This is a brilliant story - extremely well planned with lots of emotion and character development.
It's new and different from any other story I've read, with such an original idea about living in Diagon Alley.
It really adds a new perspective on being a squib, and the whole sickness thing is genius.
I love the way you made the chess pieces not like Will - that was a touch of genius!! It's a very light piece that stays with you, with very believable character traits. Awesome :D

Author's Response: Hi there!

What a nice surprise to get a review for this story! I don't know many fanfiction readers that are interested in an OC only story, much less willing to read one.

I wanted to use the Harry Potter universe in a fresh way, and I'm glad you picked up on that. Thanks so much for leaving your thoughts and comments!

pix

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Wasn't the best? It was awesome!!
I love the characterisation, the character of Florence is pure genius, and the whole originality of the injury is not just creative, but amazingly well written too, very believable.
The story title is very awesome and catchy :)
Please add the next chapter soon, this story is brilliant and ended on a very annoying cliff hanger.
I love the way you portray James too, realistic and avoiding the stereotyping of him!! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a nice review :D I'm glad you like Florence :) She is a bit like my friend to be honest, blunt and to the point, but with a soft nature :) I really like the way she's turned out :D I actually kind of got the idea for the injury from a story in a newspaper, and this story literally just strolled into my head :) Thank you for reviewing :)

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Your first story? :O
My jaw just dropped to the ground.
It's very funny and awesome, I loved all of it!
It's gripping, I could not take my eyes off the screen, and I was eating up every word you wrote, until the classic delivery of the last line, which is brilliantly formatted to have that huge impact on the reader.
I love the way you based some bits around real life, as in the first time Harry waved, and James wanting to be the first oe to see it, and the way Lily loves taking pictures. It makes it even sadder the way they die.
I was certainly not expecting that ending - you had me the whole way along until the shocking cliffhanger.
You got the challenge, and turned it in to something completely original and creative. Amazing story, I loveeddd it!! :D

Author's Response: This was a very cute review and I loved every second of reading it! I wanted to make the story more funny and family-y but then ya know...crush all the dreams of the reader in one line...;) oh voldy, why do you have to be such a buzz kill? Lily's habit is stolen from me, I love taking pictures but unfortunately when I do my thumb is always over the lens or its blurry.

You are so lovely! I'm glad you liked this story so much :) you are welcome back any time to review if I write some more :D

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WOW.This is so haunting!
I love it the way you've got a completely original relationship, a bromance, and then used two completely awesome characters and transformed it in to a completely awesome and fambubblybumshus story.
I love the way you portray Percy too, not just the stereotypical swot, you added a lot of depth and you've certainly changed my perception on that character.
Now every time I look at Benedict I'm going to think of Percy ;)
“I’m not gay,” Oliver protested, lately that seemed to fall all on deaf ears." That quote is so so so awesome - I was really laughing my head off until I was making a squeaky sound.
There are so many emotions wrapped up in this piece, it's just so awesome ;)

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This one shot is so so so so so good, how can you write so well i the early hours of the morning??
I love the cute plot twist, and the little details, like Louis saying "tan" instead of "can" like most toddlers :)
The last line is spectacular, the whole one shot is spectacular, and the POV is brilliant.
"Nothing could outdo the Christmas day on which Victoire had tried to send Louis by owl to Santa Claus against Dwiddle's Doll House."
I absolutely loved that, it's bits of quirky detail like that that make you such an amazing and awesomely awesome writer, Val.
It added a nice touch when she was angry and spoke in french, that shows that when she's feeling emotive she slips in to her mother toungue, which made it so real and imaginative.
The innocent thoughts of Louis were really awesome, I loved the snitch cake bit - excellent ideas, Val, really amazing. ;)

Author's Response: Sophie, have I ever told you how much your support means to me? This much.*points back and forth from the earth to the moon*

You are awesome. Here is a Snitch cake for you.

&hearts

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FABAROONEY!!
Loved it, how they are getting in to a relationship (at last) and they are like TOGETHER!!
*excitedsqueal*
Bbbut.
I am annoyed.
And fustrated.
It's killing me man, when will Wood find out it's his kid??
He has to find out at some point?
Gr, why do you have to built up the suspense and tension so well?
P.s the dialogue betwen them is perfect - you got it sopt on AGAIN Val, not too flirty and you molded their personalities so well that they slot together well.
*nod of approval*
So it's more believable and realistic so you can actually picture them as a couple instead of dramiones
*scowl*
I actually love Cat!! She's my all time favourite character. I like her more than any other character, I'd go as far to sya I like her more than...
Prepare yourself..
Harry Potter!!!
Her timing and delivery is perfecto, and she always gets me laughing so much that I can't breathe for like a whole minute and nearly suffocate and die.
She may be a murdurer, but she is awesome ;)

Author's Response: Your review is fabarooney - and I really need to write these expressions down somewhere to include in a Cat scene.

No hating on Dramiones, some of them are actually quite good (though I can understand what you mean).

Cat is my favourite character too, but then I'm also very biased...

And Oliver willl find out soon.
And is she a murdered? Kiwi wants to kill her off sometimes, yes, but Cat? Maybe I should reread this chapter...

Thank you for this awesomely awesome review. You're fandabidozey &hearts

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This is one shot not only has a different pairing - but a different plot, different to one I've ever seen.
It matched their two characters, despite the odds, well, you made their differences and similarities slot together brilliantly :)
I like the whole against-the-stereotype-house-personality, it's really inventive ;)
The whole thing is short and sweet, though personally I think this material could be turned in to a novel :D
The way they keep on meeting, and there dialogue is all very flowing and natural - which makes it very relatable and realistic.
Keep up the awesomely awesome work :D

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For a first attempt: WOWSAS.
The quotes work really well in this piece, adding to the amount of pure awesomeness.
"Only his words could make her cry," I love that!!
I suppose it sums up a lot of heartbreak and emotion that Hermione went through, and this one shot gathers the worst and best moments of every relation ship, the ups and downs, and warps them neatly up in a present with a nice bow on the top (which is the quotes).
Brilliant first attempt at Romione - you'd never have guessed - you write it like a pro!!
The originality of the sequel too, just blows ma mind, man!!
I HOPE TO SEE YOU DO A LOT MORE ROMIONES :)

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Alliteration coming up:
Absolutely Astonishingly Amazingly Awesome And Ace!!!
Mwhahaha I am the king of alliterations.
Erm, back to the reviewing serious bit.
The orginality blew my mid, I was scrolling down your stories (break from work) and I thought - wow, you're not crazy enough to write a story from a sock's point of view, are you?
I guess I underestimated the true extent of LittleWelshGirl99's power.
I love the whole superior, bragging and over use of the word "awesome" (I totally don't over use the word awesome cough cough).
It's so so so so so so so inventive that it's Dobby's sock too!! It's stories like these that people join HPFF!
Very comical; I'm pretty sure my sister thought I was dying because I was laughing do much I was making these weird wheezing noises.
I like the way i gets chucked in the bin at the end - though it's pretty sad :'(
"Personally, I think it’s a fine work of literature" I love that quote, it's so awesome! The whole ramblings thing is not boring either - you made it not too long and not too short, the perfect length that gets the reader hooked and satisfied when they finished it that they read an amazing one shot.
"While I’m waiting I think I shall call for my minions to chop off a few heads."
That bit is pretty awesome too, it leaves you lingering with the hilarity of the story, like an after-dinner mint to top off the meal.
Woo! I think the sock could seriously be a new superhero :D

Author's Response: More alliteration coming up:
thank you thank you thank you thank you

Ok yours was better than mine. :P

Haha not sure I like the idea of someone scrolling down my stories - my older ones are pretty bad - but ultimately I'm very glad that you did! This is such a lovely review!

Haha weird wheezing noises FTW! Lol I bet Lottie was weirded out. ;D

Some people were actually suggesting I write a sequel to this, but I'm not sure what it'd be about! If you have any ideas, PM them to me and I'll see what I can do!

OH AND THANK YOU FOR THAT GRAPHIC! I'm adding it as the chapter image! :3

Ahaha! Superhero sock!

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No James, don't do it!
I'm sorry I've messed up you perfect number of reviews (123) but after a great deal of screaming at the computer at James and Carlotta, I couldn't resist reviewing :)
Brilliant cliffhanger - this story is brilliant for those tense, insightful and gripping paragraphs that have you hooked.
I love the depth to James you add - most people don't bother when they're doing 1st person, but you make it os much more realistic by adding his thoughts, and description.
"A ringing silence fell upon the flat" that's awesome description of James's shock, and how it would've actually felt like.
You wrote the raging argument very well, explaining all of what it really would be like for Al and James - I love the original touch of Lily being a squib, an have done through out the whole story.
The whole story plot, is very well written, and well thought out - you are definitely pro at story writing.
The newspaper article is brillaintly portrayed too, and very newspaper-y, grabbing all the best gossip, exaggerating it, and the fickleness in it I thought was quite believable.
I love everything about this tory - from the title to the content to the characters, it's all fantastic and clever and witty!! :D

Author's Response: Please, don't apologise for leaving a review! I'm not that fussed about a perfect number :)

Writing in first person was a massive challenge at first, because I've always done third person before, but I decided that in this fic, first person would work better. It's tough at times because of course there are some things that James doesn't want to admit even to himself, but it's also easier to hold back things like daddy issues which is good ;)

Lily being a Squib is, if I do say so myself, my favourite of all the aspects of this fic. She manages to steal the show every time she features - I'm not sure whether this is good or bad! But it does have the added advantage of providing a contrast between her life and James and Albus' on the other hand. Glad you like it :)

The newspaper article was an utter pain to write! It took me about ten drafts to get right in the end, so I'm glad that it's convincing.

Thanks for reviewing! It's really nice to know that people are enjoying what I'm writing :)

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Ah! The dramatic irony in this piece - it is not only EXTREMELY fustrating but also very well written as to make you feel so annoyed at Carrow and Rose - it certainly had me screaming my head off at the computer screen.
The relationship between Scorpius and Rose is also very well written - casual and relaxed, like they both don't have to try hard to be around each other but yet go together nicely - therefore making it easier for them to slip in to a romantic relationship *wink wink hint hint*
Every chapter has you wanting more, with both cliffhangers big and small. The whole Lily werewolf thing has me intrigued, and I'm desperate to see how you play that out, and who knows about it too.
Woo! Another highly enjoyable and awesome chapter to read, thank you :D

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This is so so so brilliant!!

It really has the reader stuck in the story, and when she didn't get the seeker job I swear I had to restrain myself from punching the computer.

The twist with the seeker position and the beater position is done amazingly - sometimes when that kind of plot is used it can be a bit fake and cheesy, but it's absolutely wonderful in this context. It gives the reader a roller coaster of emotion - the anxiety on the pitch, the intensity of the seeker scene, the sadness as she fails and then the awesomeness as she gets beater, all beautifully wrapped up in one delightful chapter.

I love the way she's a Wood - that's so awesome and original - and the way you describe Sirius is perfect. Lazy and nonchalant yet actually very good at it. The description is of a perfect amount - enough to make it very realistic, yet not too much to still keep the reader interested.

As far as stories go, this one's fantastic and I'd like to see a lot more of Jenny!! :)

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I love all the nick names, and how he remembers all the students - it's a very clever idea and yet very real as well.
I absolutely love this character - he's unique, funny and very very witty.
The 3rd person is probably the best I've ever seen, it works fabulously well with this, the ramblings, thoughts, extra bits of information that makes it an absolutely unforgetable and a joy to read.
This story is all round perfection and amazingly creative, hilarious and fambubblybumshus!!
I loved it :)

Author's Response: I hadn't written all that much first person before writing this, but I think this is definitely my favourite 3rd person story to write. It's just so entertaining, ahha.

I'm really really glad you liked it! And I can't deny that it's been hella fun to think of all the nicknames ;)

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This is such a touching, moving and beautiful one shot. It shows all the different aspects of life, and is so perfectly described with lots of realistic detail and brilliant character development.
I love it - "The soft sound of her laughter met the deep tone of his" and " anger shaking the voice that typically sounded as if it had come straight from an angel’s harp." Fantastic!
The mini plot inside the huge plot is amazing, and I think it captures all the different emotions and twists and turns of life wonderfully - covering marriage, death, e.t.c all rounded up in such a lovely one shot.
I like the way you describe Bill and Fleur's relationship - one of the hardest to understand, but you made both their personalities slot together nicely, which is not an easy thing to do.
Well done on such an amazing one shot - certainly brightens up a dull sunday afternoon!!

Author's Response: Hi there! I really have a soft spot for Bill and Fleur. I think that she's such a misunderstood character that doesn't get enough credit for the strong woman she is, so I'm really happy you enjoyed me portrayal of them in this!

Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving this awesome review ♥!

Jami

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This story is fantastic - I love it!!
It's definitely original, and the third person POV works brilliantly with this story.
The character of Scorpius is very well developed - the depth, flaws, thoughts and emotions are explored and make him very realistic and relatable.
I love the way you describe all the different relationships and characters he has - the best friend, the annoyed lover, the fierce enemy, it has all the components of a fambubblybumshus story.
Overall, a pure delight to read, and I'd like to see a lot more of it!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I've tried quite hard to make this Scorpius both recognisable as what fandom has envisioned him to be, and different enough to be something new. I feel this chapter sometimes gets a bit frantic with all the characters and ideas it introduces in one go, so I'm glad that's proven to work, to be coherent, and to be compelling. Plenty more of it's still up here, and there's plenty more to come.

Thank you for reviewing!

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I love the satisfying plot line and the hanging end sentence that leaves the reader unsure.

This story makes you savour every word and finally releases it's grip on the last line. I think it's very clever, and very awesome (as always) with the whole set-out-to-do-something-but-it-didn't-happen-yet-a-better-outcome-came-along is perfect style for a one shot.

The third person works spectacularly well with this, as I think the first person wouldn't have as much as an impact on you.
The name "Eleanor McGrath" is just too totally cool and awesome dude :D

Author's Response: Ahha thank you so much! :D I did want to keep away from the typical reunion scene in the greenhouse and make y'all guess where it was headed, so I'm glad it worked ;)

Ooh thank you! I do love writing one-shots, and would like people to get something from them too - I feel very flattered that you like my style :3

Hehe yes, I do like first person but it would have been a bit too emotionally over-involved; a degree of separation, I think too, works better. And thankyou so much for your lovely review! :D

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This one shot is so incredibly moving, and touching. I love the way you portrayed Regulus and explored all his feelings - not only are they realistic but also so well described!! :)
I love the whole star metaphor thing - awesome, imaginative and really really really creative, a work of a genius such as Rowling herself.
The way you describe Kreacher is brilliant - like how he came to be grumpy.
This is just such an awesome one shot that is so amazingly wonderful on so many levels :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Regulus has always been understated for me so I really wanted to focus his feelings true to how I see him.

I honestly LOVE how J.K.R has named them after stars.. it says SO much about the purebloods and sihgw;igw I Just love it so much I couldn't pass up on using it in my own story!

Kreacher - another misunderstood thing. I personally think he was so brave.

Thank you very, very much for leaving this review!! :D

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This is not only the sweetest one shot I've ever read, but also the awesomest!
I love the lay out - the chapter idea is very original and unique.
I love the style as well - very unique, with a lovely portrayal of Lysander.
The description is so amazing with powerful symbolism and a realistic insight to what he thinks and feels.
And all round plesure to read - an absolute gem of a one shot :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this oneshot; I'm so very flattered! Thank you! :D

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Loving the unique character - although there are a lot of crazy 1st person next gen stories, I've not seen one as original as this :)
I love the main character - Roxy rather than Rose/James II and it's very funny too, I laughed at al most every statement, chuckling the whole way through.
I love the quirky style - not only is it creative - it is very different compared to your other work like Brave which shows what a brilliant writer you are as you can get in to characters and make them seem real very easily. For example, Leah to Roxy.
This is such a lovely and awesome piece of writing with original ideas and fantastic formatting (the layout is AMAZING!)
Soph :D

Author's Response: Gosh! I read and reread this review over and over again! thank you so much! your reviews always make my day!

Roxanne was always one of my favourite nextgen characters too write, and I always thought there were very few stories which had her as a first character, so I'm glad that you like it! :D

Yay! It was sort of hard moving from a story which was pretty light hearted liek The Plan to one which was a bit more serious, like Brave so your review is like making me squeal with happiness!

Thank you so so much for taking the time to read and leave this lovely review!

love, izzy xx

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I just typed out such a long review and forgot to submit it :P
So I'll try to remember it:
I love the way Muriel beats a spritely young lad like Charlie and sends him off home - that's hilarious!!
It's so exciting - all the different methods of getting Muriel in to a care home - the good ol' slow drawn out Percy one, the brute force charlie one, the pranks one - what'll be next? Bribery? It has you hooked and doesn't let go, as it's a very interesting, unique, quirky and funny read - that people can not just relate too, but also laugh at :)
I am really looking forward to the next chapter *update soon cough cough* and the intelligence and awesomeness of Muriel!!
Excited for some more Muriel goodness :)

Author's Response: OH NO SOPHIE YOU POOR THING D: You're so lovely to review me again anyway!

Haha I just can't Muriel being beaten by anyone, certainly not someone who is, for all intents and purposes, her superior *le gasp*. The update will be coming very soon now!

Oh, I'm very glad you like them all! I was a bit stuck at first trying to think of them all, but then realised that each Weasley was very different and would definitely have his own way of doing it. Bribery... hmm... you'll have to wait and see ;) I'm so glad that you like it, though, and that's it's laughable!

Thank you so much for this lovely review! :)

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Such an inventive idea!
I love the way there's the mini competition through out the Weasley family, and the stubborn grandmother that won't budge! You write her stiff witty personality very well, and the cliffhanger at the end of it! I'd like to see a lot more of Muriel ;)

Author's Response: Yay, thank you so much! Hehe the Weasleys are just so competitive it's ridiculous ;) and Muriel has always been such a character that I couldn't resist combining the two! Hehe I am glad you like it, and how they interact with each other - keep reading for more Muriel :D Thank you so much for this lovely review!

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YAYY!! First to review ;)
Aw so sweet and awesome and cute :)
The way you portray their personalities is so perfect as they kind of slot together (cheesey metaphor coming up) like two puzzle pieces.
I love the way the plot is so original and creative.
Your description is very much like Rowling's herself, along with the dialogue - very realistic.
I like the way Fleur is so furstrated with Bill - yet still clings on like she is strangely fascinated by him. The immaculate detail on the chapters really paints the scene in your head and helps readers to really see it, even if they have a weak imagination, it does all the work for you through your words.
This story is extremely awesome, kep updating! :D

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Absolutely mesmorising and beautiful - I've never really paid attention to the Bloody Barn and now every time he's mentioned I going to think of this one shot.
Really touching and original - it definitely had me eagerly reading the whole way through.
I love the way you portrayed the baron and the sickening to delivery of the last sentence or two.
Overall I riveting read, amazing :D

Author's Response: You are amazing!!! Your reviews are always the best and brighten my day!
Thank you, thank you!! :D

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Hope you've enjoyed it?
I LOVED IT!
What a cliffhanger too - you better update soon...
*threatening growl*
Suspense and tension is a theme through out the whole story, obviously with a mixture of emotions that adds to the whole element of confusion of Severus (wow sorry long puzzling sentence.)
I love the way you portray Snape in this piece; you have brilliant character development and the way he deals with Beth really adds depth to his character :)
I love love love love love love the level of description to each sentence, paragraph, chapter, it just makes it so real and awesome!!
I love the dialogue between the death eaters, I know, it's random, but it's so well written and just the way Rowling would've written it :D
I also like the way you write and describe the way Dumbldore and Snape deal with each other, how they don't know what to think of each other almost.
Please keep updating - this story is just so awesome :D

Author's Response: I'm so, so happy to see you by this story! :3 And to hear that you've enjoyed it, too -- that just really makes me excited, especially because it's THIS particular story. I've been working on these books for nearly a year and a half now, and am ridiculously invested in them; they're like my children now!

Snape is one of my very favorite characters to write, and getting to include him here, in this particular era, has been a blast. I wanted from the very first to give him a girl enough like Lily to make him notice her in the first place, but different enough to really challenge him, and I hope that's what I've accomplished here. My writer's bias is inclined to think that he and Beth do make a very good match!

Death Eater dialogue is actually one of the trickier points of writing, especially in scenes like this, so your compliment on it is totally appreciated. :) Just the way Rowling would have done it?! I wish you could see the smile on my face right now! ♥ And I love the way you described the Dumbledore/Snape aspect, because I think it's very apt: They really /don't/ know what to make of each other.

Gahh. This review just totally, totally, totally made my day!! I've just posted chapter 22, and you'll definitely be getting updates every Sunday until the book finishes (chapter 34) unless stated otherwise. I can't stop writing this story to save my life! :3 Thank you so much for reviewing!!

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Astonishingly good one shot - it is outstandingly original and one of the most intruging AND gripping ones I've ever read!
I love the fresh new idea to write about trelawney and her mind - it's both shows great signs of creativity and inventiveness (if that's a word :D)
I found it over all extremely awesome - I couldn't drag my eyes away for a second! - and you are a very talented writer!!
Well done for such a fambubblybumshus and tremendulant one shot :)
- Soph

Author's Response: Wow thank you SO much for saying that! I don't know how the idea came to my head to be honest. I have never shipped Trelawney or Severus at all, seeing as they've never interacted before so the fact that this certain plot bunny popped into my head was also a surprise! So thank the bunnies ;)

Thank YOU for such a fantastic, lovely comment! It's made me really happy :$ Hehe! Especially on this story! I was quite excited about it but it had no reviews.. until now! :D So thanks again!

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