Reading Reviews From Member: Elfwynn
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Review #1, by Elfwynn Ruins: Ruins

2nd February 2016:
I love the back story that you have created for Pansy as it provides a really nice foundation for the character progression. She is so much more mature and empathetic; I love how you have used this sympathetic stance to describe and explore the circumstances and positions of her former classmates.

I found the dynamic between Pansy and Draco really interesting. They have both responded so differently to the situation post-war; Pansy seeing it as an opportunity to follow her dreams and Draco simply drowning his sorrows. Despite this, you manage to (re)assert the common foundation of understanding between them as the piece progresses. There is a sense that both characters (along with a number of their pureblood school friends) as rather lost in this ‘new world.’

The addition of Benjamin to the story provides a fundamental turning point with regard to Draco’s character. Up until that point Draco’s actions (or at least what you know of them) are primarily selfish. Benjamin and his relationship with the child provide some hope of a happy future for him.

Although a rather tragic story, I really like the way that it ultimately ends up being one about hope, loyalty and friendship.

Thanks for the review swap - I really enjoyed this story!

Elfy x

Author's Response: Hello!

Thanks so much for the awesome review and I'm so sorry that it took me so long to respond to this!

I think that Pansy was a really great character to write. I had never thought much of her before but she already had such a rich history in my universe. The choice to follow her dreams instead of accepting what her parents want from her really says a lot.

Draco on the other hand has been through just as much after the War but he's not capable of getting out of his funk. I feel like a lot of pureblood children would be lost after the War was over. Where do they really belong? I tried to write the scenes with Draco and Pansy as realistically as I could.

Benjamin is a very important character to this story, even though he's just a baby. Draco comes across as such an awful and selfish person before you find out about Benjamin and it really shows that he can love, he's just afraid to.

I wanted to leave the ending open for you guys to interpret and I'm happy that so many of you have enjoyed it. :D

Much love,


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Review #2, by Elfwynn Divided: The Tale of the Hogwarts Founders: Chapter II

18th June 2015:
Hello! I kept on reading...

Great chapter! I really got a feel for the era in which the story is set. I love how you have worked the conflict with the invading Danelaw into the storyline it really frames the time period and sets the tone.

I like the way you have portrayed both Rowena and Godric’s internal conflicts over their sense of duty. Again this seems to reflect the backdrop of conflict and rebellion against the invading forces. I also loved the sense of irony portrayed (in the first chapter) by the way that Rowena escaped from her duties by jumping out the window, having just criticised the lord for hiding from the invaders and not doing what she perceived to be ‘his duty.’

The irony now, is that the muggle neighbours called on those with magic to save them in the battle but are then suspicious of magic’s ability to heal. I like the way this is used to frame how muggles are ultimately weary of the wizarding population; magic is a force for destruction but not for healing.

It is interesting to see how the self assurance of Helga and Godric balances out Rowena and Salazar’s conflicted personalities respectively. The story so far forms some interesting situational, intellectual and character based binaries.

I can’t wait to read more.

Many thanks for the swap!

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, thank you - I really appreciate that you kept on reading! I'm so glad to hear that you liked the historical context and how it was woven in - it's really wonderful to hear that it helps set the scene and that you liked how it frames the era.

I love what you've pointed out about the irony about sense of duty - I hadn't thought of it in those terms but you're so right, haha. She was doing exactly what she criticized that lord for doing - although she might have argued that she had better reasons. :P

I really like your analysis of the Muggles' opinion of magic as well - they don't understand it as well and see the destructive side and how it can help them, but when it isn't helping them any more, people get uncomfortable with it.

Thanks, I'm really glad you like the characterisation so far and the different ways they interact with situations. I am loving your analysis of this so far! Thanks for such a thoughtful review, and for the swap!! ♥

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Review #3, by Elfwynn Fair Agony, Fair Madness: Prologue

16th June 2015:
What an interesting start. I really like the way you have set the story up; so much reticence. Why won’t she open the letter? Why won’t she go to the memorial? What was it that she lost? Who was it that she lost? There are so many questions… and that just makes me curious to read more.
I really like the way you haven’t explicitly named the main character in this first chapter. It gives it that air of frustration that I felt when I read Daphne du Maurier’s ‘Rebecca’ in which you never find out the protagonists name. Without knowing the characters name, I find that I am forced to think a little more about their idiosyncrasies and how they relate to the other characters.
I would like to read more.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it, I was really hesitating at first about posting this! The idea is still not exactly clear but I'm working on it and hopefully it will evolve!
About the main character though, the mystery will be revealed in a few chapters and you're going to end up guessing eventually.. The idea isn't to hide who she is, because the story needs her to be even more involved in the events :) I won't spoil the fun though ;)

Thank you for the review I really appreciate it

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Review #4, by Elfwynn Shadow: Shadow

12th January 2014:
Goodness me! This is so creepy.

I love all the creepy mythology and folk tales that you use at the start. It seemed like some of the imagery that you deployed had quite a few *almost* religious references and connotations. Was this a deliberate decision or did it come from the myths and tales that you found or just something implicit in the way you were writing? I only really know the role of the incubus in the Merlin legends so I would be interested to hear what you think.

At first, I wasn't quite sure where the 'Harry Potter' factor was (if that makes sense). However as the creepiness factor begin to grow, it seemed to draw back from the purely mythological and historic to evoke an increasingly sinister connection between the incubus and the witches of the wizarding world.

I love the voice that you use - it feels as if the narrator is whispering quietly in your ear; telling you things - evil secrets that should be repeated.

Finally, when I was struck by the revelation of the name, I did a double take and I had to go back and re-read it from the beginning!

I love the way that that this piece seems to draw you in carefully and then suddenly slaps you with a realisation that puts everything in perspective. It acts like a crescendo that ends with a sudden clash of a cymbal!

Really nice work!

Author's Response: Hi! :)

Hehe, I'm glad you found it creepy. Creepy is the most fun to write. :)

I'm glad you liked the references and the religious imagery- that was very much on purpose! I sort of combined the research I'd done with some of my ideas of restrained sexuality from the era and religious imagery, so it was a little bit of a combination. Many of the facts, like incubus visits being used to cover up unwanted pregnancies and abuse from relatives/family friends, were from my historical research.

That makes a lot of sense! It was tricky to work in the HP verse since there aren't any mentions of something similar, which is part of why I set the story in the Victorian age.

I love the way you described the voice, that's just what I was hoping for! Evil secrets that should be repeated... I like the idea that the incubus really wanted to tell his story and be heard. :)

Ah, I'm so thrilled to hear you felt that way about the ending. That was just what I hoped for, to have this plot twist which changed the whole story, so I'm glad that was the effect! :) A crescendo that ends with a sudden clash of a cymbal... I LOVE that!

Thanks for the lovely review, it was so wonderful of you to come by and read my story! :D It really made my day! :)

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Review #5, by Elfwynn Severus Snape & Some Drunken Harry Potter fans: Severus Snape and Some Drunken HP fans

10th October 2013:
I love how original this is - it really made me laugh!

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