Reading Reviews From Member: Morganna
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Review #1, by MorgannaA Hundred Million Freckles: just because.

1st September 2012:
Hey Morganna here with your requested review!

To answer your questions, I personally think that the unique elements incorporated within this story is quite intriguing. The fact that it doesn't have a complete 'novel-like' plot doesn't bother me at all and I'm impressed that you wrote the characters in so well. I loved the descriptions and the romantic concept!!! Although the POV was a bit confusing. It seemed like there were times when we would be seeing Lily through James's eyes then jumped to a third party POV. Nothing too distracting though :)

Overall, I think that this was a really cute one-shot. I think it has potential to be a short story... novella maybe??? haha


Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for stopping by! I'm really glad that you enjoyed this oneshot; I really appreciate you addressing all of my concerns and thank you for the compliments! I didn't realize the issue with the POV until recently when someone pointed it out; now that I've had a third opinion on it, I think it's due for an edit. Once I get some free time to look it over, I'll definitely address it :)
I really appreciate that you think this has the potential to be a short story or novella! Thank you! I think it's going to stay as is (I like the "completed" status waaay too much, haha) but I would like to write a longer James/Lily story sometime.
Thank you so much again for reading!


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Review #2, by MorgannaHappily never after: Begging with a lot of tears

1st September 2012:

Hey! Morganna here with your requested review! As per your request, here's a general review!

Just as I have said, this is a very heartbreaking opening. Already there's emotion within the chapter as a family is torn apart by the cruel realities of their world. Because of that emotion it makes me, as a reader, want to read more of this. I like the way that you've ported Remus in this chapter. He resembles the canon so far. I can't wait to read on :D

Good job!

Author's Response: Hey, glad you felt the emotion of the chapter and that it made you want to read on! :)
Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by MorgannaNobody Breaks My Heart: Introduction

27th August 2012:
Hi! Morganna here!

I think that you are off to a good start here. I'm loving the ambiguity of the opening scenes as well as the descriptive area that you have about Kaya. I'm assuming that you'll elaborate more on her character as the story progresses.

As for characterization, I'm liking your original character already. She seems to have quite an edge to her. I'll have to talk more about her in the later chapter as this is just the beginning. Good job so far!

Although I did see a few grammatical errors, as well as some comma usage/ position issues. Don't worry those can easily be fixed ^_^ This chapter also felt a little to abrupt due to its length. However, you did give us (the readers) a fair warning that this was the introductory chapter, I can let this slide ;)

As I had mentioned earlier, I like how your introduction really opened up a lot of opportunities for you story! It really places your readers at a position that keeps their curiosity rolling. Good job!

I can't wait to read more!


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