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Review #1, by justind7Forbidden Longings.: First Encounters.

12th June 2014:
Pretty good!
I'm glad to see Christine is meeting the trio and seems like she'll be friends with Hermione. The fact she can stand up to Malfoy will definitely win Ron and Harry's approval!
Some more typos,such as "Seamus Finnigan" typed like "Shamus" or "barely" is spelled like "barley."
It seems as if Dumbledore has not died and the trio has stayed at Hogwarts for their seventh years. Does this mean that Voldemort doesn't exist? Or is he already dead? If you were planning on revealing that, do it, but leaving that info out could be wise by making the reader make his or her own assumptions!
I think the password is new beginnings in Latin, like Christine is having a new beginning at Hogwarts? Brownie points for me?
Keep up the good work

Author's Response: I had realized some of the grammar mistakes after I had published the chapter but to edit it would mean restarting the validation time and I think I was a bit to eager to hear what you guys thought :), this story is and AU but Lord Voldemort is still around (kind of) I promise I will explain soon, thanks for the review xx

P.S yeah brownie points for you- I took a leaf out of Jo's book and used some of my Latin knowledge for the passwords x


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Review #2, by justind7Forbidden Longings.: A Private Sorting.

12th June 2014:
A very creative story!
First, there are some grammatical errors, such as missing commas. Always put a comma before the word "too" and put commas before the closing quotations when someone is talking. For example, "Of course," Christine promised.
Other than that, this is good for your first chapter. I like this idea a lot of a transfer coming in their sixth year! It should be very interesting. In the story bio it says she will have some romance with Draco, but Christine being in Gryffindor AND muggle-born should be interesting!
Keep up the good work, I'm interested to see how this story turns out.

Author's Response: This is actually their seventh year but i have explained more about that in the authors note of the next chapter. I apologize if I am changing too much of the original HP story but I am making it work for mine :). I will try and keep on top of my grammar mistakes it's often caused by me being to eager and typing away and concentrating more on the story line but I'll check it over more in the future chapters, thanks for the reveiw.

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Review #3, by justind7Delicate: Prologue: The Test

25th July 2013:
Fantastic! I really enjoyed it, and I'm anxious to read more. I will admit, I was hesitant to read this because I'm a bigger fan of action/adventure rather than romance. However, I'm already hooked, and I plan on reading the whole thing. Keep it up!

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Review #4, by justind7Anachronous: In a Man's World

24th June 2013:
I really liked how you put the perspective of Andromeda's whole life in this. I thought the word choice was very descriptive and it helped add to the story. Good one-shot!

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate your kind review :)

-Amanda


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