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Review #1, by LeonoreThe Pawn in the Game.: Returning to School.

25th October 2015:
DELAY? Do you know the meaning of the word 'delay'? :P

Yeah I think my alcohol tolerence is gone. Forming complete sentences is harder than it should be on just one glass of wine... here goes anyway.

Poor James. Teasing comes naturally to him and he only means things as a joke and yet Lily just gets worked up.

"...or that he'd have made the friends he did in Ravenclaw." is a bit shaky meaning-wise.

Oooh. Tut tut, James... my first instinct is "Marauder's Map", by the way, though that would perhaps be a little unoriginal for you. Depends how you'd then use it anyway, of course.

Aw, poor Al, worrying for no real reason. *relates* Of course worrying doesn't necessarily help (I still managed to leave all my scarves at home this term because I was sure they were in the bag with my hats but they weren't, but anyway), and he needs to remember he can get them to post him stuff if necessary!

*laughs at James and the strippers* Aw, little James, pretending to be all grown up!

Yep, something odd with Lily - she's in a hurry to go, and then won't sit with them.

IT IS THE MAP! I guessed it. Knew I was right to bother mentioning it. :D

*huggles Molly* Poor kid. She knows what Percy's like. *pokes him* Hopefully this'll push him into reassessing priorities as he has to find different things to brag about with regards to her!

Well I don't know what you were worried about with that chapter!

~ Leo xx

Author's Response: Yeah, the second version worked out a whole lot better. If you'd seen the original... This is pretty much a complete rewrite.

And yeah, I know a month isn't SUPER-long. I have another story that got left so long I sort of forgot where I was going and abandoned it, but there's a difference between a delay because you've been busy or you've been working on something else and taking a month while you are TECHNICALLY working on it all the time - *writes 300 words* *takes a three day break*

I'll see if I can fiddle around with that sentence some more.

And yeah, the Marauder's Map probably IS a little unoriginal, but I needed him to have it - like I said, Chekov's guns - so it really had to be referenced in this chapter.

Albus worries a LOT, poor kid and he REALLY overdoes it in this chapter. *huggles him* Of COURSE Harry and Ginny would send on anything he forgot, but he still works himself up.

As for Lily and I said, a few more Chekov's guns.

Thank you so much for the review.

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Review #2, by LeonoreThe Pawn in the Game.: At the Warlock's Court Hotel.

9th September 2015:
Aw, bet poor Lucy is feeling embarrassed by all the fuss! Even if she enjoys it, she'll have to put up with being paraded.

And Lily is being a bit of a brat. She has some temper! James could really do with shutting up at this point... but then he wouldn't be James. Sweet Al, trying to go and sort it out. And yes, Rose is not really the best example in this kind of situation...

"But had he really the right to do that when she'd specifically told him not to?" wants a question mark.

"How on earth were you supposed to know when people meant what they said and when they said one thing but really wanted you to do something different?" SO TRUE.

"flashing earringS" (I doubt she goes around with only one... and if she did it'd need an "a"!)

YES, quite divisive, Percy's fussing over Lucy! Someone should point that out to him. Though maybe he'd say something about it depending what the child's aims were in life or something - actually, what WOULD he say to that?

Question mark, again - "Mum, have you heard how her trial with the Arrows went?"

POOR Lucy! Poor, poor kid. Expectations like that... "It was more of a relief than anything" - yes, that she didn't have to deal with her father grilling her on why she didn't get an O in something. Though it means she'll have to face that later - not being the best; at some point she'll find something she can't do. I feel sorry for her.

Urgh, Percy nicking the credit. I suppose he'd respond to the "isn't it divisive?" with "the others didn't get 10 Os".

And his response to Louis' results... *prods him hard* Good on Louis for standing up to him. And Ginny is so sensible and grown up.

*stabs Percy with a pen*


And he's doing so nicely. *cheers for him*

Good chapter, and I think we're getting closer to action now! I'm trying to figure out what house Lily will be in and I still don't know. And I'd say I hope Molly is Hufflepuff or Slytherin to challenge Percy to think about things a bit more (I bet he'd be scornful of anyone else's kids ending up there), but I'm not sure if I'd wish the stress of his opinions on them. Anyway, expecting to find out soon!

Author's Response: Fixed the typos. Thanks for pointing them out.

Lily IS being a bit of a brat, but remember, she is pretty anxious at that moment and under a bit of pressure. After all, her dad is the Boy Who Lived, a national hero, started illegal defence groups at school and made the Quidditch team in 1st year, her mum is a reporter and played professional Quidditch, BOTH her brothers play Quidditch for their houses and Albus gets pretty good grades as well and James is the sort of person everybody's at least heard of. And now one of her cousins has received straight Os in her O.W.L.s. It's kind of a lot to live up to.

In some ways, it might even be WORSE for her than Albus, because like if she doesn't make the Quidditch team, she'll be the ONLY one in her family who didn't.

Al worries a lot and he really wants to help people but doesn't always know how, unlike Rose who always THINKS she knows how, even when she doesn't.

Yeah, Lucy is under a LOT of pressure. I've hinted at that a few times and I've had a few EVIL thoughts for her 7th year. Not sure whether I'll use them or not, but...

Hmm, *grins at your thoughts about the sortings* You MIGHT find out in the next chapter. Both girls' houses will actually play a part in their future stories, I think. It may not seem immediately apparent (or may), but where they are sorted will DEFINITELY have an effect on them.

Love hearing where people expect my characters to end up.

Thanks for the review.

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Review #3, by LeonoreThe Pawn in the Game.: School Supplies.

24th August 2015:

James? Prefect? Don't think that's VERY likely... :P

Poor Al. Being in this family takes some self control.

Oooh sounds like muggle studies will be interesting...

And Lily's cute. Innocently cute. But I won't get attached. I've already told you I refuse to get attached to her or anyone else except Lydia.

Well done Lily! Teach him to talk properly! *approves*

Poor James. Mother critisising his grades in front of him. He claims not to care but it's still not too nice, trying to shame him like that.

And anyone who didn't know Albus would be disgusted by that "Herbology is really interesting," comment. If you DO know him, you know he actually means it and isn't just sucking up.

Oooh, I have a bad feeling about Lily carrying her own wand. It's just like her to ask, but I've still got a bad feeling about it! *eyes you suspiciously*

Lily's self-absorbtion is starting to get irritating.

Aw, poor Hugo. I forgot he has to wait an extra year!

I'm slightly surprised at them having to go into muggle London to get the stuff - rather than Flourish and Blotts getting it in especially, or Hogwarts providing. Maybe not many students do muggle studies, but what about those with no muggle connections? And I'd expect the Ministry to have something to say about the risk to the Statute!

The 25p on the end surprises me - they have 2 of each item, right? Though I guess stuff like biros and pencils you'd tend to get in packets with several, which they could share. And from the list at the top of the page, I'd say they're pretty lucky to get it for 6.25! Haven't added it all up yet, but that stuff can be pretty overpriced here. And a surprising lack of 99p's on the end.

Nice chapter, with some intriguing stuff!

~Leo xx

Author's Response: OK, admittedly I just pulled the price of the items out of nowhere, but Harry'd only be paying for Albus's items, so there wouldn't be two of everything. Admittedly, THAT wouldn't make much sense.

The Muggle London part was probably a bit of an indulgence on my part. It was just more interesting to write that than to write a typical Diagon Alley chapter.

And I'm glad it at least took a while for Lily to get irritating. In the first version, she was irritating right from the start and I was ready to have her abducted or hexed into non-existence or something, 'cause she was annoying me.

I thought she'd annoy you when she started being dismissive about Hugo. *grins*

James does get rather stereotyped as the troublesome kid, doesn't he? Which probably only encourages him to play up to it.

Thank you so much for the review. *grins*

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Review #4, by LeonoreThe Pawn in the Game.: Summer Days.

6th August 2015:
Yay, Pawn in the Game! Very, very intrigued by the summary. And now, one jerky, bitty, sleep-deprived-Leo review coming up... it's reading time!

*huggles Albus* He's so sweet and innocent. They both are, actually - Derek surprisingly so, when he starts about the shooting games. Like "oh it's terrible and I'd NEVER want to play that!" He's... what, 13? And he calmly mentions he's not allowed to play stuff, neither of them feeling at all that maybe they've grown out of such restriction and it's unreasonable (as many rather younger kids feel). It's slipping from sweet and innocent into sickeningly good.

But I love Albus' doubt about the nature of the internet and how real the games actually are.

*cheers for cricket* Valuable life skills there. No kid should grow up without knowing at least the basics! (Knowing the names of all the fielding positions and the key players of the England squad and your local county team... not compulsory, only encouraged. :P Understanding the importance of the Ashes IS important.)

Yay for Callaghan! He's always awesome. And it's good that the legislation is going well and protecting people like Lydia. Especially Lydia.

James is mean, teasing Lily, but then isn't scaring younger siblings before they start a great tradition? Albus and Rose verge on boringly goody-goody sometimes. Especially considering their age. They feel younger than they are. Oh, and Albus says he hasn't had a detention but didn't he get one in 1st year? I seem to remember him freaking out about it...

Love all the various conversations, but the links between them do jolt rather and voices are kind of stilted and not really realistic speech. I know it's a tricky bitty chapter, before anything really starts - yeah, it just doesn't really come together. Maybe it need either more complete and longer scenes (padding isn't always bad) or cutting down the scene-setting and heading almost immediately into the action.

Looking forward to seeing where it goes, anyway, especially once all the awkward intro-y stuff is done!

~ Leo xx

Author's Response: Yeah, getting the various scenes together was just annoying. I will have another go through it, but I think I might move on a bit first. Sometimes once you've written a little more, you can see what can be changed.

There are a couple of things I need here, like the reference to the Irish Ministry, for future stuff, so I can't really just cut it.

As regards the whole "games about massacring people are dreadful," I've come across kids a good few years older than Albus and the gang that think like that. I think it's partly a personality thing. This whole "everybody suddenly becomes a rebel at 13/14" thing irritates me because in real life people don't usually change personality like that. I mean, yeah, people do start to question things more as they grow up and yes, a lot of teens do get rebellious in their early/mid-teens but I know people who would probably still be horrified by stuff like that as adults and I know people who'd have been rolling their eyes at the restrictions at 8. Not that I'd consider not allowing 13 year olds to play games marketed as 18+ and including really offensive and violent stuff to be particularly restrictive anyway.

While it was a very different era, my friends and I were about a year and a half older than them when we were freaking each other out with "imagine if you found out your parents weren't married when you were born!"

The 1st year detention never actually went ahead, so he never actually HAD a detention. That was when Lydia did her bizarre "giving detentions for no reason and then cancelling them" thing.

Thanks for the review. And especially thanks for the honesty, though I know I can trust you on that one. I think once it comes to the next chapter, things will come together a bit more. I'm not really sure how to tie this chapter together, because it's just jumping too much from one thing to another. I have one idea, but whether it would work or not...

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Review #5, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: The Midnight Feast.

25th March 2015:
Aww, poor Nathan. Practical potions is tough, if they can't tell the difference between one little slip-up and doing the entire thing wrong. Though of course any scale of slip-up is equally bad as it makes the potion useless/dangerous, so it's a good lesson.

They do their end-of-year exams in the exam hall? I always sort of imagine they just do them in class, at least for the first three years when it's pretty informal (years 4 and 6 might be mocks). But I guess if they have a hall free and enough staff to supervise, and they're not worried about messing up other classes, it's be reasonable to do it in the hall.

Al is a little too sensitive sometimes. I feel a bit sorry for him, but he REALLY needs to get used to being teased or he's going to be very miserable for most of his life.

Yay, midnight feast! I'm surprised they didn't fall asleep waiting - I think my sister and I used to try to sit up waiting for midnight to have midnight feasts when we shared a room, and we kept on accidentally falling asleep. Definitely at Brownie camp pretty much everyone was asleep by midnight, however hard we tried to stay awake, though that was 7-11 year olds. I guess if they're talking and sitting up, they'll be a lot less likely to doze off.

The set out the plates and poured out the packets of sweets, crisps and chocolates. Should be "They set out..."

"What about parents getting their hands on them?" Nathan asked. "Or teachers." lol, definitely a legitimate concern!

So it looks like both Rose and Nathan have topped Defence... ;) You've missed History of Magic.

"I passed everything except Transfiguration," Dora said. "I wonder why that is."

"Erm, because you never even listen to Professor Blackburn, let alone do any work," Rose said.

OK I actually have to cheer for Rose here. Dora got owned. :D

YAY RAVENCLAW WIN THE HOUSE CUP!!! CELSA SUB CONVENIANT AQUILA SAPIENTES MENTES! *still feels the need to recite that at every opportunity just because I can still remember it*

Yay happy Lydia :D And if apologising is what makes her happy, may as well let her, I guess. *huggles her*

I like this chapter. *nods*

Author's Response: I honestly don't know where they do the end of year exams. Most schools I worked in had at least some classes do them in the hall though, as it makes it harder to cheat, but I guess Hogwarts has 5 years doing non-Ministry exams, as opposed to three in a lot of schools here, so it might be different. *shrugs* That was something I was actually wondering what I should write for it.

And yeah, Al takes teasing WAY too seriously, poor kid. He'll grow up. *hugs him*

2am doesn't strike me as ridiculously late for 13 year olds to be awake. Then again, I am rather a night owl, so my perception may not be the normal one. But when I was at a wedding last summer though, the bride's little niece was up dancing until the early hours and she was 7. Not sure how late she stayed up, but it was definitely well after midnight.

Yeah, I just HAD to have SOMEBODY mention parents and teachers getting technology that could be used to spy on their kids. It was hard to figure out who should say it though, as they are such good kids.

I reckon they would mark the potions on how close they are to how they are supposed to look, smell, etc, but I think a small mistake could make a big difference, depending on what the mistake is. Nathan MAY be overreacting a little, because he is so annoyed with himself for messing up on a potion he knew well.

Yeah, the Nathan part should have been History of Magic, as you could probably have guessed. I was busy switching subjects around, trying to decide who should do best at what and obviously got confused somewhere, although that was a strange one for me to make a mistake on, as it was pretty clear what Nathan was likely to do best at.

And I thought he deserved to do well at SOMETHING.

*laughs* I MADE YOU CHEER FOR ROSE. I MADE YOU CHEER FOR ROSE. Dora did deserve that, didn't she?

THOUGHT you'd be pleased to see Lydia starting to feel a little better. Knowing her job is safe is probably quite a relief for her and I think the school year being over would help too. Even though she likes her job, she has had a REALLY tough year, and I'd say she'd be glad of the break. She could REALLY do with one.

She still has a lot to deal with, but she's definitely beginning to recover.

Glad you liked the chapter. *grins*

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Review #6, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Nott to Blame.

13th February 2015:
Hi. I've thought of enough comments in the first
few paragraphs to convince myself to start
writing a review. Especially as I don't have any
kind of excuse NOT to tonight (and I've already
missed enough chapters).

Slughorn! Well, I guess Albus has a good
explanation. Even if Dora's being rude about it,
I bet that's the reason he agreed to return

Dora's definitely back to full-on horrible. Can't
decide whether I like that Rose is unable to
answer back but that Dora has regained all her
former confidence.

Oh, so it's NOT for Lily that he's returning. It
makes sense, that he'll only be there for a few
weeks - I'd have trouble believing him returning
full-time really. All the Slug Club stuff...
definitely the same old Slughorn. You've got him
bang on with the "always a favourite student of
mine" stuff. And he is a seriously useless
teacher. *wonders if there'll be anything
important happening at this Slug Club revival

Ooh, I like the sound of them getting a link
between Fairfax and the A.W.L. I do NOT, however,
like Nott's comments. *distracts Lydia with
kitties so she doesn't read it* He's very good at
turning it all round to suit him. *glares* He'd
better get caught out soon! There's some
criticism of the A.W.L., which I approve of, but
far too much opportunity for Nott to push his

He really is right that Hogwarts needs to sort
out it's vetting procedure for teachers. THIS IS

Wow, I never thought Felicity's mother would be
non-evil. Despite the fuss about unmedicated
werewolves, at least she's attacking Nott!

Hehe, detention for Rose! :D

Ah, that motive makes sense!

Flitwick is nice. Of course he must realise just
why Rose hexed Dora! Dora deserved it, but he had
to give Rose detention, and while I like Rose
getting in trouble it would be unfair to be TOO
harsh, especially when Dora's punishing her by
crowing about it anyway.

*goes back to playing with Lydia and the puppy
and kitties in a room with no copies of the
Prophet and no nasty people*

Author's Response: Yeah, it would be pretty unrealistic for Slughorn to come out of retirement YET AGAIN. It was a crisis that brought him back in Half Blood Prince after all. But when there's probably less than two months left in the school year, it makes sense for somebody with a knowledge of what the students have been doing to cover and it gives McGonagall the summer to find somebody permanent.

Slughorn is great fun to write. You can just have him ramble on about anything, so long as it allows him mention his famous contacts or congratulate himself in some way. He's brilliant for giving stuff away too or hinting at stuff.

Nott wasn't MEANT to start making those comments and pushing his own agenda. He was just meant to insist the A.W.L. had no responsibility for what Fairfax did and indicate his responsibility for the vandalism, but then he started going on a rant when I was editing.

Felicity's mother is more of an idiot than evil. She's just one of these really overprotective women, who doesn't want her daughter exposed to anything that could possibly worry or hurt her, or cause her to challenge her mother's prejudices.

Somehow I don't see Flitwick as being overly-strict, especially not when it's Rose's first detention in nearly two years at Hogwarts. It's not as if she's a troublemaker. And he knows the situation well enough to be able to have a fair idea that there was provocation.

Besides I think he knows Rose well enough to be aware that the humiliation of GETTING a detention would be punishment in itself.

And yeah, Lydia could REALLY do with a break from the constant stress. Although she now KNOWS what caused the Wolfsbane to fail and the person who did it has been exposed, and the constant calls for her to be fired have died down, all the discussion about Fairfax and how his actions could have harmed students are a reminder of how dangerous the creature she transforms into could be and of how much people fear werewolves and also a reminder of that transformation, which is something she really needs to forget. And on top of that, she's dealing with the revelation that a colleague and somebody she considered a friend was behind something so horrible. So she is DEFINITELY still recovering. I think playing with puppies and kitties in a peaceful environment might be relaxing for her.

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Review #7, by LeonorePending Further Investigation: xiii. reconciliation [or] the truth will set you free

4th February 2015:
So, I've decided to dash out a review in the 5 minutes I have free. Apologies in advance if it makes no sense.

Poor Lester! Having to learn programming from a textbook. I've done a bit and it's definitely something best picked up from practice. I'm very curious as to how computer programming and app development will help them sort out this electricity/magic issue - I've always considered that issue to be due to the physical principals of electronics, and I'd expect knowledge of the mechanisms of electronics to be more important here, but then magic works in strange ways. Are they trying to develop an app to make electrical devices compatible with magic or something? *wants to know more* *gets very excited about the entire engineering thing... yeah you know what I'm studying*

Yay for Lester making up with his dad! And being made captain! Might help make up for learning all that evil programming stuff from textbooks. ;)

Beautiful chapter ending.

Yeah this review was going to be about more stuff than just me getting excited about engineering stuff but I'm running over my 5 minutes and I have to dash off and if I don't post this now I won't get round to it. Loving the story. Keep up the good work!

~ Leo xx

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Review #8, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: The Following Day.

1st January 2015:
Rose logic. She's a spiteful kid, you have to admit. She's being offered a chance to skip class but she wants to go in the hope of seeing Dora being expelled! (Ignoring the fact that come on, McGonagall's hardly likely to make it a big public spectacle if she DOES expel Dora!)

Aw, Twinkle! The house-elf is now joining the ranks of my favourite characters, alongside Lydia, Fionnuala, and Angie. (DON'T ARGUE WITH LEO-LOGIC!)

Good riddle.


Poor, poor Lydia. *scoops her up in a massive hug and runs away with her* I TOLD you to leave her alone. And obviously people who don't know what happened are going to ask questions.

Very interested in what's happened to Dora. Whatever McGonagall's said must have had an effect on her - but then McGonagall IS brilliant, and she'd have a perfect way of dealing with Dora.

You've written "She couldn't help grinned."

"It's I should be asking you that, Rose." sounds weird to me. "It's me who should be asking you that, Rose." or "I should be the one asking you that, Rose.", maybe. Is this another of our English/Irish English things?

"But it was also pretty exciting." Yeah, that's the right thing to say to Lydia. JUST like Rose to feel that.

Poor Lydia. That's quite a betrayal. *huggles her again* I TOLD you to play nicely with her and you didn't, so you're not getting another chance! Lydia's confiscated. Permanently. She's going to live in a fairy palace with nice people and be a fluffy werepuppy instead of a werewolf. *nods*

Flint and co. aren't going to give Lydia a hard time because she's not actually in the story any more, I took her out. *nods again*

That's good logic, Albus. If Rose isn't shoving her opinions/theories down everyone's throats, that's suspicious.

HOW DID YOU GET LYDIA BACK? *rescues and huggles her again*

The Daily Prophet had better not stir things up again! *glares*

"Oh, are you teaching us now?" probably wants a question mark.

"I'm sure you can find some way of keeping yourselves occupied." Who on earth thinks THAT'S a sensible thing to say to a class? He's lucky the class in question are unbelievably studious.

So THIS is Madame Ogden. Yes, Rose has a good point about the constant reassurances only making her more nervous. But naughty Rose, lying there! Thought she was going to play a prank indeed... but OK, it saves some explanation as to why she was so suspicious of Dora otherwise.

I like sarcastic Rose. Yes, I said I actually like Rose. At least briefly. She should be sarcastic more often.

That last sentence makes me doubt whether Dora really will receive her comeuppance. Hmm...

Author's Response: Well, to be fair, it's not JUST because she wants to know if Dora's expelled. She just wants to know the outcome of everything that happened. Can you really imagine Rose being happy to be left in the dark?

Yeah, Twinkle's pretty cool. She was just meant to give a message. All that stuff about being a bad elf was all her own.

And you might get more hints about Dora later on, but like you suggested above, a lot of it isn't going to be announced publicly.

Yeah, poor Lydia. And worst of all, it's naturally going to set her off wondering who else might be secretly judging her or just pretending to be her friend. Particularly after her parents' reaction.

I think she needs some hugging and reassurance right now.

Yeah, spoil her a bit there until I need her again. She deserves it.

I KNEW you'd get mad at Rose for saying that eavesdropping on Fairfax was exciting. Yeah, not exactly one of the wisest things to say, but she's still pretty caught up in the whole thing.

*laughs at Flint not being mean to her because she's been randomly abducted* That's PURE Leo-logic. And it would be pretty weird if she just randomly disappeared from Hogwarts, especially after a class she only turned up midway through.

I'm surprised you didn't equate her absence with your abduction of her.

I KNEW you'd like Albus's logic there. Well, actually, I kind of assumed you'd like him surprising her by figuring something out without her prompting.

I've corrected the mistakes and actually, I suspect that line sounding awkward may be partly Irish-English and partly my just not being able to get it sounding right. But he does have a point. If she didn't know what happened, she would definitely have either been airing her opinions or trying to think up ways to figure out what had happened.

You'll find out the Daily Prophet's reaction, or lack of, in the next chapter.

So lying is naughty, but cheeking strange adults is a positive attribute...all right. And if she says she was already suspicious of Dora, they'd probably figure out she and Dora don't get on and might think that'd give her a reason to make it up.

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Review #9, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: The Clock Strikes One.

6th December 2014:
Yay, Angie's happy!

Granny and Grandad Granger are lovely, it makes me feel almost sorry for what I did to them in Rainfall. Rose's option choices are unsusprising.

This line: Angie's face lit up. "Thank you so much for including me, Mrs. Granger." - *huggles Angie* It's kind of sad that she's so surprised to be included, but it really makes her day.

Haha, Hugo's indignation at the idea of Rose getting a boyfriend! Somehow I doubt Rose is going to be getting a boyfriend in the near future, because then you'd have to write romance.

Poor Hugo. It's funny, the idea of him not being in the same year as Lily - I always assumed he was, from the epilogue, but it probably wasn't explicitly stated (I obviously don't have HP books here to figure out where I got that idea from).

This bit struck me as slightly odd, like it ought to be one or the other. Unless the repitition is for effect or something:

"At breakfast the following morning, it became clear not all her classmates felt as she did.

At breakfast the following morning it became clear that not all of her classmates were as pleased as she was to be back at school."

Well this just sums up Albus perfectly: "...and Albus just looked worried." Poor Al. I hope he gets that snitch and beats his brother.

Rose doesn't seem well at all. Not sure what's wrong with her but we're probably going to find out soon. (If she has Spattergroit... :P )

MAYBE Dora's feeling equally ill and is going to find something to help her sleep. Or maybe she's been doing something to make Rose ill.

This sentence seems kind of awkward. Maybe: "In the common room, a candle was alight," or "A candle was lighting the common room" or something (this might be Irish/English differences, I don't know). And this doesn't really want the comma: "its light hurting her eyes after the darkness of the dormitory."

Rose definitely doesn't seem well at all.

I WANT TO FIND OUT WHAT DORA'S UP TO TOO. And I can't think of any more theories at the moment, but I'll let you know if I come up with one.

Author's Response: Angie's fairly easily made happy actually, probably because she's learnt not to expect much. It's sad in one way, but it also means she's pretty resilient. She doesn't stay down long.

To be honest, I think she needs practical help more than emotional help. Mostly, she just deserves to have some of the opportunities other kids take for granted.

I love writing the difference between the Grangers and the Weasleys, with the Weasleys being such a big, crazy, tight-knit clan and the Grangers quieter and more well, academic, I suppose for want of a better word, but both adoring their grandchildren and spoiling them in their different ways - Molly fussing over them and feeding them up, Arthur taking them into the Muggle world and sharing his hobbies with them and the Grangers giving them advice on school and stuff.

As far as I know, all it said in the epilogue was that Hugo and Lily were discussing what houses they'd be in when they eventually got to go to Hogwarts, which could imply it was the same year, but wouldn't necessarily HAVE to. I've a couple of reasons for splitting them up - partly so I can focus more on each of them at a time and partly just because it struck me as a bit of a coincidence if both of Ron and Hermione's kids were in the same year as one of Harry's. Of course, it's a bit of a coincidence anyway, both of their children being within born within a couple of months of one of Harry's, but still. I suspect they are meant to be in the same year, but since I don't THINK it was said directly, it's one of the things I chose to play around with. The wiki just says Hugo was born after August 2006.

Yeah, that repetition is called "forgetting to delete the rejected sentence when editing." I changed that sentence so many times; it just kept sounding slightly wrong, probably because I was after skipping (Irish-speak alert; I guess ye'd say "had skipped") over a good chunk of time, so I must have forgotten to delete one of the rejected version or copy and pasted too much.

Hmm, it would be rather a coincidence if both of our stories had Rose ill at the end. Though of course, in yours, she got sick in her first year (ye don't use "sick" like that either, do ye? I try to use "ill" anyway, because I'm more sure of it. I don't think I could bring myself to use "poorly") whereas IF she IS sick here, it's her second.

I was wondering if you'd raise the possibility of Spattergroit. *laughs* Although that can last months, I guess it's not impossible, as Year 3 will be from Albus's point of view. I haven't decided whose point of view to write Year 4 from, but at the very least, she'd have 16 months to recover.

And of course, if she WERE ill for a long time, it would mean Albus would have to stand on his own two feet, which could be interesting.

I would torment you some more with suggestions about Rose being ill, but since you don't like her, you probably won't care.

Wonder what I'd have to do to her to get her your sympathy.

Of course, she COULD just be tired. It is pretty late and she hasn't slept and the teachers have been piling on the work as the end of year exams are coming.

And yes, if Dora was feeling ill, she might well get up to go to the hospital wing or something. Heading for the dungeons seems less likely, unless she wanted to ask Fairfax for a potion, but what are the chances he'd be in his office at 1am. She could be planning to raid the potions stores though, I suppose, and drive him crazy again. *laughs*

Yeah, that sentence was a bit awkward, so I changed it to "a candle was alight".

I'd love to hear any theories you have.

A fair amount will be revealed in the next chapter - what Dora is doing, if there is anything wrong with Rose (well, I guess it's fairly obvious another chapter should give some indications as regards that) and what happened to the Wolfsbane. Of course, the first and third could go together. Or they might not. I guess the second could be related too, but it's kinda less likely to be.

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Review #10, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Confidences.

5th December 2014:
Aww, Rose is so GROWN UP! Hugo's such a lovely normal little boy. Poor Angie - she's missing her siblings - maybe wishing her siblings could be normal and happy like Hugo? And the moment she gets excited about a topic of conversation, Rose changes the subject and ignores her!

Mmm, they get good breakfasts, at least on Easter morning! *is jealous*

Aw, Ron's being perfectly reasonable. Hermione just likes arguing with him, I guess.

As Hermione's English, you probably want English grammar here. " be allowed to start his Easter egg."

*huggles Hugo* He's so normal and excited and keeps the conversation from getting too deep.

Aww, Charlie actually WARNS them about the flames? I'd have expected him to not tell them to make it a surprise - a surprise which is hilarious for everyone else.

Good, Teddy doesn't fancy Lydia! Not concerned about this "she fancies him" thing. But I've already told you my views on this whole situation! Victoire's just giving her opinions/beliefs, and while they make sense it's hardly evidence of what's going to happen.

No Albus does not need to keep an eye on Angie all the time! Angie is perfectly capable of looking after herself in the Burrow.

Rose, tactful? If only. I can think of people Angie would rather have this conversation with.

Here: "What did you mean, so?" The "so" on the end is an Irish thing and, well, Rose isn't Irish.

Poor Angie *huggles her*. Rose is definitely not the best person for her to have this conversation with. I hate how casually Angie says things like "she'd probably spend the money in the pub...". Poor kid.

Um, Rose, Angie said she needed a break. That includes a break from you!

Yay, Angie's having a nice Easter for once! Everything's so normal (apart from Rose's deep conversations with people) and nice, and Hugo's bouncing around being a normal kid. It's nice seeing Hugo like that, without all the problems my Hugo has.

*bounces impatiently* I want to know who tampered with the Wolfsbane! Because as you know, I don't really have a clue.

Author's Response: Yeah, I don't think it's been mentioned yet, but Angie has a brother Hugo's age and it has definitely been mentioned that she has a little sister, who is probably around 6 - I've lost track, but I have her age in my notes. So yeah, she's probably wishing they had as much to be excited about on Easter morning as Hugo has. And she's probably worried about how they are spending the Easter holidays and who is looking after them and stuff.

I see the Ron/Hermione argument here as being part of an ongoing thing. Can't you see Ron regularly forgetting when it's his turn to cook, either accidentally OR accidentally-on-purpose? And Hermione constantly nagging him about how unfair it is that she's made dinner five times this week and he's only done it twice? I don't really see either Ron OR Hermione as the type to be too enthusiastic about housework, though Hermione'd DO it because she's something of a perfectionist. And she'd be irritated when Ron doesn't pull his weight. She does seem to secretly enjoy nagging him though.

Dialogue de-Irishised. I might get a chance to get you back when you start writing people like Callaghan.

And yeah, Hugo is a normal ten year old boy in this. Actually both Rose and Hugo are pretty happy - so far. As are James, Albus and Lily - again so far. Apart from Albus's regular worries, but they are relatively minor.

And yeah, Charlie warns them. George wouldn't, but Charlie does.

That's as much as you are going to get about Lydia possibly fancying Teddy, so you can interpret it pretty much as you will. I think it's open to debate whether even she really knows the answer to that one, as she probably wouldn't be too inclined to admit it to herself if she did fancy him, since he has a girlfriend. I think she's pretty likely to get a crush on any guy around her age who is nice to her anyway, since she's a little low on self-esteem and it probably means a lot to her to think somebody is concerned for her.

To be fair, Rose just wants to make sure Angie isn't left out, since she doesn't really know anybody there other than Rose and Albus. And kind of Hugo, but a ten year old probably isn't the greatest company a 13 year old could have. I don't think Angie'd mind, actually, but Rose is sort of the "younger siblings are so annoying and should go away" type, so she wouldn't think of him as being much company for Angie.

Actually, although they'd both probably hate this comparison, Rose is kind of like James in that way - they both, in different ways - sort of do the "I'm WAY too mature for what the younger kids are doing." Whereas Albus doesn't care and is like, "oh, of course, Lily, Hugo and Molly are welcome to join us."

Yeah, Angie refers to stuff like that casually, because it's pretty normal to her. Poor kid. She's pretty resilient though. I mean, yeah, stuff gets to her occasionally and she does feel a bit left out when the other kids are making plans for their holidays and stuff, but look at her in that Transfiguration class where they were turning balloons into footballs or whatever. She's perfectly capable of enjoying herself a lot of the time.

I am REALLY looking forward both to seeing what you make of certain things in the next chapter and how you respond to the reveal. And even more so to something that won't be revealed until somewhat later, when you will probably be appalled at somebody.

Thank you SO much for reviewing.

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Review #11, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: King's Cross Station.

21st November 2014:
Haha, I know people like that. And yeah, the teachers would probably take it seriously.

Aw, brotherly love... *huggles Albus*

Oh yes, three weeks IS forever... until it's over, when you look back and it seems like no time at all.

Ooh, Rose is inviting Angie to stay! *looks forward to seeing what happens* I guess we might get to find out more about Angie!

Aaaand Rose is convinced it's Dora. Still.

Rose is confused. Wow. Yeah, Angie's kind of nervous... that's surprising?

Aww, Hugo. Hermione's being boring. Though the four of them in London IS worrying... Aww, James is being mean. But I'm actually happy with Rose for once for not letting him get away with it. *cheers for Aidan & co* Oh, I don't like Rose again, she's being disparaging of them. "What would blind kids be doing in a museum", indeed! And Arthur... in a muggle museum... yeah, not the best of plans.

You probably want a comma in here: "...his stupid Quidditch, and finally parted."

Ron and Hermione are perfect together. And this is a perfect demonstration of why! Ron's being a bad dad, but he's right that he doesn't have to worry about encouraging Rose to be interested in her education!

Rose - ancient runes and arithmancy - yep, thought so! The Muggle studies thing makes sense... and I think you mentioned something about having a muggle teaching muggle studies, not sure, which would suggest SOMEONE will take it. And Angie for Care of Magical Creatures. I like Angie.

*huggles* Thank you so much for yet another shout-out!

Author's Response: One of my friend's actually said once that a class she had were given this questionnaire including stuff like "do you drink?" and "how often?" and some of them were writing in ludicrous stuff, like that they'd been drinking 5 days a week since they were 13 and stuff and she said she knew they weren't because she'd kind of have noticed if they'd been coming into school after drinking that much. So yeah, kids exaggerate.

Yeah, we might get to see a little more of Angie.

Rose didn't mean to be quite as disparaging as that came out. She was mostly just interested in why it'd be of interest to them. But yeah, it does show she's got a fairly stereotyped view of people with disabilities and just kind of expects that they wouldn't be able to do many normal things.

And yeah, she's REALLY not thinking about how it might feel for Angie to go and stay with complete strangers, in a world she's still a newcomer to.

Will insert comma. *laughs*

Ron probably wouldn't say that stuff if he really thought there was any danger of Rose NOT taking the decision seriously, but as it is, he likes to tease her and Hermione about taking life so seriously. And he likes being the cool dad.

Angie would definitely do Care of Magical Creatures, because it gives a bit of freedom and a chance to mess about. And yup, am thinking of a Muggle teaching Muggle Studies. *plots*

Well, a large part of the story was inspired by yours, so it's only fair I gave you some acknowledgement.

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Review #12, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Ravenclaw versus Hufflepuff.

16th November 2014:
I think they need to get Dora's head looked at. She's laughing for no reason now. *cheers for Blackburn ignoring her*

Aww, Al is cute. And Blackburn seems so much happier and more confident this chapter than she has in the whole of this story so far! I approve.

Why should Rose think? Um, Lydia, I think Rose SHOULD think at least occasionally.

Al, stop asking Rose for Quidditch advice. The more you ask for her advice, the more unbearable she'll get. And urgh, she's not very good at comforting him (unsurprisingly). I think Al should meet Callaghan too.

Oh, Angie's getting mildly irritated with Fionnuala. Can't really blame her. Somehow I doubt Fionnuala's going to notice, though.

"Is there really any point in hanging around longer than we need to?" needs a question mark.


Maybe some exclamation marks in your Quidditch commentary - like "And they're off!", and sometimes join with commas or elipses rather than full stops all the time, for variety? Good - realistic - commentary, though.

Aw, Rose doesn't want to get wet. Go on, soak them! Aw, ickle firsties scared of thunder! I like thunderstorms - though I prefer to be indoors for them! Haha, characters getting wet! *sniggers and cheers* (Yes I'm easily amused when sleep deprived).

YAY, RAVENCLAW! *dances*

Poor Scorpius. I like Scorpius.

Hahaha Felicity's drunk. Or at least thinks she's drunk. Rebel Ravenclaws!

Author's Response: Well, Blackburn's now had the potion work twice in a row, so I guess she's relaxing a little bit. She still has a fair few demons to deal with, of course, but she's probably feeling a little better than she did before the full moon, at least.

And come on, you know what Lydia MEANT. Why should she think about how Lydia might be feeling?

I'll correct that missing question mark.

I'm surprised you didn't give out about Rose rolling her eyes at the first years being scared. I thought you'd disapprove of that.

And yes, the first years convincing themselves they are drunk. *laughs*

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Review #13, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Weaving a Web.

5th November 2014:
*shakes Dora hard*

Rose is an idiot. She's convinced it's Dora - AGAIN. And oh no, she can't use the potion as bait... oh OK, she's not going to make it vulnerable or anything. Phew. I wouldn't put it past her to leave it lying out in the open in order to lure Dora in.

Al doesn't like them sticking their noses into other people's business. I actually approve of Rose finding out who's responsible, though. She's doing good things. But she's unbearable with it. Poor Al, putting up with her.

Bossy boots Rose. Stop ordering Al around.

Haha, someone already thought of it. Well obviously other people are going to think of the obvious, even if it takes Rose a while. But NO ONE THOUGHT TO ASK THE GHOSTS? THAT surprises me.

Stop arguing with people for the hell of it, Rose. Nick is sensible.

Actually, it's just occurred to me that Harry's trying to push for Auror reforms and the Draoithe are debating Fianna reforms! And Nick's summed up the difficulties faced by both groups of reformists very nicely.

Yay, Nobby! :D

What MIGHT Peeves do to Fairfax's office? Provided it doesn't prevent them from being able to retrieve the potion when Blackburn needs to take it!

D'aw, Albus is so cute, all proud of being mentioned.

And I can tell exactly why Neville is particularly fond of Nathan!

Oh, Dora's reaction to the news of a test! I TOTALLY haven't joined in complaining about the unfairness of surprise tests... Actually in these circumstances, I'm glad Rose spoke up. It's better than Blackburn having to deal with Dora's complaint herself.

Teehee, Peeves refusing to dismantle the web!

Author's Response: I don't think Rose would be able to get her hands on the potion in order to leave it somewhere out in the open. And I don't think she's that irresponsible anyway, although when she gets an idea into her head, anything is possible. Hermione's idea about leaving hats and stuff lying around so the house elves will be freed, without considering where they'd live or how they'd support themselves if they left Hogwarts was bad enough, and Rose has a touch of Ron's impulsiveness on top of that.

And yeah, poor Al. He does get dragged into things he really doesn't want to deal with. It's more that he's worried than that he doesn't approve of it, although some things he DOESN'T approve of, but he won't speak up to say so. *hugs him* I am fond of my Albus.

And yes, of COURSE McGonagall and the other teachers and Hermione are going to think to ask the portraits outside Fairfax's office to watch out and see if anybody tries to enter. It's not really rocket science and I want to avoid the "all adults are stupid and can't figure out things a 12 year old can" idea.

It was only while I was editing and added in the line about how they shouldn't BE Aurors if they're afraid of risks (the comment about how in a dangerous job, people are going to be more wary of change was the one I realised Rose wouldn't let go without an argument) that I realised how similar that argument was to the one Burke was having with everybody about how nothing about the Fianna should be changed because they are absolutely perfect. I think even Rose would shut up if faced with Burke. He's pretty intimidating.

Yeah, Nobby. I thought you might comment on the speculation about Hermione too.

I hadn't even thought of them not being able to get the potion. Yeah, that wouldn't be good.

And yes, I think Neville's reasons for sympathising with Nathan are obvious to anybody reading. I try to show Neville coming full circle, treating people like Nathan and Blackburn with the compassion that people like Remus showed him when HE needed it, because he knows what it's like to lack self-esteem and he also knows how a person can overcome that and how they can succeed when they are given encouragement to BELIEVE they can. And now I'm reminded of an Irish proverb, "Mol an oige agus tiocaidh siad." It means "praise the young and they will come on." Or "they will achieve" probably expresses it better.

Complaining about surprise tests is totally legitimate and under normal circumstances I don't think Blackburn would give them anyway, but she just really wants to be left alone at that moment. And you can see why she'd want to shut Dora up.

And yes, that was what I meant when I said that Rose arguing in Transfiguration wasn't as bad as it seemed. At least it meant Blackburn got out of responding. Although I think she'd just have ignored the comment anyway.

And did you really think Peeves would just take down the web so Fairfax wouldn't get caught in it? *laughs*

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Review #14, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Protective Potions.

2nd October 2014:
"She couldn't remember whether or not she'd been at breakfast actually." might work better as "She couldn't remember whether or not Felicity'd been at breakfast, actually." It's obvious who all the "she"s are referring to, but it can take a second to process and figure out that one "she" is Rose and the next Felicity.

Rose REALLY has it in for Dora. It doesn't even make sense. Though I guess there is the similarity with the chocolate cauldrons... but seriously, Rose!

You've got a question mark instead of an exclamation mark: "That's exactly what I mean!"

I really don't know who'd try to off a first-year kid either. (Well, who a certain author could convince to do it for them.)

I'm confused. Like Rose, I can't think of any explanations. IT MAKES NO SENSE. I'm sure it will later, when you've actually explained what's going on, but I can't think of any realistic theories.

You might want to put quotation marks around the first "it" here: " explain what "it" was or who'd said it."

Yay, Scorpius! I like Scorpius. Poor Al, though, feeling even MORE inferior!

Poor Felicity. Yes, I said it! Poor Felicity. She's an idiot, and I don't like her, but I still feel a little bit sorry for her. And Rose needs to mind her own business and sort out her attitude. I like Lucy.

Abric's dodgy potion, trying to make a couple of easy galleons. That's all there is to it. I was sure there was more to it than that, but that's really the only explanation that would make sense.

Rose apologised to someone! *gasps*

SERIOUSLY, ROSE. MIND YOUR OWN BUSINESS. Poor Abric's just had to tell McGonagall everything - and he deserved everything he got from her - and he'll have to face the other Slytherins and all the people he made ill, but to have Rose LYING IN WAIT TO QUESTION AND LECTURE HIM THE MOMENT HE COMES OUT OF MCGONAGALL'S OFFICE. Not appropriate. Mind your own business, Rose. Though stupid Abric deserves to have a nasty time after being so stupid and creating the situation that's going to be horrendous for poor Blackburn to learn of.

Rose being disdainful and "holier than thou" again. Um, I'm pretty sure McGonagall's already told him all that.

I still like Scorpius. He's amazing.

Aaand Rose is dwelling on Dora's swelling solution again. Surprise surprise. And there's a far more plausible explanation for why Dora didn't buy the potion: Dora's not stupid. The potion works on people who know basically nothing about werewolves. Dora might make Blackburn's life hard but she's not scared of her. She just sees the lycanthropy as a weapon to use against Blackburn (partially as revenge for her getting into trouble the previous year), not as something she's really concerned about. She actually knows that full moons are perfectly safe (because Blackburn wouldn't have her job otherwise, and they've had enough of them already), she just convinces others otherwise to make Blackburn's life miserable and increase the chances of Blackburn being fired (because even if she's not the villain, she wants that to happen).

I'm both sorry for and angry with Abric. He's a stupid idiot and he's REALLY going to pay for it.

Though if Abric can get into the potions cupboard, Fairfax REALLY isn't very good at locking up. Hmm... (Yeah, if I come up with more theories, I'll tell you.)

Author's Response: *laughs at your confusion at the beginning of the chapter*

I've now removed that question mark and yeah, you're right; that "it" probably should have quotation marks around it.

*bounces* I SAID I'd make you feel sorry for Felicity. Yeah, she's an idiot, but she's an 11 year old girl who was raised in a pretty prejudiced environment and she's away from home for the first time, so it's hard to blame her for overreacting to things. She needs reassurance rather than dismissal.

And *grins at you commenting that the explanation is the only one that'd make sense* You came close to the solution when you started speculating on Felicity having done something herself and making a mistake.

*laughs* People spent a day feeling terrible and it could probably have been a whole lot worse if he'd inadvertently added something really DANGEROUS and your main concern is that it'll upset Blackburn.

Yeah, Rose's logic doesn't really work there. Especially since there are almost certainly other people who dislike or are scared of Blackburn and didn't buy it. Apart from anything else, she has Potions class with Abric, so she'd probably have an idea of how much his potions were to be trusted. And besides the Notts have their own agendas here and are more in the business of using the whole lycanthropy thing than anything else. Dora sure doesn't seem particularly scared of Blackburn. More the other way around if anything.

I feel the same way about Abric. On the one hand what he did was REALLY dangerous and while he didn't really think of the harm he could do, it WAS pretty selfish. But on the other hand, he really didn't mean any harm and crossing people like Orpington and Montague REALLY isn't a good idea. And he was pretty lucky he wasn't expelled really.

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Review #15, by LeonorePlum Velvet: Blue Leather

25th September 2014:
Hello! Leo is going to break out of her usual habits and actually admit she's been here.

How do you do it? Everything you write is so beautiful. Poetic, even. The way you build the picture slowly, innocent at first and then gradually revealing that it's darker than it seems at first glance.

There's one sentence that doesn't quite read right for me: "They'd like that, I think, and smile; cat-like and contented." The semicolon especially seems to break it in the wrong place, and there's a tiny bit of ambiguity regarding which person the "smile" actually fits with ("they'd smile" or "I smile").

Your descriptions! Argh! They're just SO SO BEAUTIFUL. The room, with the moonlight... it paints this picture, and it's beautiful and creepy at the same time, and I can imagine it perfectly. The bite at the end is in the same style as everything else, and if flows in perfectly, and you're lost in the story and it suddenly occurs to you what's going on and you wonder why you didn't realise earlier.

Chocolate-and-firewhiskey apricot drops. I'm not sure why that stood out to me, but it did. It's such a gorgeous tiny detail. Your writing is full of these tiny details, and maybe that's what makes it so gorgeous.

That ending. Beautiful and creepy. Like the rest of it. The way you've just captured the thoughts and the mood. Shocking things seem natural. Your writing is so beautiful and unique and perfect. TELL ME YOUR SECRETS.

Ahem. Yes, I'm in awe of you.

~ Leo xx

Author's Response: Hey Leo! Haha, no worries about it - I have a habit of reading things and not reviewing, since I'm often multitasking :P Thanks so much for stopping by! It's so great to see you! :)

Gah, thank you so much! I loved writing this - it was difficult, though, building it up, because I wanted to get that innocence at the beginning, and the creepy, dark sort of thing later on, so I'm so glad you liked it!

Ooh, yeah, that does seem a bit weird - thank you so much for pointing it out, I'll go back and edit it to make more sense! Thank you! :)

Thank you again! The room with the moonlight was actually a deleted scene from my Albus/Gellert, haha, but I'd already taken out of that, and it fitted so well in with this, so I edited it a little, and then adapted it into this. I'm so glad the bite worked - I was so nervous that it would seem so out of place!

Haha, I loved including that! I always try to include other senses into things, because I think it's so striking when they are included. So yeah, chocolate-and-firewhisky apricot drops :P

Thank you so so much - I loved writing the ending, and I really wanted it to just be so creepy, even though there's this sort of weirdly sweet, romantic sort of layer to it. I'd tell you if I knew - honestly! But I just have no idea! I just write and sit at home with my fingers crossed! :P

Thank you so so much for the lovely, lovely review - it was such a great surprise to get, and so wonderful for you to break your habit ;) Thank you so much! :D

Aph xx

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Review #16, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Sudden Sickness.

24th September 2014:
Madame Pomfrey says Blackburn will be fine. :D Though that's physically, not mentally.

STOP APOLOGISING, LYDIA. AND STOP SNORTING, DORA, YOU'RE NOT A HORSE. Rose is being nice and sympathetic and for once not getting too distracted by crazy ideas about revenge on Dora. Dora, who's doing Charms homework... and if she fails Transfiguration, Blackburn gets the blame...

Yeah, betting whoever's responsible for the potion failing also nicked the ingredients. And I very much doubt whatever potion's being brewed is going to be entirely innocent. Yeah, and it wasn't James and Robin.

Stop jumping to conclusions, Rose. Just because you don't like Dora.

Yeah, Fairfax really sucks at keeping things locked up.

Now I'm thinking Felicity has something to do with the missing supplies, because Rose thinks she doesn't.

Mind your own business, Rose. And haha, Rose got told. *cheers Kate*

I know you were worried about it but you've done a good job of covering such a long time frame in this chapter.

Oh. Oh no. I can't say this makes me like Felicity (in fact it shows she was only calming down about Blackburn because she thought this mysterious potion would protect her, not because Rose managed to convince her), but the poor kid doesn't deserve to be poisoned. And I'm desperately trying to guess why someone might target her. Maybe to frame Rose or Albus or Blackburn... the logical thing to do would be to read on, so I'll do that...

It's not just Felicity? I'm guessing it's all the people who were really scared about Blackburn. But who... why... I'm trying to come up with insane theories but I don't know, I only know there's a guy involved so not Dora (unless polyjuice, which I really doubt). YOU HAD TO LEAVE IT THERE, DIDN'T YOU? NOW GET ON WITH WRITING THE NEXT CHAPTER - YOU CAN'T LEAVE US HANGING LIKE THIS! Oh hang on, you can and you are... I bet you're laughing so hard right now...

Author's note - yay, thank you! *hugs* (Au Clair de la Lune, by the way - you missed the "la", translation I'm using is "By Moonlight" ;) )

All your little hints about this chapter and it was so unexpected and ARGH! Get on with that next chapter! I'm waiting very impatiently because I need to know what's going on!!!

Author's Response: Yeah, Blackburn will be fine physically. The potion didn't even fail this time. It's just been a tough transformation because she's tired and stressed and really didn't need a transformation on top of all that. Mentally might be a bit harder to predict. She has a LOT going on in her head.

I actually laugh every time I read your comment to Dora that she's not a horse. THAT amuses me.

Hmm, yes, Fairfax certainly seems lax about security. Maybe it's because he's so obsessed with his potions that he doesn't notice mundane details like that. Or maybe there's something more to it. Maybe he's not lax about security at all. Maybe somebody's figured out a way past his security. *confuses the issue*

*laughs at your reaction to Kate telling Rose off*

I think you've put together more than Rose has. Although she's busy taking care of Felicity.

Yeah, framing Blackburn seems like something the A.W.L. might do.

I was originally going to put all the stuff about Felicity and the others getting sick into one chapter, then I thought where's the fun in that. I have to give people a chance to speculate.

And you're a great one to talk about cliffhangers.

Like I said, I don't DO French. *laughs*

I was looking forward to your reaction, and that of my other reviewers, to this chapter, as the events are so unexpected. The people who are ill are the last ones you expect to be victims.

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Review #17, by LeonoreFanged Revolution: Chapter the Second

15th September 2014:
Yes! Osbert makes an appearance in this chapter! I'm a sucker for wizarding politicians, and he looks to be an especially interesting one.

I feel like this would flow better, but might just be my personal opinion: "The Auror to whom he told his story followed him dubiously into the alley."

The end of that first section... yeah, that's effective. Really effective. Something is quite clearly wrong. We know what from the story summary, but still effective.

Ah, Septimus Malfoy. His presence makes so much sense.

You might want to capitalise 'head' in order to indicate that it's a title and not Malfoy's head (which I thought it was at first, especially coming straight after the word 'blond') "The tall blond Head of the Department of Magical Law Enforcement stood to Osbert's right." And I feel like 'Osbert's right' flows better than 'to the right of Osbert' but again, my opinion.

'scum that live there'. Ooh yes. Lovely evidence of his opinions towards a certain segment of society - and his openness about his hatred. To treat them with no respect shows a level of overconfidence (that's not the right word to describe it but it'll have to do).

Septimus Malfoy guides his hatred of vampires. Yes, that makes so much sense. And dirty tactics to get himself the positition of trust... dirty politics, the best kind (in fictional settings, that is). Ah, note Malfoy is the one drafting the bill...

I definitely like Nightstalker. He might have killed the Minister's daughter casually and with no respect for the body or anything, but he's not going to run away from something he's caused. That last section, the dialogue is bang on. Gorgeous descriptions scattered right through, too.

Amazing so far. Well done. I absolutely love the setting you've come up with - originality and dirty politics! Yes!

~ Leo xx

Blue v. Bronze review battle.

Author's Response: Haha, I knew when I saw you posted in the thread that you'd like Osbert. He and Malfoy have a long history together, and Malfoy isn't exactly the nicest of guys (what an understatement).

Yes, something is definitely wrong. Obviously, we know what, but this is still very early in the story.

Septimus Malfoy doesn't really guide Osbert's hatred of vampires as manipulate it for his own purposes. Of course, now that one has killed his daughter, Osbert is a lot less... tolerant, you could say. The real Minister here is Malfoy. Osbert is just a figurehead that he uses to keep the impression that there is democracy.

I think it's a combination of overconfidence and arrogance that is Malfoy's problem. It's the same attitude that is displayed by his descendants in Harry Potter's era, as well as the rest of the pure-blood supremacists: "I am better than you. Deal with it." Of course, that always starts problems when the group that is supposed to be inferior takes matters into their own hands.

Nightstalker isn't going to run away, once he faces the fact that this gigantic mess is his fault. He has a... shall we say antagonistic relationship with Septimus Malfoy, basically a more violent version of Arthur Weasley and Lucius Malfoy, which comes into play later. (In fact, Malfoy accuses him of being a coward to get him going. Oops... a small spoiler.)

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Review #18, by LeonoreFanged Revolution: Chapter the First

7th September 2014:
Hi! Leo here from BvB.

I love the premise for this story. I've never seen anything like it before, and this is an amazing first chapter. Really well done.

I've got a suggested revision of a sentence, mainly for reasons of tenses: "He'd viciously defeated Septimus Malfoy in a duel, so now the entire Auror force was out looking for him."

Scene well explained. And that encounter with the woman at the end - that's brilliantly written. I can feel the instincts in him, the draw to bite, the fact that while in many ways he's like a man he's also very different. Carefully chosen words get some great tension up. And that line "The horror on her face made him angry." Yes, I can imagine why that would make him angry. There's a certain amount of sympathy, despite what he's doing.

Caught a little typo, in the second to last line - it should be "and slept the SLEEP of the content."

Ooh, amazing final sentence.

Brilliant. And really original.

~ Leo xx

Author's Response:

Hi Leo!

About the sentence revision, and the typo: I thought I caught all the errors. Guess not.

I'm glad you thought the scene was explained well. I spent quite a bit of time on it, so it's nice to see positive feedback :)

Having someone being horrified at Nightstalker just because of something he couldn't control would definitely have made him mad. When I get my muse back I'll go more in-depth into his backstory, about how he became a vampire, and his motivations, but for now I'll just respond to reviews. Stupid writer's block. *sighs*

Thanks for the lovely review!


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Review #19, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Ghostly Information.

7th September 2014:
OK. So you've been hinting at dire things. And I'm about to find out what...

Oh no, those two are talking. One's bad enough, but both Dora and Felicity together?

That Felicity kid is an idiot. I blame the mother.


She said it. Rose is an idiot. OK, whatever I predicted, I didn't expect that. I didn't expect her to actually tell anyone that it was Dora last year. Rose needs to think before she opens her mouth. Seriously. She's going to regret this later.

Don't let the potion fail. Don't let the potion fail...

Rose is still being an idiot and needs to shut up right now.

She's still bitter about Albus? Yeah, I can see why. But she's actually admitted it to herself, while I think she was above that before. She's admitted to herself that she's determined to prove Dora's involvement for vengeance and not just because she thinks it's the most likely option. And she doesn't even seem to be feeling guilty about it.

Yay, the sweets! That must be a pretty big owl, 'cause they ordered quite a lot.

Aww, Fionnuala's off in her own world. She's still my second favourite character. OK, I probably shouldn't let on to you about that, but I've mentioned it before anyway...

The Grey Lady keeping her company? That is an amazing idea. One I'd never have thought of. Well done McGonagall. *cheers*


Oh. Poor Blackburn. Vicious cycles - bad transformation means she worries more about the next, so is tired and the transformation is worse...

I love your characterisation of the Grey Lady. Spot on.

Nobody likes Dora. But Rose doesn't deserve to have people like her the way she's acting now either.

*hugs Blackburn* Aww, yay, at least she knows someone cares now.

"Well, almost everybody." NO ROSE. Rose needs to keep her mouth shut and leave the talking to Angie. Chance would be a fine thing.

Sugar. Yes, Blackburn needs sugar. That will make everything alright. And don't try to tell me otherwise, 'cause I'm not going to listen.

"There was something about Madame Pomfrey that made obey any instruction she gave immediately." - spot the missing word!

I've decided I'm not going to hurt you. I like the ending, and even if you're an evil person at least you're not being all mean to Blackburn and she at last knows people care and I'm a bit worried about why Pomfrey's here and I'm sure that's what you want but it's as happy an ending as I can hope for and a lot happier than I expected. I've decided the potion is just for energy or a calming draft or something innocent and to be expected which will help her. And that IS all it is. I will refuse to accept it being anything more serious.

Summary: Rose is an idiot and she's going to regret saying all that. Angie is awesome. Fionnuala is also awesome, in a different way. And Blackburn is not as badly off as I was expecting from your hints.

I like this chapter. You said I wouldn't, but I do. It is maybe my favourite chapter, even though you said I wouldn't like it, because I interpret that as a nice ending. Rose is an idiot and is going to regret saying so much, but whatever, it's only Rose and I don't like Rose.

It's really well written to, and things like the moment Blackburn takes out the sugar quill and stuff are small but perfect. 'Clawesome.

Don't know how to end this review. Oh well, you know I'm random by now...


Author's Response: OK, I've inserted the missing word, so that's that sorted.

And yeah, I probably made this chapter out to be a little worse than it really was. I just thought you mightn't be too pleased to see Blackburn unwell.

To be fair, Felicity could find out from just about anybody about Dora being behind what happened the previous year, as it's pretty well-known. Most of the Ravenclaws from 2nd years up would have figured out who'd lost them the points and Scorpius was passing it around too.

And yeah, she sorted of admitted it's Albus she's concerned about more than Blackburn, but doesn't seem to notice that that means she's not really stopping to think whether or not there's even any evidence Dora is involved in whatever might be going on this year.

And yes, I was thinking "the poor owl", but they seem to deliver a fair amount in the books, so it's one of those things I figure I can justify by canon. And the fact they are magic and the parcel could probably be enchanted to weigh less.

The Grey Lady thing was yet more stuff I planned about Blackburn's off-screen time. After all, she was pretty upset before the full moon and probably shouldn't have been alone. She'd probably get herself pretty worked up, waiting for the transformation to take place. OK, she was going to do that anyway, but it might help a bit to have somebody to talk to. And I thought the Grey Lady being the Ravenclaw ghost and a young woman, probably around Blackburn's age or a bit younger, wouldn't be a bad choice (I mean, around Blackburn's age when she died - clearly she's been around about a thousand years. And then I thought I should make some reference to it here.

And I'm glad you think I characterised her well. It was one of the things I found hard. I was even questioning whether she would put herself out like that, but she does seem like a nice person behind her reserved persona.

And yeah, Angie sort of knows what it's like to be stressed out, so she's a little more careful about what she says than Rose is, as Rose has had a comparatively easy life.

And yes, sugar might help Blackburn, either because of the energy boost or just because it might make her feel a little better, psychologically.

I will reassure you there's nothing too serious about the potion Madame Pomfrey brought her. It's probably slightly more serious than the options you're hoping for, but not by much. She's just generally feeling pretty unwell from a combination of stress and the effects of the transformation, but she'll be fine in a couple of days.

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Review #20, by LeonoreEmpty Promises: Out of the Shadows

5th September 2014:
Hiya! Leo here from BvB!

First up, I love your opening. There's this immediate sense that there's something different, more mature, about the MC than the people around them. And that line, "I take another sip", is so effective.

Absolutely gorgeous description. These little lines which just create a picture. Of Rose, the cigarette, the atmosphere of the party...

Wow. The sudden change in atmosphere when James turns up and ruins everything. I really caught the anger. And that "Bang!" in the middle, so sudden, absolutely no warning!

You have a beautiful style here, really lovely to read, incredible descriptions. It flows so nicely, and I can't really think of anything to pick up on!

~ Leo xx

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Review #21, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Shocks and Sugar Quills.

15th August 2014:
Right. I have my teddy bear. You've been scaring me about this chapter.

Um, uh oh. This is really not a promising start.

Missing apostrophe - "From the looks on her classmates' faces,"

Dora's smirking again. Surprise surprise.


*laughs at Neville having dropped his wand*

I would expect a question mark here, to indicate the way it's spoken: "Yes, Rose?"
Missing word: "...and that if she just waited..."

Phew. I mean I don't like that Blackburn's not sleeping well but at least Dora isn't directly responsible (again).

Oh. Oh no. Here's the bit you were talking about.

"Rose had the impression she was quite stressed." This sentence isn't really necessary. The previous sentence shows very effectively that Blackburn's stressed, so you don't need to state it explicitly. In fact stating it like that detracts a little from the effect.

Oh no, she's blaming herself for being on edge. Vicious circles.

That kid is unbelievable: "On edge about what, Professor?" Dora asked slyly. "Turning into a werewolf tonight?"
Good response from Blackburn, at least. But really? Dora is a disgusting creature with no sense of decency.

Missing word: "Can you just get on with your transfigurations, please?"

Punctuation: "How could anybody, even Dora, ask something so hurtful?"

"She looked pretty upset." Well duh! Genius, Rose. Maybe more effective to "show, not tell"? Although why I'm encouraging you to torture her in even more description I don't know. Plenty of that already. But yes, write what makes her look pretty upset to Rose, rather than simply stating it.

DORA IS SMIRKING AGAIN. HEX HER, ROSE. But then Blackburn would have to give Rose detention. But Rose would then have time alone with Blackburn to maybe talk to her. Blackburn would probably feel so much guilt about having to give Rose detention for protecting her, but she'd do it because that's her job (and Dora would get her fired otherwise). But Rose could point out she didn't care, that it was worth it. But then Blackburn would feel the professional sense that she hadn't given an appropriate punishment. But... ARGH, THIS IS CONFUSING. JUST HEX DORA, ROSE, AND NOT IN FRONT OF BLACKBURN.


No, Rose. Don't mention Dora's parentage. That would just be hypocritical.


"I think Blackburn's pretty stressed," GENIUS, Rose. I mean seriously.

Chocolate. Yes, she needs chocolate. Aww, they're all so sweet. PLEASE DON'T LET THIS GO WRONG. CAN THIS PLEASE JUST BE A NICE GIFT?

Fionnuala made a good suggestion. That's character development! She's aware of what's going on! Nathan's still stumbling around, though! Aww, they're so cruel to him. :P

"a small pile of gold" - if they've only got 14 sickles and 5 knuts, the pile is mostly silver, no gold. (Technicalities :P )

Fionnuala is very involved in this! Fully awake and conscious and making very sensible suggestions! (CHOCOLATE!!!)

Yay, it hasn't lead to disaster! (at least not yet) Those kids are so sweet. Please can this make Blackburn happy? Or at least a bit less miserable? Pretty please? *Dobby eyes* (Apparently Dobby eyes work on JKR herself; so they must work on you too, right?)

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much for this awesome review. *hugs you*

I've corrected those mistakes. I don't usually make so many. I just ended up rewriting most of this chapter as a lot of it sounded REALLY bad the first time and then got so fed up with it that I couldn't be bothered editing properly. So I knew there'd be a few words and punctuation missing, but I decided to post it anyway. *laughs* I've been working on this chapter for a couple of weeks, so got to a point beyond caring.

The parts about Rose thinking she's stressed or upset were more to show what Rose is worrying about, but you're right; apart from anything else, it flows better if I leave out that "Rose had the impression she was quite stressed" line, so I've removed it. Plus, there are too many of those comments. Something else I'd have noticed if I'd read it through in one go, rather than writing a few hundred words at a time.

*prods self over the gold/silver thing* I actually meant to check that, but forgot.

And yes, Blackburn is working herself up into a complete state, isn't she? But you know, it's one of the hard parts of being a teacher (and one you don't think of until you're in the situation) - you're supposed to be the adult and the person responsible, which can add extra pressure if you're already stressed or upset about something.

Hmm, I'm not entirely sure about Blackburn's response. In a way, it is letting Dora know how much it's getting to her.

Oh, believe me, a certain amount of that stuff about Blackburn seeing Rose hex Dora occurred to me too. I definitely think she'd be torn between knowing that as their teacher she should punish Rose, being grateful that at least somebody is concerned about her and feeling guilty for having set the whole thing in motion, so to speak. And I think that if Rose said it was worth it, she'd both think Rose was just saying that and also that she should be discouraging her from thinking that way.

I agree it would be hypocritical to give away Dora's family background and while there are many things Dora should be blamed for, her family isn't exactly something she can help. Rose just finds it hard to keep quiet Dora is mocking others for not mentioning stuff, when she isn't herself. And Rose can be somewhat impulsive.

*laughs at your comment that Blackburn needs chocolate*

And do you really think I'd make them giving her sweets go wrong? *grins evilly* No, seriously, that is just a gift, that's all. I'm not even sure how it COULD go wrong.

You really expect me to be consistently nasty, don't you? With good reason, I expect.

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Review #22, by LeonoreThe New Pride of Portree: Friends Again

6th August 2014:
Hmm, has Mariah given up or is she planning something? So she was shocked to find out that Fitz and Molly were actually serious... but I'd almost say jealousy is more likely than acceptance in that situation. I guess I'll just have to wait and see.

Ooh, Fitz does care about Mariah. If he'd really moved on, he wouldn't be wanting revenge or being keen to not look at her. It's that it's revenge for the affairs - not just for being the cause of his injury. I guess it might be a pride thing, that he's embarrassed that she wasn't happy with him but felt the need to have those affairs. *shrugs* Well, something tells me there's going to be some Mariah trouble later.

Good ol' Percy. Getting thing sorted out. And making Fitz actually think about Molly's feelings rather than just making assumptions. I love the way he hints at his own experience of coming back into the family for the battle.

Love the cottage pie thing - it's just so normal and relatable.

Molly and Fitz, just friends? Mmm, not sure about that. No, Molly, you're more than friends, as everyone except you can tell...

I'm half surprised that nobody made a sarcastic comment about Hilarion "watching" the game on the wireless. I guess it's not my family, and they aren't really in the mood for picking up on technicalities like that.

Hilarion's so sweet.

Hold the baby. The cure for everything :)

Love it, as always.

~ Leo xx

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Review #23, by LeonoreHead Girl Evans: Lily

1st August 2014:
Hi Grace! Dropping by from BvB!

That list of all the ways she's been bullied... poor Lily! And worried that she's not a Gryffindor because she runs away, because even though she knows logically that it's the sensible thing to do she's still got that doubt that maybe it makes her a coward.

Something I spotted: "when the meeting resumed" - as it hasn't get begun, I think you mean "began" ("resumed" implies there's a break in the middle of the meeting).

Yes, Lily! Definitely a proper Gryffindor! Bravery isn't necessarily about standing up for yourself and picking fights. It's about refusing to give up and sticking to your beliefs no matter what, and that's what she does. She deserves that badge.

A general comment - some of your sentences drag on quite a lot and can be a bit confusing. Maybe break them up a bit? A lot of the long ones, it's just a case of having the right punctuation to make it work, like this one I'd makes something like: "She couldn't question him about why he'd been chosen as her partner - the meeting was due to start any minute. She could express her shock for as long as she wanted afterwards."

Yes, Lily! Well and truly in charge. She showed those bullies what she's capable of! And in regards to your A/N - nope, not dark! I'd say it's happy, not pure fluff but very positive. Just keep an eye on your sentence length and punctuation to keep the flow smooth. Otherwise, lovely story! And great choice of topic!

~ Leo xx

Author's Response: Hey Leo! Thank you for stopping by and I'm glad that I caught you in Crit mode.

I can't really blame Lily for having that doubt that running away from the threat because she's from Gryffindor and I don't doubt that she had heard people say that running away from a threat made you a coward and that would've probably stuck with her.

I took your suggestions about the sentences and I cut some of them up into two sentences to make them shorter.

Lily is my baby so I really wanted to write about her overcoming the trouble that she must've gone through while attending Hogwarts.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

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Review #24, by LeonoreThe New Pride of Portree: Widdershins

26th July 2014:
Hi! Dropping by with another classic Leo-review (nonsensical rambling and all)

I LOVE the superstitions bit in the middle, and the comparison to 'The Scottish Play'.

Ooh, awkward parents/Fitz stuff!

Poor Fitz. Practically the first thing anyone mentions to him is his shoulder. And he screwed up in front of Molly's family.

Yay, Prides! Haha, Jinks and "Chariots of Fire". Definitely a good move on Fitz's part, showing them those films. And they get on so amazingly, with their inside jokes and friendly insults.

Great press interview technique - "please don't print that" "don't print that" "or that". If it was anyone but Ginny...

Yes! Don't let Rakes get away with it. Though if he hadn't cursed Fitz then Fitz and Molly probably wouldn't have ended up as coach and captain...

Fitz + Molly = :D

I think you're the only author who's made me really care about the romantic side of the story. I guess this one works for me because their relationship is pretty complicated - injury, manager, temper, OCD, being coach and captain, worrying about the team, and of course the parents. It actually seems realistic, which is something I hardly ever feel.

By the way, I'm jealous of them getting to spend so much time on Skye. I went camping a few years ago, just for a couple of days, and it is the loveliest place. It may have helped that in out week going round Scotland, we had the best weather for those days, but even ignoring that it's lovely.

Yeah, it genuinely does rain a lot in Scotland. Not all the time, but a lot. And they get a lot of snow in winter. Though there are many days when it's beautifully sunny, there are also many with atrocious visibility due to light rain/mist.

And Brits do talk about the weather a lot. It's not just a cliche. I am living proof (and I'm not the only one obsessed with it, either) :)

~ Leo xx

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Review #25, by LeonoreThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Howling at the Moon.

22nd July 2014:
*gathers Blackburn into a big hug* You're not having her back unless you promise to play nicely! *glares*

Yes! That bacon! They definitely did deserve it.

"Roosters aren't animals," she pointed out. "They're birds."
Honestly, Rose... Considering the official scientific definition of an "animal" (with assistance, as ever, from Wikipedia): Animals are multicellular, eukaryotic organisms of the kingdom Animalia (also called Metazoa). Animals are divided into various subgroups, including vertebrates (birds, mammals, amphibians, reptiles, fish). Roosters are birds. Therefore Rose is actually incorrect: roosters ARE animals (just not mammals).

Ahem. Yes. I have a habit of picking out things like that (I wrote a short essay brit-picking on washing machines in a review for someone not that long ago).

Poor Scorpius. He's making stupid decisions, but I can see why. I suppose you can make his life hard, and Angie's, and anyone else's you feel like, but I'm keeping Blackburn. *glares again*

I want to say at least Dora'll fail Transfiguration, but then she'd blame Blackburn and there'd be charges of incompetence not just of being a werewolf.

Haha, Binns is a useless teacher.

I'm all caught up now :D (I just reviewed this chapter not the next one because what I have more to say about it specifically). Bye bye! *waves*

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you for this review. It made me laugh out loud and cheered me up on a somewhat stressful day.

And I LOVE your nitpicking. LOVE you proving Rose wrong. You need to have a conversation with her. She needs to be proven wrong occasionally, I think. She's a little too sure of herself. And Albus isn't sure ENOUGH of himself. *laughs*

Please feel free to Brit-pick anything that isn't quite right in these stories. Sentence structure is what can be most difficult actually as I am progressively beginning to reaise we use a fair bit of Irish-language sentence structure directly translated into English, one of the most obvious being "I'm after doing..." instead of "I have done..." I once spent quite a bit of time trying to figure out how non-Irish people would say "it's after snowing." "It has snowed?" "It's has been snowing?" "It's snowed?"

Scorpius was actually about the hardest character for me to characterise, as it seems like both the idea of him being a repeat of Draco and the idea of him being completely different and having to prove himself have been used so often. I've seen both done fantastically, but that's the point. I didn't want to just copy something I'd already seen somebody else do. I guess he is different and trying to prove himself a bit in this, but mostly he's too caught up in Quidditch to even bother about proving himself.

And I liked the idea of a Slytherin who is ambitious in a non-typical way. It's not wealth he wants or to be the centre of attention, but rather to excel in his chosen area. We haven't seen much of that kind of ambition in the series, probably because most of the main characters - Harry, Ron, Sirius, Hagrid - are rather biased against Slytherins.

And yeah, Dora and her father would probably blame Blackburn if she fails Transfiguration. She can't really win on that one, because if she tries to make Dora work, she's setting herself up for hassle. Of course what she SHOULD do is report Dora whenever she makes comments. And people like Flint too. But considering she can barely hear the word "werewolf" without getting upset, I don't think she'd find it too easy to discuss their behaviour.

And yes, Binns is useless.

Thanks again.

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