What... the actual fuck... did I just read?
I loved it though. Write more?Author's Response: you, my friend, just read an awesome fanfic.
and i shall do, shall shall.
SHALL I TELL YOU
till next time
lOony Report Review
I really like your story. I havent commented on the other chapters because I just started reading it.
But seriously? You ended it at a shitty moment. A shitty moment indeeedeee.
Um. Continue. Please?Author's Response: ahh, cliffhangers are quite shitty, are they not? muhaha, im glad you like my story, thanks for reviewing and i shall update soon ! (: Report Review
My mum just walked in on me rocking back and forth, crying. I don't know why, but at the end I just want Albus, Nick and Piper to die in some sort of great sacrifice. Then maybe they'll be remembered as hero's... if James and Al make up just casually (you know the deal, James pulls him out of class, they talk, Al starts to forgive him but then says it will "take him some time to forget") I'll shoot myself. As Albus dies James and Lily will cry beside his bruised and broken body, regreting all the evil they did to him. I've got it all set out in my head :D
Nick. Oh, Nick. I just want her to be happy. Will her suffering end soon?
I love this fanfic (it's probably my favourite of all HPF's)!
Byeee!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm not sure how to feel about you crying in a ball; part of me is humane and sad, but my sadistic writer inside is telling me this is the effect I want. So, I'm sorry you're crying, but I'm happy about it. :p
As for the sacrifice, that's not entirely out of the running. I can assure you, though, if/when there's any make up between Albus and James, it will be big. After everything that built up over the years, James pulling Albus out of class to 'talk' would result in a punch in the face from Albus. But remember this: Albus isn't completely innocent. None of the Slytherins are.
And, no, the suffering has just started. *cue evil cackle* Thank you so much for the lovely review, and I'm glad you like it!
Ellie Report Review
Basically one of the best stories I've read on HPFF... the writing reminds me of Those Meddling Kids by iPodapalooza on One Direction Fanfiction (don't judge me!!)
I have this picture in my head of Louis realising James is in love with Lemon; he tells her that he had seven children, and that they are all set for careers in quidditch. Then he'll storm up a staircase and tell James that he better appreciate Louis' generosity. I really want some sort of dramatic, angsty yet funny thing to happen... please update! I only started reading today but I'm hooked! Report Review
I have but one wish, and it is for the girls rooms to be disgusting.
Like, worse than the boys.
Please?Author's Response: It won't be THAT, but it won't be what the boys were hoping for, that's for sure.
Thanks! Report Review
This is so bloody dramatic!
Seriously. Emotional rollercoaster in the house.
Please update soon? I only started reading today and am already addicted... I've never read a "girl goes to school as a guy" book that's been so well-written; they normally go like this:
I am just a simple, plain, supermodel gorgeous genius that wants to go to a smart person school. But the ONLY smart person school is like in another country with, like, only guys there like yeah? So I'm just going to dress up as a dude because that makes sense! But like there's this guy who I'm making into a confused puddle because like he like-likes me but thinks I'm a boy! OMG but no w-w-worries ma bestie, everybody will forgive me for crossdressing in the end, because when I take my man shirt off you can suddenly see my enormous jugs (that were somehow taped up, despite that being like tots uncomfy) and they're all like "yep. He's a she. Lets let her stay here, and while we're at it, hows about nobody sues us for allowing a female child to live with hoardes of testosterone fueled males? And screw all that paperwork; it was like totally her destiny to be here. Right?"
Aannnyyyway, I really really like this story. 10/10 :DAuthor's Response: HAHAHA! I love your review! :P Especially the beginning: 'I am just a plain, simple, supermodel gorgeous genius'. That is soo the typical female protagonist. ;)
The next chapter is a bit less dramatic, more like a transition toward the Ball, and writingchapters like that always goes a bit slower than the action-packed chapters. :) I hope you'll like it.
Thank you! Report Review
THERE IS NO NEXT BUTTON.
I'M FREAKING CRYING MY EYES OUT, WAITING FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER.
AND THERE'S NO NEXT BUTTON.
UPDATE. THERE IS NO OTHER OPTION.
(please read this in a James Bond voice)Author's Response: That was a fabulous review. :) I thank you.
I know- I'm in the process of writing the next chapter. It won't disappoint, but maybe not in the way you wish. And because I'm feeling particularly evil, I will tell you this: it will end bittersweetly, but one of the two endings is a lot more heartbreaking ... and to be honest I'm leaning toward that one ...
Anyway, thank you for the amazing review!
Ellie Report Review
oh god this is brilliant! I haven't read anything quite like it, ever. Ginny hates James, and is such a lousy mother- genious! Well she doesn't hate him, but... you know? She kinda does :D
I think there should be a scene where all the kids get dropped off at Harrys work and he has to deal with them, and does Ginny have a job?
Awkward change between sugestion and question :S
byeee Report Review
this sounds hilarious ;)
Add another chapter though. I'm hoping that they fall in love (and, lets face it, they totally will) :) Report Review
So, who is she? I actually love S.H.I.E.L.D so much! Ans she's still in Hogwarts?
You better continue this, and an evil guy MUST break into Hogwarts with a robot (so she can kill it)!
Also, Iron Man. He must be a continuous character, and you CANNOT let him have a mental breakdown or show emotion... Tony Stark's to cool for that.Author's Response: Thank you! I'm not sure about bringing in Iron Man or other Avengers yet. If I do, it'll be a little later in x Report Review
I totally knew she was evil. I think Georgie (tehe) should punch her when she becomes popular, because Olive is mean. Yeah.
I used the word mean :)Author's Response: I don't know if "Georgie" has it in her ... haha Thanks for the review! Report Review
I don't know why, but this makes me excited. It's all fast paced and Hardocvengers. Is that it? Maybe Haravenocs. Harravendowho? I'm thinking Haravenocs, it looks the best.
Wait is there an actual name for a Harry Potter/Avengers/Doctor Who fandom? It's pretty random...
But annnyways, this is super duper pooper scooper-ing good!
Whoa. I am the Rhyme Lord of the Time Lord(s)!
Rawr. Yeah I'm gonna go now.
And update! I hate when people write freaking amazing stories and never update, even though I do it with every story I've ever written :)
Also, if/when Iron Man comes in, please don't make him serious. I read one the other day where he was all "we must save the world" and I was like "poop. This makes me think less of Tony!" Needless to say, Tony Stark/Iron Man is my favourite Avenger.
Actually, he's my favourite character of all time (excluding Neville Longbottom, because that kid just gets me).
Wait, I've gone off topic. Sorry. But yeah, Iron Man needs to be badass, not afraid to swear and (MOST IMPORTANTLY) have a lot of guns.
Like A LOT of guns. And the amazing supercalafragelistic suit- don't give me some weak, idiotic storyline where it got lost while he was boinking Pepper in space. The suit makes the man, young swan. And Tony has to be friends with Albus or James, because YOLO.
Plus, he has to exist. Don't let my senseless, "It's Three AM, There Is No Icecream And My 50% Grade Assignment Paper Is Due Tomorrow/Today But I Haven't Finished It", review get you turned of from him.
Nah, I could never feel that way about Starky, because Sherlock Holmes wears tweed.
I hate tweed! Still, props for R.D junior for managing to pull it off.
Oops, got sidetracked again. Anyways, to summarise, this is good and you should update it soon!
LOL if you'd skipped to the end you would have saved like seventeen hour of your life :D Report Review
A DANISH OF LIES!
That is all. Report Review
I was reading this in my hammock, in the outside place (being the nerd I am, this is a foreign and strange world) and, naturally, laughing a freaking lot.
Boobs. I love boobs. Like a shelf! They're really fun.
I said that out loud, to summarise what I'd just read, when suddenly...
My four year old GIRL neighbur (who has been watching me for some time, though I didn't notice) decides to repeat what I said.
Her father glared at me so I ran inside.
Oh, and I was wearing my dorothy the dinosaur onesie and a llama beanie. Guess I won't be getting babysitting duties anymore :(
LOL jokes, they knew I was weird waaay before this incident. Like they'd let me take care of the cutie that is their daughter.
But I hope they forget about it soon, and don't tell my parents. That would be an awkward conversation.
Also, when you update next she should count her shoes, and make sure you put lots of brand references in! Shopping is my thing, too :) Report Review
I have no idea why, but this made me cry.
I'm sitting here, in my room, crying and wondering why I have no life :)
It's just, Neville never was as special or loved as Harry. He was a side-character, destined for greatness but not until it wouldnt be noticed. And his parents weren't dead, but hardly parents at all; he was both better and worse off than Harry.
My mum just walked in, and I had to explain why I'm crying. She gave me this look like, "how did I raise this disgrace to humanity", but I don't care. You should write more stories like this one, it's sooo good! Report Review
I reeeally like this :D
I haven't read too many stories about the Ravenclaw family that wasn't centered around Rowena or her first daughter. Seeing a distant, mysterious relative is different and interesting.
Good plot, excellent grammar. When are you updating next?Author's Response: Thanks!! I've got the next chapter written ... just going over it now :) Report Review
This is reallly good :)
It would be interesting to have a chapter examining why she likes to dance, and who she is... How does she feel about her mums death, her family and school? You have skimmed the surface, so I think that will come in future chapters.
When are you going to update? It's really interesting despite the dullness of my review. Honestly I'm not this critical and boring most of the time...
The grammar and spelling was all really good, and I like the overall plot :DAuthor's Response: Hello!
Sorry if i seem a little over excited, it's just you're my first review on my first fic and I'm a little bit happy right now!!
If I'm honest, I got bored with this story and started on another but I'm gonna make another go of it now.
Thanks for your kind words!
Rosie :) Report Review
This... I just... It's sensational.
Please, write a novel about her!Author's Response: Junebug's the fangirl who's living her dream xD I've had a few requests for an expansion, but I never planned on one. It would be utter crack, natch. Report Review
Just as a general, I don't like parodys.
They're not Sirius enough (tehehe) and have no substance.
This, however, is an exception. Because of one amazing moment...
Draco's affair with himself. Made me fall of my chair and reread this three times. Hilarious!
You should do more parodys.Author's Response: Bahaha, I'm glad Draco has pulled you in 8D Of all the hoopla over Draco's love interests, none will ever hold a candle to himself. Here's to narcissism! Report Review
They're so serious, but in a cute six-month-relationship kind of way. And I completely agree with what you said in chapter one... fluff, fluff, more fluff :D
You haven't updated in sooo long!Author's Response: Hee, there's really nothing /but/ fluff. Play's a bit on the backburner, since I've got other WIPs. I write more of it when I'm feeling fluffy. I will try to keep it slated in the future ^__^ Report Review
This has a unique storyline, pleasant characters and a good overall atmosphere.
There are no speech marks! Speech marks are essential to all punctuation ("they look like this") and help to show readers when a person is talking. You can't not have them.
Go over, edit and repeat. I'm going to check and see if your other chapters have them, but if not I can't continue reading this.
Luckily, the spelling and paragraph structure is well done, which makes it relatively enjoyable to read.
Byeee Report Review
First of all, this is really good.
But you need to do some major editing. Though there are no spelling mistakes (that I've noticed) you tend to write longer sentences that don't make sense.
Also, the gaps between each paragraph are huge. The story is about 1/4 of the sidebar length, but you add heaps by unnecessary spacing. This annoys the Hades out of me.
Overall, however, the plot is interesting and the characters memorable. Has Aurora spoken to the boys since first year? I recall you saying that she was a social recluse...
It's good enough to make me read each new chapter, but edit so that you don't just ramble on about insignificant nonsense (an example of this would be in the first chapter when you explained the appearance of angels and gods. Too much detail, didn't really make sense).
Byeee Report Review
I looove this!
Audrey isn't a total bore for once, and that's encouraging.
I think Ginny is pregnant too. And at some point during her pregnancy, Audrey will leave Percy... but no worries their love will grow.
Why did they break up? Audrey clearly initiated the split, as Perce still loves her.
Update!!! I really want to know what the Wotter dinner will be like :) Report Review
I was laughing so hard... It shouldn't be funny, but it is.
And tantrum much? Then he's just so sad that Lilly hates him!!
You should write a short story where this scene happens, just a bit more drawn out.
Byeee Report Review
Fred is so sweet! Although I question how many times he's "fallen in love"... can't he meet a nice, available dead girl and settle down?
Also, do the students know about him being a ghost? I don't think they should, because then there can be a huge reunion thing at the end where he talks to Fred the second and George. Author's Response: He will meet a nice dead girl soon I promise :)
He just has some issues to contend with first :P
You will find out more in the second chapter which will hopefully be posted soonish.
Thank you so much for your lovely review :) Report Review
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