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Review #1, by Pheonix PotioneerIn the Mourning: Epilogue

6th March 2018:
Wow, I didn't realize I needed to cry today. Thanks for breaking my heart. It's appreciated.

You do a great job, in this chapter especially, of showing that after DH it wasn't "happily ever after". They struggled. Harry struggled, Ginny struggled. Things got better, yes, but life is still hard.

Also, the relationship between Harry and Professor McGonogall was just beautiful. I loved them together and wished this had actually happened in the book. A+

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Review #2, by Pheonix PotioneerAll the truth about Jimmy Portman: Of baby dragons and rare pink elephants

18th January 2018:
AH Jimmy officially knows! I'm sure he'll want to know exactly what Dorea knows but... squee! To be honest, I'm surprised that Dorea is taking it so calmly. If I just found out that I had a secret brother i would be freaking out.

But yeah, everything's just so complicated. Dorea's got it right. Peter is a good father now, and Jimmy/Harry loves him, so seeing them break up as a family would be heartbreaking. Not to mention that if he lives with the Potters it would be weird and he'd have to adjust and his dad might be in prison... and now Remus is involved too... Yeah. It's crazy.

Love the story, love all the twists, keep it up!

Author's Response: Hey, Claudia! Thank you so much again for this lovely review, and sorry if I'm replying so late!

Yes, Jimmy knows. And drama is coming (not that it wasn't there already... :P)

Ah, yes, Dorea is taking everything rather calmly, but that's just how she is, you know? She's very reflective and with a fervid imagination and a great disposition to accept just about anything (I'm going to sort her in Ravenclaw, if I ever get to write her sorting... imagine her father's reaction... :P)

It's very complicated, yes, and a lot of people's feelings (and not just that) are at stake. I think you summarized it pretty well...

Hopefully it won't take too long before next chapter, but I'm not sure how long it'll take... I want to finish the story by the end of the year, though. It's one of my new year's resolutions. :)

Thank you so much again for reading and letting me know your thoughts! Receiving this review really made me smile!

Much love,

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Review #3, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Pawn in the Game.: Returning to School.

16th December 2017:
I agree with Albus that Ginny shouldn't really be comparing James to Albus when they get into arguments. I think it just makes it worse.

Oh goodness, I wonder what James stole from his dad's room. Nothing good. Maybe it was the Marauder's Map? I don't remember whether James has obtained the map yet or not in this series.

I don't blame Lily for not wanting to sit with Albus. The train ride to school is when a lot of new friendships are formed, and I'm sure Lily wouldn't want to feel left out of that because she sat with her brother. Albus's worry is sweet though.

I was right! James stole the Marauder's Map! Ha!

Albus getting so worried over Lily is sweet, but honestly Albus, she's eleven. She can handle herself. Lily is a big girl now.

Lily's in Gryfiindor! I was half-hoping she'd join Albus in Ravenclaw.

That's so sad that Molly was upset over being in Hufflepuff. I kind of wish I could comfort her. I'm sure she'll adjust soon enough, but still...

Albus cares so much. It's adorable.

Great chapter, as usual! I know you haven't updated in a pretty long time, but I totally understand seeming how I've done the same thing myself. I've been in your position.

Author's Response: Yup, comparing kids is never a good idea.

And you were absolutely right about the Marauder's Map. It's going to play quite a part in this story if it ever gets completed.

My characters are really not cooperating in this story. If they start, I'll carry on.

Thanks so much for the review. I always love to hear your views.

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Review #4, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Pawn in the Game.: At the Warlock's Court Hotel.

16th December 2017:
Throwing a PARTY for good O.W.L. results? That sounds a bit like Percy to be honest, but is also way overboard. Even when I would get straight A's at school I would tell my parents and nobody else. I was always a bit embarrassed. Even just a "congrats" would embarrass me, so if I was thrown a party... I don't know what I would do, but I certainly wouldn't be happy.

Aw, that's sad that Lily's getting so mad at her mom. I don't really like to see her angry.

Lucy is a little embarrassed. I would be too, if I were her. I feel a bit bad for her.

Dominique might get to play for the Arrows! Yay!

I love George's line of, "Sorry we're late, I just couldn't stand the thought of listening to Percy pontificate for any longer than necessary." George Weasley for the win. I glad that he tried to make everyone else who didn't get great grades not feel as bad.

Honestly, I am kind of getting sick of Ginny's snide comments in public about James. Like the "hear that James" when Bill mentions that everyone should do their best. I'm not saying that James's attitude is justified, I'm just saying that Ginny is probably making it worse. I wish Ginny would look closer into why her son is misbehaving because then she might understand his behavior.

Author's Response: Yeah, Percy probably is going overboard (hardly be Percy if he didn't). I got a CD and obviously cards when I got my Junior Cert. results and we got the day off school. It's sort of a tradition (if that is quite the right word) for kids to go out drinking the night of their Junior Cert. results actually, although obviously they are underage, being mostly 15 or maybe 16.

But yeah, Percy is making an unnecessary deal out of it and embarrassing Lucy.

Lily's anger is going to be a feature of this story (if I can ever get my characters to cooperate so I can complete it). There's a bit of a story going on there.

And yup, George isn't going to miss a chance to get in a dig at Percy.

Yes, James seems to have kind of gotten the role of the "difficult kid" in the family and I agree, that's not going to improve things. It's only going to encourage him to continue playing that role.

Thanks again for the reviews.

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Review #5, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Pawn in the Game.: School Supplies.

16th December 2017:
Hey! So even though you wrote this chapter forever ago, and I could have sworn I read it (even though it's been forever so I sort of forgot what happened) I realized that I've never left a review on anything but Chapter One. So... here is a very belated review!

I was really glad that Albus asked what an exercise book was because I didn't know what it was either. And I'm a muggle. I realized that it was probably something you guys have across the pond, and sure enough, when I googled it I found out that what you guys call an exercise book is called a composition notebook in the U.S. I'm also not used to seeing a pencil eraser called a "rubber".

I can't wait to see what Albus thinks when he starts using a pencil. I've always wondered why wizards don't use pencils, because they are a lot easier than quills.

Aw, that's so sad that Lily doesn't want to wait for her dad to get her wand from Diagon Alley. In my headcanon a wizard getting their first wand is sort of like witnessing a baby's first words or a baby's first steps. It's not something that you want to miss.

Honestly, I kind of agree with James when he got annoyed with Ginny for saying, "We're hoping his results are a bit better than this year". Like, that's not something you want your mother to mention in public with you right there.

Willow and unicorn hair. That sounds like the perfect wand for Lily.

Huh, you guys call ballpoint pens "biro" across the pond? I actually had to google it to find out what a biro was. Always nice to learn something new!

Overall, nice learning about Diagon Alley. I really can't wait to see what you do in muggle studies classes.

Author's Response: Thank you so so much for the review. Great to see you posting again too. I've read back over the previous chapters of Albus Potter and the Chosen Four too to recap on anything I'd forgotten.

Actually, we call "excercise books" copies or copybooks in Ireland, but I know they don't use that in England. I think I might have had to check with an English friend that "exercise book" was still the term as a lot of the English books I've read are quite old.

We do use the terms "biro" and "rubber" though. Another one I argued (jokingly) with an English friend about was "parer". I actually don't know WHAT ye call them in America, but in England, they apparently call them "sharpeners". The things you use to make your pencil point sharp again when it breaks or becomes blunt.

And yeah, I would imagine a parent would like to see their child get his or her first wand. I LOVE your headcanon about it.

Thanks again for the review.

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Review #6, by Pheonix PotioneerActions Speak Louder than Words: Buildup: Scorpius POV

20th May 2016:
Just read the entire thing in one day, and it is brilliant! Keep up the great work!

Selenia's death was devestating! Never expected that.

So... I can't help but think that everyone is missing some big thing as to Stannous's intentions. For example, when he kidnapped Rose, I understand using crucio flagnate on her and releasing her to show that she is the girl in the prophecy. But if he thinks he is the father, why didn't he sexually assault her? Did he honestly care enough about Rose to wait until she was older? I don't understand it at all.

And then, when he came back two years later, he was really stupid. There were two other people there, just sleeping. If he really wanted to kidnap Rose again, he just needed to cast muffilato. He's not stupid- he successfully forged his Hogwarts application without anyone finding out, and he got past the wards to their apartment. So, I'm forced to conclude that the mistakes he made were actually deliberate. For example, when they attacked Rose and Scorpius at the hospital- clearly Stannous was smart enough to figure out that Rose was there, and which room she was in. But instead of going himself, he sent really low-key people. I know they said that Stannous was probably hoping to overwhelm them with numbers, but... come on. He had one shot at this. He shouldn't waste it.

So clearly Stannous is smart- and dumb. OR he is smart and plans these attacks to distract from someone else. Stannous has the best aurors trying to find him, so maybe he is trying to distract them from something else that might be going on. That's the only reason I can think of why he would be so stupid.

Speaking of the hospital, Rose's fall is also interesting. She trips over nothing (probably a trip jinx), falls and sees someone. Probably either Stannous or one of his lackeys. My guess is they hospitalized her in order to make it so she would forget her revelations about the case she was working on. She said she couldn't remember anything, so after Rose was unconscious he probably obliviated her. And then to cover up the noise of Rose falling her probably used muffilato, which is why James and the other people in the house didn't hear Rose fall.

And I don't think Selania died by mistake, with death eaters mistaking her for Rose. They look completely different! I think Selania was killed because she knew about Rose's revelations on the case. I think they killed Selania instead of Rose because it was easier, and it actually would have been harder to obliviate Selania since that would have to be done secretly. They could kill her openly. And of course, they didn't care to keep Selania alive. They need Rose alive because of the child.

And speaking of the case Rose was working on, we saw that the papers ended up back in the drawer- and we know that the papers were strewn all over the place when it fell. So that means that either James or another resident of the house put it away for her OR whoever insinuated Rose's fall, and who was working for Stannous, did it. My guess is the latter. But if they tripped Rose to make sure that she would never solve the case, then why wouldn't they steal the papers? Why would they leave it in the house? Unless they tripped Rose for an entirely different reason. Or that person is a member of a third party- someone else who knows about the prophecy, but isn't working for Stannous and has his own, independent motives.

But if we assume that the person who tripped Rose works for Stannous... then we have a HUGE problem. Actually, we have a huge problem either way. Because that person was standing in Grimmauld Place, and were not detected at all. That is BAD NEWS. That place is protected with a freaking Fidelius Charm! So if Stannous can get in there, then that is very very very bad. Of course, that does raise a bit if a mystery, because then wouldn't he just try to attack Rose there, instead of the hospital? My only explanation is that Stannous does not want to reveal that he can get into Grimmauld Place. I think he's saving that reveal for after Rose's child is born.

I think that part of Stannous's plan, now that Rose is pregnant, is that after the baby is born he will kidnap the child and raise it to be a dark wizard. After all, the prophecy says that the child will be super-powerful, so those with malicious intentions would probably want to use that child. If that is the case, then it's sort of like season 6 of Doctor Who: Amy is going to have a powerful timelord child, so she gets kidnapped by Madam Kovarian, she has the baby, and then the baby is kidnapped. So I feel like this is going to follow a similar plotline. And that makes me very scared for Rose, Scorpius, and their child.

So the events I am eagerly anticipating are:

a) Rose having her child. Hope it will be happy occasion and not riddled with negative situations (but it probably will). I also want to know whether the baby is a boy or girl. And can I just say that the current names they have chosen are terrible? I know, whole star constellation family tradition thing, but come on.

b) Rose possibly solving that case that she was SO close to finishing before she fell and lost her memory. I'm really curious as to why they were murdered, and who their names are.

c) Scorpius and Rose's wedding! I'm hoping, once again, that it will be an extremely happy occasion, and that death eaters don't show up (like they did during Bill and Fleur's wedding). But I doubt my wishes will be granted.

c) Finding out Stannous's endgame, even if it absolutely terrible. I just want to know.

Anyway, great story so far, and keep it up!

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Review #7, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Pawn in the Game.: Summer Days.

21st September 2015:
Derek isn't allowed to play violent video games? Sad. My brother has been playing them since like, the dawn of time. Violent video games seem pretty normal to me, but I suppose to someone like Albus it would be horrifying...

Cricket! The game almost no American has ever played. For some reason my middle school gym teacher taught us that game... and I haven't played it since. I've never even seen a single match. I hear it is pretty popular elsewhere in the world though.

Rugby is another one I've never played or watched. That's basically like American football, right, except with a different ball? I think? I know almost nothing about it.

So what film did they watch that Derek couldn't believe Albus had never seen? I'm curious.

NO! Albus tuned out of the conversation about the comparison of muggle and wizard law enforcement! That sounded so interesting! The limits of POV...

Hermione has a good point about the whole blood prejudice issue in Ireland being completely ignored, like it doesn't exist. That happens a lot with problems people don't want to address- especially discrimination.

LIly is starting this year! I wonder what house you'll put her in. Good chapter- can't wait to get back to Hogwarts!

And poor Hugo. :(

Author's Response: Well, he isn't allowed play R-rated, glorifying crime and graphic torture typed games. There's a wide range of "violent" when it comes to video games and while some of them are pretty much cartoon violence, others are really disturbing and promote some really harmful viewpoints.

Not many Irish people have played cricket either, though apparently our team does pretty well. No idea how, as it's not taught in schools or anything. I would imagine the team are mostly Anglo-Irish. I got myself into a bit of a quandary actually, because all I know about cricket is that you hit a ball with a bat.

Rugby has become pretty popular here in the last 10 or 15 years. Before that, it was pretty much a South Dublin and Limerick thing. South Dublin because it's sort of a private school thing and as for why Limerick, I have no idea. It's just always been popular there for some reason.

I had a bit of a debate with myself as to what attitudes should be like in Ireland, since the Irish Ministry will appear later in the series. I didn't want to make it more liberal than the British one, because it annoys me when writers bring in OCs from their own countries and have them so shocked because there's no prejudice in their countries. I wouldn't mind if their countries had DIFFERENT issues, but when they've none, it doesn't seem realistic. But if it were more prejudiced, it should have come up with Seamus and stuff. And what's the point of bringing in another country if issues are exactly the same? Then I thought, "well, why can't they do what Ireland ALWAYS does and just completely ignore the issue?"

And I'm getting a bit of fun out of parodying Irish attitudes.

And as for Lily's house, well, that should come up in chapter 4 or 5.

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Review #8, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: The Burned Boat

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

Hmmm, Albus bullying second years. Tsk tsk. I know, it wasn't really bullying, but you shouldn't be taking advantage of their fear.

Nice, Lindy! Burning the boat! Awesome! Hogwarts will have their hands full with those four.

So to replace Divination they chose... Alchemy (and Magical Theory, which should be interesting). Alchemy! Does that even work? Yeah, I get the Flamel did it with magic, but... sorry, alchemy just seems very sketchy. I mean, in order to change an ordinary metal into gold, you'd have to change the very atoms in the metal! You'd have to change all of them! Alchemy is impossible. The only way you can get gold is if there's a magic spell that will change the very atoms of a metal.

Internships! What a great idea! I wonder who will get what internships? I'm mostly curious as to what internship Matt will get. Albus will definitely do aurors, no doubt about it.

I love how Gemma says that she will not INTENTIONALLY set anything on fire. Nice, Gemma.

Author's Response: It wasn't the nicest thing for Albus to do, but his still a 16 year old boy. Hogwarts will definitely have its hands full with those four girls.

Haha, I didn't think much about it when I picked alchemy. It won't have a big focus in the story because Albus won't be taking it. Perhaps those who take it will just learn the history and the theory, not actually do it.

I had a lot of fun with the internships plot! I hope you enjoy it as you read. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #9, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: Gemma Brickston

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

Wow, Lily broke up with her boyfriend, but she's the one who's crying? Wow. And who is he anyway? I'm curious. To be honest, I'm surprised that Albus had snooped around and already found out. He snoops around and eavesdrops on everyone. Shouldn't he have figured it out by now? I guess he doesn't care about Lily's mysterious boyfriend than he does other things...

And Lily missed the train? Wow! Just... wow! She must care about him a lot. And she's the one who broke up with him! Maybe... there must have been a reason that she broke up with him like right before they left. And why she kept it a secret. Maybe she realized that nobody would ever approve of their relationship, so they had to break up before school started?

Gemma is such a wonderful name. Sorry, I just had to say that- the chapter is named after her. I actually wrote a story where the main character's name is Gemma.

Gemma, Samantha, Lindy, and Bethany. All troublemakers. Ugh, that sounds bad. If Albus, Matt, John, and Kaden are the modern Marauders, then Gemma, Samantha, Lindy, and Bethany will be the girl Marauders.

Wait, when Matt realized that Malfoy would be in most of their classes, Albus said, ďDepends on how he did on his O.W.L.s." But Albus knows! Malfoy told Albus, Kaden, and LIly in DIagon Alley, remember?

Author's Response: I don't think I even gave the boyfriend a name, since he never had any scenes in the fic... You're right that Al doesn't care much who Lily's mystery boyfriend was. He's got other things on his mind. Lily was very sad about breaking up with him, but she knew he was an idiot. She kept him a secret to avoid all the questions her family would have.

I love the name Gemma, too! It's so pretty. Yes, they are all very much troublemakers.

Oh, you're right! Sometimes I forget what I've written... Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #10, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: Balladanis's Visit

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

Poor, poor Matt. Suffering Legilimancy. Oh, and then the nightmares... I will repeat: poor, poor Matt. Let's just hope it works. Fingers crossed.

Ha ha, I find Hugo being bad at Quidditch amusing.

That's really nice of Hermione to not stop Albus and Matt from eavesdropping.

WOW Balladanis is like a double agent! Wow wow wow! I thought Balladanis's part was over. This is crazy! Balladanis's act at the Ministry is precisely that- an act! Frankly, I'm kind of surprised he's willing to play in politics. Before now, he never got involved in government, since he seems to just like catching dark creatures and dark wizards. Why is he getting so involved in government now? He never cared before. Why doesn't he just quit? I don't get it. Could he secretly be on the side of Laurentis and is pretending to be on Harry's side so he knows what is going on? Hmmm. Conspiracy theories are running amok in my head.

Great chapter! Really, really intriguing, especially the bit about Balladanis.

Author's Response: Matt does have an awful hard time with so many things. But he still tends to be very upbeat, hoping new things will help and such.

I really love writing about Hugo's awful Quidditch skills. It stands to reason that at least some of the Weasleys would be bad at Quidditch.

I find Balladanis a fascinating character, so I keep bringing him back. You're right that he never used to get sucked into politics, but now somehow he has. Perhaps he has his own agenda... Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #11, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: Occlumency

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

Oh wow, I forgot that this version of Scorpius hates Albus! I'm so used to reading fics where they are best friends, so them being enemies is kind of weird. Now everything Malfoy did third year (Trying to figure out that Matt was a werewolf) and fourth is coming back. Yeah, don't like this Malfoy very much.

Lily's comeback is BRILLIANT! I knew she was smart. She made Malfoy speechless! Ha! Why is he that speechless though? Maybe because it was unexpected? Oh no, does Malfoy have a crush on Lily? Is that why he bragged about getting 8 OWLs? Hope Lily doesn't go for Malfoy. She's smarter than that. Ugh, I've gone off topic again, haven't I?

Wow, Matt did REALLY WELL on his OWLs- as well as Albus- and he isn't at school a few days a month. Since he misses so much class, that many OWLs is actually very impressive. Congrats Matt! He could actually be a really really good student, I think, if he didn't miss a lot of school and have a lot of other things on his mind.

Oooh, Occlumency lessons! I wonder if that could help Matt? I've never thought that Occlumency could help him, but maybe it could! Hooray!

Author's Response: Yup, Scorpius hates Al in this! There really are a lot of fics where they're best friends. When I started this there weren't many next gen fics featuring the canon kids in general. Nope, this Scorpius is not cool.

I love writing Lily. She's so much fun. He's speechless because it was so unexpected. He doesn't know Lily well. Noo, he definitely doesn't have a crush on her. And even if he did, Lily would never go for him.

Matt did do really well! He studies a lot, knowing he'll need top marks when he looks for jobs. He makes up for his missed days with extra studying.

I find occlumency fascinating. Maybe it will help! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #12, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: Big News

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

James joining the circus would be amusing. Bit of a stretch though, unless he flew around on his broomstick and did stunts with his broomstick at the circus. I can actually see that.

So, ALbus said it was 8 o'clock in the morning, and he only got 6 hours of sleep, so... he didn't go to bed until two in the morning? ALBUS! Why did he do that! It's not like he was even doing anything really important, like homework, is it? Wow. I've turned into his mom.

Good for Gerogia! Talking sense into James! She came up with some very good arguments to get him out of that mess.

Hmm, so Harry won't be an auror anymore. I must admit, that makes sense. With the horrible hag Laurentis minister and the stupid Johnson as head auror, work must be extremely frustrating for Harry. And one thing that my parents always told me is that if you don't like your job, quit it. I doubt a job as an auror in the present climate is probably making Harry miserable, and a job at Hogwarts as DADA teacher for the great Kendrick is probably much better. Contrary to what everyone else might think, becoming a teacher would suit Harry well. I always thought that Harry would make a great teacher. The only problem is that in the original series his temper would have gotten in the way. Though I suppose much of that was stress over Voldemort.

Albus blushed when Marina looked at him! FINALLY Al is growing up and showing an interest in girls. It took him long enough.

Kaden, telling Lily that Albus snuck into Knockturn Alley last year is not cool. *groans* I just hope he doesn't turn into a Peter. I like him too much.

Author's Response: A wizard joining the there's a plot I've never once seen in the queue!

Haha, Albus is a teenage boy. He spends his summers staying up late and sleeping until the afternoon if he's able. Actually, I did that a lot in college when I only had night classes.

Georgia really was the best person to talk to James.

Nope, Harry's taking a break from being an Auror. He'll be able to help a lot more from the outside, without all the bureaucracy tying him down. Plus, he's a good teacher. I also think he'd make a great teacher! I imagine his temper got better after the series was over.

Haha, some people take a bit longer to be attracted to others. But this series still won't focus on romance.

Aw, Kaden won't turn into Peter. He's just got a big mouth. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #13, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: A Talk With James

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

Good idea for Rose to go find James- James has no quarrel with them, after all. And being "given space" might make him feel abandoned, so that's good.

The part where Rose eats the chicken is rather amusing. Nice job, Rose.

Hmmm, what does Harry want to tell the kids? Something important, obviously. Are they moving? That's what most "big announcements" are probably about. But why would they need to move? I can't think of a reason why. Hmmm. And then, Harry mentioned it being part of the Prophet. It must be something pretty big.

Why does Lily keep bringing up James? She's not stupid. She knows it's a sensitive topic.

Nice chapter! The tension builds...

Author's Response: Like usual, Rose's idea was good. James definitely needs people in his corner.

Moving doesn't seem to be a normal thing in the wizarding world, probably because with Apparition and Floo Powder, wizards can work anywhere. Most moves tend to be work related.

Occasionally Lily likes to start drama, and bringing up James tends to do that. You're right; she isn't stupid. She knows just what she's doing. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #14, by Pheonix PotioneerAlbus Potter and the Pureblood's Secret: Results

20th June 2015:
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015!

I find Rose's worrying over the OWLs amusing. If I have a big test I worry about it crazily like she does, but I do it before, not after. After, I'm kind of like "Oh well, it's done now. Yay!"

Ugh, family fights. Not good. I hope James doesn't stay mad at Harry and Ginny for too long... and that Harry and Ginny don't stay made at James for too long.

Good job Rose- nearly all Outstandings! Just slightly worse than Hermione's results. Albus's aren't too bad either- better than Harry's, I think. Albus did have a lot going on with Boone and everything, but at least he didn't have the threat of Voldemort looming as he took his exams. I'd say that Albus and Harry are roughly the same then, when it comes to schooling.

I feel so sorry for John's mom. She must be miserable, with her kids running around destroying things half the time!

Hmm. Very sad note this chapter left off on. James running away is not good.

Author's Response: I loved writing the bits about Rose worrying. I love Rose's character and writing her is so much fun. I tend to do my worrying after as well, which is why I like tests that give you the results straight away!

Family fights are not good...but they're good for the plot!

Of course Rose got nearly all Outstandings. She worried for nothing, like usual. Al did really, really well, too!

John's mum is mostly worn out. She loves her kids, but they're all troublemakers and her husband works so much.

James running away isn't good, but he's got a lot of people he can run to. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #15, by Pheonix PotioneerVisibly Scarred.: Flashback.

12th June 2015:
Hufflepuff, House Cup 2015 review!

Poor poor poor poor Lydia. She really shouldn't blame herself like that. None of this is her fault, none of it. She keeps blaming herself when she shouldn't... I suppose I can't talk. Something recently happened with my friend and I keep placing blame on myself, even though my rational side of my brain is yelling at me to stop it.

Wow, Lydia is now worried that even MOPSUS, the cat, doesn't like her. She does realize that cats have no idea that she is a werewolf, right?

I hope Mopsus helps her. Mopsus is so sweet, and a wonderful cat. I wish I had a cat. I love them.

By the way, nice naming choice for the cat. Mopsus. I looked it up because it sounded Latin, and apparently Mopsus is the name of a seer. I wonder why you chose that?

Wow, Merrickson sounds wonderful! Absolutely wonderful! *Gives Merickson a hug and some flowers* Good for her! It is nice to see so many people supportive of Lydia. Werewolves twenty years ago wouldn't have gotten that support. I know there are still problems, but this is huge progress! Between Blackburn's grandma, and the seventh years letter, and Teddy and Victoire, and Merrickson, and McGonagall, and Poppy... this is wonderful.

I think it would be wise if Blackburn didn't go into her office for a while. She definitely needs a psychologist or a psychiatrist.

I know the students see Merrickson as strict, but I like her. There's a lot of teachers who students complain as strict that are nice. Sure, they may be strict, but they are still nice.

Author's Response: Sorry about whatever happened with your friend. Hope it works (or worked) out OK.

Forgot to reply to your comment about Lydia's panic attack in the other review. I hope I've managed to show that reasonably accurately. I've never had a panic attack either, so I was rather relying on second hand information, but there's been a lot of discussion about mental health issues and stuff on the forums recently and there is a thread in the St. Mungo's section asking about how to portray anxiety disorders accurately, so I got a lot of information from that.

The name for the cat basically came from googling well-known historical women in the wizarding world and finding one that both sounded interesting and like a nice name for a cat. I thought Lydia WOULD call a cat after somebody interesting. Not sure that was really the name she'd choose, but I couldn't find anything that really fit.

And she's more worried that Mopsus wouldn't want to leave the home she's spent her life in than that she dislikes her, but yeah, basically she's just second-guessing herself one everything, poor girl. She really does need help.

Yes, Merrickson is a bit like McGonagall - strict, but kind behind it. There are teachers who are strict because they just don't want the students bothering them or they don't like kids much (I think Snape falls into this category - he likes the academic side of teaching more than he likes the students) and then there are the teachers who are strict because they really care about the students and want them to do well.

And of course, in the case of Merrickson, Rose and her friends were predisposed to dislike her, because they wanted Blackburn back.

And yes, I'm trying to show that the wizarding world is moving on, but of course, things aren't going to change overnight and I think it might be harder for werewolves to gain acceptance than people like squibs, because there IS an actual danger there. Only if they aren't careful, but it still is understandable that people'd feel anxious about a werewolf teaching their kids. But things are definitely improving and Lydia has a lot of opportunities Remus didn't. A lot of people do care about her. She just need to stop feeling so guilty about needing a bit of extra support.

Thank you so much for your reviews. It great to hear what people think of this, because these two chapters weren't easy to write. I read a lot about how panic attacks and flashbacks feel and look, but it still wasn't easy to write.

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Review #16, by Pheonix PotioneerVisibly Scarred.: Panic.

12th June 2015:
Hello! This review is for Hufflepuff, House Cup 2015.

Poor poor poor poor Lydia. I'm just going to say that all the time now.

That's really nice of Teddy and Victoire to invite Blackburn to go out with them. Wouldn't Blackburn kind of be like the third wheel though? That's probably awkward. And the fact that Blackburn use to teach Victoire. Thatís awkward too. Maybe they should have gone with more peopleÖ but then Blackburn would probably be even more stressed out about strangers. Thatís probably a bad idea, forget that.

I feel so sorry for Lydia about her parents. If my parents abandoned me- no matter what the circumstances- I think I would be psychologically broken forever.

Lydia should get a wizarding psychiatrist. It's clear that she has PTSD. She might be embarrassed, but I think it would really help her.

The Hopping Pot is such a cute name. Love it! If they truly enjoyed the story they would make it a wizarding and muggle pub (Because the Hopping Pot helps muggles), but that would probably lead to many problems. Wizards would probably forget to stop talking about magic when theyíre drunk. OrÖ how about itís an all-wizarding pub, but 5% of the profits goes towards a muggle charity? I wonder if any wizards have ever formed charities to help muggles. Like they go and fix things in Africa or something using magic, and they lie about how they did it. THat would be cool. Anyway, Iíve gotten REALLY off-topic from the point of the story.

It's very interesting to see what a panic attack is like in the person's head. I don't really have them, so i donít know what itís like. If Iím irrational scared, I have a raised pulse and subtle shaking, but thatís it.

I feel so bad for LydiaÖ once again, I must say poor poor poor poor poor poor Lydia.

Author's Response: Yeah, poor Lydia. She really DOES have a lot of problems, doesn't she? Her parents' reaction probably played a large part in how she feels about her condition and about herself. If even her parents can't accept it...

And yes, Lydia DEFINITELY suffers from PTSD. I answered an online quiz as her once. It had a scale of 0-10: PTSD unlikely, 11-13: possible, 14+: likely and she got a result of 22. Twice what would have suggested she might have it.

My interpretation though is that the wizarding world is sort of behind when it comes to mental health issues, mainly judging by things like the locked ward and the way people are divided between those who think Harry is telling the truth and those who are laughing at him or condemning him in Order of the Phoenix. Not one person thinks, "this kid is apparently hallucinating about the guy who killed his parents returning and killing his friend in front of him. Maybe he needs some kind of help." Now, this is partly because most of those who cared about him believed him, but still, imagine if a national paper started openly mocking a teenager for being traumatised. Really insensitive!

My feeling is that the wizarding world has more effective relief for the immediate symptoms of mental health problems, like calming draughts and stuff, so that sort of gives them less of an incentive to work on dealing with the issues permanently. Like everybody thought Ginny was fine at the end of Chamber of Secrets after she'd been given a few potions and stuff, but her reaction to the Dementors in the following book and her comment to Harry in his fifth year kind of imply she was finding things more difficult than anybody realised.

And yeah, I think the whole thing with Teddy and Victoire might be awkward, but I think Victoire might be a bit uncomfortable with the idea of Teddy and Lydia going out without her. And she certainly needs her friends.

I've gone out a few times with my friend and her husband, without any awkwardness, but yeah, this is a little more complicated.

And yes, I DEFINITELY think some wizards would help Muggles. I mean, there must be wizards living in places suffering famine and drought and all and I can't imagine Muggleborns letting their families starve without intervening. Like in World War II, when Belfast was bombed, they called Dublin for assistance and, even though it was TECHNICALLY a breach of neutrality, de Valera ordered every available resource be sent to Belfast immediately. Some things you just can't sit back and watch happen, even if the rules say you should.

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Review #17, by Pheonix PotioneerVisibly Scarred.: Fear.

6th May 2015:
The moment Lydia said that sse was in the corridors of Hogwarts I knew it must be a dream, because you said this story would just go until she came back to Hogwarts. If I hadn't known; however, I would have thought it was a dream once she mentions her claws growing on her. I would have believed that the students had shouted, "IT'S THE WEREWOLF!"

Lydia seems like such a little girl in this chapter... yet in Rise of the A.W.L. she seemed like an adult despite her suffering. I guess she just composes herself for the students- after all, if they saw Lydia like this, they'd feel no protection.

When Lydia's grandmother is talking, she says, "Isn't that what grandmothers are for." It should be a question mark, not a period.

I like Blackburn's reaction when Hermione comes. She totally freaks out. I find it kind of amusing.

Mopsus is coming to Hogwarts! I wonder if Rose or Albus will ever come across Mopsus in their later years.

Very insightful chapter. Poor poor poor poor poor poor poor poor Blackburn.

Author's Response: Yeah, it occurred to me afterwards that my reply to that review had sort of given away the fact that the beginning of this chapter wasn't exactly reality. And yes, I phrased that comment by the students in such a way that it allowed for it to be interpreted as just an insult.

And yes, when I was writing this chapter, I was thinking, "gosh, she's TOTALLY reverted to childhood here." I think she is somewhat immature/young for her age anyway. Perhaps not in the usual way one means somebody is immature, because she is very responsible and stuff, but she's really lacking in confidence and looks to people like McGonagall and her grandmother for affirmation about what she's doing. She sort of manages to hold it together when she's teaching, but at this point, it's just all been a bit much.

That mistake has been rectified. Thanks for point it out.

I don't know if Albus or Rose will come across Mopsus; they might. Leonore was insisting I give Blackburn a kitty, to make her feel a little better. So I did.

The idea of the head of the Department of Magical Law Enforcement coming to your door would be a little intimidating I think. Do ye have some version of a Minister for Justice? I'm guessing it'd be a little like that. She should have guessed it was related to Hermione's campaign for increased werewolf rights, but she's not exactly thinking very straight at this point. And she's still terrified there'll be some kind of further consequences to what happened.

Yeah, poor Blackburn.

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Review #18, by Pheonix PotioneerVisibly Scarred.: Concern.

4th May 2015:
I can totally sympathize with Blackburn barely being able to stand. I was sick a few weeks ago to the point that I could barely lift my head off the pillow without getting a massive headache. I know that's what Blackburn had, but I know the feeling. Just standing up to go to the bathroom was agony.

Poor poor poor poor poor poor Blackburn. I'll probably end up saying that every chapter now.

Wow, so now we actually get to read the seventh year's letter! That is so heartwarming, and so is Blackburn's reply. I was smiling like a maniac at that part, which probably isn't a good thing since I'm in a room with a lot of other people. Oh well.

Yeah, I think seventh years can handle her first name. The less of an age gap between the teachers and students, the less of a strictly teacher-student relationship there is. One time I was in a roomful of my teachers and it was wonderful listening to them gossip like normal people.

I wonder what Blackburn will think when she gets Angie's sugar quills.

Author's Response: Aw, sorry to hear you were sick recently. That's never fun, particularly when you feel that bad. Hope you're all right now.

One of the things that made me want to write this story was those letters, along with the night she, Teddy and Victoire go out for a drink. I had to plan more or less what they said, so that I could refer to them and I kind of wanted to write them out properly.

And yeah, the 7th years are only about 7 or 8 years younger than Blackburn, so the relationship there isn't going to be as formal as that between a 40 year old teacher and an 11 year old. I wanted to give her a nice 7th year class, since they are old enough either to be really supportive or to be really hurtful, if they were mean.

Thanks so much for the reviews.

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Review #19, by Pheonix PotioneerVisibly Scarred.: Pain

4th May 2015:
Poor poor poor poor poor Lydia. STOP HURTING HER! You never listen to me when I say that! Is it really too difficult of a command?

I like how Blackburn doesn't explicitly say that the Wolfsbane failed until later- it just says the word it with italics.

Wow, on the day that Rose saw Blackburn I didn't know Blackburn was actually supposed to be in the hospital wing. Interesting insight.

That conversation that Blackburn had with McGonagall had Rose and Albus eavesdropping on them, yes? I'm glad they didn't suspect anything.

McGonagall and Madam Pomfrey are wonderful. (I feel weird calling them Minerva and Poppy. It's as if they were my own teachers.)

Just out of curiosity, how long are you planning to make this? And will you finish this and then start The Pawn of the Game or do both at the same time?

Nice chapter! I got the impression that Blackburn is very miserable, so if that is what you were aiming for you succeeded.

Author's Response: This story will probably be about five chapters long, possibly six. I'm only planning on going as far as her return to Hogwarts. I'm going to finish this and then start The Pawn in the Game. I expect to finish it in about another month, so it's easier get it done and then move on.

Yes, that is the conversation Rose and Albus overheard and yes, they were lucky not to be overheard. McGonagall would NOT be happy. And I think Lydia would be embarrassed and upset at the thought of being overheard. She wouldn't be annoying with them, but she might be hurt.

There were some hints about the fact she wasn't supposed to be working that day, but they were subtle when I was writing from Rose's point of view. They did overhear McGonagall saying Madame Pomfrey hadn't expected her to return to work that soon and that she was in no fit state to be teaching, but it wasn't very specific.

I find it difficult to think of McGonagall and Madame Pomfrey by their first names too. I keep tying their proper titles, then realising Lydia wouldn't think of them that way after working with them for a year and a half. In chapter three, it gets MORE fun, because Hermione appears and I have to remember that Lydia'd think of her as an important Ministry official and CERTAINLY WOULDN'T use her first name.

I really am cruel to her, aren't I? Poor girl.

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Review #20, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Rise of the A.W.L.: The Midnight Feast.

4th May 2015:
Last chapter! Permission to SQUEE! (That last part was a Dcotor Who reference.)

Nathan worries about EVERYTHING. With good reason, but he still worries a lot. Nathan and Albus are both big worriers.

Ha ha, very true that Slughorn probably didn't care much about the exams. I have some teachers that are like that.

I wonder what house Lily and Hugo will be in? I'm curious. Will you go with the traditional Gryffindor, or something else?

Of course the Ravenclaws would decide not to get into any trouble whatsoever. Smart, but it wouldn't be very fun. Though Ravenclaws are known for being smart, so that makes sense.

I never thought that Angie would be much of a troublemaker. She seems very eager for the midnight feast to be somewhere forbidden.

The reason it feels like a boarding school story is because it is a boarding school story! Hogwarts is a boarding school. I suppose Angie doesn't realize that she's in a story, since she's a fictional character, but she is!

Hmmm, despite the fact that Dora seems to hate most of the Ravenclaws, she still came to the midnight feast. I wonder why. Does she want to be friends with some of them, and she refuses to admit it?

Ravenclaw won the cup! Hooray! Hufflepuff should win next year.

I love the conclusion: saying goodbye to Professor Blackburn. Awesome.

Rise of the A.W.L. is over! Congratulations!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review, and all the reviews you've give me actually. I love hearing your thoughts.

Yeah, Nathan does worry a lot and that probably makes his awkwardness worse.

I wouldn't say Angie is exactly a troublemaker, but she does like a laugh and to take the odd risk.

Yeah, Dora doesn't want to be left out, even though she acts like she doesn't like or care about anybody. Interesting observation. Dora isn't exactly the world's happiest person.

I wanted to give some indication that Blackburn was beginning to recover. Of course, it's not going to happen overnight, and she'll probably always have some issues to deal with, but the fact that the school year is coming to an end and she has a few months to relax, combined with the knowledge her job is safe and knowing what happened to the Wolfsbane potion is helping her relax a little and start coming to terms with what has happened to her.

Hufflepuff might win the following year. You'll have to wait and see.

Same with the houses the younger kids are in. All will be revealed in the fullness of time.

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Review #21, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Rise of the A.W.L.: New Legislation.

26th April 2015:
Teddy! I don't think we see nearly enough of Teddy. Well, I don't have much of him in my stories either, so I suppose I can't talk. But still, you should include him more, simply because i like him.

Wow, it's chapters like this that your knowledge of politics shines through. You have a good point about the whole "what to charge Fairfax with" sort of thing. Nobody really thinks about that much, well, at least i don't. It's sort of a "he did a crime, he'll get a trial, and probably go to jail" sort of thing. It's easy to forget that it's more complicated than that.

Wow, I keep forgetting that Rose is smart sometimes. She has a good point about Fairfax's whole motives thing. Unlike Harry, she doesn't stop at "the culprit is caught, hooray!" sort of thing. She evaluates everything afterwards, and thinks, unlike Harry, who seems to not like thinking. Rose would have been really handy back then. I suppose they had Hermione too, but Rose seems to think a bit more about things like that Hermione... yet, Hermione doesn't have as much of a temper as Rose does... so I suppose Hermione is a little better...

I didn't even think about the possibility of using Ministry potions! Lydia only stayed with Fairfax since she trusted him so much! Oh, that makes everything much more terrible! Poor, poor, poor Blackburn! STOP TORTURING BLACKBURN. I need to start a campaign against you, with STOP TORTURING BLACKBURN as my slogan. How about I take over the series, and Blackburn is cured of lycanthropy, wiped of her anxieties, and owns a private island in the tropics and is really rich. That sounds like a wonderful idea.

I wonder what Teddy was talking to Blackburn about. Whatever it was, it must be something that Hermione wasn't allowed to overhear. I can't help remembering the Lydia-Teddy-Victoire love triangle. Did it have to do with that?

You were right, that was a very informative chapter. And only one left!

Author's Response: Thank you so so much for this review. I've read it SO many times already. I really shouldn't be this pleased to have people yell at me, but it's nice to feel people are invested in my characters.

I knew people would react to the idea that Fairfax basically manipulated Blackburn into continuing to use his potions. She is WAY too nice for her own good sometimes, and she sort of felt it would make him feel she was blaming him and that he might be hurt or offended if she said she'd prefer use Ministry provided ones. Of course, she's feeling pretty betrayed. Poor girl.

Lydia's problems aren't going to disappear quite THAT easily, but she will gradually begin to recover. Not sure about her having a private island. That reminds me a little too much of a certain politician.

I'd love to see how you would write a sequel about Blackburn though. *grins* I'm actually writing the "missing week" from her point of view at the moment, but that's certainly no more positive.

There's no real mystery to what she and Teddy were talking about. He was just expressing concern and having a chat with her. She probably got a bit emotional, mostly from the relief and he just thought she needed a friend.

The main reason Hermione didn't remain for it was just because Lydia doesn't know her that well and she's a Head of Department in the Ministry and a war hero and I think Lydia'd be somewhat intimidated by her. Not by anything she DOES, just in the sense of, "gosh, I'm talking to a woman hotly tipped as a possible next Minister for Magic and one of the people I learnt about in History of Magic when I was at school." That, and Hermione just wanted to talk to her daughter.

And yeah, it's hard to show too much of Teddy, as he's not at Hogwarts. And he is a fairly nice, and interesting, character. I think I portray him differently from a lot of people, but I'm kind of fond of my version.

Rose is different from Harry, but the circumstances are different too. Harry was dealing with people determined to kill him, whereas Rose is dealing with more ideological conflicts, so there is more to question.

Makes it less certain that the villains will be convicted too, as what happens isn't as serious.

And of course, the books weren't from Hermione's point of view, so we didn't see so much of what she thought about things. And yeah, Rose has quite a temper. *huggles her*

Yeah, just one chapter left and I think it's mostly fairly minor stuff - just the midnight feast and the exams and all. This is sort of the last revelation chapter.

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Review #22, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Ravenclaw versus Gryffindor.

26th April 2015:
Lucy does have a point that Rose seems overly-confident sometimes and Albus is not confident at all. Rose and Albus kind of equal themselves out in that respect. It makes them reasonable friends. After all, if Albus was confident like Rose, they would be butting heads and squabbling all the time.

Rose, Slughorn treats everything like a news story. You do have a point that he shouldn't, but if he isn't directly affected, that's how he treats everything.

Hey, why is Hufflepuff in last for everything? How about you swap Slytherin and Hufflepuff's positions so Hufflepuff beats Slytherin by 300 points instead? :(

Albus did an excellent job! I'm so proud of him. :) He deserves a medal and a gold star. Congratulations Ravenclaw!

Though, even after that, Albus is STILL doubting himself. Sigh. Rose really needs to donate some of her confidence.

A midnight feast? That sounds like a great idea! Bring it on!

Author's Response: Yeah, Rose and Albus go well together in one sense, but I think there are times they make each other worse, because his admiration for her makes her even more convinced she knows it all and having her to turn to makes him less likely to depend on his own judgement.

Hufflepuff isn't ALWAYS last. They came second in the House Cup in "The Writing on the Wall." It just so happened I needed to have Ravenclaw and Gryffindor fairly close and with Scorpius as Seeker, Slytherin were always going to win. Hufflepuff is still an awesome house.

The midnight feast is solely for my own amusement and because I can't help thinking Muggleborns would be sure to come up with the idea of having one.

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Really great to see you around again.

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Review #23, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Rise of the A.W.L.: Nott to Blame.

25th April 2015:
Dora had a point, that everything always revolves around the Potter's. But Slughorn did come out of retirement just to teach Harry, so Albus's idea that Slughorn might be back for Lily isn't too far-fetched.

I can understand Rose's annoyance with Professor Slughorn, but after so many years of teaching, exams probably don't seem as important to him anymore. But for the most part, I agree with Rose: Slughorn should be teaching!

Nott does raise some reasonably points- why would he try to set a werewolf loose? If I didn't have Rose's view butting in, and I was just an ordinary wizard lounging at home, I probably would have believed Nott.

Nott seems to be a very good speaker, and he gives good replies. It's not a surprise to me that he is the leader of the AWL.

NOW we finally know who hexed the memorial. That's finally revealed! I've been wondering about that for a while.

Or, I wonder if Dora is the one who hexed the memorial, and Nott said that Fairfax did it to cover Dora's tracks. After all, Fairfax was already guilty of one offense, why not make him guilty of two? I imagine that Nott is protective of his daughter, but I don't know. We've never actually seen them together- maybe that will change next year?

Felicity's mother seems to be the default concerned parent. There are PLENTY of parents like that in the world, who will sue the schools for a little thing and make sure there are a million rules implemented.

Flitwick has a good point about Fairfax's motivations of hexing the statue. It's clear that Flitwick has thought about this a lot. I suppose the staff has had many discussions about it when the students aren't around. I wonder what they say? That would be fun to find out.

Great chapter! The one advantage of reviewing this so late is that I can go right off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: *grins* I'm actually writing a story from Blackburn's point of view, covering the week or so after the Wolfsbane failed, at the moment. So there will be a little bit about what the staff think in that. It's obviously before they know who the villain is, but stuff like the conversation between Blackburn, McGonagall and Hermione about whether or not it was deliberately tampered with will come up.

And yeah, Dora does have some reason to feel resentful, doesn't she? After all, it's not her fault what her grandfather did, but people are going to judge her by it and people like Slughorn treat the Potter and Weasley children as if they are heroes just because of the families they were born into. It isn't fair. But she really isn't helping herself by her reactions. Scorpius suffers from people's preconceived ideas of "Death Eater families" too. Even though his father and grandfather weren't actually prosecuted, there is a lot of suspicion of them, and I'm not sure if Draco ever fully recovered from his experiences. I'm not sure watching people being tortured, being pretty much forced into attempting murder, spending two years in constant fear of your life and realising everything you've been brought up to believe in and support is really the cause of all your problems is something you'd get over too easily.

Yes, I would imagine many parents would react like Felicity's mother. I wanted to show more of a middle ground than just "people who hate werewolves and go out of their way to be nasty about them" and "people who are completely reasonably about it and have no anxieties at all about what could happen if the Wolfsbane failed." Even Ron and Mrs. Weasley expressed some anxiety around werewolves and in both cases, it was completely irrational, so I think there would be a lot of concern, not all of it completely irrational.

Yeah, I just used one parent as an example, as it could get confusing if it was somebody different expressing concern each time. Plus, Rose would be more likely to take notice of a reference to somebody she has heard of before. The paper has been getting a lot of letters on the issue over the years, so you can assume she's not the only one expressing those views.

And yes, Nott is smart and very plausible, which really makes him more dangerous than a ranting irrational villain, because it means people are more likely to believe and support him.

Nott's protectiveness of Dora will actually come up in year four, so a little while away, but you've put your finger on something that will appear eventually.

Slughorn knows he's only back for a couple of weeks and, being Slughorn, is using the time to reconnect with his old favourites and find out all the gossip, rather than worrying too much about the exams. After all, the N.E.W.T. course is a two year one and the O.W.L. either a three year or a five year one - I'm never sure if they are tested on the first two years in the O.W.L.S. or if they are more a foundation and the course only starts properly in 3rd year - so it's not like a couple of weeks are going to make all THAT much difference. He still should be teaching though.

Thanks for the review and I hope you enjoy the final three chapters. The second last one reveals the final few details.

It's great to see you back. Hope there'll be a chapter of "The Chosen Four" soon.

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Review #24, by Pheonix PotioneerThe Rise of the A.W.L.: The Jelly Legs Jinx.

31st January 2015:
Oh, Rose. So naive. She thinks that since she knows Dora is wrong, the Ministry won't bother to hear Dora's side. It becomes obvious at moments like this that she's young. I'm not very mad at her this time- just surprised.

Ha ha, I find it amusing that Rose was angry about the article not being front page. I suppose the Ministry doesn't want to draw attention to it.

I'm surprised Rita Skeeter didn't find out the identity of the two thirteen-year-old girls (Rose and Dora). But how did she even find out that much in the first place?

For Professor Vector, I keep thinking of the Vector person on Despicable Me. I suppose I should take this professor more seriously.

I don't blame Rose for being annoyed about Dora getting away with everything and herself getting attention. I think it's because Dora knows how to be sneaky and subtle, while Rose does not.

One thing I am annoyed at Rose about is that she uses Dora's background and Dora's father as justification. I know Dora was doing everything of her own will as well, but still- it's like judging Sirius Black for being a Black. And Blackburn for being a werewolf. I agree with Rose, that Dora deserved it and such, but Rose really shouldn't have used Dora's father as justification. I would have said that Dora is capable of evil deeds (like what Dora did last year) and that all year Dora complained about Blackburn and made anti-werewolf remarks.

At least Rose isn't the stereotypical, brilliant protagonist. She is flawed.

Good chapter! And what was the scene that Leonore had you put in?

Author's Response: There's actually a hint as to how Rita knows what she does. There's a reference to a beetle around Hogwarts at one point.

She does know their identity, but by keeping it vague, she's both trying to create more concern among parents - it could be THEIR child that was targeted - and also making it look as if they spoke to her directly. By not citing the source, it makes it less likely she'll get called out on the fact she got her information rather obliquely.

Well, Rose meant it would be pretty coincidental if Fairfax just picked a student to bully into helping him and they ALSO had a father with similar views to Fairfax, but yeah, that's ignoring the fact that if Fairfax knows who she is, and there's a good chance he WOULD, or that he could find out, he might choose her, thinking there was a good chance she'd go along with what he asked or at least, that she'd be unlikely to have parents who'd make an official complaint about what he did.

And yes, Rose can be pretty unfair when it comes to Dora. She just looks for anything to criticise her for, even when it's something she has no control over. There were plenty of other things she could have said to back up the fact Dora is likely to do something to hurt Blackburn voluntarily.

Flawed people are so much more fun to write anyway. Characters who get everything right are boring, both to read and to write. You can do so much more with characters who make mistakes and mess up. Rose's obsession with certain things - like proving Dora guilty - can send her off in all kinds of wrong directions and affect her judgement.

Leonore wanted me to write a scene where Rose got caught hexing Dora and got punished for it, which was sort of overdue anyway. And then, when she mentioned it, it occurred to me it'd be a good way of revealing certain information.

Thank you so much for your review. Hope you enjoyed the chapter.

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Review #25, by Pheonix PotioneerGive It A Go: Just A Date

26th January 2015:
Yes, finally something ORIGINAL where Rose and Scorpius aren't hopelessly in love! I'm a fan of ScorRose, but it is so common that it gets annoying after a while.

I love how realistic this is. This is what actually happens in real life.

I think everyone knows someone like Violet. I have a friend who isn't quite as bad as Violet, but she can be annoying sometimes.

Ha ha, Kenway's date puked. That's kind of funny.

I'm glad Ella and Albus worked out great- I really like them. Hooray!

Great job with this!

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! We like being realistic, and ScorRose pairings often bug us at least a little, so this was our way of contrasting most stories that pair or ship them. Granted both our Rose and especially our Scorpius are both quieter, reflective characters and I guess you don't see that wih Scorpius too often.

Violet was a character we saw as very... outgoing and our characters often tend to lean towards independent with a sense of humor, but we try to get a balance of personalities because that's what's realistic. ;)

Kenway's date couldn't have ended any better in my opinion (props to Georgina) which makes it fun especially with his character. Heehee! If you liked he Albus/Ella, check out the later chapters of our story The Wizarding Life of Ella Green.

Thanks for the review!!

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