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Review #1, by Felpata LupinMiracle : { excitement is out, anxiety is in }

21st January 2018:
Hi, again! Back for your request! ;)
An intense first day, for sure... poor Marissa, so much to learn, having to settle down in such a new and foreign environment... and apparently there is still some prejudice against Slytherin, isn't there? I'm wondering, are all the Wotters Gryffindor or are there exceptions? Hugo seemed friendly enough, at least.
And we've met some new characters. Aishwarya and Roman seem nice, too, if a bit crazy. I could swear Aishwarya has a crush on Marissa, or am I reading too much into it? :P I can totally understand Marissa being a bit wary about the party, I'm not much of a party person, either, I'm always a bit shy around new people...
And we got to meet old people, too. I must confess that I was surprised to see McGonagall still teaching Transfiguration, I assumed she had retired, seeing that Cho was the Headmistress. Also, I have to admit, I felt like McGonagall was a bit too cold when Marissa went to introduce herself? I know she's strict and everything, but I would have imagined she would be a bit nicer with a new girl who was just trying to introduce herself? Just my feeling, you know, not that it is that important.
I'm wondering how Marissa's school days will go on now and how she will interact with all the canon and original characters you have introduced so far. Feel free to come back and re-request when you'll have new chapters up (if you please, of course).
Love,
Chiara
PS I'm back with the nationality game... where is Aishwarya from? She has such an unusual name and I can't really locate it... :P

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Review #2, by Felpata LupinMiracle : { never stop smiling }

21st January 2018:
Hi, here with your request! :)
Sorry it took me a bit long, it's been a bit of a crazy period...
And so Marissa had her first trip on the Hogwarts' Express and is finally at the castle. And Slytherin? Really? I must confess that I didn't see it coming, but it's a nice change, there aren't many Slytherin MCs out there. (I think I would've still preferred if she was a Ravenclaw, but I'm curious how she'll fit in Slytherin... guess it will bring a lot of drama... :P)
One thing that I quite enjoyed was how Fred replied to her asking if he was George's son using basically his father's words :P The Weasleys must be a bit overwhelming, I wonder how her future interactions with them will go, especially with Albus, they seem to be set for some kind of relationship (even if I'm not sure how that'll turn out yet)
And I'm also quite curious about Scorpius and this Halley girl. Will they be friends? How will their relationship develop? So many questions...
CC: I still think that the flow might need a bit more of work (maybe add some more description?) and maybe this chapter was a tiny bit cliched... But all in all this was a nice read, I'm quite enjoying Marissa's experience so far.
Moving to the next chapter now.
Bye,
Chiara

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Review #3, by Felpata LupinWrong number: First call

18th January 2018:
Hey, Elena! Ciao, mia cara! :)

Finally, FINALLY, I'm here with the review for our swap... the last couple of days have been crazy... tonight, too, actually, but I won't go into details because I would end up being as rambly as your OC... totally not worth it, trust me...

I have to say, this first chapter made me laugh. :P I'm not sure how verosimilar the whole situation is... I mean, didn't she realize that the voice wasn't her friend's? And out of all the people who she could have called, a wizard who happens to be her ex's cousin? (Do wizards even have phones?) Erm, sorry... this sounds like a lot of complaining... but it's just me overthinking stuff... it's a fic and it's hilarious and it's not supposed to make 100% sense. So don't mind me. :P

I love how she just started rambling about her awful day and just kept talking and talking and barely listened to James' interjections (which, I guess, sort of answers my previous question. She didn't realize she wasn't talking to Victor because she was too caught in her own story... She is a fun character) I also loved how James played along, just because he was finding it all entertaining. His comments were brilliant, like that "Perfect strategy" or, even better, "Abby's perfect dog" Ahahah! Just great!

And the way he finally revealed who he was... brilliant! He left her speechless, which is probably not something easy to do! :P

Btw, did you say lasagne? Because I wouldn't mind some right now... :P

Thank you for swapping, dear. I had fun reading this. :) Maybe we can do it again (or you can request in my review thread, if you like. I wouldn't mind coming back.)

A presto,

Chiara

PS how did the exam go?

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Review #4, by Felpata LupinThe 'Savior' Thing: Lily

13th January 2018:
Hey, Jayde! Hello, my dear! :)
I promised you I'd stop by ages ago and never did, so I'm here now, since a few days ago was your birthday (it was, right? I'm not mistaken?) So, happy belated birthday, hon! :D

Aww, this is so adorable! I know I said this at every chapter, it's just the truth! And I love how you kept the chain going, with Albus telling Lily that it was "his saviour thing". I just love the whole concept of the story so much (I guess this, too, is something I've told you over and over again)

Lily is just so adorable. I love how she got lost in her own head, with the grass symphony game. You wrote it in such a lovely way, too, and it was just so children-like... so adorable!

And the puppy! Oh, I so wanted to cuddle it, too, poor little thing. It was just the sweetest thing, why on earth would Harry react that way is behind me... I mean, I get that an unknown creature can be potentially dangerous (I had no idea which creature it was, btw... I need to revise my magical creatures' knowledge :P) but he definitely overreacted, much more than he did in James' and Albus' episodes, in my opinion. But hey, that's just Harry being himself (or better, being the overprotective father you've been portrayed in here and that I can totally imagine him to be)

Anyway, this was lovely, as usual! Happy belated birthday again and a huge snowball hug!

Chiara

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Review #5, by Felpata LupinMiracle : { a brave new world not unlike fiction }

13th January 2018:
Hi, me again! I figured I'd read one more chapter, just to see how Marissa was dealing with everything. And apparently she has Spanish origins (I should have known from her surname, but I didn't remember it... sorry...), but she doesn't really know? I thought she moved to England later? Sorry, I'm overthinking again... :P

And her friends are chinese. And Chie is a squib and Cho's niece. That's so intriguing, I love it! :)

And wait... Francesca Longbottom? As in the daughter of Neville? And why does she have an Italian name? Okay, I'll stop with the nationality game... :P

I loved the conversation among Marissa, Chie and Leiko in the beginning, I think it was done really well. :) You got this sense of familiarity that only old friendships carry and I loved it. Also, I really liked Chie being a squib and the way Marissa got around to tell them the truth. :)

I also really enjoyed seeing Marissa around Diagon Alley, so reminiscent of Harry's first trip there, it was really nice. :) I think the flow still felt a bit fractured in a couple of passages, but aside that I really enjoyed your descriptions and Marissa's stupor at all the wizarding shops, especially Flourish and Boots... I think I would never get out of there if I got in there... I mean, a wizarding library? I would go crazy...

It was also really fun to meet a few of the Wotters' clan. :D

“You might, if you get tangled up with one of my crazy children, or nieces,” George quipped dryly, a wry smile in place. As a second thought, he added, “Or nephews. Them too.”

This was probably my favourite passage in absolute! Ahahah!

And cute, little (or not so little... how old is he?) Albus. That was a fun encounter. Wonder why Lily was so annoyed at him... :P

Great chapter! :)
Chiara

Author's Response: Ah, no, Marissa knows. She's a bit of a rambler with new people.

And I really liked the name Francesca! Just a little detail that I like. And who knows? Maybe Hannah Abbot is Italian! I've seen her portrayed as South Asian, so anything's possible!

I think that was my favorite part too; i really don't know how I nailed their friendship right on the head, but I did! I was super proud of myself.

I think I wrote the Diagon Alley scene using inspiration from how I would react. I really had to channel my Harry Potter fangirl for that scene.

Meeting the Wotters is always fun, tbh.

Thank you, that line was a pure gold, and I added it in, after I had finished the chapter!

Ah, Albus is seventeen. And Lily is a Character(tm), which partially is reason to her annoyance. The other reason is yet to be revealed. I'm glad you noticed that little detail!

Thank you for reading!


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Review #6, by Felpata LupinMiracle : { it starts at the beginning }

13th January 2018:
Hello, dear! Here with your requested review! Sorry it took me so long... also, welcome to the HPFT community, it's so lovely to meet new people! :D

So, first of all, let me tell you... I think the premise for this story is just so clever and interesting. What would happen if a Muggle received a transfusion from a wizard? The Muggle's physiology is bound to change somehow, and it's such an interesting idea to explore.

Also, your description of the incident was so, so, so well done. I could totally picture everything that happened, and also the way you wrote Marissa in those moments of semi-consciousness, it was really well done and effective.

I have a question, what are Marissa's origins? Because you mentioned her not being British, if I understood correctly, and she calls her parents Mama and Papa, and that's clearly not English (I think?) :P Spanish, perhaps? Or French? Anyway, I love it. I always love different nationalities in fanfic. :P

So, Dean Thomas was the donator. I wonder why he did it, it was calling for trouble. Unless there was no one else available and he just happened to be in the right place at the right time. Maybe there's more to it? Or maybe I'm overthinking as usual? Sorry, don't mind me...

And then she started showing signs of magic (no, I'm not surprised) and she received her Hogwarts' letter at eighteen... how is she even going to fit in? And Cho said that it's something that happens at times, even if it's very rare... exactly how often does it happen? :O (maybe there's still hope for my letter to arrive, then? Ahahah, just kidding :P Or maybe not...)

I peeked quickly at other reviews, and I saw Bianca commented on the fact that Harry, Ron and Hermione wrote a DADA book together. It is a nice thing to include, I can totally see that. I also quite enjoy the idea of Cho being Headmistress. Are you bringing in other canon characters? Because it's fun to see what people's idea about their future is. :)

CC time, hope you don't mind it... First, the flow. I felt it was a bit fragmented, like each sentence felt a bit disjointed from the others. Dunno if it was just my impression, and I wouldn't really know how you could fix it, but maybe try to re-read this and see if you can smother it a little? Also, I would have expected Marissa's parents to be more shocked at Cho's announcement. I'm not exactly sure how the family of a Muggleborn normally reacts to the news, but I felt they remained a bit too collected. Then, again, maybe you wanted them to, so again don't mind me too much.

All in all this was an interesting first chapter, I'm very curious about how Marissa's adventure at Hogwarts will go. I can totally see her as a Ravenclaw, btw. ;)

Thank you for requesting, it was nice to get to read this. :)

Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: That was exactly my first thought when I'd came up with the idea! I really wanted to explore that, and I have a lot of ideas in mind!

Marissa's origins are going to be mentioned in the next chapter, but she is of Spanish origins.

Yeah, I sort of intended Dean Thomas just to be there at the right place, right time.

I imagine that magic matures with age, and that's why there are signs of magic, rather than the child just being a whiz at it. I'd like to believe that maybe that some magic matures later than others, and that's what Cho thought was the case with Marissa.

I do intend on bringing in some canon characters, but they might not have huge roles in the story.

I totally get you about the flow. Something about the chapter always seemed stilted to me, and over the months I have tried to fix it, but nothing seems to work. I'll just have to sit myself down for a few hours and figure it out, I guess.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #7, by Felpata LupinIcarus: Hindsight

19th October 2017:
KRISTIN!!!
Hello, my love! Here I am for your new chapter, and sorry it took me a bit long...

Oh, my Merlin! I love the Potters (and the Weasleys, of course) Did I mention I love the Potters? :D

Poor Lily, how confusing it must all be... but at least she's surrounded by people who love her, it's so nice to see all the family together and hear all the good news! But... Arthur and Molly... so sad... :'(

I also loved seeing Lance again, even if it made me a bit sad that he was a bit wary with Lily (or was it just her impression?) It's so sad, but understandable, too. After all, what she did wasn't exactly correct... but it was nice that they saw a movie together like old times. And I wonder why she had a deja-vu waking up on Lance's couch? :P

So, Louis moved to Germany... wonder if he kept in touch with Alex and Celeste... (You know why I'm wondering this...)

And, oh my god, Percy "entertaining" the reporter! I love it! Ahahah!

I'm sure there's something else I wanted to mention, but I'm almost at work now so I have to leave you. But great job as always and I can't wait for more!

Love you always!
Chiara

Author's Response: CHIARA HI ♥ ♥

I love the Potters too. I just love writing Harry with the family that's everything he wanted as a kid. If anyone deserves the best family ever, it's him.

I'm glad you liked the whole family all together. And I know, I felt really bad about Arthur and Molly. They are perfect and I wanted them to live forever. But no one does :( (They'd be in their late 80's by this point, and none of my grandparents lived that long.. but also I forgot that wizards live longer than Muggles.)

I think Lance might have been wary at first, just because so much happened that it's hard to pick up their friendship where it left off. Tehehe... maybe some memory retained after all?

Er... Hugo moved to Germany. Louis is still around. Worry not! ;) (I can see how someone can get mixed up though. I can't keep track of all of the cousins either)

Percy saving the day with his cauldron talk was the highlight of writing this chapter. XD

Thank you so much! You are the best and I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts on the chapter! Love you forever!


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Review #8, by Felpata LupinIcarus: Ghosts

2nd October 2017:
You put that end note just to confuse me more, didn't you? :P
And Lily doesn't remember anything... that's so sad... :( But maybe she'll get her memories back somehow? I hope so, I don't want her to completely love her experience.
And I can't wait to see her meeting Lance! I've missed Lance! Surely, she did cause a lot of trouble using that cube, but she shouldn't be too hard on herself...
I love that Iris has a child now. And Marta is always Marta *rolls eyes*
And I love how Lily was immediately submerged by letters from her family! Ahahah! I love the Potters! (Well, it's understandable that they would react that way after four years, I'm surprised they didn't just Apparate at Iris' immediately)
I'm almost at work now, so I have to leave you. But this was an awesome chapter as always (even if I would have liked some answers instead of more questions... but I will forgive you...)
Love you so much!
Snowball hug,
Chiara

Author's Response: Yeah, by this point with the past three chapters I've probably confused everyone to the point where no one will read it anymore :P But, I promise that the remaining chapters will start to answer questions rather than raise more. (Finally.)

Yay for Lance! He'll be in the next chapter :) I think Lily is in a difficult place and guilt/blame are kind of flying all over as she learns new things. She's understandably upset and her emotions are everywhere. But things will start to calm down for her and I think she'll be able to see things more objectively given time. :)

yeah, everyone's lives have definitely moved on a lot! More to come with Marta. Her story's not fully told yet ;)

Aw, haha I'm glad you liked that! I think that despite how nosy her family is, they do understand how overwhelming it would be for all of them to Apparate over there, and probably have grasped that being there won't help Lily as she's going through a lot that she has to process without being surrounded by people. So they settled for a million letters and a promise that she'll see them the next day, which I think is fair ;)

Thanks so much! And you even read this on a tiny screen on the train, so kudos to you :P Thanks so much for reading and for another absolutely wonderful review.

Snowball hugs!
♥♥♥


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Review #9, by Felpata LupinIcarus: Meanwhile...

1st October 2017:
Yay! New chapter! :D
Oh, my Merlin! This is so crazy! Marta, what have you done this time?
I'm wondering how this all connects to everything else. Also, I'm wondering if Marta has just changed history, somehow causing Voldemort to be born, or maybe she travelled to a different universe, not just a different time? At first, when she met Tom (I guessed it was him almost immediately, I'm quite proud of myself :P) I thought she was going to prevent him from marrying Merone somehow. But then she introduced herself as Cecilia... I don't know... I'm confused...
Anyway, this was such a great chapter, as always! And I need more, like right now! I need to know what happened to Lily and to the crew and how Marta's jump into the past has affected everything else.
Love you!
Chiara

Author's Response: Ehehehe yeah it a little crazy I guess :P Everyone's favourite agent of chaos had been absent for a little while and it was just about time to mix things up :P
Haha, yes! Gold star for you, I love that you guessed it. I was wondering if it was going to be obvious and at what point people would catch on ;) Ooh, and I love your theories. I can see how you're confused though and I wonder if I should go back and edit this chapter because maybe I got myself in over my head :P but I'll just say this: 'Cecilia' is actually a canon character, so what Marta did was essentially make sure that events from HBP did end up happening.
Um, anyway, the next chapter is about half written and *hopefully* it will be up soon-ish!
Thanks so much for your review! ♥♥


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Review #10, by Felpata LupinIcarus: Tempus Fugit

10th September 2017:
KRISTIN!!!

So first... thank you so, so, so much for the dedication! It really means a lot to me and you are the best and most supportive friend (and most talented writer) ever! I love you, darling! *big snowball hug*

Second... wait! What's happening?! Why is everything/everyone disappearing?! What's going on?! What will be of Balthazar?! What will be of the crew?! What will be of Lily?! (I'm confident that Lily will be safe, but I'm scared for everyone else...)

Third. This was so wonderful! Oh, my Merlin, I loved it! Like, every little bit of it! But especially that Lily/Celeste moment. Their kiss was so perfect, and I so, so loved the perpetual sunset. How can you use science to create such a beautiful, romantic image? Have I ever told you that you are a genius? Also, your descriptions are so incredibly beautiful!

This was just great and I know I should say much more than I have, but just... this is one of the best things I've ever read and I'm so happy you've updated this and I can't wait for more and I adore you!

Chiara

Author's Response: You are so very welcome! Your feedback on this story has meant so much to me. Gah, thank you! You are a very talented writer yourself!!

Secondly, ehehehehe. That's all I will say about it here, but the next chapter is up and may answer some questions... Kinda. :P

Third: Yay! I'm so glad that you liked it! Aw, and I love the way you described that sunset as science creating a beautiful romantic image! I'd not thought of it quite like that and I love that :P Thank you so much!

Aww! I'm so glad you liked this chapter! Thanks for such a wonderful review! ♥♥♥♥


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Review #11, by Felpata LupinIcarus: All Good Things

29th July 2017:
Hello, my beautiful Kristin!

Sorry if I'm a tiny bit late with this... I haven't felt review-y these past few days and then yesterday I left for the holidays... well, I'm here now! ;)

I loved this chapter! Not that this is surprising but I really did!

First of all, I loved that you interspersed this with the logs. I loved the contrast between the technical and impersonal tone of those and what the true life on the ship is. Plus, I love that it sort of links back to the beginning and the way it helped showing the passage of time.

I felt so envious of Lily in the beginning of the chapter... floating in space... how awesome must it be? :D

I felt a bit less envious as she thought about the misterious portal... what she's about to do is absolutely foolish! Who would actually enter a cave inhabited by dangerous alien monsters to jump into a portal that could lead you home as well as in any other possible alternative reality?! It's absolutely, 100% crazy! I don't want to know how this is going to end. (Actually, I do...)

Ah, Lily and Celeste! Yes! Yes! Yes! How do you call them? Lileste? Celestly? Erm, don't mind me... but I loved to see them flirting, as unprofessional as it might be. ;)

Lily's birthday was so adorable! They made such a sweet surprise for her! :) Also, I love the idea of her making a scrapbook for the crew! It's so nice and I so love the familiar atmosphere on the Daedalus (I think I've already commented on that but it's something that I really love so much!)

Oh my god, we are almost there... I'm scared and excited at the same time! I really hope everything will turn out to be alright for Lily! Also I'm so proud of how much she's changed and the fact that she really wants to use her fame to make the world better!

I'm leaving you now! Thank you for another awesome chapter! Let me know when you updated again!

Huge snowball hug rolling your way, darling!

Chiara

Author's Response: Chiara! Once again you are the best person ever! Thanks so much for reviewing so quickly! ♥

Thank you! I know it was kind of a departure from the way the rest of the story has been structured, but I felt it was the best way to show the passage of time without just skipping huge sections of it. I'm glad you liked the balance between the logs and the narration!

I know, I'm really jealous too :P

Yeah, she's known all along that it's going to be dangerous and that it might not work, but reading the logs all the time that reinforce *how* it might not work is pretty scary. So it's either that or stick around on a version of Earth where she doesn't belong and waits years for them to invent technology or maybe never goes home. But yeah... sounds pretty terrifying what she's headed up against. I think the uncertainty is the worst part!

Haha, I never gave much thought to what their couple name would be. You can call them whatever you like :P

I'm glad you liked her birthday, and her ideas about making a scrapbook! And thanks, I'm so glad the familiar atmosphere comes across - especially after only three chapters of knowing them - that close feeling is one I felt was really important to how the crew works and I'm so glad it came through in the writing. It's modeled on my own experience with my shipmates working on tallships. :)

She really has changed! I'm so proud of her :)

Thank you so much for this wonderful review! Hopefully the next chapter won't take as long - I've reached the point where a lot of the story has been written for years so it's just filling in the gaps now.

Snowball hug and all my love! ♥


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Review #12, by Felpata LupinTraitorous Hearts: The Stolen Truth

23rd July 2017:
Hi, Penny! Here for our swap!
Oh, Merlin, did I miss this story... how am I so behind? Thank you for giving me an excuse to come back here!

As always, your writing is stunning. I love your descriptions, the atmosphere you manage to create and, most importantly, the dynamics between your characters, they way they study each other, the carefulness in every word and gesture, it's so fascinating. I loved that you showed us both point of views here.

I feel sort of bad for Draco, forced into this role, knowing that it's actually just an act and that the esit is already decided independently of how the meeting goes. I loved that you showed him tired and doubtful, even if he managed to hide it. At the same time I find it interesting how he is fascinated despite himself by her and wants to figure out her secrets, just because it has become a personal challenge, or maybe because he wants a justification for what he's doing. Maybe both...

I also loved how you made Astoria lose her cools, if only for a moment, when the subject of her family was brought up. And then, with the switch to her point of view... that was so intense! I could feel the fear and the tension when she thought he would torture her (by the way, I loved that you showed how Draco is repulsed by the idea of torture, even if only so subtly and from a point of view of someone who can't know that. It was so effective). And the Legilimens bit... it must be such a awful sensation, someone violating your mind that way. It can be, indeed, much worse that torture... And that cliffhanger, oh my Merlin!

I'll try not to take so long to get back to you next time, I need to know what happens next! But I have to go now...

Thank you for accepting the swap and bringing me back to this wonderful piece of art! And welcome back to our lovely community, I've really missed you!

Lots of love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hey Chiara!

Thank YOU! You offered the review swap. And I was just so excited to take you up on it! It's always fun to swap with you, and I enjoyed reading your writing again! It had been way too long.

I really like your insight on Draco's motivations for pushing this when the outcome is already decided. I agree that he considers it a personal challenge and wants to figure her out, but I'm not sure I remember anyone else suggesting what you did - that he wants to find out her guilt because it would justify his actions this time. That really rings true. Draco's actions and motivations are complicated, and I've never put those words to it before, but I think you are right and that on some level the desire to be right about this, to be condemning someone who actually did what they are accused of, is a factor. If she's guilty, then that's one less sin on his shoulders.

Or is it...?

Writing that moment where Astoria loses it was such a relief for me. A BREAK in the TENSION! And I really wanted to take the opportunity to show that, as good as she is at all the deception and at keeping her emotions close to the vest, she's still 16. She's a young girl, and she's under tremendous strain, but her devotion to her family is absolute. They are her weakness, and she can't quite hide it.

Plus, I liked having this moment of breakthrough. Like they've been dancing around each other for 4 1/2 chapters and the time has finally come when we're getting past the surface.

I'm also really glad that you homed in on that moment where Draco is repulsed by the idea of torture, but Astoria can't tell. I cannot imagine Draco would have the stomach for that kind of cruelty, and I think he'd have had to witness far too much of it already. It was something I really wanted to convey without having it be obvious to Astoria what his reaction meant, so I'm really happy that it came across and that you liked it.

Muahahaha. Yeah, I'll admit, I enjoy a good evil cliffhanger. But I try to write the next chapter fast so that no one suffers too much.

And oh my gosh, Chiara, you are going to make me CRY! You are too sweet. Thank you so much for that absolutely lovely welcome back. It really, really means so much. I've missed you too!

--Penny



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Review #13, by Felpata LupinBeyond Repair: A Highly Unusual Day

22nd July 2017:
Here I am again! I thought I would profit and just go on reading. :P

I remember reading the first part ages ago, when you were writing it, in one of our Skype writing dates... I so miss them... anyway...

First of all, your description was great, as always. The sultry afternoon, Petunia painting her nails, McGonagall's appearence... also, I love that you sort of created a parallel between the weather and the narration, the growing tension between the two sister and the sense of suspension before the storm explodes.

By the way, the argument was just so sad... especially because they both just said right the things that would hurt the other more without meaning it. That's just how bad arguments go, isn't it? Wrong words and misunderstandings. But it really looks like the beginning of the end and it is so sad to see. I felt so bad for Tuney here...

Another great chapter! I really love this story!

Love you, my dear!

Chiara

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Review #14, by Felpata LupinBeyond Repair: The Picnic

22nd July 2017:
Hey, Renee, love!

Thought I would profit of your appreciation month to move on a bit with this lovely story you have here! ;)

Oh, poor, little Sev... even if he does have a few little creepy moments... like the desire when he looks at Lily, and the fascination he already has for Dark Magic. It was interesting to see the different reactions Lily and Petunia had at the mention of the Imperius Curse, I love how Lily can immediately see the darkness in it, while Petunia sees only the selfish part. It's so in character for both of them and I love how well defined their personalities already are, even if they are all just children,

But going back to Severus, I really felt for him and for his family situation, it's horrible the abuses he and his mother had to suffer, and it's so heartbreaking that he prefers to be the subject of his father's rage, just because he wouldn't go after his mum then. There is one thing that confused me a little, though... why did he have magical wounds if his father is a Muggle? Not important, but I tthought I'd ask.

I loved how Petunia felt pity for him, too, but fought it off because it was a reality she couldn't and didn't want to understand. Sometimes things are just too painful and it's easier to close your eyes and pretend they don't exist, isn't it? I loved the way you wrote her inner conflict.

And I also loved the way you wrote her jealousy, and the mental mechanism that will lead her to hate her sister and despise magic in the long run. She doesn't think magic is creepy, she loves the idea of it. What she hates is that she can't be part of it. And that's not even that, because what she really hates is that her sister doesn't mind shutting her out from that part of her (obviously, it isn't Lily's fault and Petunia should understand that, but seeing the situation in this light makes you understand her motivations much better and it makes total sense).

To cut it short, this was another awesome chapter, with wonderful character development. I so love how you write everyone. Actually, I so love how you write, dot.

Might be back for more later. See you for now.

Snowball hug,

Chiara

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Review #15, by Felpata LupinThe Harder They Fall: Deeper Than Oceans

21st June 2017:
B, I love you!!!
And I love this ending!!!
And I love this whole story, and your wonderful writing, and your brilliant mind!!!
And I'm so proud of you for getting to the end of this! I can't believe it's finished, I'm so excited and a tiny bit sad at the same time... (also, how awesome is it that we finished our stories practically at the same time?)

Okay, I'll stop blubbering and try to leave an actual review now... :P

So, first... I love Finn's Mum! I love that in the end all she cares about is her son being safe and happy. Such a stark contrast with Jameson, who primarily cares about the good name of the family. I felt so awful when he rejected Finn...

And speaking of Finn... I couldn't be more proud of him! I loved the scene when he broke the Hallows symbol, it was so brave of him. You can really tell how much he's grown up and changed since the story started.

I hate, hate, HATE Tom! Poor Finn, I felt so bad when Tom finally told him what he'd done to Hero... :(

Oh, and I love that the Cloak was fake! Fleamont is so smart! ;)

You really fooled me... I truly believed Brindley was gone for a moment... how dared you scared me that way? Shake-what???

But then she opened her eyes, and she wasn't ill anymore and that was so amazing and made up for any previous heartbreak. I so loved the concept that the curse nullified itself, such a stroke of genius! (By the way, I don't think I've commented on it before, but your Grindelwald was amazing, too. You just have a talent at writing dark wizard, I guess...)

I'm so glad Brindley decided to forgive him. I mean, I'm not surprised that she did. How could she not when he'd tried so hard to set things right? I loved that she made a blanket fort, like when they first kissed. Such a nice touch!

I so love the idea of Brindley and Fleamont trying to build a relationship. And now I want that Marauder sequel even more. I love the idea that the children of Finn and Brindley grew up with James! :D

Oh, by the way... talking about family and cousins and stuff... what about my little Bash? I like the idea that he made up with Finn and Brindley and they kept in touch... but maybe not? I just hope he won't get involved any more with Tom and the future Death Eaters...

So, to cut it short, I loved this, and I'm so glad you gave us a happy ending (no, it wasn't obvious... I mean, do you remember how you ended Hero???)

I know I tell you all the time, but you are an amazing writer!

Thank you so much for this wonderful story!
Snowball hug!
Your little Chi!

Author's Response: Argh Chiara this has to be the best review you've ever given me, I love you so much! (And yes, I love that we finished at the same time :D) Thank you thank you THANK YOU! And also thank you for being there every step of the way. You're amazing ♥

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Review #16, by Felpata LupinThe Harder They Fall: Hollow

18th June 2017:
Oh, my Shakespeare, B!
I swear I have tears in my eyes right now... Sebastian, what have you done? (And yes, I still love him)

I felt so bad for Finn. When he heard about Alenya... I mean, he sort of asked for it, and I sort of expected it to happen, but it still broke my heart.

And I'm so worried now about Fleamont and about Brindley and... well, I'm so worried about everyone, actually. And I just want to hug Finn and Bash and tell them that it'll all end well. Because it will, right? Or at least, not so bad?

As always, I could probably comment on a thousand other things, but I'm so overwhelmed with emotion right now... I just can't wait for the last chapter, even if I'm scared to find out what will happen.

This was so brilliant and heartbreaking and I love your writing so much!

Snowball hug,
Chiara

Author's Response: I thought of you when I wrote Sebastian because I knew you wouldn't like it :( I'm sorry! (But I'm glad you still love him :P) Sorry for all the emotion little Chi! *snowball hug* but thank you for reviewing!!! ♥

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Review #17, by Felpata LupinTransition: Transition

18th June 2017:
Hi, Vilja. I'm here with your requested review. Sorry it took so long...

This was interesting, I find Mafalda's origins very intriguing, I really like the idea of the daughter of two Squibs being magical and ending up in Slytherin. I really enjoyed the first scene in the playground, when her father realizes she's a witch. I also really liked the descriptions in that first scene.

I was a little bit confused about dates and ages, but I think I figured it out, maybe? Did Mafalda for some reason start Hogwarts when she was older than eleven? Like, she should've started in Harry's fourth year and started in his sixth instead? Why would that happen? I'm curious. (And if I misunderstood it all, I'm sorry).

Mafalda is kind of annoying, actually, but I love that she actually has some Ravenclaw in her, you can clearly see the traits of both houses. She also seems the kind of person who would let their curiosity get them into trouble... I wonder if that did happen to her...

I read the review Abbi left you, and I have to agree that the story feels a bit incomplete, like we get a lot of information about Mafalda and everything going on around her, but we don't really know what to do with that information... if that makes sense? I think I told you something similar about another of your stories... obviously, this is only my feeling and you are totally free to disagree with me.

One thing I really liked (in this story as well as in other of your works) is your attention to details and making everything fit in canon. It really shows how much effort you put in your plotting and I really admire that.

So sorry again for the long wait, it really was a crazy period for me...

Much love,
Chiara

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Review #18, by Felpata LupinThe Harder They Fall: Immortal

16th June 2017:
Hi, B, love!
It's 9am and I'm waiting for Anja and Jo to wake up so I thought I would profit and leave you this long-owed review. (And maybe get to the new chapter too, if I have time)

"Never before had he felt as though maybe he wasn’t so immortal. That life was not perfect, that his family’s wealth and name couldn’t fix everything." The impotence in front of death... this really hits me in the feelings so much... also, I'm a bit disappointed that Finn chose to condemn an innocent girl, but I can see why he did so and I still love him.

"Like our good looks."
"I heard that skips generations."
Ahahah! Did I mention I love Brindley?

The whole scene on the mountain, the dancing and everything that happens next... oh, my Shakespeare! That was just amazing and wonderful and... I so love Finn and Brindley together. And I so love your writing! Also, I loved the bit about the birthmarks, such a nice touch!

I loved the idea of the ring, it was so clever. And I loved that moment with Hero. I just wish she made it in time to tell him what Tom did. But I have a feeling he will figure it out soon anyway...

"The two most important girls in his life. One he had already lost. The other was only a matter of time." Poor Finn... can I just hug him?

My little Bash... I almost forgot you mentioned him... what is he up to? Should I be worried?

Sorry, I'm cutting this short. There's surely something I forgot to say. Just wanted to tell you again how much I loved this chapter! It was really, really brilliant!

Love thee, little B!
Chiara

Author's Response: Chiaraaa! Thank you so much for coming back and leaving a review, even when I told you not to :P I'm so glad you liked the chapter! Thou always brings a smile to my face :) ♥

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Review #19, by Felpata LupinThe Harder They Fall: No Rest for the Wicked

20th May 2017:
Oh, my Shakespeare, this chapter!

And what a cliffhanger! Is he going to reveal it is Brindley? Is he going to tell the other Hufflepuff girl? Is he going to simply refuse to say anything? I want to know, but at the same time I'm scared of the answer and its consequences.

And by the way, the torturing scene was so powerful. Terrifying and heartbreaking, but so well done. Poor Finn, I just want to cuddle him and keep him safe...

Oh, Ben and Radbourne... I loved the conversation between Ben and Finn and their mutual acceptance. It was a sweet moment, even if there was a bitter taste in it as well, because they are both forced in these situations they can't manage. It is always Tom, indeed.

And the chocolate bit... I wonder if Dumbledore was truly allergic or if he somehow guessed what was going on. After all, Dumbledore always knows everything... he's Dumbledore! I loved the way you wrote him, by the way, and that little argument between him and Tom about love. So very in character for both of them.

Usually he enjoyed his own company - and really, who wouldn't Maybe he's not the old Finn, but some parts of his character will never change! :P Thank you for tearing me a laugh among all the angst!

And of course, Brindley! That moment in the greenhouse was so sweet! So many feel... (also, I loved the creature)

This was such a great chapter and I can't wait for the next!

Love you, little B!

Chiara

Author's Response: Can't say I'm sorry for the cliffhanger ;) I also want to keep Finn safe :( but I'm the writer so it doesn't work that way :P

Thanks for reviewing little Chi! I love you!


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Review #20, by Felpata LupinRemember: The Battle

12th May 2017:
Hi! Here with your requested review! (Sorry for the long wait...)

Wait... who obliviated who? I hate cliffhangers, why do you all keep doing that?

But I did enjoy this chapter. :) I found your characterization of Audrey very interesting so far. I liked that she was there for Percy and that she helped him seeing past his pride and ambition and going back to his family and the bright side. Also, she is a Clearwater? Interesting :)

Ah, the ending... Fred... :'( There are no right words to say in these situations, I'm just glad she was there for him in that moment. Poor Percy... :(

I think you did a nice job with this chapter. The pace was good, the dialogue felt natural and there was just the right balance between dialogue and description. I did find this a bit too short and the end a bit too rushed... but you left me wonder, which is always a good thing ;)

Nice work so far!
Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Hehe...because it's the only way I can end things decently? ;)

I'm glad you liked her characterisation! The Clearwater thing was a spontaneous idea which popped into my mind because I couldn't think of any other surnames that weren't rubbish, but it's not canon :)

Originally, this was a one shot, and then I split it partly because it was a bit long and partly because I had too many ideas for chapter names :P I agree that the ending was a bit sudden but...yeah. I guess that's what surprises are for lol.

Thanks for the review! :D



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Review #21, by Felpata LupinFrom the Ashes: Good Mourning

12th May 2017:
Hi, Jenn!
Here with your review! Sorry it took forever...
This surely was interesting, your stories are always very peculiar and with many unexpected twists and characters' interactions.

I like the first introduction of Lyall and Andromeda and how they clashed a little at first. I loved your characterization of Lyall as a quiet and old-fashioned man, it made total sense to me.

I really liked Hope's backstory, too. Well, I say liked, when it was actually quite painful. Cancer is a bit of a touchy subject to me... But I loved that she was an art teacher and the part about Jakub and Chiara (btw, I might've got a bit too excited when I saw you had an Italian character named Chiara in here... :P)

I liked that you included Newt and Tina as well. Poor Tina, Newt must not be simple to live with... but he's so adorable at the same time. :) That must've been quite an experience for Andromeda, eheheh!

I was a bit surprised by their intimate moment, it did came quite suddenly. But I guess it was nice that they could find solace in each other in a way... later, when she burst in tears and he said that it was normal to hate them and took her to the cemetery... oh, the feels... :( But then you made me smile when they shared memories of Dora and Remus as children. I can totally see little Remus going around stealing food and leaving notes asking for more!

I really like that in the end they decided to marry and share Teddy's custody. Also, Teddy seems such an adorable, little kid (well, he's his father's son, I'm not surprised... :P)

I really enjoyed reading this, nice work!
See you,
Chiara

Author's Response: Glad that you liked it. The intimate part was more of a reaction than a response. I didn't want to elaborate too much on Hope, but I thought it was important see was explained. The cemetery scene - it's something that I drew from personal experience when my grandfather died. I'm glad you liked the memories and reconnection.

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Review #22, by Felpata LupinThe Harder They Fall: The Beginning of the End

7th May 2017:
Shake-what??? Was your goal to break my heart? Because in this case, you managed it!

Poor Finn... :'( I just want to hug him tight and never let go! He shouldn't have to deal with all that, he shouldn't be involved, he's just a kid! It's not fair! *more hugs*

Was it Sebastian who told Dumbledore? I have a feeling it might've been, but I guess I'll find out later... and did Tom give him the Dark Mark? Why? What else is he planning now?

Oh, my Shakespeare! So now Finn has a new, impossible task and Brindley is in even more danger... And she's dying??? What???

“It’s okay, Finn. I’ve come to terms with it.” “I haven’t.” Oh, Merlin, this killed me. You have no idea how much... :(

It also really killed me the way Jameson talked to him, but I can see where he was coming from... he just don't want to lose Finn as well... still, he was rather cruel...

On one hand, I'm glad Finn is trying to get Tom off track, on the other I find it awful that he would put him after some random, innocent person... I just hope everything will turn out to be okay in the end...

Sorry for another disconnected review, but I really loved this chapter, despite it being heartbreaking! And now I can't wait for the new one!

Lots of love, my little B!
Chiara

Author's Response: Shake-what, Chi?! No, that wasn't my goal and I'm sorry! ♥

It was an early version of the Dark Mark. As to what he's planning... well, you'll find out! ;)

I'm sorry if this was a bit emotional, but thank you for reading, Chi! ♥


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Review #23, by Felpata LupinIcarus: Show and Tell

4th May 2017:
KRISTIN!!!
I'm here! Finally! I can't believe it took me two months... :( But better late than never, right?

I'm so impressed by the amount of thought and work and research you've put in here, you seriously even thought about their space itinerary??? You are brilliant!

I love the crew, it really feels like a bit family. I love the concept that, if Daedalus was a person it would be a Hufflepuff, it's so true! ;)

Did I already say that I love Alex? I'm quite sure I did, once or twice... :P (not his music, though... I'm sorry about that but I'm quite grateful I don't have to attend to any concert by them... :P)

And Celeste! I have so much admiration for Celeste. She's had to fight against every kind of discrimination in her life but never gave up and just conquered everything that was important for her in life. Ah, if only I had a quarter of her strenght and commitment...

I can see how Lily would feel inadequate compared to her. But I also think she's too hard on herself. Living with fame you never asked for can't be easy either, and it really must make you wonder if anything you achieve is really deserved or not. I'm sure her life will get another interesting turn once she's back. This experience will surely teaching her a lot!

Will she meet Celeste once she's back? I hope so, after all they have Louis as a connection ;) Ahahah! I bet Marta would be qulte umpredictable on... anything! :P

I also loved the interpretation of magic you gave here! Basically, we are all daltonic... ahahah! I wish I wasn't, though. Chores would be so much easier!

If you couldn't tell, I loved this chapter! Just like all the other chapters! And I can't wait for more! (Maybe I won't take that long to catch up next time!

Love you!
Chiara

Author's Response: CHIARA ♥ ♥ ♥ HI ♥ ♥ Your reviews are always a treat, no matter when they show up! :)

Thank you! Yes, I've planned their whole itinerary. Omg, the amount of unnecessary background for this story - I even have a picture where I've drawn the blueprints of the ship haha! And I've planned out every character's background to an extent where most of it probably won't even appear in the story :P It's a bit excessive!

Aw, yay, thanks, I'm so glad you like the crew and I'm especially glad that it feels like family to read about them, that's exactly what I was going for.

I'm also thrilled that you like Alex (even if you don't like their music :P) and Celeste! Celeste is definitely very driven and motivated - she puts my lazy writing to shame :P She'd have written this story in only a few months :P

I really like what you said about Lily, and about what you deserve vs what you achieve. Definitely a lot to think about! And yes, she's learnt a lot so far through all she's been through in the past couple of months.

Thanks, I'm glad you liked the interpretation of magic. I admit that because I'm a biologist, the mechanism of inheritance of magic is something I've always been curious about, and this was the best explanation I could come up with! :P

So glad you enjoyed this chapter. As always, thank you SO much for reading and for leaving this wonderful review. You're the best! *SNOWBALL HUG* All my love! ♥


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Review #24, by Felpata LupinBurning Secrets: Burning Secrets

30th April 2017:
Hey, Vilja! Here with your requested review! :)

Well, one thing is for sure, you have a way to surprise the readers, your stories are always so different from anything else I see around.

I had heard about the theory of Draco as a werewolf, and I honestly love it! I think it makes a lot of sense and gives to Draco's character even more depth. The scene of the bite was done so well by you. It wasn't excessively detailed, but it still gave me the chills. Well done.

I'd never heard about the theory of Madam Pince being Eileen, instead. That took me by complete surprise... at first I thought that they had a secret relationship (meaning love relationship) even if it felt so weird, then when she called him "son" I was like... wait, what? I found it so interesting.

I loved how each section brought out Severus' secret anguish, and how each one was concluded with a reference to the burning of his Mark, it was quite powerful. I felt so sad about the last section and the fact that he'd lost his mother's affection. I wish he'd tell her the truth, but obviously I can understand why he wouldn't.

I honestly really enjoyed reading this, I think you did a great job. I don't really have CCs for you, I really liked the theme, pacing and structure.

Thanks for requesting.
Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hi Chiara, Thank you for such a nice review. I'm glad surprise was the first thing you mentioned, I like to outstand on that front ;-) I really don't know how to reply, so I just want to thank you for taking the time to read this and leave a review.

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Review #25, by Felpata LupinEnchanted: 20 Questions

24th April 2017:
Hi! Back again for CTF!
Okay, so I skipped the first chapter (#strategy) and I might've lost a bit of context, but... things developed quickly, didn't they?

Well, Scorpius seemed pretty lovesick, actually. I'm not sure what Rose thinks. And she has a boyfriend? Not nice, Rosie...

I liked the 20 questions thing, and I found sort of cute when Scorpius asked for a kiss... Also, a baby sister... Nice :)

I enjoyed seeing Hermione and Ron in the angry parents' role. Well, Hermione was angry, Ron was just... Ron. Seeing him stuffing his mouth with food, while commenting "What your mother said" really made me chuckle. :P

I must admit, the structure felt a bit weird for me, and I found a bit distracting that you put author notes in the middle of the narration. But feel free to ignore me, I'm just being a perfectionist, I guess... :P

All in all, this was a fun read. I think Rose and Scorpius make a nice couple. I'm not sure I 100% approve her rebellious behaviour, but she's an adolescent, so I can't blame her, can I? (Scorpius is my favourite, in case you were wondering).

I wonder how their relationship will develop from here, I guess we'll see more romantic interactions soon.

Have to go, but you'll see me back on other chapters. ;)

Bye,
Chiara

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