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Review #1, by HufflePuff_BlitzLying Josephine: Introduction: Boxes

5th March 2016:
For The HPFF Review-A-Thon!
Tanya! My love! It is finally time for this wonderful moment. And a fine moment it is.

Your introduction was incredibly marvelous! It gave pretty much a basic synopsis of the story and revealed a marvelous insight to our main character. You have done a wonderful job at letting the readers know what the character has done and how she feels but you left it open for multiple interpretations later down the road so I, as a reader am intrigued at what will happen in this story.

I do enjoy the date stamps on these also, as it gives a good sense of time. Because sometimes an author will use the "it has been several months" but it appears as if years had transpired. So giving the date really helps to understand when everything is happening.

The second half of this chapter is really well done also Tanya! It re-established how the character feels, and starts to reveal more information. But you still left just enough details for me to crave a lot more!

I keep asking questions, like: "Fred had a best friend other than George!? How did that happen?" and it's the questions like that (trust me I have many many more) that are prompting me to continue onto the next chapter.

On thing I did have a question about, and it might just be my abysmol grammar skills at work, but we had this sentence: "I stand at his funeral, encased by a sea of mourning friends and family, all dressed in black. Yet, despite the crowds of mourners, I am still alone." and to me it seemed like a change in the tense for the story. because before it was like "I never did celebrate" which sounds like past tense but the sentence I pointed out was in present tense, and it stayed that way. I'm thinking It is just me because looking back now the rest of it is in present tense and it is probably some rule I don't understand. lol.

But overall A+++ Tanta Great first chapter! I really enjoyed it! Cannot wait to continue!

Hugs and Hufflepuffs!

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Review #2, by HufflePuff_BlitzFirst Date: Chapter 1

8th February 2016:
Kaitlin! Hello!
I really really really really really loved this. Not just saying that because Harmus is my otp and I'm really happy that more are starting to appear. But this was so cute and adorable.
I love how you kind of kept it to cannon, with Harry still having his kids. That was a nice touch.
A couple of things I noticed was you had said "Worries" in the second paragraph when it looks like it should be worried. And then Seamus catching the feather on fire. Wasn't that in Charms and not Transfoguration. It's been a long while since I've read the first book that I might be completely wrong so ignore me for that of that is the case.
But once again I really enjoyed this! And maybe someday we will get to see more of you writing this pairing because it was really good!

Author's Response: Hey Kyle!

Thanks so much for stopping by to read this.

I'm glad that you like the bits of cannon compliancy mixed in with the new relationship. Harmus is a cute pairing for sure.

Thanks for catching those couple mix ups. I tend to type really fast, edit quickly and then post before I can start doubting my writing too much, so sometimes little typos get missed. I will definitely go through and fix those.

Thanks again for popping by and for your lovely words.


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Review #3, by HufflePuff_BlitzLegendary: Nightmare

31st January 2016:
Tammi! You posted it! This is wonderful and sad and James is one cool dude.
I can't wait for you to keep breaking my heart :D

Author's Response: I did! And I am going to enjoy breaking your heart! :D MWahahahahah

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Review #4, by HufflePuff_Blitztime, space. : love, hate.

28th January 2016:
Um. Wow.
Just, Wow. Can I just say that over and over and over again because I think I am truly lost for words right now. Wow.

Okay, back in focus... kind of... but hello, me for our swap :)
Let me just say how wow this is. Like I can't describe how wonderfully beautifully written this story is. and to have shoved all of that into a one-shot. Masterful.

"Its essence swirls around the room like grains of sand carried through the wind, echoing in the past, present, and future, suspended in reality, pushed forward across the lands and the skies, to stop deep in my heart. Time." - I was enthralled by this sentence. Absolutely Stunning writing

I would love to give some constructive criticize on this, because you know how helpful that can be, but honestly I am so blown away by this that I have nothing bad to say about it. While I'm not the best person at grammar, I didn't see any mistakes and even if there are some in their they are totally eclipsed by the writing of this piece.

If reading this was a live performance, I would give you a standing ovation. Seriously. Sorry for Gushing over this, but seriously I loved this piece!

Great Work on this! Absolutely Marvelous! Definitely deserves a Dobby next year!


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Review #5, by HufflePuff_BlitzFirewhiskey and Dragonbreath Shots: Firewhiskey and Dragonbreath Shots

28th January 2016:
Ummm, hi. Here for our swap.
Don't mind me, just wiping some tears from my eyes. That ending was really sad. Was it supposed to be? if so marvelous job, my heart is breaking.

I don't usually read this era but I'm glad I read yours because i was thoroughly enjoyed by it. I loved your portrayal of Sirius, James, and Lily.

Also i loved how you mentioned Petunia and Vernon. At first I had a question, seeing as you said it was christmas time sixth year, and i was really confused of her age and her going to a bar. So great job answering that later in.

The only thing that really threw me off, was at the beginning, it seemed like it took the dialog a little bit to kick off but once it did it was absolutely amazing dialog. and as a disclaimer, like I said before I don't usually read these kinds of stories so it might of just been me. :)

I really enjoyed this!
Thanks for the swap

Author's Response: Hello Kyle!

Thank you so much for the swap, and I'm glad you enjoyed it despite not having read this era.

Yes the ending was supposed to be a little sad, because I see James and Lily as a couple who get together after so much already transpired between them.

Despite not reading this era, I'm really glad you enjoyed this story and thank you once again for your feedback!

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Review #6, by HufflePuff_BlitzAn Inspector Calls: Prologue

17th January 2016:
Isobel!!!' Why didn't I know this exsisted before now! It is so good! (Not just saying that because you mentioned me :D)
I never thought that there would be an Irish ministry but that would make a bit of sense. All the wonderful Finigans!!! So is this going to be a Wootergan story?! If so you are the most incredible person ever.

Hope to see more chapters soon!
Hugs and Hufflepuffs

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Review #7, by HufflePuff_BlitzWish On Me: Wish On Me

19th November 2015:
Tammi! This is so adorable!
Harry and Theo are such a good pair.
I really enjoyed this because all of the cuteness!
The only thing I really noticed with this was all of the short paragraphs made it a little choppy to read. But Absolutely perfect other than that!
- Kyle

Author's Response: KYLE!

Thank you :D Haha I feel like I need to write about Theo's adventures as a Genie. He'll be so terrible and not entirely sober the entire time. :P

Ahh, thank you for pointing that out, I need to go back and edit this one.

Thanks!!! :D

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Review #8, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Chewed Quill

20th October 2015:
Yo TAMMI! I'm Back!
Another Great chapter.. James is a cutie as always. :)
BTW Love the chapter image! Fluffy Cat!
Awesome work as Always

Author's Response: YAY! I'm once again glad that you're enjoying this story, it makes me so happy!

Haha gotta love a bit of snowball!

THank you!!

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Review #9, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One Where James Is Up All Night

17th October 2015:
I'm going to start a happy chapter dance when I enjoy these chapters. Because I really enjoy these chapters.
Once again James is perf. And Abigail is so sweet.
I feel like Abigail is my spirit animal. I would totally watched James in her situation.
Once again. Absolutely fantastic.
I can't wait to read what James gets up to into the night ;)

Author's Response: Awww yay! I hope you do lots of happy dances! :D He is isn't he? *swoons* I might have to steal him away from her haha.

Haha she could so be! Thank you so much, Kyle!

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Review #10, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Muggle Studies Project

17th October 2015:
Aw James is so cute talking about the tv.
I love him. That assignment sounds so fun.
And haha Abigail sounds like me in these situations.
Another great chapter Tammi!
Sorry this review is so short. I guess there isn't enough Michelle to complain about.

Author's Response: I do love writing James! :D He brings me joy, he's such a happy chappy.

Thank you so much, Kyle, don't worry more Michelle will be around soon to complain about. :P

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Review #11, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Four Hour Nap

16th October 2015:
Hey Tammi!
Another great chapter! Abigail is my kind of girl. Naps are lovely. Once again I hate Michelle. Screw throwing her in the dungeon. Feed her to the Balrog!
Once strange thing I did notice was that in the last chapter you had said it was the second week. And then in this chapter you mentioned it was the first week.
Other than that it was marvelous as always. :)

Author's Response: Hey Kyle!!

Thank you :D Oh yes, naps can be lovely. I am yet to experience a lovely nap, mine always end in me forgetting the day/time/year.


Whoops, I didn't even realise that I done that, thank you for pointing it out.

Thank you so much, Kyle!!

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Review #12, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Change In Friendship

16th October 2015:
Another great chapter!
I feel like I am starting to sound like a broken record. But I love James. He is so sweet. I love how he is showing an interest in Abigail.
Once again loving this story. I think I've read up to here already. How could I have forgotten to review so much!

Author's Response: Awww you can keep telling me how much you love James, James would love it! He has such a crush on Abigail, he just needs to admit to it! *Shakes him* ADMIT IT YOU FOOL!

Awww thank you so much! I hope that you continue, I love hearing what you think! :D

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Review #13, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Chocolate Of Forgiveness

16th October 2015:
Me again!
Aw James was so so so so so so cute. I love him. I just wanna kick Abigail out of the way and be in her place. This chapter was too ah.
I don't think I can say much else. Besides you. Know. My hate of Michelle. But I bet you know that already. :D
Great again Tammi!

Author's Response: Those two make me so happy! James is so adorable haha and I think Abigail will cry if you kick her out of the way, but no one can resist James!
Oh yes, there is much hate! haha

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Review #14, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The Love Potion

16th October 2015:
I hate the two of them. Throw them in the dungeon.
So the infamous William shows his face. I like him. But there was a huge lack of jinxing on his part.
Poor James and Abigail. Though. If James wasn't so adorable I would feel worse for the two of them.
Also. Is there a 'I hate Michelle club'? If not I will be more then happy to start it.
One little mistake I saw was in the first paragraph. The part about the parties. I think the line was 'this parties' and wasn't sure if it was supposed to be 'these' other then that it looked fantastic!
Great work as always Tam!

Author's Response: They are swines! the biggest swine!

I hate them too! TO THE DUNGEONS!

He does! He is around, he should have jinxed everyone!

We should make one! We can both be founders!

Whooops, thank you Kyle!

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Review #15, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One With The 'Supportive' Best Friend

16th October 2015:
Hello! Me again :)
Once again. Don't like Michelle. Can we toss her off the astronomy tower? Please.
She's a Puff. So sweet. Love me a good Puff.
Once again I love James.
The only thing I thought was weird was them calling the professor 'Mrs' I don't know why but it just seems like they don't refer to their teachers like that.
Great Tammi!
I can't wait to keep reading and hating Michelle.

Author's Response: KYLE!!

I don't like her either, and I agree that we should, maybe she can take Rebecca with her?

Oh yes! Abigail couldn't be anything other than a Puff.

Ooops, I didn't even realise that I had done that! I shall change it.

Thank you so much Kyle!!!

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Review #16, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy: The One Where James Knocks Me Down

16th October 2015:
Ok. I know I've read this chapter before. Why the smelly butts did I not review it.
But I did quite enjoy this. It was very swell. I loved Daryl. *swoons* do we get to see him again? :)
Michelle. Ugh. I don't like here attitude. But I do love those comic books. That is the most fantastic idea ever!
And James. James, James, James. *swoons again* James is adorable. I can't even.
Ok. I like this. I think I might've read the next few chapters already also. But I' guess I can reread them again and again. :D
Great Tammi!

Author's Response: Hahaha oh Kyle! Or Lyle as you wrote. :P

I love Darryl too! He needs to come back! Just to torment James haha.

Michelle is a big meanie! She needs to go away!

And wo! James! James! James!!!

Awww yay!

Thank you so much!

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Review #17, by HufflePuff_BlitzJust Another Night: Just Another Night

20th July 2015:
Hufflepuff-House Cup 2015
Hi Erica! This was really good, I've never really read much from Harry's Pov but I enjoyed this.!
You're Grammar was really good, and I didn't really notice any mistakes in it at all :)
The only thing I might suggest it slow it down about. In this chapter it felt really rushed and made it a little hard to follow.
If you don't mind, I might suggest adding a little bit more details to it.
Like all we really saw was how Harry was feeling, which I did feel anger towards Dean while reading this! :D
You could try adding some details of the common room like how Harry was sitting or how he felt physically. Was he tense, gripping the arm rests in frustration, doing anything noticeable to how he was feeling.
Other than that I really enjoyed this! I hope this didn't sound too mean.
Lots of Hugs -
Kyle :)

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Review #18, by HufflePuff_BlitzStay With Me: I

12th July 2015:
Sam I think you might of turned me into a banshee because I am screaming so much right now. I love this so so so so much. It is the most beautiful thing ever. So worth the wait.
This chapter had everything wonderful in it. Especially theo. I like me some theo.
obviously I knew it was coming. But for some reason I thought Seamus and dean were dating. Or am I just trying to come up with more Seamus fantasies.
But anyways. I loved this so much Sam. Even though I requested it you are the most awesometastic person in all the lands. May your quill ever be sharp and your inspiration flow like a keg of mead.
Okay. This is why I can't read this after watching GoT. But seriously you rock.

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Review #19, by HufflePuff_BlitzLove Potion Number Dead: [ii] - the team of aurors

12th June 2015:
Hufflepuff, House cup 2015
Hello again! that sounds like such a hectic work enviroment. I would go crazy. For one I would bring a book or two and figure out a way to improve the coffee machine, obliterate that mold, and idk, make the place seem happy.
Albus, he's so adorable. I love him already.
Neat chapter, excited for the next one to come out!

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Review #20, by HufflePuff_BlitzLove Potion Number Dead: [i] in which i escape the torture

12th June 2015:
Hufflepuff, House Cup 2015
Hello! me again! That cow. I had to stop reading for a moment because that was hilarious! My cat gave me a weird look because of my laughing.
But I enjoyed this chapter, I don't usually enjoy malfoy stories but the one you portrayed is a pretty cool bloke. and I love the puns. I don't get why people hate puns so much. I think their quite epic really.
anyways neat chapter, cannot wait to read the next :)

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Review #21, by HufflePuff_BlitzLove Potion Number Dead: a prologue of sorts

12th June 2015:
Howdy Hey! House Cup 2015 - Hufflepuff
So this is interesting, something mysterious lurking in the yard. and the wife knows something, but she aint saying anything. most interesting.
At first I thought this guy was a muggle, but then he said healer, so I'm thinking he is a wizard, but still not entirely sure.
To be honest my curiosity is caught and I cannot wait to start the next chapter.
-Kyle the hufflepuff

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Review #22, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Story of Nicolae: The Catalonian Fireball

12th June 2015:
Hufflepuff, house cup 2015
hey there! Charlie, you silly egg, why didn't you consult with the infirmary! Blarg! But I'm sure he will work it out... maybe with Erik :)
Some mistakes I saw in this chapter that would be an easy fix (sorry I don't enjoy pointing out mistakes but I know it usally helps)
Lunch was generally busy was quick, i don't know if that second was is supposed to be an and or if the was quick is to be elliminated.
when he head bounding steps, i think that should be heard.
patted him oo his back, I'm thinking that should be on.
the egg of the apparation bubble, from my view point i think the apparation bubble is the not so make sense part. since they were dealing with the egg.
Hope those suggestions help!

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Review #23, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Story of Nicolae: The Antipodean Opaleye

12th June 2015:
Hufflepuff, 2015 House Cup
Hey! Me again! and look charlie is to the rescue! So i'm taking a wild guess here, but I'm guessing that Nicolae is the Dragon that will hatch? thats cool if it is, because I thought nicolae was a person that charlie got together with, but if nicolae is the dragon than I am all for team Cherik.
Erik is so adorable and head cannonly sexy. And he seemed so flirty with Charlie. Common charlie man up and ask that dude out!
overall, Great chapter!
-Kyle :)

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Review #24, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Story of Nicolae: The Japanese Lava-Swimmer

12th June 2015:
Hello! Hufflepuff, House Cup 2015
Hi again! No! how could a dragon abandon its baby... that monster! But that Tree climber was adorable, I'll take three.
and that scene where the other egg hatched, awesome. Kind of reminds me of Jurassic park, but with dragons, and people who actually know how to deal with the creatures.
But back to the sad egg, how could that dragon leave the egg. it makes me so mad!
but charlie will handle it, cause charlie is awesome.
Charlie would make a good mama Dragon.

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Review #25, by HufflePuff_BlitzThe Story of Nicolae: The Tuatarian Greybeard

11th June 2015:
Bonjour! Hufflepuff, House Cup 2015
Hey! I really liked this chapter. and poor charlie, with his hangover. but he likes blokes, so muhahaha. I like me a good character that likes blokes.
let me just be a little childish.. haha fairybum.
okay more grown up now... I would have hated the class with Fairybum, I need written info, and I'm dreadful at taking notes so I would be as nasty as a blast-ended screwt in that class.
I like Andy, She's so cool. I'm also really starting to enjoy Charlie more and more and more. I imagine Mrs. Weasley would be like that, and that would make me so bloomin mad.
but anyways can't wait to start the next chapter.
:) - Kyle

Author's Response: Hey! This response is horribly late, which I'm very sorry about.

Fairybum was one of those things that just sort of came out during Nano. It was meant to be a filler, but my characters reacted to it so it stuck!

Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter:)


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