... I am a horrible human being. Please forgive me for practically abandoning you these last few months. I'm so sorry.
Anyway, on to this chapter. Well... wow. You just continue to awe me with your words. And your characters. And your Percy. He was a little scary in this to be honest, I'm not sure I would have reacted quite like Audrey did... but then again, I'm pretty sure they're soul mates, so she has an excuse.
So, firstly, Joseph. What an idiot. You capture his creepiness perfectly and he is really rather repulsive. I think it must be quite hard for Audrey to witness that a man she really admired and looked up could be so foul in real life. She never gets it easy, does she? I can see why Percy acted in the way he did.
Secondly, Remmington. You like your creepy guys in this story, don't you. But he is just a down and out bully. I cannot believe he fired Audrey over a fight that she wasn't even in! What is she going to do? I just want Percy to take her home and introduce her to Mrs Weasley so she can feel loved and fed and looked after. But something tells me you aren't going to be so nice. But yeah, men like Remmington, the world can do without. I just hope that him firing her means we never have to see him again.
And then we have Percy. Well, like I said, he was a little scary in this chapter. I mean, you hinted at it before but we never quite got to witness it the way we do in this chapter. You capture that dangerous, wounded animal really well and I'm torn between wanting to flinch away from him and wanting to giving him a massive hug and tell him everything will be okay. But I'm sure Audrey will do that for me.
And Audrey. She just keeps on going, no matter what life throws at her. She's one of my favourite female characters that you've written. I love how no matter how serious the situation is, Audrey can always say something, or think something that will make me laugh. I just want her to have her happy ending, Merlin knows she deserves one.
And finally... He. Asked. Her. To. Be. His. Girlfriend. Or rather, he implied it and she asked it for him. In typical Audrey fashion. I loved it and I'm so pleased that they are taking their less than normal relationship to the next stage, so to speak.
So, I cannot wait to see where this is going! Please, please, please update soon and I will try my very best to leave you a review much quicker than this latest gap. But I haven't abandoned you, I promise!
Amazing chapter (as always),
P.S. Sorry about the essay.Author's Response: Hello!
Hey there, you! I'm sorry that I'm just now coming back to you, I would have answered this sooner but I've been busy and all that jazz. Anyway, thanks for coming back to both Audrey and Percy once again!
I think writing Percy as a scarier, darker character is alot more challenging and the fact that he's getting such a reaction really makes me feel relieved. It was very difficult to do and by the end of the day, I feel pretty darn proud of myself. Anyway, putting Joseph more as a creeper was done on purpose to show Audrey that not everything she thinks is what it really is. For one, considering that Percy looks so straight laced and really being quite the dashing hero while Joseph, who is handsome and rich and famous being, well, a jerk was done on purpose. After all, there are alot of things that Audrey still needs to learn and I wanted to make that glaringly obvious.
I dunno. I think I just like writing creepy blokes and then we get to Remmington, who is a really nasty bit of work!
As for Audrey, she's going to work something out and she does have Percy as her support so that's something that I'll play around with while going through the motions of the later half of the story. Its actually going to be longer than I'd planned.
You do see Remmington again, and it will not be pretty. Just as a warning. ;)
I think Audrey is the sort of girl that would do everything and anything to get what she wants and that makes her a really great character to write. She's also a favorite female too of mine, personally, she has so much grit to her and she's hilarious.
She'll get her happy ending but it won't be in the way you think and I'd rather have it more realistic with that then say, Percy suddenly being this perfect masterpiece of a man. That's so boring...and well, I like angst and I never make it easy for you all. >:D
Bwhahaha! Percy asked Audrey to be his girl but then she went on and sort of demanded it right? Hahahah, I loved that entire scene because they're just too silly.
I have some ideas in mind for the next half of the story, so bear with me and don't hate me too much for taking forever...and ever...and ever...
Anyway, update your stories! :D
I miss them!
OMG, how is Second Choice?!!!
ARGH, I need my Vivian fix too!
*Flips over table*
Thanks for coming back!
Much love of course,
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I think you are truly amazing. Really, there is no other way to describe this story or its author. This has been such an amazing read and I cannot believe it is (almost) over. The way you write is so beautiful and you have a rare ability to make something as complicated as losing someone you love into something that everyone can understand and almost relate with. I know this story was certainly an eye opener for me and I have no doubt that it was for many other people too, in some ways, I'm so happy with this ending and in others, I'm so sad it's over. I think you are incredible and that you have a real shot at making writing your profession. So thank you for this beautiful and touching story and I will be reading some of your other work too (I've started on Choices already) but they have a lot to live up to and if they are anything like this, they will be incredible.
You really are an amazing person,
~ IrishMyth ~
P.S. You have no idea how much I love Han Solo.Author's Response: You - I just - I mean - I can't - you are so nice!
I can't tell you how much this review has meant to me. Writing is something that I have always loved and cherished and I'm so happy to be able to share it with me. This was a very personal story to me and, at times, hard to share, but I do hope that I have, as you said, been able to open peoples eyes to what loss feels like. I'm sad it's (almost) over as well. This is the first story I've ever written start to finish and I'm really quite proud of it. Thank you so much for reading and for your incredibly kind words. And thank you for reading my other stories as well! They are a bit a different from this story, but I like them a lot. I hope you do, too!
You, my dear, are an amazing person as well.
P.S. I'm glad you love Han Solo! I absolutely love him, too. He's the best. Report Review
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