Good plot lines. This story could be really good. I'm a beta reader if you're still looking for one. Just PM me on the forums. I'm tinkerbell817 there too.

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That was pretty cool. 8/10

Author's Response: Thanks!

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Certainly sounds interesting. How are you going to explain away the whole "Hermione's got a twin and hasn't told anyone" thing? That could be difficult. And Hermione's whole, "I'm not a bookworm" speech to Harry wasn't that great. And why did Emma just now come to Hogwarts and how? I hope you'll explain all of this. 7/10

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Harry's been unconcious for three days and they've only been back on speaking terms for like five minutes, it's not really realistic to have them have sex at a time like this, especially not in the hospital wing and without an precautions.

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This story is hilarious! I love it. I can't wait to see what happens next. 9/10

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Glad you like the fic!

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It's really hard to read, you should put more spaces in between paragraphs. Otherwise, it's pretty good.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review, I've got to revise some of my stories because I've not very good with getting them on the site! But I'm getting the hang of it! :)

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Another good chapter. You've got some big spacing issues in this chapter. And there are a few places where, again, I'd've used different words, but otherwise, it's good.

Author's Response: well i guess im lucky i have u now arent i :)

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The transition from Snape's POV to Lily's is a little abrupt. There are some places where I'd have chosen different words, but nothing major. You did forget to capitalize James in that bit where you described Sirius though. All in all, good job. I like the beginning of the story.

Author's Response: thanks a bunch!!

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Not bad. Lily's diary entries seem a little juvenile, but it's a good start. I'll definitely come back to see wat happens. Love the banner by the way. 8/10

Author's Response: juvenile? hmmm, maybe i'll go edit them. thanks for the review though.


yes it is a lovely banner!

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I really liek the story so far. It's very different from anything I've read before. I can't wait to see what happens between Ruri and Sirius or even Remus. Good going, 9/10

Author's Response: Thanks, I hope you continue to like it once I finish the next chapter.

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this story is pretty awesome. can't wait to see what happens.

Author's Response: I'm working on it. Hopefully, it'll be up soon. thank you!

~ Caroline

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I loved it! So sweet!

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Hmmm...interesting...I can't wait to find out what happens.

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ok...I'm not sure I understand what happened.

Author's Response: Okay, well, this is interesting. When I first saw this comment I didn't know how to reply. Then I realized, this story doesn't really have a concrete 'this is what it's supposed to mean' plot. Random? Yes. Interseting? Up to you =)

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Not bad, I like the idea. It's written well. I think that maybe you should elaborate a little about what happened to them all. Not in her dream, but in real life. Are there going to be more chapters? Because if there aren't then you should probably change this and make it completed, not a work in progress.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I was a little worried on what everyone thought, because no one responded. I marked it as a work in progress, because I wasn't sure how everyone was going to respond to it, and if I was going to need more chapters. I seem to be better at stories than one shots! Thanks for leaving a review, though.

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I liked it. The story was good for all that I think the ending came too soon. I find it hard to believe that a hearbroken Hermione would give in and try to love again so soon.

Author's Response: Well, this was one of my first fanfics. At the time, I was new to writing and I didn't think I was capable of writing a LONG story. besides, this plot bunny, however unrealistic, bit me in the arse and I needed to go with it. But I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing my story!

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Not bad so far, can't wait to read what happens.

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Hmmm...intriguing. Can't wait to see what happens next. (9/10)

Author's Response: Thanks!

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Not very humorus when you know that Voldemort is coming to kill them is it?

Author's Response: well, i think its nice to know that james and lily had a fun night before he died.but i see where your coming from. thanks for the review


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Cute.

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I Loved It.

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not bad

Author's Response: err thanks

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I like it. It's a cute story but I'm kinda wondering what happens next. It could be humorus to see Draco trying to be a Dad.

Author's Response: I am considering a sequel... but no promises. I was playing around with that same idea though.

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Not bad, a little vague and lacking in detail, but not awful either. It could have been longer.

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Hmm... where did Ellie come from? I'm a bit confused but I guess we'll find out in the next chapter? I'm looking forward to it.

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