Reading Reviews From Member: Cossettely
  
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Review #1, by CossettelyForget Me Not: Chapter 1

22nd June 2013:
Hello! Let me start by saying that I really enjoyed your story, and I think that you have a good beginning to work with in the future.

I think that you set up a very cute Lily/James situation here. They are both quite in character, and although we get limited descriptions of them in the books and movies, you take what little we do receive and run with it, so to speak.

The only grammar thing that bothers me is very minute, but I tend to be picky. The word "okay" is either written out or abbreviated as "OK" with both letters capitalized. Again, pesky and picky, but necessary.

Other than that, grammar and spelling appears to be pretty good.

I look forward to your next chapter.

Cheers!
- Cossettely

Author's Response: Thanks you! I'm really glad you liked it and thanks so much for taking the time to review! And I will definitely make sure that the "okay"s are fixed in the future! Thanks for the note, that's definitely something I tend to forget about.

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Review #2, by CossettelyThe Odd One: Plotting Revenge

21st June 2013:
First off, I enjoyed reading your perspective of Tom Riddle's early years. The language and syntax you use is simplistic and well-placed because it captures the thought process of a child. The Golden Rule, but in reverse. It is the only thing that makes sense to a child.

I think that you did a good job in making Tom Riddle's thought process age-appropriate, but your last sentence subtly reveals the monster within. The child Tom thinks in a child's way, but you make sure to sprinkle in hints of his dark nature, which makes for an overall convincing characterization of young Tom Riddle.

Well done, and cheers!

- Cossettely

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading it, as writing it was a lot of fun! It was quite hard making the language approriate so I'm glad that you thought I pulled it off.

Tom was quite hard to write as he's mature and then he's only a young boy at the same time, so it's great that you thought I did a good job! I imagined him to be quite sinister at this age, so it was fun to throw in the dark hints!

Thanks for the great review ♥


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Review #3, by CossettelyThe Heir Accedes: The Heir Accedes

21st June 2013:
What an interesting tale depicting the first of many of Tom Riddle's "accomplishments" in ridding the world of those he deemed unworthy. I suppose I had never thought all that much about Tom Riddle's actual discovery of the chamber, rather, I just envisioned the results.

I think this might be how your Tom thinks as well: he thinks about results, and considers the process to achieve his result to be relatively unimportant. The way your Tom thinks about looking in pages and pages of books just for one thing reveals his single-minded determination that will later be his undoing. Throughout the story, sprinkles of arrogance define his stubborn resolve of his own superiority. These things contribute to your characterization of Tom Riddle, which seems quite believable. I think one of the biggest mistakes of Tom Riddle writers is to accidentally portray him as weak or soft, but you do no such thing, which I admire.

I especially like that you used the words "slowly unravelled the tangled web, pulling away the silky threads that concealed the truth" in your description of the quest to find the Chamber because it mirrors Harry and Ron's attempts to find it far in the future. Follow the spiders, hm? I don't know if that was intentional or not, but your writing seems so deliberate that I cannot help but think that it was.

Overall, I was quite impressed by your sinister rendition of the young Dark Lord and by your well thought out descriptions surrounding his actions. The verbs you chose as well as the phrasing helped to convey a sense of determination and domination by Tom Riddle.

Extremely well done, and cheers!

- Cossettely

Author's Response: Hello!

I'd never actually thought about this moment either until I entered the challenge, but it sparked the inspiration to write this and I couldn't resist.

I think you're right about Tom - he only focuses on the results, in as far as they concern the power he can gain, and doesn't care much about what he has to do to get there. He doesn't care much about whether opening the Chamber might be a bad idea, though, because he can profit from it and it will show his superiority. I'm really pleased you found my characterisation of him believable, since I've never written such a complex or well known character before.

I think you're the first person to pick up on the use of those words - but yes, it was done deliberately! I wondered if people would make that link as I wrote it, and it's great to have perceptive readers like you who notice those things!

Thank you so much for this amazing review!

Sian :)


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