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2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by rcjBitten: Bitten

6th September 2005:
Oops. forgot to say. I like the banner.

Author's Response: thanx... i made it myself!

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Review #2, by rcjBitten: Bitten

6th September 2005:
Hi. I like your story and please forgive me for my straight forwardness. Don't concider it a flammer. I would say it is my way of helping you with what you should improve in your story. This review is for both chap 1 & 2. They were quite a lot confusing I might say. I found myself wondering:" Wasn't it Draco that bit Hermione?? Then why is he acting like that?" And in my opinion you should be more descriptive. You can't expect the readers to guess Hermione is a prefect and the common-room you are talking about is the prefect common-room. as for the spelling it's "McGonagall". Then there is the comment about the run on sentence, and i don't think you should have said that. It is like you are saying you don't care about your story. I doubt anyone would have noticed if you hadn't mentioned it. You can check how many reads you have if you go to Edit/Delete Story at your acount. (It sure is a long review, eh?!?!) well this is what i have to say so far. Oh, the title is pretty good. it draws attention. at least to those who are mad about vampire stories. And i'm one of them. I also like the last sentence of the 1st chap. the one that says sher has only been bitten. I don't know why but i liked it. *feel free to check my story on this site*

Author's Response: actually that hlps me a lot! thankyou for giving me some critism, bc no one ever tels me how i can improve my story, so i am very thankful of your review, and i am going to go edit it right now : )

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