I really liked this story. I will admit that I have done some of the things that you made fun of in this story. And they are perfectly predictable. Bravo and thanks for the enlightening because the next time I go to write, this story will be in the back of my mind, trying to bring the story to a more realistic level, rather than an 'every-girl's-dream' level. Report Review
very awesome. can't wait for the next one. Report Review
i bring the rating down because this is cruel and unusual punishment and in the eyes of America that is WRONG!
CRUEL CRUEL CRUEL CRUEL CRUEL! Report Review
I guess I'll start with what I loved about this story first. I loved their love portrayed, I loved the idea of an early child, I loved the bottled memories and the fact that Adalae recognized her father. This story was written very well. I would have liked to see the story played out longer, maybe a little less choppy, but sometimes, choppy's the only way to go. Other than that, it was great. Props and good work from one author to another.
--MelAuthor's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you thought that. Yes, I was waiting for someone to mention that. I thought it was VERY choppy, and I wanted to add more depth to the story by exploring the characters more, but it jsut wouldn't work out. I lament that I didn't get to expand and get it to the depth I had hoped, but I suppose that this is all right how it is. I just didn't want chapters where everything was too dragged out and boring [I tried one, and I didn't quite like it...] But yes, thank you so much. I'm terribly glad you liked it :] Report Review
awesome. i can't wait until james comes back!Author's Response: Wow! I recognize your penname! You are an old reader of mine!! YAY I HAVEN'T LOST THEM ALL!
You rock. Report Review
yay! finally! Report Review
amazing story. will ALWAYS be one of my favorites.Author's Response: AWWWW, thank you!!!!! Report Review
I loved the story and thank you for doing this for him. Everybody loves you, Jay!Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
I've been waiting for this chapter!!! good! Report Review
Amazing chapter. Was the whole ending supposed to be italicised? Just out of curiousity...10/10Author's Response: Thank you... and HOLY CRAP is it?! NOOOO!!!! *goes to fix IMMEDIATELY* WTF! Report Review
I liked it. I like how Draco can perform wandless magic. Very interesting.Author's Response: Hmm, yes, he is a powerful wizard this little one =]
Thankoo for reading & reviewing =D
Alex xx Report Review
Very good. I really liked this chapter. You're establishing the relationship between the two characters very well. Kudos to you.Author's Response: OOO thankoo very much =D Report Review
Another good chapter, a few things here and there, but no one's perfect. Good Job.Author's Response: Cheers =D Report Review
I like the story line and where the story is headed. Very good. A few grammar errors here and there, but I do that all the time. Good job.Author's Response: Thankoo =]...I did try sorting them but there probs are still some there, i'll get on them once all the story is up =]
i don't know if i reviewed before, and if i didn't i'm sorry, but whenever i read this I can never stop feeling the pain that Hermione feels...amazing writer, really, you are.Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! And I love your penname. It really speaks for those of us that are far too addicted to HPFF to study! :P Report Review
truly amazing chapter...
should i be wondering if that was Amelia who Harry killed?Author's Response: Hmmm, I wonder.... *whistles innocently* Report Review
amazing chapter. can't wait for more!Author's Response: well thank you! Report Review
Amazing chapter! Loved it! Write more!Author's Response: Yay! Thank you, I will definately try to. Report Review
I'm sorry I didn't review until the last chapter...I just couldn't stop reading! This story was utterly magnificent! It was so original and so heartwarming. I mean, who would have thought Snape to have a wife...let alone two kids!? It was great. Wonderful. Great Job and keep up the good work!10/10--MelAuthor's Response: Don't be sorry - I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to keep reading rather than pause. :-D I'm so very glad you liked it - it's weird to see Severus from this sort of light rather than just for the student's perspective yeah? I definitely had fun with it and very much enjoyed adding my own little twists and turns. Again, thank you so much for the amazing review! Report Review
Amazing Katie, bloody amazing! I loved it! Great Job! I can see why you're doing the whole "thrice defied" thing, it works. I was wondering if we'd ever get another chapter! Great job! Update soon!-Mel Report Review
Amazing. Love it.!
10/10 Report Review
Your story is absolutely amazing! And so very original! I love it! Update soon! -MelAuthor's Response: I'd be lying if I said the next chapter was almost done, I've been slacking a lot but I'll try to work on it! Report Review
Top notch stuff. I liked it! Can't wait for more! Report Review
haha! i can review myself! i'll give it a 10! top notch stuff! bwuhahahahaAuthor's Response: thank you, thank you. you're too kind Report Review
Oh, you are evil aren't you? Oh, damn you to hell! We need to know what was in Aria's letter, and you have to fix James and Lily, and you need to tell us what happens with Remus and Cari...even though I know already. Damn, you really had to screw up their lives didn't you? Man, and I actually missed your writing! You're so evil! Ugh! Okay, okay, calm...calm yourself, Mel, calm. Okay, now that I'm better, I've written a new story! It's a Dramione, and I don't know if you like that stuff...but I have a chapter written and a chapter in waiting if you feel like stopping by. Talk to you later! -MelAuthor's Response: hahaha, yes indeed i may be evil, but i did have some happy stuff in there as well. Besides, their lives can't be all sunshine and daisys. They've got Voldemort to worry about, plus regular teenage drama et cetera. Anyway, you shall find all that out soon enough darlin! =P Report Review
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