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Review #1, by IchigoPanWhen Dahlias Bloom: TWO: Love, Lust and a Louispalooza

2nd September 2017:
Dahila should set up a little stand to the side of The Harpy's Lounge with a sign that says "Advice You Don't Want to Hear: 1 Galleon." Like a Peanuts strip.

My poor bleedin' heart's feeling for James effing Potter. *rolls eyes* He's basically one of those guys who peaked in high school and never got around to doing anything with his life, isn't he? Any way to lay it thick on his "love" for Constance, D! We need grab a drink together *heart*

Awesome chapter as usual. Looking forward to the next one.

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Review #2, by IchigoPanWhen Dahlias Bloom: ONE: A Seed In the Vegetable Patch

2nd September 2017:
YAAASS! A spin-off story on Dahlia!

Plums, you make me so happy. And you need to stop because now I wanna make *this* into a comic!

Also, am I the only one who finds her job ironic given how she's the literal manifestation of a someone who *shouldn't* be in hospitality? Perhaps this'll help her learn something called "empathy."

Cue Dahlia laughing hard in the background.

I love how you contrast her personality from hating the world to respectful daughter the moment she gets home. I guess daal does that (to which you also got me craving for after finishing this chapter).

Onward to chapter two!

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Review #3, by IchigoPanTwilight: Unbreakable Dawn

12th November 2016:
Ridiculous. Absurd. Mind-blowing.

Those are the words that ran through my mind when I read this one-shot. Hello lo, my apologies for getting to your 1 of 5 of your hard-earned reviews from my writing challenge.

What can I say about this story other than bloody brilliant. This was such an epic crack-fic. I couldn't stop giggling and laughing from start to finish (while earning some questionable looks and mocking laughs from my S.O.).

Oh Ed. Haven't other skrewts and magical creatures told you beauty is only skin deep? And poor Lani. At least she made the effort to talk to Ed; only to be so blatantly rejected by a skrewt of all creatures! Darling, you'll do so much better for yourself!

Anyway, before I continue to ramble on, wonderful story again. I'll be scouring your page to read more.

- ichigo :D

Author's Response: Hello! This was a nice surprise because I'd actually forgotten about these reviews! I'm so glad you enjoyed this (terrible :P) story! Looking forward to hearing from you again!

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Review #4, by IchigoPanThe Great Tale of Me, Lyra Malfoy: I.

12th November 2016:
BvB Review!!

Quite a nice start to Lyra's story in Malfoy Manor. Between her parents' complacency (and disbelief of her being a Prefect) and her brother's constant PDA (amongst the noises she wish she could unhear) with "Albie," what's a girl to do?

I've always found writing in first person somewhat easy, but challenging when describing the actions of others around said person; you've done that quite well.

Just a few minor corrections:

"Okay, more then a paragraph."

The "then" should be "than."

"That sorting hat has lost itís mind"

The "it's" should be a possessive "its" without the apostrophe.

And the period after "Iím pretty sure he has OCAED" could be replaced with a colon or semi-colon since you're explaining what the acronym stands for after.

- ichigo :D

Author's Response: Hey there, thanks for the review!

Thank you very much for the tips and kind review! I fixed up those corrections just now. I hope to see you for the next chapter.

Thanks again for the review!


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Review #5, by IchigoPanDormitory 2.6A: FIVE: Hold Your Breath

27th October 2016:
Inhale and burst out laughing. That's what this chapter did for me.

This is my favorite one by far. You're so brilliant with your words in painting the perfect scenario in one's imagination.

And here come Nova riding Albus' broomstick xD Not *that* broomstick! Again, very well done on the imagery and their now not so awkward interaction.

I hope to finish up the comic version of the beginning part of this story within the next few days! I'm so glad you love it so much!

-ichigo :D

Author's Response: Hello!

Aw, I'm so glad you liked the chapter! It feels like I wrote this so long ago, but I distinctly remember struggling a LOT with it so it means a lot to hear that.

Nova is all over dat broomstick tho ;)

You know, I genuinely can't express how wonderful the comic is. It is GLORIOUS. Seriously. I have saved all of them for eternity and when I am in my grave, they will be plastered onto my tombstone. They are that beautiful XD

Thank you for reviewing!

Plums xo

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Review #6, by IchigoPanDormitory 2.6A: FOUR: Fire and Ice

25th October 2016:
I don't know about you, but if someone were to drag me out of bed by the ankles, they should expect either a foot to the face or a hex of some sorts.

Regan and Nova are totally the types of people my RL bestie and I would do xD
And nothin' like a good ol' fashioned beat down in midst of a party. Er, in this case, a simple punch to the face and being caught.

The broomstick bit got me legitimately DYING. Nova, love, you gotta word your sentences better xD

And just some minor grammar correx:
"Won't they think it's weird that we're there?"

I think the "that" could be removed.

"we're on top form"

Should be "We're in top form"

Author's Response: Hello again :)

If someone dragged me out of bed, I would also kick them in the face. Like, um... who do you think you are?? Disturbing my beauty sleep?? A dead man, that's who you are.

I'm not the partying types but if I was, I would so be like Reagan and Nova too, I think lol. Hanging on the sidelines so I don't make a fool of myself while still having fun? Sounds great to me!

Every good party needs a fight. Nuff said. ;)


Thank you for pointing out the grammar mistakes, particularly the first one. I have a habit of saying/writing "just" or "that" way too much methinks so it's good to see where I am slipping up since I always doubt myself about whether it's correct or not.

Thank you for the review!

Plums xo

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Review #7, by IchigoPanDormitory 2.6A: THREE: Matters of the Heart

25th October 2016:
Oh Cass, you can have your pick of guys. Just because Williams has the hottest pair of lips in Hogwarts doesn't mean he knows how to use 'em right. Zing! ... No? Meh T_T

So how *does* one make their voice sound throaty? Because when I think throaty, I think of a voice post death metal growls... Not very attractive, to be honest >_>;;

And oh man, that library scene almost got me cracking up at work (I really shouldn't be reading, but here come the lull of deadline). I'm almost tempted to draw this out in a comic panel xDD

... Screw it. I'm drawing it in a comic panel.

Author's Response: Hello again!

Zing indeed, my love, zing indeed.

I DON'T KNOW HOW SOMEONE CAN MAKE THEIR VOICE ATTRACTIVELY THROATY. I just tried it and I sound like I'm trying to lay an egg or something. To all the guys I've met who can sound attractively throaty: how do you do it?

Anyways, THAT COMIC PANEL WAS AMAZING. No seriously, every time I look at it, I am amazed by the brilliance of it all. I swear to God, Al was just plucked out of my mind - you even have his FRECKLES. And Nova was just adorable and the girls' expression just killed me ohmygosh -

I loved it and I love you. Such a sweetheart < 3

Plums xo

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Review #8, by IchigoPanDormitory 2.6A: ONE: Melting Ice Queens

25th October 2016:
Hello lo! I'm finally getting around to the promised reviews from the writing challenge you entered! Sorry it took so long Dx

I love all of your OCs. They all have something quirky to contribute to your story, from Dahlia being a total ray of sunshine with her sailor's mouth (I personally loved the "go hug a cactus" line. Actually, I loved all of her one-liners.), Alice's attempts at being reasonable (well, more reasonable than the rest of the group, at least) to Nova's sudden rediscovery of her feeling things for another human. Oh my God, is this what human evolving emotions feel like?!

But methinks trouble be brewing in the dark for the sextet of Ice Queens. Onward to the next chapter!


Author's Response: Hi!

Don't worry about taking your time. I am Notorious for doing the same, it's actually embarrassing.

I am so glad you enjoyed my OCs! I always love writing them because you can really make them your own since you basically created them. Lol Dahlia's one liners make me proud. I always have such a sense of accomplishment when she screams at someone. XD

Thank you for the review!

Plums xo

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Review #9, by IchigoPanThe Chef Is In: one.

24th October 2016:
BvB Review! *salutes*

I'm currently writing a cooking fic and thought I'd check this one out for ideas :D Is it sad I can see Albus being a substance abuser much more than Scorpius? I blame Harry's reckless behavior in his youth.

And dear ol' cinnamon bun Scorpius, trying to keep everything in the homestead together for the sake of their kids. It's amazing even after everything Al's put him through emotionally, he's still trying to work things out. If that's not love, I don't know what is.

All in all, this was a wonderful one-shot.

One small edit:
"a lot less then normal"

should be

"a lot less than normal"

I'm sure it was a glossed over mistake. I've been known to do that with my writing, too.

Thanks for the enjoyable fic!

-ichigo :D

Author's Response: Hey Ichigo!

Thank you so much for the kind review! I'll definitely be sure to edit that in. I hope that you enjoyed it.


P.S. This is actually supposed to be a novel, I've just been on a bit of a hiatus with it lately.


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Review #10, by IchigoPanI Can't: I Can't

13th October 2016:
BvB Review! *salutes* We really should make this a thing.

I hardly read any Snily (is that the right pairing term?) stories, but THIS. This. Was. Heart-wrenching.

Sniveling, sneaky, nervous Severus trying to profess his love for Lily Evans yet again, only to be rejected for the umpteenth time because of him calling her the M-word. Trying his damndest to make amends, his fiery Gryffindor love of his life would see nothing of it.

And she kissed back?! Back?! Lily, what are ya doin'?! At least she was able to keep her cool and tell him to leave before things got further.

My very small critique would be the use of 'that' in "his heart hammering so loudly that he thought the whole castle would hear him." I think the 'that' there could simply be replaced with a comma to make the reading flow smoother, if that makes sense.

And you know I have to ask: What happens next?!

-ichigo :D

Author's Response: I believe that's the right term? And yay! I was going for heart-wrenching! NAILED IT!

Wow, that's a better summary than I had, hahaha!

Of course she kissed back! I always felt that part of the reason she could never forgive Severus was because she really did have feelings for him, but with everything else between them (houses, death eaters, James) she couldn't tell him. However, if she had, I think things would have gone a lot differently...

I will get right on that! And there are two other parts to this collection, so... I guess read them if you want to know what happens.

Thanks for the lovely review! ♥


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Review #11, by IchigoPanHouse of Stone: The End of Summer (and Secrets)

16th September 2016:
It's been a while since I've read a story with a cliffhanger, and such a cruel one at that!! Augh why you do dis! (claws at cheeks) The mother-daughter conversation was quite interesting and very insightful. And one can assume Piper's dad took his mom's last name upon marrying for their safety as well?

I impatiently await the next chapter and will devour it like my last meal upon your future posting.
It's soon, right? RIGHT?!

Author's Response: I've been working on challenges (that I should stop signing up for) so I don't know when the next chapter will be. I'm getting more and more into book-aligned scenes and those are the WORST to muddle through. And actually, the whole family was simply renamed to help with the hiding. This isn't revealed yet (but it's not a big plot point), but Piper's mom's name is Christina Holloway. And I totally pulled most of their names from witchy pop culture, haha. Except Jake. I just love the name Jacob. ^_^

I'm glad you like it so far! Hopefully you won't kill me at the end! Or during the sequel... Or any of the planned interim one-shots between this and the sequel... *ahem* What?

Thanks for stopping by!

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Review #12, by IchigoPanSeven Hills: Prologue

16th September 2016:
Hi hi! As promised from the writing challenge you participated, your review is finally here!

Tantalizing and wrought with tension, this prologue paves the way to the start of the unfolding drama between Portia and Tom. Tom's mockery never ceases to get under anyone's skin and relentlessly attacked what was left of his wife's pride. And poor Portia is left to fend for herself alone at the whims of his sadistic mental game.

If I could offer one criticism, it would be a small spelling error. Here you wrote: "Portia shook him off at once and entered of her own violation."

If I'm not mistaken, I think you meant to write "volition" rather than "violation"?

Anyway, very well done on this chapter. Augh, what will Portia do now?!


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Review #13, by IchigoPanThe Whole Universe: The Whole Universe

16th September 2016:
BvB Review *salutes*!

This was such a whimsical one-shot and a very enjoyable read. The formless hands made me think of the ones from "Full Metal Alchemist" when the Gate opened and Lily's curiosity reminded me of scenes from "My Neighbor Totoro" when Mei was observing the dust spirits and chasing the mini-Totoros.

From this story, Luna's "spirited-awayness" has matured and her keen observation had yet to falter as she became an adult. This especially came in handy when little Lily needed some perspective of the darkness.

My only criticism is just a very minor spelling error (exited= to leave a place; excited = thrilled, animated.)

Keep writing! I look forward to reading your future stories.


Author's Response: Hi!
Thank you for the kind review - and for catching the mistake! I changed it immediately :)

I love Miyazaki's movies and I'm happy that it reminded you of Totoro - though I've never read or saw Fullmetal Alchemist (I think I will do now though after I read the wikipedia description, thanks for the tip :D)


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Review #14, by IchigoPanHouse of Stone: Prologue

10th September 2016:
BvB Review!

I didn't realize I had held my breath reading this first chapter. Voldemort's presence'll do that to you.

You have beautifully captured the haunting and terrifying existence that is the Dark Lord in this prologue. And the reaction of the Malfoy men was sheer perfection. From Lucius' cowardly and meek responses to Draco's need to prove himself, this is a great start to the story.

Ahmahgawd, what happens next?! (palms at face dramatically)

- ichigo ^_^

Author's Response: Daww, thanks! It is rather terrifying to write from a Voldemort POV and I'm already flirting with the idea of doing it again!

You have to read to find out, silly! Thanks for stopping by!

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Review #15, by IchigoPanTo Glory: Tom Riddle

29th August 2016:
Thank you for your submission, victoria_anne!

Your prompt was "hubris."

The story revolves around Tom Riddle on his way in becoming the darkest wizard of all time. Through his boasting and fact-checking accomplishments, you were able to harness the true meaning of your prompt even without using it. The dark and stormy atmosphere only added to this.

This was very well written and it leaves your readers wanting more. Excellent work. I look forward to seeing your future challenge submissions, should you choose to participate again :D

- ichigo

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And thank you for hosting such a great challenge, I had fun! :)

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Review #16, by IchigoPanAnd in the Distance, Church Bells: And in the Distance, Church Bells

22nd August 2016:
Thank you for your submission, celticbard!

Your prompt was "awaken."

The story revolves around Ron and Hermione's wedding day, with Hermione having sudden second thoughts and cold feet moments before she walks down that aisle to marry Ron. Harry being Harry, tries his best to coax her otherwise. The tone of hesitancy in her thought process emulated "The Lady or the Tiger" well.

What I find interesting about your story is that not only have you used the word in the story, but the story itself was the theme of awakening. How clever of you.

My only criticism for this one-shot is that the intro scenery description went in a bit of a circle. But I understand why you did to emphasize Hermione's red button full panic mode.

I give brownie points for the bearded yoga hipster though xD They're *everywhere*

Author's Response: Hi IchigoPan,
Thank you so much for the review and for creating the challenge that inspired this story. I didn't want to make a big deal of it or anything, but I just wanted you to know that your challenge helped me write the first piece of fanfic (or really, the first piece of anything) that I have been able to write in years. Somehow, it helped me get my muse back, so I don't know how I can ever thank you enough for that. I'm really so glad to get back to the fandom and it's all due to your challenge. Again, I know I cannot possibly thank you enough, but I truly am grateful for the inspiration. :)

Lee Anne

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Review #17, by IchigoPanKore: Kore.

21st August 2016:
Thank you for your submission, Dirigible_Plums. I have to say this was a very interesting read. Never would I have thought of tying Greek mythology into the HP-verse.

Your prompt was "explosion" and you have weaved the usage of said word very well.

The story echoes the kidnapping of Persephone (Hermione) by Hades (Tom Riddle/Moldy-Voldy), with Zeus (Dumbledore) trying to get her back for Demeter (Hermione's mom) through diplomatic means.

Words-wise, you painted a beautiful scenery (can hell even be called as such?) throughout the story. Tom's sadistic/narcissistic nature was the embodiment of Hades. The pure and fierce Hermione stood her ground, awaiting her freedom while trying to figure out what Tom had wanted with her.

However, I was briefly confused with the story pacing 5 seconds in and then everything made sense when I started reading it like a mythology instead.

All in all, you did a great job using the prompt. I look forward to seeing your future challenge submissions, should you choose to participate again :D


Author's Response: Hello!

First of all, thank you for awarding this entry 2nd place. Seriously, it was so great to see that, especially because I know this entry was a very strange fic and not everyone's cup of tea. :D

Yeah, I was a little worried that I didn't apply the word "explosion" all too well. There was obviously the very literal explosion at the start of the fic when Tom appears, but there's also the impact it has on the physical world and all of the relations between the characters. Tom's actions rock the foundations of the system in an 'explosive' way, so you know.

I still can't get over the fact that I made Dumbledore Zeus lol.

On the plus side, I tried to keep everyone else in character as much as possible! As you said yourself, Tom tried to manipulate/intimidate her into staying with him forever; Hermione stayed firm to her resolution while trying to work out what Tom was playing at. (He wanted power basically and - rightfully - thought that having her would give him more.)

"Words-wise, you painted a beautiful scenery" - thank you so much! I took extra care with this fic given the nature of it so this really means a lot.

Yeah, I understand what you mean about the pacing. Since it's such a wild card, it's difficult to adjust to unless you know that's heavy Greek mythology, really.

Thank you for hosting such a great challenge. It was really interesting and fun to write for!

Plums xo

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Review #18, by IchigoPanRosewater: Rosewater

17th August 2016:
Short but sweet one-shot. This was elegantly done. Rarely have I read fics written in Bellatrix's POV after her escape from Azkaban (it's always either during the first war or her Hogwarts days). The fact there was no dialogue at all gave it an even more powerful impression of imagery for the reader.

Even though she had been rotting away in prison, a simple, thankless vile of rosewater from her husband reawakened her senses and her purpose, albeit a dark one. And just like that, the menace that is Bellatrix Lestrange has been awoken once more.

Author's Response: Hi IchigoPan,
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review! I'm so glad you liked this one-shot. You know, it is funny, but I think Bellatrix would be at her most interesting (albeit, probably her most unstable) after her escape from Azkaban, but that's just me, haha. Again, thanks a million for your thoughtful feedback. It was really wonderful hearing from you.

Lee Anne

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Review #19, by IchigoPanJames Should Be the Main Character of This Story: James Should Be the Main Character of This Story

17th August 2016:
Epic crackfic is epic xD This is amazing. The fact you somehow tied the Doctor to the Marauders (as Sirius screams in the background, "The writer is lazy!!!") is a feat of its own. And breaking walls are fun, especially when they're in the fourth!

Because magic, right? xD

Author's Response: Because effing magic! I'm glad you enjoyed and I'm sorry you had to read this horror of a story. XD

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Review #20, by IchigoPanThe 'Savior' Thing: Lily

9th August 2016:
Overprotective Harry is overprotective. Thank goodness Ginny was there to deadpan some common sense on him.

I really love this short story series. Written in each point of view of the Potter kids, you get a feel in how tight knit the clan is. Even if there is the usual sibling arguments/rivalry, the love is there.

And the crup. All it wanted was some food and love, like any domesticated animal. I somehow picture James wanting to name it 'Snuffles' for obvious reasons xD

And overdue review is way overdue m ( _ _ ; ) m
Miss you lots! *heart*

Author's Response: Eeek! Hi there! Thank you SO much for stopping by and reading this latest chapter, I was looking forward to seeing what you thought of it!

Hahah, yes, overprotective Harry needs Ginny to make him come to his senses. :P

Awww, thank you SO much, I'm so happy to hear that you love this. And I'm really, really glad that, despite the arguing, etc, you can feel how much the family loves each other - I'm thrilled that it came across so well.

*Squees* Gah, I know, the poor little crup! And Harry thinking it's going to hurt them... *shakes head* Hahah! Honestly I hadn't come up with a name for the crup, but 'Snuffles' seems a great one! I might have to include that in the final chapter... *winks*

Your review is not at all overdue, it is amazing and I appreciate it so much, you didn't have to review at all so THANK YOU! Miss you lots, also!! ♥

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Review #21, by IchigoPanLook I Love You (Not in this life): Wormwood and Asphodel

9th August 2016:
Yay! You're writing again!!

A wonderful first chapter to display the huge contrast between Snape and Lily's childhoods. I've always found first person a challenge to write as most people are inclined to write in third. That and the sentence tenses. *headache* However, a friend of mine made a point saying things written in first person is more interesting because it's a great guessing game in not knowing what the other characters are thinking.

Aside from very minor spelling mistakes, this chapter was paced very well. Looking forward to reading the next one :D

Author's Response: Aww, thanks very much for the review. I am glad that it came accross that their upbringings are different. Haha, I am still not sure about the first person pov. I chose it when I was doubting whether to continue my story or not, and then I read the beautiful 'sisters' by ursulagodess in first pov and it inspired me, but like you say, it's more difficult because it does not instantly have the tone of the books.
Too bad from the spelling mistakes. I hate that I make them, so now i'm curious (I really don't know what they are! Oh well)
Uploading this here was actually kind of a mistake - I thought, I already uploaded it on ffnet where I don't have to bother mods with my 100 edits a chapter, but I felt bad for deleting something approved. However, after the new low of someone actually UNfavoriting it after a new chapter update, I might upload it here again. However, I still feel like I'm doing the people who followed/reviewed previous (actually deleted one) a disservice. Oh well.
Thanks a lot for your review! It made me happy.

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Review #22, by IchigoPanTraitorous Hearts: An Unofficial Assistance

20th July 2016:
Hurray! You updated!

As expected, your writing is fabulous, as usual. And this unexpected budding friendship between Greengrass and Seamus is interesting, to say the least. Their personality dynamic is just calling for a comedic duo formation: straight-man Greengrass with the funny-man Seamus. Explosive disaster looms in their near future xD

Speaking of 'explosive disaster,' WOW. Just wow. I was half expecting Alecto to untransfigure herself from the ashes and attack them. I had this whole "Die-Hard" mixed with Michael Bay imagery in my head with the slow-mo 'xplosion with a "No~" attached to it xD

*applauds you* Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thank you so much! I've been so excited to finally get to include some humor (besides Astoria's occasional dry commentary) into this fic, and the DA--and especially Seamus--have given me that opportunity at last. Astoria and Seamus' friendship is definitely interesting, but I think that someone like Seamus is essentially the best kind of friend for Astoria. He's unselfconscious and reasonably perceptive, so she can't wall herself off from him; capable, so she can't look down on him; and a great deal more relaxed, which gives her the chance to lose a bit of her rigidity. Their dynamic has been so fun to write, and I'm glad you're enjoying it!

My scene was like a Michael Bay movie?? ACTION SCENE ACHIEVED! I'm really excited about this :D Thank you so much for this wonderful review! It really put a smile on my face!


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Review #23, by IchigoPanCrush: Crush

25th May 2016:
Augh. I thought my heart was ready, but it wasn't! (For some reason, the little voice in my head sounded like LSP saying that).

Funny enough, I've always pictured Fred as the super friendly, flighty/flirty type and George being the mopey/pining type when it came to girls.

The buildup and anticipation in finding out the origin of the note was very well done. And seeing his teenage relationship with his twin in an almost argument was also very refreshing since most fics (and even in the HPverse) seem to depict them almost always get along with no brotherly conflict.

We've all had those moments where we took a second look at a friend, thinking, "He/She wouldn't be bad for me in a romantic sense." Then, splash. Cold, hard reality dumps on you like a bucket of ice water. Well, in this case, cleaning potions from the broom closet. As I read on, I really felt Fred's heartache and heard everything shatter like a glass when Alicia confessed about the note.

Great job considering this was your first Fred fic. Looking forward to reading your future stories!

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for stopping by and being a generally awesome human being. :D

I don't think most people really see Fred as being the sort of person who gets sad very often. It was fun playing around with this though because I don't think we ever get much of that in HP books.

Well, my headcanon for the twins is exactly like what you said. Haha.

George is usually the mopier of the two and he's a bit more immature. He pines after Angie solely but he probably would be the sort to be very dramatic when it came to girls. Hahaha.

Fred I think is really flighty, like you said but he's also a tad jaded. He doesn't have much hope when it comes to getting very attached to people.

I wanted to make this story seem like it was going to end on a good note. It's written for an Angst Challenge but at the same time, the best thing is leading up to the pain. Haha.

I'm awful. Hahah.

Anyway, I've written Fred/George arguing before and I think it's realistic. I'm sure that they didn't get along all the time, can you imagine being with someone who looks/sounds/lives with you every single day? I'm sure there's bound to be some tension.

I think what's so painful is that this is something we all have been through. You look at a friend and wonder what it would be like to BE with them, only to have your heart crushed.

I am glad that Fred's heartache came across well too. I was really worried about it.

Thank you a ton for this lovely review!

Much love,


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Review #24, by IchigoPanAll the World's a Stage: And One Man in His Time Plays Many Parts

20th May 2016:
Hot Seat Review!! xD

This was a wonderfully done one-shot. From the makeshift stage Harry's kids made to the typical parent reactions (I guess the "reparo" spell doesn't work for cracked eggs), the visual descriptions played vividly in my head. You can definitely feel the love in the Potter family, something Harry had always wanted in his life. And Lily, dear, sweet Lily, already working her charms on her brothers.

And the last line was the best, having him accept his former reincarnations to who he is now: a parent.

I'd give you 20/10 for the "Doctor Who" reference, but they'd only give me 10/10.

Author's Response: Eeek! Thank you! Hot Seat reviews are the best!!

Hahaha! Why thank you! I'm glad you liked this!

Yeah, I don't think reparo would work on eggs. There are some things that even magic can't fix. :P

YES. I'm glad you got the reference. I totally cracked myself up with that one. :)

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!! It totally made my day!

Keep writing and being fantastic!

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Review #25, by IchigoPanThe Howler: The Pun Also Rises

20th May 2016:
I'm a horrible reader, leaving a review this late in the game >_>;

Next to writing action scenes, I find dialogue scenes hard to write as well because you have to consider whether or not this continues the story you're trying to tell and character development without being overly draggy.

From the get go, the dialogues came roaring out with the interaction between Teddy, Lina and Tori. Then comes the Howler with the "full name card." Everyone young and old would sympathize with that. And the puns. Oh the puns! *shakes head* Please save that for the Ravenclaws, Harry, but very well done on the cheese factor. Although I did enjoy the "mango mad" one a bit...

If I were Teddy, I would've hid under the table and casted the Disillusionment Charm as he is without his godfather's handy Cloak.

All in all, good job on the humor scale, character interaction and witty dialogue. One would say this one-shot bludgeoned its way into my list of favorites. Eh? Eh? ... No? Aw... ._.

Author's Response: Nah, there's no such thing as a horrible reader! I love reviews no matter when I get them!! :D

I actually really love writing dialogues, but I totally get what you mean! It can be hard sometimes, finding the right balance of plot development and character development.

Haha! The "full name card" can be kinda scary, can't it?

THE PUNS! I love the puns! I did a lot of research to find the best of the worst puns to work into this story, and let me tell you, it was both extremely painful and extremely hilarious.

The mango mad one was definitely my favorite. It's easily the best of them all, in my opinion. :D

Oh! That's a good idea! I bet if Teddy hadn't been so embarrassed he probably would've thought of the Disillusionment Charm too. :P

HAHAHAHAHA! *slow claps* EXCELLENT PUN! Well done! You definitely win the award for best review pun!

Thank you so much for leaving such a fantastic review! You're awesome!!

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