TWO UPDATES IN ONE DAY. VICTORY IS MINE!
ohh you have no idea how glad i was that this was updated! i've been studying all day for my last and final exam, and boy did i need a break! I love the plot development, and this chapter in particular was great! i loved the plan and the whole scene in the dorm. Ally's mental commentary is fabulous! sometimes i can't express how much i love this story. it's perfect.
LOVE LOVE LOVE! UPDATE AGAIN!
ps--watch your spelling/editing-- i noticed a few typos. (nothing major)Author's Response: Oh my god hahah thank you! And I know the queue was like 0 hours at one point so I thought I'd take advantage of it! I didn't get chance to pre read these I was too excited about uploading them but I'll go back through and change them eventually haha I'm so glad you like the story and thank so you so much for reviewing!!! Report Review
oh the drama!
so many plot twists and conflicts and random outbursts! excited to see where you take this!Author's Response: Draaammaaa! :P
I think my favourite part of that was the random outburts XD Thanks for the review! x Report Review
Aww James likes Ally Author's Response: That obvious? Hahah Report Review
i clapped like a deranged monkey upon seeing that this was updated!
What a lovely way to spend a study break. These exams are killer, man.
Loved it, as usual.
xoxo Jils (who is going to spend the remainder of her break from honors geometry to check out your new story... (: )Author's Response: That makes me happy haha and the next chapter is awaiting validation too so you can clap like a deranged monkey again ahhah and you're right they are I have my last one today so after that I'll be a 100% committed to finishing this story hahah thank you for reviewing!! :-) Report Review
my gosh, Jane's got to stop fainting all the time!
Love this, btdubs
-Jilly Report Review
You know those days when you really don't want to talk to anybody? Well Jane has one of those days everyday, and I love it. She's very different from other OCs who seem so loud, witty and confident, and it will be interesting to read a story from the perspective of a wallflower like her. Can't wait to keep reading!
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I've been run over by the truck of feels... again. I swear, every time i read a story about the last night i start sobbing. I love James and Lily so much and they were perfect and they had a perfect family and it was all lost and i just CAN'T sometimes, okay?
Beautiful. Heartbreaking and Beautiful. Report Review
once again, love it. i just--- asdfghjkl can't really put into words what i love about this. i'll attempt with a list: (a failure of a list that is)
-Ally. sarcasm, social awkwardness, occasional insanity. just great. she exhibits the signature qualities of a Jilly.
-Phoenix= fire. ginger hair= fire. Phoenix is a firey, confident character (oh the symbolism.) (plus i can't spell phoenix. pheonix phoenix same thing)
-I used a tutoring plot bit in one of my ffs, so i'm eager to see if you're going to use it similarly to how i did...
- i wonder what's up with James and if he'll discover who Ally really is! (something tells me he will...)
-i love how they're keeping themselves completely anonymous and (oh my gosh when will the charade fall? what will ally do? ahhh suspense!) yeah.
- I haven't really elaborated on how much i love the whole band/music idea. it's like a high school band, hogwarts style, and it's just so different and perfect from any other ff or canon stuff. i can't believe that no one had adressed this idea before (that i've seen that is...) GENIUS. MORE PEOPLE NEED TO READ THIS!
-i love the band name- music is might, magic is might, hahaha play on words
-I'm excited to see how Dom will fare as the manager/ will she accept!?1 hmmm
- Only 1 problem-- for me, the three guys in the band are interchangeable characters who don't have their individuality defined just yet. that's not a huge deal or anything, but hopefully they'll develop more in the next few chapters!
(WOW THAT WAS SUPER LONG SORRY THAT YOU WASTED YOUR TIME READING THIS)
keep on writing,
JillyAuthor's Response: No that's absolutely fine! Honestly that review has made my day! I'm glad you're liking the story and don't worry if it wasn't for spell checker I wouldn't be able to spell Phoenix too haha. And I am trying to include the rest of the band as the story progresses it's just hard without going off on a complete tangent. You'll be happy to know the next chapter is written just waiting to upload it and thank you so much for reviewing!!! Report Review
wow! i really like this!
what a creative idea! can't wait to see where you're headed with this. i love the double persona element-- reminds me of hannah montana (in a good way haha)
I love that Ally (Al?) is so nerdy and Phoenix is a freakin rockstar. total opposites. and the Phoenix after the Order? awesome. i could totally see that happening.
Love love love! Update soon :)
Jilly Report Review
YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW LONG I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS! SO. FREAKING. LONG.
gosh, these two are perfect. this is one of my absolute favorite FFs. I think that the plot twist is interesting but it makes me sad that brad and taylor are getting separated from the rest! ah. maybe this is setting up some sort of epistlatory (i cant spell. or is this even a word?) sequel? i like those.
can't wait for more (THERE BETTER BE MORE OR I WILL FREAK OUT!)
JillyAuthor's Response: So glad that you like the story so much! So glad that you are good with the plot twist, but don't be too concerned about them being separated! There will be more!! Thanks for reviewing!! :) Report Review
hello again! jilly here!
so this is going to be a big huge marauders saga eh? i like it.
i really like aurelia's character already. and her name is pretty. she seems headstrong and determined to prove herself (perhaps like another fabulous gryffindor whos name may or may not rhyme with Bella... (: )
as for julius greene... well his name is greene like the color green, and aurelia thinks about turning people into pineapples which are foods, and he was good at potions... so i think he transfigured muggles into vegetables (green), cooked them in soup (food and potions) and ATE THEM (evil nasty azkaban deed)! BWAHAHA! my sherlock skills are incomparable!
anyway it's a good start and i'm excited to see where this is going! keep writing!
xoxo JillyAuthor's Response: JILLY!
I love the name Aurelia too ;-). She is VERY headstrong and VERY determined to prove herself, partly because of her Gryffy-ness, and partly because of her horrible background. (Go Ella and Aurelia!)
OHMYGODDRIC! How did you guess?
... no, sorry, that's not it ;-(
Thank you! Chappie Number 4 (this seems to be its official name) is in la queue.
And thank you so much for reviewing! Please keep on r/r ing.
Miss Moneypenny ;-) Report Review
i saw the that this was updated in my favorites and i was SO EXCITED!!! this is one of my absolute favorites atm, and you ended it so PERFECTLY. it was exactly how i wanted it to be!!! i was so glad that june and remus got together, and i love that it was ruby who told him to go after, and not james/sirius, bc that really shows that he's moved on from her. plus june and remus makes so much sense its impossible for it to go any other way.
your remus is just how i picture him, and i loved reading a story from his POV. except now i'm all sad that canon remus ends up with tonks instead of june (even though i love ronks but still... ):)
you should TOTALLY WRITE ANOTHER ONE!
wizard god yes! i would probably prefer a sequel since then you can just elaborate on the relationships and characters that you already have and that i already love. if i were writing a sequel to this i might write something centered on james/lily/dara (cliche as it would be) but yeah i'd do that because their conflict was left unresolved... (on purpose perhaps so you could write a sequel? hmmm)
just a random typo that i noticed-- in the para about sirius laughing in HoM, the word "figured" got all mangled and moved around.
GREAT JOB! THIS WAS AWESOME!!Author's Response: Oh my goodness, thank you so much! I am honestly grinning from ear to ear right now, this review really made my day! I am fairly certain I'm going to be posting a sequel - I've already started writing one, so look out for that!
Courtney:) Report Review
oh my gerbils.
that chapter was so dramalicious i screamed with excitement! i'm so excited for the last chapter! this story is short and sweet and i really like it!Author's Response: Thank you so much! This chapter was super fun to write!
Courtney:) Report Review
THis chapter's good! Bree's finally not ignoring him! yay! i can't wait for more chapters!!Author's Response: Thank you! :D Will update as soon as I finish the next chapter! Keep reviewing! :D Report Review
i love the idea of the enchanted journal and the whole "you can fall in love with them if you strip off their public image" thing! this is definitely not cliched and its different from the (millions of) jily stories i've read so far! i can't wait to see how this plays out! great job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you don't think it's cliche, because I was a little worried that the whole "see the /real/ James" thing was. Thank you!! Report Review
bwahahaha i'm highly amused by this. so amused that i am laughing without making any noise (you know that weird kind of laughing? yeah, that one). i'm glad that jess isn't afraid of what other people think and does whatever nuttiness she wants. lovely story.Author's Response: Mwhahaha. sorry. i wanted a cool laugh too.
i am very amused that you are amused by the amusing story. i am aquainted with such mentioned laugh, i always look like a frog when i attempt it though. :D Jess is quite fearless and im glad you like it :D thanks for reviewing m'dear.
till next time
lOony Report Review
i like it a lot! you definitely avoided the clichés (of which there are infinitely many) and i like the twist on the classic first-kiss-then-date story. keep up the good work!
(ps- this is your virtual [insert favorite baked good here] that you earned by r/r my story! thanks!!!)Author's Response: Thank you, you are ever so nice :)
I shall gladly take your offerings in the form of a brownie!! Report Review
REE IS LITERALLY ME. EXACTLY ME. SHE IS MY CLONE. okay, who are you and how did you get my DNA??? hahaha i LOVE THIS and have already favorited it (even though i don't usually do next gens) keep up the good work! Report Review
crying, dying, THIS WAS SO GOOD! i... can't really put into words how much i love this. (i tried several times and failed miserably) LOVE LOVE LOVE Report Review
i probably read WAY to many of these james/lily stories for my own good but they're all so wonderful and different! i like your story because the jumps through time really show you how much the relationship between the two of them has progressed. i look forward to new updates!Author's Response: Thank you so much! And trust me, the amount of time I spend reading James/Lily stories borders on pathetic. They're my favorite and I just love to write them, too. The next chapter is currently in progress! Report Review
excuse me while i go curl up in my sock drawer and cry. this is just so full of emotion and the future that never was is just SO SADAuthor's Response: Thank you for reading and I'm so happy you said that I was trying to convey a lot of emotion in this as possible. I thought about how they must have felt and all and I tried my very best to put it into words
thank you again.
~TOWRTW Report Review
i really like how this is a FRIENDSHIP story and not a ROMANCE! it shows that a boy and a girl really can be friends without dating! Report Review
ah its SO CUTE! i love it!Author's Response: Awww thanks :) Report Review
i really like this (and can see why it earned a dobby already) but i would like it more if mary's dialogue wasn't but in that accent. yes, i understand that she's scottish, but her lines are hard to read. overall, it's very good so far and congratulations on winning the award! you deserved it for all of this hard work!!!Author's Response: Ah, sorry about Mary's accent. The thing is that I wanted it to be in there, though perhaps I made it a little too strong. After 62 chapters, though, I'm not very keen on going back and changing it all. I'm told it gets easier to understand the more you read, so if you choose to continue you may find it reads better for you.
Thanks for the feedback!
cheers, Mel Report Review
i really like this! its sort of weird to think of the black sisters (especially bellatrix!!) as cute, happy, little children. i'm excited to see how you work in the whole bellatrix-becomes-an-evil-death-eater part! job well done!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading! :) Report Review
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