I actually read this two days ago, but completely forgot to favourite it, so I said I'd find it today, and leave you a review as well. Sorry it won't be that long, as I don't have an awful lot of time at the present moment, but I will leave you a super long review on chapter two to make up for it!
I love Rose and Scorpius as two characters. You haven't glorified any of the issues you brought up, even going so far as to call Scorpius a 'stoner Slytherin loser', but still putting a spin on it, so we can see that he isn't a bad person underneath it all, he's just made some bad choices!
Can't wait for chapter two!Author's Response: Oh, I'm always doing that. I usually just forget until months later, though, so I'm glad you are a bit better than me :P
I'm so happy to hear that about the issues! I wanted to sort of make this a drama, but at the same time not be all THESE ARE REAL LIFE ISSUES AND THEY'RE DRAMATIC. So I've just tried to focus on the characters with the issues, instead of the issues themselves, and hope that can carry the plot.
We shall see, I suppose.
And I wanted Rose's perceptions to alter the tone of the story a bit as well. Scorpius is described as a loser because Rose thinks he is one, not because he "just is." That's what I wanted to get across with it, so I'm glad you picked up on those bits. I'm making the best effort to show that Rose's perceptions are not equal to reality, and I hope that can be seen in later chapters too! It's an editing nightmare, but worth it.
And however long your reviews may be, I am very grateful for them. Thank you so much! :D Report Review
The happy-dance I do whenever I see youíve posted a new chapter is so ridiculous. I really hope none of my neighbours see me. . . . .
ANYWAY! New chapter! Excitement! The heist! Anticipation!
Edie the tormented poet. You canít hear me, but Iím laughing! Edieís sandwich forays, I like it! Seamus is influencing her nicely then. Itís a completely irrational thought, but how cool would it be if they were just about to swap the articles when a piece of cheese feel out of Seamusí sandwich (he managed to find the time to make one while Edie and Dean were sneaking up the stairs-he just lumbered after them, earning him a smack on the head from Edie for making noise) and all these alarms went off! Imagine trying to explain that one to the Aurors! I know that wonít happen, but a girl can dream, canít she?
Wow. If you managed to read that whole thing above there, you deserve a cheese sambo too!
Miniature-Lisaís back! I love her! Though I feel very sorry for her, because she has to sit there and watch Edie make very bad life choices, Edie really doesnít listen to her at all, does she?
It seems she listened to her. Darn.
On second hand, it seems she isnít. I love how Jae just invites himself along, like everybody wants him there. Grr. . . . . If Dean and Seamus like him Iím going to scream.
Couple-hood. Again, Laughing.
He smells nice? Why are you smelling him? Who smells people?-sorry, its one of my pet hates. Really creeps me out when people say ĎYou smell niceí itís just about the weirdest compliment you can receive, right behind ĎYou have nice earsí
Seamus and Deans Ďspy gearí is their old Hogwarts cloaks? I can just see the two of them poking around their flat trying to find them. Iím going to assume Deans was discarded to the very depths of his wardrobe, and Seamusí was somewhere really weird, like inside the freezer, or behind the boiler.
I get way too into this story. Ah well, too late to quit now!
Edie? What are you thinking? Leaving Seamus and Dean to stand guard? Dean will probably start doodling and forget why heís there, and Seamus will more than likely fall asleep! Or, the two of them will start messing around and end up setting off all these alarms! The girls lost her mind!
Jae started flirting with a door? I was wrong. I donít mind if Dean and Seamus get all buddy-buddy with him, heís just as mental as them anyhow!
Stupid Brutus! Though I suppose this heist was never going to go well, was it? Itís Edie weíre talking about here! And also, very nice try Jae, but canít you see Mildred and Filch are destined to be? I feel a new ship coming on! MILCH FOREVER!
AAAH! Edie got a real, legitimate, proper writing job! Blakeslee, oh that woman, sheís brilliant isnít she? Iím so happy right now!
I know this stroke of good fortune isnít going to last for poor Edie (because lets face it, when does it?) but Iím enjoying the moment while its here!
Update soon ♥Author's Response: Hey-lo!
Man, the cheese sammich tripping the alarm system would have been awesome! Too bad I just couldn't have poor Seamus get caught, and lose his Auror's license. I would feel too bad for the wee fellow :c I'd much rather just abuse Edie! (And I did read all of it... I will indeed eat a cheese sandwich!)
Hahaha. What! That makes no sense! It's one of our senses; recognizing scent happens naturally unless you happen to have a particularly bad sense of smell. I've inadvertently smelled somebody's cologne/shampoo without grabbing their head and avidly sniffing them (although that would make a much better story.) I guess that's the same kind of thing that happened here ♥
Oh my God Seamus's cloak would TOTALLY be in the freezer. And you're right, he probably was so pumped to be lookout for the first four seconds, and then immediately passed out. Bahahaha. Sometimes I think you know him better than I do...
MILCH. MIIILCH. I love it! Maybe Mildred even has a grumpy old man-cat that Mrs. Norris could fall in love with.
I really like Blakeslee, too (though I always feel arrogant saying that about my own characters.) She's a sharp one, her!
Thank you again, my dear ♥ Report Review
Hello, Siriusly89 here with your criminally late review. It has taken me thirteen whole days to get round to reviewing this for you, and for that I am so, so sorry.
Oh, I like Mikaela, she seems snarky, but not annoyingly so. She seems just like any typical teenager who woke up on their birthday to find out their family hasnít remembered. Although I have a feeling they have, thereís just something theyíre not telling Mikaela.
Oh! It sounds like Draco made in Unbreakable Vow with someone concerning his kids. Itís bothering me now as to what it is!
They betrothed Mikaela to some ĎKingí person? Who does that? I know theyíre purebloods and all that, but itís the twenty-first century! Come on!
The detail you went into describing the bonds of the whole thin was so well though out! It proves just how much planning you put into this!
I agree with Mikaela, her family is messed up! I canít wait to see where this goes.
A very good opening chapter, feel free to re-request and sorry about the delay again.Author's Response: Haha heyy
Yes I will.
Thankyou soo much :D
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AH! NEW CHAPTER!
And so much Lisa-angst!
I understand why sheís so upset now. Sheís one of those compulsive planners, isnít she? Iím one too, and I know that if something deviated from my plan, Iíd have a mini-meltdown, so in my opinion, Lisaís taking it rather well. Rather well indeed.
And the only thing Edieís worried about is the hen night. I LOVE EDIE SO MUCH! The fact that Lisa wonít be drinking worries me. It will probably compel Edie to drink for the two of them, and really, her waking up in a wheelie bin mightnít be the best end to Lisaís hen. Knowing her luck it would end up being Roseís bin, or worse, Oliverís!
Yes! Finally Lisaís standing up to Edie. Now, me being my biased self would love to see that article published, and Oliverís career left in tatters. But my inner Lisa has just made me realise that it might be a little wrong. Gah! Go away inner Lisa! I will NOT pity Oliver-stinking-Wood who ran off with Rose first chance he got! Nope, not happening.
Lisa knows something, she does, about Oliverís shoulder. Donít tell me they used to go out or something! But then, Edie would know about that so forget that theory. Gah! This mystery is annoying me. . . . .
Hee, I know exactly what Edie would have used to lengthen that article, but I agree with inner Lisa, it would do more harm than good if she did it.
Oh how dare she! She had Edie write that big long article, and get her Ďventí on for use of a better word, to just waltz in and say ĎSorry, weíre using my articleí all because she doesnít want to look bad in front of Oliver? Grr. . .
Okay, about these articles: Rose asked Edie to write them, so she can put her name on them, and then Oliver thinks Edieís writing it, and thatís why Rose doesnít want her name on them, because Oliver will know it wasnít Rose, but actually Edie! That makes more sense now Iíve written it down!
I agree, what is this? Fourth year? God sake Oliver, youíre an adult! Man up!
Burning the note was a very nice touch, but I do wonder what it said.
Evidently, so does Edie. Groping around in the bin for something Oliver- stinking-Wood wrote her, this is bad. Come on Edie, youíre a feminist, you donít need him!
AAAH1 Seamus and Dean time! And who better to break into an office with? I canít wait for this, I really canít! Itíll be like the clumsiest heist ever done in the history of breaking and entering!
Update soon! ♥Author's Response: Hello!!!
Yay! I am *so* glad that somebody understands why Lisa's upset! I was trying to comment on the whole track that many women are expected to follow: get married, have kids, put kids first, forget your job, forget your social life, devote rest of life to the "nest." I reckon I can't get too deep into that here. But that's why Lisa was upset. She's motivated, and has goals, and recognizes that a baby is going to make a lot of those things near-impossible (at least until they turn 17!)
Bahahahaha. Edie waking up in a wheelie bin. Man, you have some good idea--OH MY GOD I FORGOT TO GIVE YOU A SHOUTOUT FOR THE CHEESE SANDWICH. In one of your previous reviews, you mentioned Seamus doing that, and it totally made sense to me. So I included it in this chapter and I MEANT TO GIVE YOU A SHOUTOUT AND I FORGOT AHHH!!! I will add it when I update with a CI. ♥ Thank you for the inspiration, you know him well!
Yes, "inner-Lisa" definitely becomes Edie's conscience for the rest of the story. I'm glad she made even you, avid Oliver-hater, see that the article is too spiteful.
The whole article-authorship is confusing, isn't it? I spend so much time going over it, and then going over it AGAIN, that I forget it's easy for readers to lose track. (What, you guys aren't sitting there, writing down notes for my story and planning everything out? What's wrong with you!) (So much sarcasm) (Seriously you guys are amazing) I think the next chapter or so will include Edie literally diagramming out what's happening, to explain it to Lisa (but mostly to you poor, abused readers.)
THE HEIST SCENE IS SO FUN TO WRITE. Even though it's taking me a zillion writes and re-writes to do it, it's a great time. Can't wait for everyone to read it!
Thank you so much for all of your amazing reviews! It's readers like you who really inspire me to keep me going, as horribly cheesy as that sounds ♥ Report Review
Hey there, Siriusly89 with your request review. I am so sorry itís taken me this long to review this for you!
The memory at the beginning was, well I suppose the only word for it is cute. It sort of justifies a clichť, and as I am guilty of both reading and writing clichťs like no one else, I really enjoyed that!
Teddy and Victoireís small talk was very, well I suppose realistic. They were acting like any other married couple since the beginning of time, and the easiness and flow of the conversation is something I always admire, as it is a thing I find impossible. Idle chit-chat is definitely a field of writing I need to work on!
Teddyís protectiveness of Lily, and then his comments on Ronís sanity were very funny. I know they werenít meant to be all that humorous, but you had me laughing!
Em, is Barrett a little crazy? I agree with Teddy, you canít go arresting people for crimes they havenít even committed. I have a horrible feeling itís a prank Barrettís playing on Teddy, to get him into trouble, but Iím probably wrong!
Dominiqueís husband is going to kill her?
Oh my goodness, itís all falling into place! The Seer in the beginning, and Barrett, and everything! Itís all clicked together nicely, hasnít it?
A really good chapter!
Feel free to re-request!Author's Response: No worries - I'm just really happy that you take the time to do this!
It's nice to hear that you liked the first part, even if it was a big clich√É¬©. It's actually quite important, but you'll discover that later :)
I'm so flattered that you think that the conversation was good and believable! That's so nice to hear!!
Oh, and yes, it was supposed to be a bit funny, haha ;) Imagine having Ron for a father...
Barrett is definitely a complicated character. You'll learn more about im in the future, but truth is, he is just desperate to prove himself, and to keep the power he has gained by becoming Head Auror.
I'm glad to hear that you think it fell into place with this chapter! And that you liked this, that makes me very happy! :)
Thank you so much, again, for taking time to to do this, and know that I really appreciate it! I'll definitely re-request as soon as possible ;) Report Review
Hi there, Siriusly89 with your criminally late review! Iím so sorry it took me this long!
Oh, this is an interesting start. Dominiqueís a senior journalist, writing a piece on werewolves. But now really, even I could have told the girl that staying there during the full moon was not a bright idea. Sheís going to get bitten, I know she is.
Your description was very well done. I can almost see every movement she makes, and I love when that happens, because it really brings the whole thing to life.
Can you imagine walking out the door and coming face to face with a werewolf? Well I know thatís never going to logically happen, but letís say a burglar. Iíd have died three times over by then.
I like Dominique as a character. I know we donít learn very much about her in this chapter, but I have a good feeling about her. Does that make any sense? Anyway.
A very good introduction! Feel free to re-request.Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing! No worries about the delay =)
I am pleased you liked this, and found it all interesting. Yes, she's not very bright, is she? xP
Its great to hear that you liked my descriptions as I always worry about them, so thank you.
Haha indeed, it's a scary situation.
I am pleased you like her as a character so far, it does make sense.
Thanks a lot!! I'll definitely re-request! Report Review
This is going to be a rather quick review, for which I am very sorry. I wish I could leave a longer one, but RL is calling me (much to my annoyance!)
I love Jily so much, and this little one-shot is so happy and fluffy, and just depicts them so well. The way that Lily's opinion begins to gradually change is so well done!
I love your pieces so much :DAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! It was my first story ever and the fact that people still read it makes me so happy! :D
Thanks for the lovely review! You're always too nice to me! ♥ Report Review
Just said Iíd drop you a line to tell you just how much I adore this story! Scorpius and Rose just seem to fit perfectly together (despite the fact that Scorpo has a girlfriend, bad Scorpius, bad)
Youíve just created such realistic characters, and I actually feel like they are real people at times! So thank you very much for this, it makes my day whenever you update!
I think Iíll get into the swing of regular reviewing, but even if you never hear from me again, just know that I am reading, and enjoying every minute of it! Author's Response: Why hello there!
I'm so glad you're enjoying it so far! And I really appreciate you pausing to leave a review. It means a lot to me that people are supportive and enjoying the stories.
I hope to hear from you again--but if I don't, thank you again! You're wonderful :) Report Review
Hey! Siriusly89 here, reviewing!
I canít tell you how many times Iíve read this one-shot, and not reviewed it! Shameful I tell you, shameful. So now, not only am I finally reviewing this, but also helping Team Black with a prompt, so itís a win-win situation over here!
Viola, as ever, seems rather mentally-ill to me. Maybe her own mother really doesnít spend that much time with her, which is why she feels the need to nick poor Lavenders mom, but still, the whole making a bookshelf fall on her, because she stated the obvious, that her mother was not Violaís was a bit much. I actually had a similar experience, of someone treating my mom as their own, but luckily I never had something thrown on top of me!
I love the mention of the way she met Parvati. In the books, they were both described as a bit ditzy and dense, but here you really delve into their personalities, and show us that Parvati resents her sister, and then Lavender has a whole host of underlying issues.
You really do give us such a clear insight into Lavenders mind. She laughs loud because she wants to forget, and she joins the DA to fight, but not necessarily fight Voldemort, to me it seems like sheís sort of raging war on herself, does that make any sense?
I love it, Lavender was drawn to Ron because he seemed a bit out of place too, and more than a bit lost. The description of her Ďcrushí was so well-written, and it sounded like a typical teenage girl, but still with that edge Lavender has. That really doesnít make much sense either, but anyway!
I like Padma, I do. Sheís just so straight forward, and she really doesnít sugar-coat anything, not even to make someone feel better. She sounds like that loner girl that no one really likes, or no one really hates, and she just intrigues me.
Can I just say that I think Padma/Lavender is the best ship of invention? Youíve managed to make the most perfect pairing in just one segment, something it takes some people chapters upon chapters to do!
Again, I really like Padma. She doesnít judge Lavender for who she is, but she doesnít encourage her either. She really is her perfect match.
The ending. Words cannot describe it, but I shall try. Its just so beautiful, and so perfect for this one-shot, and just. . . .. . gah! I told you words couldnít describe it!
Go Team Black! :)Author's Response: Hello Sarahjane :)
Eee you had me flailing at "I can't tell you how many times I've read this one-shot..."
Honestly, I'm so flattered that someone has come back to reread this story of mine despite its length, so thank you soso much! And don't worry about not reviewing before...er...ehehe I'm guilty of ninja-reading as well :P
Your comments about the characters are so insightful! And they really made me think about my own characters. You're right about Lavender joining the DA not because she wants to directly defy Voldemort - but because she's excited, confused, impulsive even...basically she's a bunch of hypersensitive nerve endings :D And I'm glad you pointed out how the Patil twins are different! I was trying to make all the characters real and believable in this story! In the books, all of these characters - Lavender, Parvati, Padma, Trelawney etc. are one-dimensional, so it truly does mean a lot when readers find they can relate to my characters / or that there is depth to their characters.
And gaaah Padma/Lavender the best ship of invention? I think I just melted :O THANK YOU SO MUCH
I'm so happy and honoured to receive this review! Thank you so much once again ♥ And GO TEAM BLACK WOO ♥ ♥
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Hello, Siriusly89 here with your eleven day late review. I am so, so, so sorry it took me this long to review your chapter!
Anyway, Iím here, ready to review!
Gah! I wish I could find this rumour-starting so called Ďfriendí and give her a good talking to! Does she have nothing better to do than stand around gossiping about other people? Now honestly!
And now Malcolm is having a go at Louis. I can completely understand Louis losing the plot, but he really has landed both himself and Freya in hot water now, hasnít he? Because that idiot Malcolm is going to spread it around Hogwarts that the rumours are true. Freya is going to kill Louis, isnít she?
And now the consequences are beginning to set in. Oh no, so now Louis is going to have a very angry Freya, her parents and then his parents on top of that jumping down his throat!
Again, I am so, so sorry about the horrifying length of time it took me to review this for you!
Feel free to re-request! Report Review
Hello, Siriusy89 here with your criminally late review, for which I am so sorry!
Anyway, Iím here, and ready to review!
Oh! This is from Lilyís point of view! I like I, I like it very much. The subtle beginning, just her talking about her summer flowed nicely into her talking about her relationship with Severus, something I really like!
She sort of seeís Severus as the innocent person in all this, in the sense that she seems to think that Severus didnít know what the others were capable of, and then again maybe he didnít, but I just think its Lilyís way of justifying her staying friends with Severus despite it all.
The memories were such a nice touch. I loved the one about James and the grapes! Or then Severus protecting Lily from Petunia (because lets face it, Petunia was a nasty piece of work!) Then, when the cracks begin to show in the relationship, and you can see them both floundering to try and salvage it, when really thereís nothing they can do.
Sorry, I just have to mention it, the memory of James and Lily in the library, priceless!
Severus probing around in Lilyís mind was beyond creepy. If it had been me, I wouldíve run a mile, but I suppose she was his best friend and all that jazz . . . still. . .
Urgh, Petunia. She just needs to get over herself! But hey, at least Lilyís meeting up with Alice, so that might take her mind off of Severus and what a rubbish friend he is!
And weíre back to Jamesí point of view! I love Tibbs, and him/her giving poor old Sirius a mini heart attack. The banter between Sirius and James is something I always enjoy, but especially in this story, as you seem to have gotten their relationship balance just right! Gah!
Oh? James is a right brainiac isnít he? I like that he didnít just get ĎOut standingísí in everything, and I felt as if you really had taught out everything! I love well-planned things! Yay!
And I will bet you anything theyíre going to run into Lily in Diagon Alley!
And back to Lilyís point of view! I like Alice, she seems like a very level-headed individual, and she didnít sympathise with Lily, telling her that her actions towards James were right considering how upset she was, she told it like it was, and I greatly respect her for that!
I canít wait to see what she says to James!
Another great chapter, feel free to re-request! Report Review
Hello, Siriusly89 here with your review that youíve been waiting eleven days for. . . .I am so sorry.
Anyway, Iím here, reviewing!
I like this Sirius. Usually, heís portrayed as a happy-go-lucky prankster, and in this, he seems, well Ďdepressedí seems a bit heavy, but a bit off anyway. His description of life as a Black was also very insightful, and then the explanation for his paranoia, everything was just really well-thought-out.
Lindsay seems like an intriguing character, and you have me wondering about these nightmares of hers.
Oooh? Bellatrix did something to her because of Sirius? Very interesting! Siriusí sense of guilt was also very ĎSirius-likeí if that makes any sense at all. Then the little hint that maybe Sirius suffers from nightmares as well was a very nice touch!
This was a very interesting prologue. I get the feeling thereís more to Lindsays and Siriusí relationship than meets the eye, and Iím interested to see where it goes!
Feel free to re-request!Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! It made my day. :) You are wonderful.
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Hi! Siriusly89 here, reviewing (as you may have guessed!)
Thank you so much for entering my challenge!
The beginning was rather sweet, you know, Justin asking Ernieís permission to take Hannah to the Yule Ball and whatnot. Eloise wouldnít happen to be Eloise Midgeon would it? Gah! Yay if it is! I love when really minor, minor characters get included into things, it makes me so irrationally happy!
Oh! Your use of the quote was just wonderful! It was so weel thought out, and it flowed nicely with the rest of the piece. You really did your homework, as you chose a person who speaks quite, well pompously, and a bit old-fashioned in the books, and the quote just fit him perfectly! Iím not sure how much sense that made, but I loved it anyway, that much you can be sure of!
Eloiseís response, ďThatís niceĒ. That one line, ah, it has me rollin around the place laughing. So funny.
ďYou look ravishingĒ- such an Ernie-ish thing to say. Heís just so darn entertaining, Iím going to go on a hunt for more pieces with him in them (or perhaps you could write more Ernie fun? *hint hint*) Iím joking of course, but Iím not saying I wouldnít love it if you did ;)
The comments on the dancing, especially Harry, because lets face it, he was a bit hopeless. Nope, scratch that, very hopeless. The boys decision not to say how pretty Hermione looked was a good one in my eyes!
Ah, the ending was just so innocent! This one shot was just so sweet and fluffy! Iím sitting here just Ďawhingí at my laptop like a loon, but I donít care.
A brilliant piece!Author's Response: Hello!
Thanks for making that challenge! I really like all of your challenges, haha! We have the same taste! :p
Eloise is Eloise Midgeon, yes. :) I think they'd just be adorable together! :D
Oh, I know. If someone has put minor characters in their fic I just get so happy! I don't know, I just like that they've been included. :p
At first when I saw that quote, I tried writing a Founders era but that just ended horrendously. I don't think I'll ever be able to write those types of fics! So I was thinking about dropping out but I really liked my quote and then Ernie popped in my head, so I'm glad you liked the use of it! :D
I literally sat there for about five minutes trying to work out how she'd respond. :p
Ernie is entertaining. I loved writing him! I think I may write some more of him, and if/when I do, I'll make sure to let you know. ;)
Harry was an awful dancer, and I felt like everyone would have had a bit of a giggle about it. :p Boys can lack common sense at times, but Ernie and Justin were pretty clever about that type of stuff, in my opinion. ;)
I'm so glad you liked it! You're so sweet to me! ♥
Thanks for the AMAZING review! :D Report Review
Hey. . . . .Siriusly89 here with your review that took me eleven whole days to get to and I am so, so, so sorry about that I actually donít even have a legitimate excuse apart from sheer forgetfulness! I am so sorry!
Oooh! Voldemortís point of view. I love the banter between him and Snape, especially when Snape mentions helping Draco. Thatís the exact way Voldemort would have reacted in my mind anyway.
Poor Tori! Griz not aiming at her is about as truthful as the notion that Voldemort is nothing but a big softie on the inside, which is to say that itís nothing but a big pack of lies! Lies I say!
I love it, Terry walks in while Toriís having a mini meltdown. The causal way he approached her was so cute. Gah!
Iím very interested in this plan now! Please tell me they carry it out in this chapter, because itís really bugging me as to what it is!
Toriís inner battle on whether she should be talking to Terry or not is very interesting. Its sort of sad that she views him at the Ďenemyí when really, all he is, is a friendly boy who has taken an interest in her.
I really like Toriís innocence. Her father is her hero, and all she wants to do is be like him when she grows up, pretty much like any child since the beginning of time. Nearly every childís first role-model is their parents. Except, Toriís father isnít a good person to aspire to be, is he? I mean, Tori doesnít seem like Death-Eater material to me, she just seems too innocent, but then again, she probably doesnít realise the full extent of what Death-Eaters do, does she?
Oh! For the first time, Tori sort of realises that some of the pranks the Slytherins pull mightnít be that funny! Interesting!
Another wonderfully wonderful chapter!
Re-request ;)Author's Response: Hola! Thank you for another greatly enjoyable review! :)
I'm happy you liked the beginning with Voldy- I wanted to switch the narrative up a bit, and who better to cameo than You-Know-Who and his favourite follower!
Haha, yeah that Griz is a nasty one, but at least she has mean aim with that Beater's bat! :P
Aw, I'm glad you like Terry and Tor's banter!! I think they're cute, too. But yes, many more conflicted feelings coming up in future chapters! Ahh, and they kind of forget about the revenge plan, but it has since been published and is worth waiting for!!! (or at least I like to think so!)
I'm glad that you think she comes across as innocent, because that's exactly how she is: naive, and stuck in idolizing her Dad without realizing the true implications. She's just detached from the violence of it all, and can only see the glory. But yes, she's starting to see things in a new light!
Thank you so much for the lovely review!! Of course I would love to re-request! :D Report Review
Hello, Siriusly89 with your rather late review, sorry about the wait!
Anyway, Iím here, ready to review!
Oooh! I love prologues, they sort of set the mood donít they? The CI is really pretty by the way.
Your description in this is amazing. I can actually visualise the room, scratched table and all. Thereís something about dimly-lit rooms that gives the whole thing an instant atmosphere, I know Iím only on the first paragraph, but it already feels sort of tense, and Iím anticipating something. I donít know what, but itís something.
Barret and Marwicks conversation while, well Iím guessing sheís a seer did her thing was funny. It had an element of humour to it, but they again that could just be me. I think itís just me.
Oooh! The ending! What a cliff-hanger! Whoís going to murder their wife? I have a horrible suspicion that itís Harry, but Iím praying Iím wrong. Please tell me Iím wrong!
Feel free to re-request, and I promise it wonít take as long for me to get around to the reviewing next time!Author's Response: Don't worry about the wait, I just really appreciate that you've taken the time to do this! :)
I'm so glad that you liked the description - for me, that's a vital part of stories I read, so it's nice to hear that it works in my writing as well (at least in this chapter!) ;)
Haha, I'm surprised that you found it funny! But I guess that it's a bit silly. Barrett is quite a silly character, to be honest, because he's so obsessed with proving himself.
I'm not going to ruin the next chapter by telling you who the murderer is, but I've requested a review for the next one, so if you do that you'll find out! ;) Thank you so much for this lovely review, it really makes me happy to hear that you enjoyed this!! Report Review
Hello there, Siriusly89 with your criminally late review (I am so sorry about the length in which it took me to review this!)
Anyway, Iím here, ready to review.
I loved the introduction, it really set the mood for the rest of the chapter. They seem to love each other, but then they sort of hate each other at the same time, and their relationship is really intriguing!
ĎA trip to the Muggle landí- I know this isnít really supposed to be humorous, but you really got me with that line! Iím just sitting here, laughing away to myself like a loon. No problem whatsoever.
Now, I sometimes can be a little slow to pick up on thins, but Iím just wondering why the boy was so creeped out by Catherine in the first place? Just a question. I get the whole Ďweird batting of eyesí thing, and the whole running after him, but I canít see exactly what turned him off her in the first place. But that really is just me being odd, so I apologise!
Catherine and Domís friendly chat was, well, a bit cold. They donít really seem like best friends, but again, that is more than likely just me! Although it would be nice to see some Catherin/Dom friendshippy moments!
Then her and Astons little banter. Aston really seems like a nice guy, and you can see Catherin warming up to him gradually!
Overall, a nice start. Maybe a little more explanation behind certain things would add to the chapter as a whole, but overall it was really well written!
Feel free to re-request.Author's Response: HIII
Your review was worth the wait :) I will surely mention what ticked catherine off later as well.
Its basically the fact that he didn't try to talk to her. He didn't try to take her to the dance floor. Dom just stormed off with his friend. he was just standing there. Also his shyness. He was running away from her and you know how everyone likes to chase those who want to be away from them. Its like that
He was creeped out because she took him by surprise. Her first influence on him is totally different from who she really is.
Thankyou soo much for this lovely review.
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Hello! Siriusly89 here with your terribly late review! I am so sorry, I really am. I didnít mean for it to take this long, its just life sort of ran away from me and blargh.
Anyway, long story short, I sincerely apologize and I hope this doesnít prevent you from requesting from me in the future!
Aah! I love Romione! There isnít enough of it floating around the forums if you ask me. So I am truly looking forward to reading this.
Just as a side note, I review as I read!
I love the beginning, Ron asking for Harryís help was just so perfect. Because theyíve always had each others backs, no matter what (well, lets not mention the incident during the seventh book, just brush that in under the carpet there.)
The buying of the ring sounds hilarious, I really wish we couldíve seen some dialogue for that, I imagine it being rather funny!
Ginny keeping Hermione out of the way so those two could set everything up. You canít really see me, but Iím laughing. Ridiculously loudly.
You used such brilliant description throughout this, that I can almost visualise the scenes as they happen, which is a thing I love!
And then the ending was just picture perfect. Couldnít have been improved.
Thank you very much for this highly enjoyable Romione one-shot!
Feel free to re-request!Author's Response: No need to apologise! I know as much as we'd like to we can't spend all day on here and the forums haha.
Thank you very much for the review, I'm really glad you enjoyed this story, it's one of my favourites. I have a total soft spot for Ron and you're total right about there not being nearly enough Ronmione stories out there :) I'm slowly working through my one-shots and editing them, I'd never thought to put dialogue in the ring buying part but now that you've said it, I can definitley see that working perfectly-thanks for the tip!
My biggest worry about FF is writing the characters and getting them totally wrong so I'm glad mentioned the portrayal of Harry and Ron's friendship and yes, we'll definitely sweep that 'incident' under the carpet haha!
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Super speedy update! Iím so happe. . . . . .
You have to sympathise with Edie though, the poor girl just sort of threw herself at Jae, without really thinking about what was going to happen after they pulled apart. Just typical Edie, this girl really needs to look before she leaps, not after!
ĎGood-aterí- I have to use that sometime in the near future, I really do. Pure genius.
Poor Edie, I know the feeling. When it is entirely too late, and you know you should really be asleep, but you just stay up typing and re-typing, and the Ďwriting moodí always hits on the night before youíve to get up early or something like that, and youíre just sitting there going ĎI should really be asleep, but I canít stop now!í
Oooh! The first draft of Edieís article. Iíve just read the first two paragraphs, and I can already feel the venom. Oooh, Edie is not a happy camper now is she. Iím just sitting here, pleased as punch, because Oliver needs taking down a peg or two. Whatís he doing kissing Rose when he was after stringing Edie along!
I love how even when Edie is being mildly civil, she still manages to get her little digs in here and there. Take the paragraph where sheís describing Oliverís love for Quidditch, she manages to call him an alcoholic, and slip in his snipe at Kenmare and Ireland (still havenít forgiven him for that! Wait until Seamus hears, he wonít be his hero after that now will he?)
She totally over exaggerates Oliverís obsession at Hogwarts, and I love her for it. In true journalist style, sheís managed to turn something small, such as a passing comment, into something massive. Just love her, and you can bet Iím laughing evilly to myself!
I just loved that article. It was so snarky, but yet had a professional edge to it, if you get me? Just pure genius. I cannot wait until it is published! But wait! If Rose and Oliver are going out, that means Rose might stop it from going to print. If she does that, then well, I wonít be responsible for my actions. Strongly worded letters will be sent her way.
Poor Lisa, I know it has to be hard for the poor girl. She really is very sensitive, isnít she? Justin and his limited emotions are hilarious, although that might just be around Edie. As we all know, she can be anything from mildly awkward, to completely inappropriate! I am so glad sheís going for the job! Yaay! I really hope she gets it. . . .
Yay! No more drinking for Edie. A nice walk really does the same thing, now doesnít it?
OH MY GAWD.
Did not see that one coming.
Although I donít know why Lisa is so upset? She is getting married to the man of her dreams, so shouldnít it sort of be okay? Although I have a feeling thereís more to this than meets the eye. . .
My suspicions are aroused!
Another wonderful chapter! Update soon please!Author's Response: OH MY GOSH THIS REVIEW. :D :D :D
Yes, intersting how Edie accuses Oliver of being thoughtless, and then acts the same way... I can just see them being "that couple" that shows up to dinner parties two hours late with only some paper napkins, or starts political debates with strangers in pubs. What a trainwreck it would be xD
I'm glad the insomnia reads well, as I rarely suffer from it myself. I'm more of the "I'll read this book just to wind down a bit, okay here we go first senten--*snore.*"
Aagggh I was so nervous about the article!! I mean, obviously the one that Edie wrote was really well done, or Witch Weekly would never consider expanding the magazine. I talked it up so much and then had to actually write it xD Maybe it's not the kind of stellar work that Edie did, but I hope it suffices!
Oh my gosh, you're right--I have to include how Seamus feels about Oliver's disproval of Kenmare! It's too good to pass up! Thanks for the suggestion :D
Yes, Lisa is abnormally sensitive these days, if you catch my drift ;D ;D ;D I was so worried about including this in the plot, because I think these kinds of stories get some serious flack on HPFF (at least when involving teens or people outside of relationships.) But I couldn't help but include this little bit of feminism, that even if you ARE married, you may just not want to take that extra step.
Hmm, no, there's not more than meets the eye. (I'm so glad I have everyone paranoid by now though!! haha xD) Lisa was upset because, yeah, sure, she wants a kid. But a few years down the road, when she is prepared, and when she's gotten her "three years of marital bliss." Some people think that's selfish; personally, I think jumping right into parenthood before you are emotionally/financially prepared is selfish. And I think that's all I do as for answering your question :P
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Hello there, Siriusly89 with your very, very late requested review. I am so sorry about the wait, and hopefully, should you choose to request again, it wonít take quite as long!
Anyway, Iím here, ready as ever to review!
I like that you showed us this specific scene through James eyes. To be honest, I never really understood how Harry didnít get what ĎL.Eí stood for in OOTP. Now come on, really?
One thing I really liked was that you made sure to describe Jamesí fascination with Lily in a way typical to teenage boys. I donít care what anyone says, no fifteen year old can be in love, yes it can grow into love when they get older, but itís just not possible. And then sometimes you read these stories where James is professing his undying love for Lily, without even explaining how he came to feel like this about her and it just annoys me. Whereas in this, while it is obvious James likes Lily a lot, itís because sheís a pretty girl whom he annoys to get her attention, but who he secretly likes. The end.
Poor Jamesí conscience finally seems to be catching up with him. Lilyís competitive side is also very endearing, because sometimes sheís painted as a bit of a saint-like figure, you know, loved by all, hated by none, whereas in my mind at least, sheís a bit like Hermione. You know, canít really handle not being the best at something, and if sheís rubbish at something, she writes it off as a waste of time.
James is a secret smarty! I loved their discussion on the Transfiguration question, in a way, it was sort of him showing Lily that heís not the worst person in the world through a common interest. And it was just one of those Ďawhí moments.
Gah! Well Lilyís mood has done a 360 turn around, hasnít it? I know that, theoretically, it is sort of Jamesí fault, but in all fairness it did show her what type of person Severus really was. I can understand her being mad at James, but her last comment was just harsh.
I am now very intrigued!
Feel free to re-request!Author's Response: Hi there! Thank so very much for coming by to review my story.
I'm really glad you liked James's point of view and his thoughts towards Lily and I really love that you enjoyed the Transfiguration moment.
I do really hope you wouldn't mind my requesting again! I would really love to hear of your opinion for the next chapters as well :)
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Hello, Siriusly89 here with your very late review, for which I am very sorry for!
It seems I start every review with that first line these days. . . . .ah well, now is not the time to ponder my shoddy time-keeping abilities!
Awh, Toriís making an effort to look good for her little crush! Naww. . . . .although Iím not sure how sheís going to react when she finds out that heís a Muggleborn, somehow I donít think thatís going to end well.
Astoriaís day sounds hectic! A little like mine, minus the whole magic part, and the preventing someone from hexing a Ravenclaw, but she sounds like a girl who has a million things to do all at one time!
The boys giving her Quidditch tips was pretty cute. I was just sitting there going, awh, you donít think Astoria knows what sheís doing, thatís nice, just wait Ďtill you see her in action. Because, lets face it, we all know Astoriaís going to be brilliant at Quidditch. Seriously. And if sheís not, I shall eat my hat.
GAH! SHE WALKED INTO THE MUGGLEBORN! YAY!
Mysterious muggleborn is Terry Boot! For some reason, I had it in my head that M.M was a Hufflepuff, but now we know heís a Ravenclaw. HANG ON! Phin hexed a Ravenclaw outside D.A.D.A, right? What if that was Terry?
Wait, Terrys not in Astorias class. Never mind. .. . .
Their little banter was very well done. They arenít falling all over each other, but thereís definitely some subtle flirting going on, and I love to read that, you know, the whole poking fun at one another, all the while batting eyelashes. Itís just brilliant.
Wohoo! Astoria is right on track to become seeker! That little piggy Griz just needs to leave her alone.
One snitch, I told you my prediction would come true!
Two snitches, I should so become a seer!
HOLD IT! That stupid Griz hit her in the back of the HEAD? What is wrong with that girl? She needs help, and lots of it! Stupid Griz, stopping Astoria from becoming the seeker, making me wrong. Grr. . . . ..
Feel free to re-request!Author's Response: Ahh, I love your reviews, they make me laugh :)
I love making Tor snap out of Death Eater child mode for a little and just act like a normal fifteen year old! I'm glad you think Terry and Tor seem to have good chemistry, I'm hoping that their relationship proves to be quirky and funny the way it is in my head instead of all Twilight-esque swooning and all that.
Astoria is really busy, and I'm sure all the identity crises in the upcoming chapters won't help with that at all! :P
Yes, Griz is just mean, isn't she! Well no worries, they get her back... in, like, Chapter 17... but eventually, she gets what's coming for her!!! It's too bad Tor got attacked during the trials, but I guess not everybody gets to be a Quidditch player. Although I'd totally be one if I was at Hogwarts. Definitely.
Thanks for another great and entertaining review! :D I'll definitely re-request. :) Report Review
HelloÖÖÖ.Sarahjane here with your terribly late review, for which I am very sorry!
Aah! The 1940ís is my hands-down favourite era! Itís so eerily intriguing, and some of the things that went on scare me half to death, but I still love to learn about it and . .ah, itís really hard to explain, but Iím just going to end of this completely irrelevant paragraph here. Very long story short, I canít wait to read this!
Camille is a very interesting character (I know we are only on the first paragraph but anyway!) She looks the part of an innocent young woman, yet she really is an assassin in disguise. She would be the definition of femme fatale, in my eyes anyway.
Astrid seems, well no, mentally disturbed doesnít seem the right word, but you know what I mean. Shell-shocked doesnít seem to fit it either, but itís like she knows what sheís doing, but she doesnít at the same time, if that makes any sense at all! Aah! I love novels like this, you know, the ones that make you think and analyse things!
Nope, I was wrong. Johanna is femme fatale. You have created such strong female leads, I love it! Because lets face it, back in the 1940ís it was the men that went off to war, and here are the girls doing their piece as well! Girl power!
I like that youíve included some male roles as well. We donít learn much about Xavier, but he seems to grasp the whole situation better than the girls do. Well, Astrid is sort of dead on the inside due to her sister being killed, but the other two still seem to have a sort of, well, not innocence, but naivety about them, whereas Xavier seems to be facing death square in the face screaming ĎShow me what youíve got!í
Poor Simons a prisoner. I like how youíve included a prisoner as well, as it really gives balance to the whole thing. Itís making me very uneasy though, because Iíve read about what went on in those torture camps, and I really donít want to have to see that happening to someone. . . . .see what I mean? Intriguing, yet it scares me. But itís just so darn interesting! Gah!
The insight into the French M.O.Mís efforts to try and overthrow the corrupted Muggle government, without revealing the presence of magic is very interesting, it also pieces together everyone. Camille, Astrid, Johanna, Xavier and now Jean are not just running around killing and imperusing for the sake if it, it has structure and a base, a bit like the Order of the Phoenix, except a bit more lenient about the killing.
Oh my good God! Jean is related to the mayor who they have to kill, and Johanna and Simon were dating and then he got deported and I hope they get him out and youíve just left me on a plot twist and I am definitely favouriting and please feel free to re-request!
And Apolline is Fleurs mother. I actually got that first time round, but I was so busy babbling, I forgot about it. BUT WAIT! If Apollines dead, that means no Fleur. . . . GAH! I need answers!
I am so favouriting.Author's Response: Hello Sarahjane! I'm late in responding, we're even...
Camille is more of an innocent young woman than she seems, as you might know from reading on. Johanna is most definitely a femme fatale though!
I like your interpretation of Astrid being sort of mentally disturbed, even though I'd never thought of it like that. She is more than a little disturbed by her sister's death, that's for sure.
Well of course there would be men in this story! Haha, your description of Xavier made me laugh, but it fits.
Oh don't worry, I feel horribly uneasy about writing Simon's scenes, and that plus the ToS limits what you will read about. I had to include him though -- I couldn't talk about WW2 without the camps.
A bit like the Order of the Phoenix, absolutely, but they have less morals.
Haha nope, Apolline isn't Fleur's mothers! Astrid is Fleur's grandmother, and I thought it'd make sense that she'd name her daughter after her deceased sister. Which already lets you know that yes, Astrid will survive. SPOILER ALERT WHAT.
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Hi there, Siriusly89 here with your requested review, which is insanely overdue and I sincerely apologise about this!
Iím going to guess that the first person we come into contact with is a Muggle, due to their wish to become a doctor, not a healer. Yay! I love wizard/muggle ships, because its so fun seeing the wizard/witch try to explain. . . .ah. . .
Iím suspecting the girl ordering her Ďusualí is Lily, am I right? Iím right, I know Iím right!
Heís Irish! Instant connection. I love him already! And heís a Motherís boy, and for some reason I just find that really adorable. So I hope his mother makes a cameo at some point in time!
Wait, the waitress is Lily, never mind. . . .
I would recommend getting this beta read though, as there were a few grammatical errors, but other than that, it was a very nice introduction, and you have me wanting to know more!
Feel free to re-request, I promise it wonít take as long next time!Author's Response: Hey,
Thank you so much for this review.
I'm thinking of asking for a beta, it would be a good think... I'll make a topic for it some day in the future :)
The idea of a muggle trying to find his way into the magical world always amused me, especially when they are grown up and don't believe things that easy any more. And there is the fact that he will have to learn to live with it over time... but first he has to find out and I'm not planning on letting that happen very soon.
I had a plan with this girl had ordered her usual, but I totally forgot about her. I have to give her a comeback, I think...
I'l definitely re-request, I liked your review.
Thanks again and till the next one :)
Hello! Yay, new chapterino! :)
Oh how Iíve missed Edie.
The sarcastic salute, I salute Edie for that. Because fit people just get on my nerves, stop jogging and just eat some cake for Godís sake!
Edieís inner dilemma on whether to do her job, and ruin not only Oliverís career, but undoubtedly their relationship, or to just gloss over that, and live in a cardboard box with nothing to eat and no hope of ever finding a job in journalism again, but still have her little romance with Oliver is rather complex, isnít it? Iím not even sure if all that made sense, but it did to me, so anyway.
I personally hope Edie writes her article, because we all know that Oliver will forgive her (cough, he wonít, cough, perfect opportunity to set her up with Dean or Simon! Letís not forget the Simon!)
SEAMUS! Of course Seamus had to turn up in the park, its where all the Seamusí of the world go to socialize, and have awkward encounters with their friends.
AH! SEAMUS IS A DEDIE SHIPPER! And, as we all know, what Seamus says, goes, so they have to get together now. They just have to. YOU GO SEAMUS. I didnít think it was possible, but I love him even more now.
Edie has developed a habit, of well, not lying because that makes her sound all manipulative and evil, but lets just say Ďhiding the truthí when really what she needs to do is confide in her friends, because theyíre going to get really angry when they find out all the stuff sheís been hiding from them (well, Dean will, Seamus will more than likely shrug and go make himself a cheese sandwich.
Oh Seamy, its okay, Iíll move in with you if Edie wonít, Iíll even ignore the spiders (even though I have a deadly fear of them. . . .) but anything for you, Seamy, anything.
I think I have a problem. Iím entirely too obsessed with Seamus. Itís actually a problem.
Now this is just freaky. I have been wondering ever since the last chapter what Edieís roll in the war was, and weíve just learned it now. Awh.I was hoping she would have stayed on and kicked some Death Eater butt, but I do understand that not every student was very keen on the idea of dying. Her mother did the right thing, sometimes when Iím reading DH, I wonder how on earth the parents left their children in Hogwarts, but this just shows that Edieís mother had her priorities straight!
Ah Edie and her apparating around Witch Weekly, even apparating is hilarious with this girl. Ah. . . . . .
HOLD IT! HOLD EVERYTHING!
Oliver is kissing Rose??? Well itís more like Rose kissing Oliver but still! I hate him, I hate her, I hate them both! Edie deserves more than that slime ball, I hope she writes the article and destroys him and runs off into the sunset cackling madly! Grrr... .
Awh, poor Edie. but what on earth is she going to Jae for, when Dean and Simon are both ready and available, that girl, Iíll never understand her.
Although thatís why sheís so endearing, she just mucks up so much its impossible not to love her!
Another wonderful chapterino!Author's Response: Hey, you snagged the first spot again! Nice ;3
Ugh, yes. Her dilemma is quite complex... sometimes I think almost too much so! I keep trying to simplify things in the plot when I'm writing, but there's so many things going on. So I guess this story is just going to be as chaotic as Edie's life!
I totally thought about you when I was writing Seamus in this chapter :P That bit where he realizes exactly why she's trying to get in shape has been in the plot for a while, but initially it was going to just be mentioned in passing. But I just have too much fun with Seamus! (I totally snorted at the cheese sandwich comment. Because he totally would. But it would be at Edie's flat, when she isn't there, with her bread and cheese.)
Edie's role in the war is actually important to the plot (BECAUSE I CAN'T JUST PICK ONE PLOT TWIST AND STICK WITH IT, GUH.) But it has a lot to do with why she tries to be so politically opinionated and active now.
Hahaha! I totally should have had her go to Simon, I didn't even think about that. Well, Jae is more important to the story, but I can't shake the image of Kate Nash and Simon Pegg--two gingers. Too cute. :P
Thank you so much for this review! It was so entertaining to read! I can't quite get over the cheese sandwich... ♥ Report Review
Hello! Siriusly89 here with your very, very, very late review. I am so sorry! I really am! Please donít be too mad!
Anyway, Iím here, reviewing!
Ahahaha, ĎIs he even smart enough to fancy someone?í-pure genius. And itís only the second line.
Couldnít Amaris and Goyle get together and leave poor Astoria be? Hey! Thereís a plan, set those two up, and leave Astoria free for the charming muggleborn, who is making his debut in this chapter, if Iím not mistaken?
Wow. Remind me to never get on Astoriaís bad side. That girl has a sharp tongue!
Ahh, youíve got to love Goyle and his desperate attempts to talk to poor Tor, I almost feel bad for him. Almost. I would never inflict him on poor Tor, but maybe he could find love with someone? Donít leave the poor bloke alone anyway.
AH! THE MUGGLEBORN! Heís the guy in the room, isnít he, if heís not, then Iíll eat my hat (metaphorically of course, I donít think I own a hat) but anyway.
The conversation is really, endearing! He is just a real charmer, and you can see Tor falling for it hook, line, and sinker. Although she probably has a few tricks up her sleeve, so we wonít write her off just yet.
The pug, named Pansy, has to be the best part. No objections. The best.
Again, many, many apologies on the lateness of this review, but do feel free to re-request!Author's Response: Haha that's perfectly okay! I'm glad that you liked the Goyle-bashing, although I do agree that it gets a little harsh. Although his unrequited crush on Astoria is very hopeless, and he should probably catch a hint!
Hmm, Goyle and Amaris getting together, that's an idea! It would solve some problems, anyway!
I'm glad you liked the conversation between Astoria and the Muggleborn, I think they're very sweet together!!! No need to eat your poor hat, you were right :P Also, the pug named Pansy sealed the deal for Tor I'm pretty sure. Not only that he has a pug, but shares her dislike of mean old Pansy!
Thank you so much for reviewing!!! :) I will be very happy to re-request!!
Hello! Siriusly89 here with your very, very, very late review (Iím so sorry!)
Anyway, Iím here, ready to review!
I love how Ton just forgot about her sister for a whole week, although to be fair, Hogwarts sounds like a pretty big place (its massive) so, really her not seeing her sister for a week isnít such an alien idea after all. Huh, who knew?
The conversation about the Weasleyís get-together is so plausible, I can actually see it happening! Ahahahaha, Ginny fell off her chair. . . . .ha. . . . .
Summer and Autumn tag-teaming poor Matthew and Henry didnít seem all that fair to me, never mess with two women, especially when they know each other inside out and thus can cover each others weak spots, its inviting them to hand you your butt on a platter.
I love Matthew, Henry and Summer together. They are not allowed go out with each other, or anyone else. They are just to stay best friends, and wash each others socks. Okay? Good.
Awh. . . .. you got my hopes up there for a minute. I thought Lorcan was a boy, because I love the idea of gay James, heíd be like a very camp Sirius! Out of all the Next-Gen-ers, I always felt like either James or Louis would turn out to be gay. . . .
Ah well, you canít have everything. Lorcan sounds like good fun though, doesnít she? Maybe she could make more appearances later? Please?
Itís snowing in September? Or have we jumped forward in time and I just havenít noticed? Itís more than likely me. . . .
We jumped forward in time. Knew it1 I am a genius! Well, not really, but anyway!
Aah! Autumn and Louis are going to Hogsmeade together! I think I know whatís going to happen. . . . .. .
Autumn and Louis sittiní in a tree,
Feel free to re-request, I promise it wonít take as long next time.Author's Response: It's not so much forgets as has a billion other things to think about, and now your comment has my brain buzzing with a plunny of someone who gets lost inside Hogwarts and never finds his way out muahaha.
Ahem. Yes, poor Ginny. And poor Matthew and Henry, they didn't stand a chance. And yes, they will wash each other's socks for the reast of their lives. I promise.
Haha, yeah, we moved through time.
K-I-S-S-I-N-G? Maybe, maybe not!
Thank you for your review, and no apologies are required honestly!
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