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Reading Reviews From Member: Ashlumos1888
  
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Review #1, by Ashlumos1888Fluorescent Adolescent : whiny male protagonist

29th October 2016:
Ok, so I read this ages ago now, and at the time I remember not really getting into it then and abandoning it, but I gave it another go a few days ago and I am SO glad I did!

Firstly it's so well-written, I really love your writing, witty dialogue and not too slow! Mikey is my absolute favourite, and I'm sort of routing for him instead of James at this point? I also really want to know more about Freddie and his dynamic with James, that sounds super interestng!

I think my favourite part is the friendship group you've got going on with the sixth years, especially the Ravenclaws! Most Next-gens with James/OC that I've seen tend to have the OC with just one best friend with their whole life centred around James, so it's really refreshing to see that Effy's actually GOT her own life and can deal with her issues without him.

Can't wait to see what happens next! Do you have an idea of how many chapters are left?

Author's Response: oh my god. please puh-LEASE forgive me for such a late reply to such a wonderful review! first semester at uni has been absolutely crazy and i feel like the biggest idiot thinking life got easier after year 13. hahaha to THAT. i'm super sorry !

you're so, so kind. i couldn't be happier that you gave FA another go after my heavy editing! yeah, you're so right about the typical friendship dynamics of next-gens; they're either 'nerds' with just the one friend or totally bffl'ed up to rose or dom (or both) thus giving them easy access to a potter boy. i initially started off with aspen being dom but i just felt like that wasn't right, was too lazy- throughout my whole secondary school experience i found myself making friends with new people, different people, and maybe it's because i'm an extrovert or maybe its just such an fundamental part of being in school but i really, desperately wanted to reflect that within FA. like even writing references to teddy oliver or eve feltham make me so happy!

thanks again for such an incredible, heart warming review. and i'm super sorry for the delay in replying! xoxo


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Review #2, by Ashlumos1888Hopscotch: Eight

15th July 2016:
I absolutely love this story! I think it's the best Next Generation fic I've ever read - I can't believe it hasn't received more attention! You write extremely well, and you're characters are all well-crafted, though I'd love to learn more about Nick.
Can't wait til the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks very much xxx

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Review #3, by Ashlumos1888Not Fade Away: What'll You Do Now

10th May 2016:
Wow, this is a fantastic story! I usually don't like reading Marauder's stories, as The Life and Times kind of ruined all other James and Lily works for me, but this is one of the best fanfics I've ever read!
Your characterisation is excellent, and I especially like your James and Sirius. I think those two characters are two of the hardest ones to capture in Harry Potter - it's so easy for them to seem annoying and dislikable - but you've pretty much nailed it! They're exactly how I'd always pictured them in their Hogwarts days. I love the whole Sirius-and-Mary thing too, their relationship seemed like it was pretty interesting, and I'd love to hear more about it!
Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: I have not read The Life and Times; maybe I shouldn't if it might impact my own view on Jily and the Marauders era. Though this is absolutely more a 'First War' story than explicitly a Marauders or Jily story (even if, with Lily as the protagonist, both will of course be important). We'll see a lot more of James in the chapters to come, he's been on the sidelines for specific reasons - mostly so I could introduce other characters - but there's stuff going on we will get into SOON. And definitely Mary and Sirius' relationship, platonic and romantic, will be explored further.

Thanks for reviewing!


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Review #4, by Ashlumos1888How not to be a Woodley: The Crapula Incident

26th October 2014:
I really like this story! I think it's very well written for one thing- sorry if it makes me sound like a prat, but it really puts me off a story when there's loads of obvious spelling/grammar mistakes in- and the characters are all pretty realistic and likeable, Seth in particular. I'll definitely read the next chapter when it comes up!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! You don't sound like a prat at all; grammar and spelling (and also language in general) are really important to me when I read/write a story! I'm glad to hear that you like my characters and particularly Seth!

The next chapter will be up soon! It should be in the queue by tonight :). Thanks for reviewing, it really really means a lot!


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Review #5, by Ashlumos1888Head Trouble: The First One

24th September 2014:
I love the new take on Freddie! I think it's pretty interesting to see such a different take on him, I'll definitely read the next chapter when it comes!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! New chapter in the works now.

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