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Review #1, by CedricsGirlThe Day the Angels Cried: Prologue: The End.

31st July 2012:
Naturally I love anything even remotely Cedric Diggory related. He's undoubtedly my favourite character (if you haven't already guessed from my username).
I really like the concept you've produced here. It's fresh and original and full of Cedric so how could I not? Notably I'm also very impressed whenever I come across an author who can take a severely minor character from the books and turn them into a likeable story major. At least, from what I've seen so far he seems likeable. I won't deny my particular guilty pleasure for the Slytherins and you do seem to have hit the nail on the head when attempting to implement some believable house characteristics. It'll be interesting to see what you do with him.
Another thing. THANKYOU! For once a story with a potential suitor for Cedric who isn't a Mary Sue and who's name doesn't star with 'C' and end in 'o' (because honestly I wouldn't know where to begin with deciding who I despise more). There is one niggling hitch with the main character that I do feel the need to get off my chest though. Her name is very American. I mean when I hear 'Tatum Crawford' I immediately thing of two very current and very tasty looking hunky American men. I just have a thing with names for characters. For me they always need to mean something so unless Tatum's American and has some sort of connection with gorgeous Hollywood Americanos her name will probably continue to irritate me throughout the duration of reading this story. Sorry.
Overall however I really enjoyed this. It looks to be a very promising story but lets see if my first impressions are right. Well done!

CedricsGirl

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Review #2, by CedricsGirlA Seductive Gryffindor And a Slytherin With Emotions?: Chapter 2: ~Hermiones makeover~

31st July 2012:
Argh, it's so devilishly cliche but I love it! You've got the 'stunning' Hermione/'platinum blonde' haired Malfoy/'Mione' nickname all making their appearance in there and I have to say it's total cheese. The brand of cheese that comes with 'guilty-pleasure' stamped on the packaging! There were a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes in there which at times were really distracting but I gather this was written a long time ago (I've read some of your most recent material and your writing seems to have come on leaps and bounds since then) so I'll try not to obsess over this in future reviews. Argh I was totally cringing at the thought of Hermione going to a Slytherin Quidditch practice session dressed up in high heels. If any girl had tried to pull that off when I went to school she would have been well and truly laughed at regardless of her popularity status. I was completely cringing for Hermione. Hey by the way, am I correct in thinking that this story is set during the sixth book? Only as far as I am aware Marcus Flint is in Oliver Wood's year so naturally he would have left around about three years ago. Oh well I won't argue; he's always been one of my favourite Slytherins and hey, it's your fan fiction.
I don't know if this review is coming across as a very positive one. I want to reassure you that I really do enjoy this story. Hmm maybe focusing on the more positive aspects of this chapter would be a more logical was to conclude this review. Let's see if I could possibly be nice for a change (at times I'm just too critical but don't take it seriously, it's just me getting carried away).
Yes there ARE a lot of positive aspects of your story. Your plot is glaringly addictive despite the obvious cliches - believe me, I would not be reading and reviewing this if I didn't think it. As long as you have that in the bag I'll just grit my teeth and try to ignore the cringe.
For me the thing that really stood out was your characterisation. This is definitely a strong point for you: Harry, Ron, Draco, Flint, Lavender, Ginny...you hit the nail on the head for pretty much all of them. Maybe not so much Hermione but that falls into the whole cliche aspect that I've already gone over.
Ok, so I think that's my dribble over and done with and I'm sorry if this annoyed you but yeah, loved this! I think what I'm trying to say is I hate cliche's but I love them if that makes any sense to you. Probably not so I'll just plod along now and read the next chapter. Hey it's one in the morning over here; I better hurry up and get reading if I want to find out what happens next!

CedricsGirl

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Review #3, by CedricsGirlA Seductive Gryffindor And a Slytherin With Emotions?: Chapter 1: ~Let the game begin~

31st July 2012:
Hmm, an intruiging plot...not totally unlike some of the Dramione material I've read before but it'll be interesting to see how you develop this. Hopefully it'll be more believable than other people's previous attempts.

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Review #4, by CedricsGirlBumping Into The Opposition: Bumping Into The Opposition

31st July 2012:
Although I enjoyed the more romantic tendencies of this One-Shot one aspect that really grated on my nerves was your characterisation of Cedric. when you think about it, what he did to Katie was rather selfish and cruel. It suggested to me that he had a very sure opinion of himself and enjoyed the attention directed at him. Getting to the point you seemed to give off the impression that he didn't care about her or Cho and the kiss was purely for him. I'm sorry but I could never dream of Cedric acting this way - maybe the actor who plays him but not Cedric. From what I gathered he was always extraordinarily selfless and noble - a true Hufflepuff so you can understand why I feel as though you characterised him rather inaccurately.

Having said that I still thoroughly enjoyed the story line and the way you wrote this piece. One thing I noticed at least twice in that story was your impressive ability to convey emotion. Perhaps if you had replaced Cedric with a character more fitting to that role I would have liked this more.

Still a very good story though.

7/10

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