I love it! Your description is amazing; I could just see her sitting there with the flowers around her. And I love how you hinted on the plot in between. I so want to read more about what happened. =D All in all, this was a wonderful piece. Good job!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I try to work really hard on my description, so I'm glad it came out OK. Thanks so much for the lovely review!

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Interesting start. I like the idea of having the heart and the head talk separately like that. The chapter flowed well if a bit slow, but first chapters are always slow. ^_^ I wished there were more things going on here than just explanations, but it's the introductions after all. ^_^

I don't think you need to introduce the Marauders and Lily by explaining their characters in paragraphs, you can easily show it to us through their actions. Here it's a very common characterization of the Marauders, so it feels a little cliche at this point, but I'm looking forward to see how you will develop their characters. But all in all, I enjoyed reading this. Off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: thank you so much! i could have done more with this scene, but there's not much else to be done, like you said. i look forward to your review! =]

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That was really good! You captured the emotions brilliantly, and I love how you wrote it from the brother's point of view. My favorite line has to be this one: Then again, Albus figured, if the tiniest brick is removed from the tower, the top will crumble too. I was close to tears by the end. :) All in all, you did a wonderful job here. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! That's one of my favorite lines too. Thanks again for the lovely review!

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Lol, can't wait to see their dates! This chapter kept me laughing the whole way through, especially when Lily and Izzy mimicked Sirius and James. I love the present day comments too. =) Overall it was a very fun chapter. I'm off to the next one!

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I love it! The first kiss was cute, and Sirius was a git for saying that he didn't want anyone to know about that. =P I love how they bonded, and that prank on the Slytherin was hilarious! I'm definitely looking forward to seeing what the girl pulled on the Marauders. =D One thing that bothered me, though, was the misspelling with Lucius' name. You kept spelling it Lucious. But other than that, this was really good. Keep it up!

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Great start! I love how light-hearted it felt, and how you introduced the girls. I love how you wrote them, by the way. I'm curious about Sirius' relationship with Izzy, and what did he mean about things being 'delicate'? Guess I'm going to find out. =P All in all, I'm hooked! Keep up the good work!

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Hi Lucy! Saw this in SAYS cbox and decided to drop you a review. ^_^ I like it! You wrote Fleur's voice well, and I love how she didn't quite believe that Bill loved her until he stood up for her. The argument between Bill and Molly was well written too. I think it could use a bit more description in the beginning, but the build-up toward Fleur's decision was nicely done. ^_^ Keep up the good work!

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Great chapter! Again, I love the description. The moment of action flowed fluidly, and you did a good job building up the panic. I like the dialogue, especially when George and Beetum were arguing. Watch out for missing punctuations too, especially the quotation marks in front of dialogues. There were some missing, and sometimes that made it hard to tell when the dialogue began and the narrative ends. ^_^ All in all, I like this chapter a lot. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Yup, I get it. Thanks!

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Hello! Sorry this took a while. I've been busy with a bunch of things, but here it is. I like where the plot is going, and the description is well done. Dialogue flows well too. I don't really like Ron's characterization that much though. He seemed to be slightly too childish here, like the way he panicked when Harry hesitated about trying out in the end. But I like that he knew more than Harry about dragons. It made sense since his brother works as a dragon keeper. Harry's sudden interest in Hermione threw me off a bit. I don't mind Harry/Hermione, but since this is following canon, it feels like it comes out of nowhere. He did tell Ron in DH that he thought of Hermione as a sister. So maybe show the transition from the brother/sister feelings Harry had for her to the romantic interest more?

Other than that, this was a good chapter. Off to the next one! :)

Author's Response: O-kay, I'll bear that suggestion about Harry and Hermione in mind. Maybe, in a later chapter, I'll put in a conversation detailing Harry's developing crush on Hermione. So, thanks!

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I really like this. It's always interesting to see a fanfiction set outside of England, and Grace and Black seem to be great characters, and together they make an interesting pairing. I love your description; it really keeps me on the edge of my seat as they fought their way through the curses of the pyramid. I don't really like swearing in fics, but the plot is engaging enough for me to read past that. ^_^ Keep up the good work!

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Yay for a quick update! =D Love this chapter. I’ve got a feeling Sirius might do something reckless, despite the last line. =P The dialogue flowed really well, and I’m looking forward to see Remus and Tonks move in. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: That's Sirius for you! Glad you are enjoying it and thanks for the review!

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Another great one! I love the chemistry between Draco and Astoria. They're not instantly falling for each other, but there's something there. I also like how Draco was working as a personal assistant and Astoria's application was immediately rejected. It shows the aftermath of the war for the pureblood family. ^_^ The dialogue flowed really well too. Looking forward to the tea with the Malfoys! Off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad you do! Exactly - I like to imagine that things didn't go all that well for the purebloods after the war and that people weren't all that keen with them in general. Thanks again!

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Great start! I love how you wrote Astoria's character, and the dynamic of the family is interesting and realistic. It was also fun to see her endure Nott. =D The boy just couldn't take a hint, could he? I'm looking forward to see more of her and Draco. ^_^ Keep up the good work, Steph!

Author's Response: I'm glad you think the family dynamics were realistic. It's been a bit difficult on that particular area. And nope, he could not =p Thank you so much!

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Hi! This is a great story. I love the pace you're keeping, and the description is great too. Your characters are interesting, and you introduced Ella very well. At some point it is a bit too violent for me, but overall you're doing a great job here. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Yeah, it is a bit violent, I apologise for that, but I'm glad you're liking it anyway :)

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Great one-shot! It's short, but you've managed to convey the emotions very well in such few words, and I just love your description. =D Keep up the good work!

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Oohhh… Grimmauld incident? Interesting, very interesting. Anyway, I love how you wrote the attack scene. The pace was just right, and it was quite thrilling. =D The meeting wasn't boring either. With all Potters and Malfoy around, I do wonder where the Weasleys are. ;) Anyway, love it! Definitely adding it to my favorite. Keep up the good work!

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Great start! First of all, I love the casting list. If this were a movie, I would definitely go see it just for the actors alone. =P And to be honest, it's a little confusing right now, but it's intriguing in a good way. =D The description is brilliant, and I love how you introduced your characters. So far each and every one of them has their own unique voice, which is very important in a story with many characters like this. ^_^ All in all, wonderful job! Off to the next chapter!

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This was really good. I love the description and the fact that you didn’t use any name. =P I have a spot soft for both Luna/Neville and Neville/Hannah, so I could really see this happening. Anyway, I also really like the use of second person. I don't read it much, so it’s always very interesting, and I thought you did a good job with it here. ^_^ Good work! Keep it up!

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Aww, this is a really adorable one-shot. I love how you portrayed the friendship between Harry and Hermione, and the fact that it revolves around the chess set makes it even more interesting. I've always associated chess games with Ron and Harry, not Harry and Hermione, so it was different. ^_^ The story flows really well too. All in all, it was a very enjoyable read. Good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've always thought of Ron and chess together - so it ended up as a way for Harry and Hermione to be with the Ron they loved ... rather than the idiot he was being at the time. Thanks very much for reviewing :).

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Brilliant chapter! The description here was wonderful, and the flow was great too. I love how you wrote the nightclub scene, and poor Viktor! I wonder what really happened to him, and if Hermione would meet her idol soon. The tension between Malfoy and Ginny was very well-written. I'd love to see Draco's take on Viktor's death, especially since he was Viktor's escort. ^_^ Keep up the good work and can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you once more for the great review! :)
I think things are finally going to start picking up (finally) and hopefully I'll churn out the next chapter within the coming weeks, but no guarantees (darn exams week!). I'm glad that you liked the chapter, there's a lot more to come, I promise. :P

- Jess

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Great chapter! I love how you characterized the Weasleys. And Hermione was right to be mad at Ron. He's just as thick as ever. =P I'm excited for Hermione's job! I hope she gets to meet Riddle, I'd like to see more of him. ^_^ The ending might be a bit cheesy, but I don't mind it. She's giddy about the work, so it suited that. Good work! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Ha, I'm glad that you think I didn't lay it on too thick for Ron, and they'll be a lot more Riddle soon! :D
I'm making things move so slowly, I somewhat regret that in my plot planning. :\
And yay that the ending wasn't so cheesy that it made you cringe, haha.

Thanks, again! ;)

- Jess

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Interesting start! AU is always very fun to read, so I'm looking forward to see where you’re going to take this. ^_^ It's intriguing to read Tom as the good guy, and I'm looking forward to see this new world where he's in politics. ;) All in all, great job! Off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Sorry for the somewhat late response. :\
But, thank you very much for the review! I'm glad that you like the story so far, and don't you worry. I've got plans for Tom Riddle. *grin*

:P

- Jess

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Yay to you for updating! I'm glad you did too, this was a great chapter. Your characterization is brilliant, and I love that closing line. =D I'm looking forward to Sirius and Lucius together, and now I really will read the present! Keep up the good work, timeturner! Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you for the support here and over at the forum. I appreciate it so much! I'm actually working on the next chapter already because you guys have been so fantastic about my attempts to try this again :P

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I love it! Sirius/Hermione is not a ship I'd normally read, but it's growing on me, and I love how you wrote them together here. The description is amazing, and I definitely have to go back and read the present one of these days. =D I love how the Blacks are rising to royalty status once again; I'd love to see how Hermione adapt to that. ^_^

All in all, great work! Off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: The present will make it make more sense. I think it will stand alone but reading the present will definitely make you understand how Sirius/Hermione came to be in the first place.

I agree with the royalty statement and that's something I've thought alot about and want to include in this. Hermione - enjoying her new found position and Sirius always running from the Black label. I think it would be lots of fun to explore that.

Thank you for the great review!

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Aww, what a cute story! I love how you described the setting here, and Ginny was so innocent too! I especially love the part with the Muggle couple, and the end where she saw her brothers were all home. All in all, it's a heart-warming one shot. ^_^ Good job! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks! It was supposed to be just that, a feel-goo winter story, I'm glad you mentioned noticing that!

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