All the chapters so far have been nothing short of excellent. But there is something to this chapter that just gives it that Wow factor. I suppose its due largely to Rose's passion and fire. I loved the expansion on the deathly hallows as well. All in all I'd say this was my favorite chapter.
But I must add although you said there was no cliff hanger ending this time, somehow you couldn't resist leaving us with one in the form of an excerpt from Chap 9, you naughty girl you.
By the by I tried msging you on your authors page for help with my latest chapter but I couldn't find how to leave messages. Maybe I'm just too thick to figure it out, but could you walk me through it? I'd really like the help as I'm simply hopeless editing myself.Author's Response: I'm so happy you liked it. The story keeps getting more and more complex and some days I swear it has a mind of its own! DH was such a complex book and I hope to it justice with my interpretation of the cannon facts.
As for contacting me. On my author page, right underneath the links that show my numr of stories, reviews and fav author, you will find a sentence that says "click here to contact MissMdsty and learn more about their writting". That sentence contains a link to my Meet the author thread in the HPFF forums. You can set up an account (it's quick and easy!) Or just log in as a guest. Then you click on my author name and you'll find a page where you can send me a private message. :D it's a great community there and it's a lovely way of really getting in touch and brainstorming and just discussing the books and our love for Harry Potter! :) Report Review
You sly girl you. All the way up to Chap 11 eh? And here I was wondering when the next chapter might be due out, only to find it'll be sooner than I thought. Well that's good news for the fans anyway.
Well on to the review. Great Chap and I loved all the wand lore you threw in. It sounded well thought out and logical. One slightly off track question is the National Wand Registry an aleggory for the debate on Gun Control in the US. Sorry didn't meant to get political but it sounds like a great idea. Wands can be dangerous and so could guns. So we need to keep a record of who has them in case they ever fall into the wrong hands. Or am I just reading too much into it?
Well back to the review. Now I am always a bit weary of folks going further into certain areas of the HP Universe that JK didn't expand on. Not that I don't think it should be explored, just that some don't quite do it so well. But you handle it beautifully and I am anxious to learn more about how they went about copying the wands.
But question why does Scorpius think that their is a whole network out there doing this, unless I missed something.
Coming back to expanding on the HP Universe lore etc, I plan to do something similar in the story I am working on and am wondering if I'll be able to do it similar justice. So if I may, as soon as I get back to writing I'll send you the chapter to proof read .if you don't mind that is ;-)Author's Response: Hey there! I'm really happy you liked this chapter!
As for your question on the gun policy in the US, I'm not from there, so, although I did follow the topic, I couldn't say that's what I had in mind at the time. You'll learn soon enough what I did have in mind.
I wouldn't say I'm expanding into it, not just yet of course, but all of this information is very carefully researched and it's not something I write just off the top of my head! As for Scorpius, well, you saw how much is needed to copy a wand. It can't be more than one person, and he is a smart Auror, he knows it!
I'd love to help you, but the archive doesn't allow you to contact another member, so what you should do is go to my Author Page (just click on my pen name) and there you'll find a link that says "Meet the author". Click on that and it'll take you to the forums, where you can contact me! I'd be more than happy to help with your story! :)
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Hi Missy, I've been away too long again but at least I knew I'd have something to look forward to when I finally got back to HPFF. This was a great chapter, I love the interplay between poor Scorpius and Rose. Very curious to know though what is cheesing off Rose, maybe more so than even who is behind the wands. But I guess we'll find out soon enough.Author's Response: So good to see you're still following this. We've got a long way to go before we know who's behind this, but bare with me. It will (I hope), be worth it in the end! Report Review
WOW! Can I just say it once again - WOW! That was amazing Missy. Touching, heartfelt and all around brilliant. Truly this is one of the best Fan Fic stories I have ever read. Nothing, and I mean nothing wrong here, this was absolutely marvelous. The only bad part was when I came to the end. I WANT MORE DAMN IT!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely comment! :) I'm really happy you enjoyed it! Report Review
This was a great story and i love how it complemented the canonical works rather than going against them. I must say you have a really great writing style. Your stories flow and don't seem at all forced in anyway, the mark of a good writer
I also truly believe what you say about stories that want to be written. I have one I'm working on and I am anxious to finish it if for no other than reason than I want to find out how it ends (if that doesn't sound too strange)Author's Response: Hi again! =)
PoA is my favorite of all the Potter books, but I've always felt that there are some moments that I'd like to read more about. Sirius's Halloween 1993 is one of those moments. I'm glad you think it complemented the original work.
Wow, what compliments. =) I feel like I'm still very much a beginner, but it's so cool to hear that my style is developing well.
This definitely was one of those stories, that just needed to be written. I have a NaNo novel in works that gives me similar feeling, and it looks rather promising. Good luck with your story! Write from your heart! =) Report Review
So I wasn't sure what to expect from this story but I am a a big fan of MissMdsty, so when I saw her review I felt ok maybe this is something I have to check out, and I must say I was not disappointed. I have always enjoyed satire but never thought I'd see the day when it could be applied to the HP Universe, Voldemort especially. But from the moment I read the line "evil wears pink" in the intro I said this is so crazy it has to be funny, and it was ^^Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for the review! =)
I'm glad you found my stories and enjoyed them. I guess I have bit twisted sense of humour, but then again it's pretty fun to go against the type. Voldy parodies are so fun to write!
Since you enjoyed this, I'll recommend for you to check Cassius Alcinder's work. He likes to write humorous Voldemort stories as well.
Happy holidays! =) Report Review
Thoroughly enjoyable. This is probably my favorite chapter so far. You really did wonders in capturing not only the personalities of the Potter/Weasely family but also the love and camaraderie that made the original books such a joy to read.
I just wish they could put a higher rating that 10 out of 10. Can not wait for Chap 6Author's Response: Chapter 6 is in the queue! :)
I'm really happy you liked the interaction of the whole family, since it's such a difficult thing to capture all those characters at once!
Looking forward to your next chapter as well! :) Report Review
Another really great chapter. Its interesting the changes you've made and yet the way you've kept Potter Generation 2 so similar to Gen 1. Harry it seems has now become Sirius, Ginny has become her Mom, Albus is Harry as he was as a kid, but he's also goten some Ron in him since he's been acting as a surogate brother to Jon, who is himself both Ron and Harry, as evinced by his disastrous attempts to transfigure his pen.
But all in all I like it, you've added a lot of original stuff, but kept the spirit of the old days.
One question though, if this woman is somehow linked to Voldemort and Albus has inherited his father's talent for picking up Voldemort's thoughts, which is why he can sense this woman why doesn't Harry sense her since his connection would be stronger?
So when is Chap 4 due out?Author's Response: Thanks for the great review :) I actually didn't think of that question, which shows how much I get carried away while writing and then forget the simplest things :/ The answer, although it isn't a very good one, it probably that since the end of Voldemort, Harry has relaxed and his scar is not so open any more, and also that the woman doesn't know about Albus. The woman is probably practicing Occlumency (or is it Legilimency? The ability to block people from reading your mind) on Harry but not Albus.
~Jacelyn Report Review
Hi Missy, I am so sorry that I've been so busy lately and wasn't able to read the new chapters sooner. This was really excellent stuff, really. Rose is certainly my kinda gal and I am having a growing fondness for Scorpius, the fact that he's a Malfoy not withstanding.
A few small errors and I copied them so that they7ll be easier to fix
"He slowly made his way across the street and entered the -street-"
"La revedere!” she greeted - shouldn't it be "she said in farewell"
Earlier this week we -’ve- had an incident.
"the properties of a wand -the- belong to somebody
But of course I am the last one to talk about errors ^^Author's Response: Hey there! It's nice hearing from you and I'm happy you came back to read.
The mistakes... eh... this chapter was written in between bouts of writer's block so I just wanted to get it out of the way. I will edit it eventually, once I'm done writting.
Thank you so much for your feedback! Report Review
I really enjoyed this chapter; the dialogue was well written and I also like the idea of exploring the horcruxes from another angle. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. Oh just one thing in your summary at the end you have "A world he may not make it out alive of." I imagine you meant to write "A world he may not make it out of alive"Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback, glad you liked it!
Yeah, that last line I kept thinking there had to be a better way to word it. Hopefully you enjoy the next chapter. Report Review
I like the fact that you're telling this in a 1st person narrative and that you're trying to show Hermoine's sense of wonder at being a witch. But I feel like you've made Hermoine know more than she probably would have about magic and Hogwarts. I'm sure that at age 11 she probably may have guessed that there were strange things going on but my feeling is she may not have assumed (despite how clever she is) rgiht of the bat that she was witch. But then gain maybe she would.
Still congratulations on the 1st chapter of your first story. I will keep an eye out to see what happens to Hermoine at Hogwarts. Best of luckAuthor's Response: Thankyou, I appreciate your feedback. But she didn't know she was a Witch she just thought she was different to others but she never dreamed she was a witch. Anyway, thanks for reading. Report Review
I'm so happy this is finally up. I've been waiting ages, just ages :-)
This is shaping up to be quite a mystery when it involves dead aurors from decades past. I'm wondering though if that wasn't a mistake on the part of our antagonist, involving someone long dead or i it that he/she doesn't care. Well I suppose we'll see. How long before Chap 4? (I know impatient aren't I)Author's Response: It wasn't so much a mistake as a taunt. "Look at me I'm killing people and you can't do anything about it". It's how the antagonist is trying to prove himself more clever.
The chapter is halfway done, I hope to have it up in a few days. I had it typed up until 3 I'm afraid and now I'm just making it up as I go.
I'm so happy you enjoyed it and thank you for your feedback!
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Beautiful, absolutely sublime. This chapter said so much and yet you did so sparingly, without the superfluous drivel that sometimes make what would have been a good story seem pretentious. Definitely adding you to my small store of favorite authors. Going to savor this story and hope some of your skill rubs off while I'm doing it.Author's Response: Hi!
I'm really glad you enjoyed it. This one is still one of my favorite chapters in the entire story.
Thanks for taking a moment to review! Report Review
The plot thickens. So Alana is the new Hermoine, Jonny combines elements of Harry and Ron and Albus is his father's son. I like the parallels once again between the Philosopher's Stone and Voldemort's Last Wish.
So when is chapter 3 due? An would you do me the honor of reading a chapter or two of my story? Not soliciting reviews but I would appreciate an experienced eye to tell me what I could be doing betterAuthor's Response: Working on Chapter 3 as we speak. I hope to have it done by next week but I'm a little sloppy when it comes to deadlines... I tend to spin the story out a bit more and get carried away :P
Thanks for the nice review :) Of course I'll have a look at your story.
~Jacelyn Report Review
How does one review perfection. This was absolutely brilliant, hands down one of the best stories I have ever read. If there was a way to rate this story higher than ten believe me I would.Author's Response: I'm responding to reviews a bit out of order, but I really just wanted to sit down and tell you how much this review meant to me. Seriously. ♥ I smiled so much when I pulled up my author's page and saw this here waiting for me!
I am beyond flattered that you used the word 'perfection' in relation to this story, and I'm so, so happy to have written one of the best you've read. You really have no idea how much that means to me. :3
Thank you SO MUCH for this review, and I have absolutely no words for how much this review has supported and encouraged me! You are fantastic. ♥ I really hope that you enjoy the rest of the story, and am anxiously awaiting your opinions on future chapters! Report Review
Great stuff Missy. I'm really enjoying this story and seriously, and I mean seriously can't wait for the next chapter. You have me hooked, so please, please tell me its in the queue and will be out in a few days.Author's Response: Thank you! I have the next chapter written, I'm editing it and it will be up in a day or two.
It's great to see that you like this. I'm also looking forward to seeing what's next for Dennis in your story!
xoxo Report Review
Amazing. Simply amazing stuff. A few very minor errors, but still this stuff you've written is so intimidating it makes me feel as if I should give up writing. I like how you've adapted elements of HP Year One to form Albus Year One. I don't want to give anything away, but I have a sneaky suspicion that I know who Albus's friend isAuthor's Response: Hi,
My apologies for the errors D: is it just spelling and grammar, or something else? Please let me know and I'll try to fix it :)
Thanks for lovely review, means a lot.
Hmm, I wonder what that suspicion is? And you mean Jonny right?
P.S YOU SHOULD NEVER GIVE UP WRITING
P.P.S I don't want my writing to be intimidating :3 ~Jacelyn Report Review
Great first chapter and I love how you were able to slip it right in to year six without the need to retocon anything. Report Review
Hi MissMdsty, I must say I love your story so far. If there is one thing I enjoy it's a good murder mystery. Next Gen stories are ideal in my mind for fanfic because you can stay true to the characters without bucking the canon. Something I know some fans dislike.
I'm actually trying to work on my own mystery novella (also involving Aurors), but from a different angle and I'ld really appreciate it if you would take a read and maybe give me your honest opinion.Author's Response: Hello!
First of all, thank you for your review. I haven't really written any NextGen, this is my first shot, but the plot bunnies just won't leave me alone.
Of course I'll take a look at your story and leave a comment, I love a good mystery story.
Brilliant stuff. A truly great read. Looking forward to Chapter 2; is it done yet?Author's Response: Thanks! And chapter 2 is done, but I don't think I submitted yet... I'll check, in the meantime, why not read my other stories? This Lorcan/Lucy one is going to take a while because I have writers block, but I think It'll be going many places (omg didn't even knew I wrote that! SPOLIER ALERT lol) Report Review
Your story has a great premise and I like the direction your taking it, but I think there is just too much happening in the very first chapter. You may want to pace things out a bit. Also there are a few grammar and spelling errors that if fixed, would make reading a lot smoother. All in all though I like what you've wrote and would like to see more. Report Review
I became interested in your writing after reading a review you had done. You were so spot on in your assessment and suggestions that I felt that if you could translate half that into your own writing it'd be brilliant.
I am pleased to say I was right. Very well written story here, a good balance of humor and melancholy. Just had one issue and that was the fact that Dumbledore had no password at all until after Voldemort's disappearance? I think the story might have worked better (for me) if the Gargoyle had said "Don't you think it's about time you change your password?"
But other than that one small thing, Sherbert Lemons was absolutely incredible. A solid 10 out of 10 Report Review
I find it incredibly hard to believe that you are 17. You have to be one of the most talented people here. I expect great things from you in the future. In fact I'd like an autograph now, before you get famous and become inaccessible.Author's Response: Thank you! Your are very kind. :) Report Review
Great stuff. I am your new biggest fanAuthor's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
Enjoyed this one almost as much as the first. Thought Hermoine was a bit too cold though, especially considering she never gave him a chance to explain his side of things in the first place. By the way, how did you do on your exams? And are these A'Levels you're talking about?Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I wanted to make her seem distent as I feel like Draco should have a chance to show his softer side, but he is still very much a Slytherin through and through! I did my highers, so I am now in my final year, I did quite good, I'm happy with my results thanks for asking! I'm not sure if there is a way for you to respond to my questions here, but thought I'd ask anyway, are you doing exams as well? :) Thanks again for the review! :) Report Review
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