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Review #1, by Sparxfly93Overcoming Darkness: Facing Lucius

30th November 2012:
Love the story. Are you gonna write more of it anytime soon? I actually favorited it a couple months ago so I could keep an eye on it and I've been back quite a few times since then, waiting for more, so if you had any plans to continue, please do so.

Author's Response: I'm so sorry for abandoning it! I logged in on a whim the other day and saw all the reviews and favorites and felt so much guilt I had to finish up the ending lol.
Thank you so much for reading! xx


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Review #2, by Sparxfly93It's All About Hermione: Chapter 13

18th July 2012:
there are a lot of inconsistincies in your story. For example, at the end of the last chapter, the girl called Ginny freckle-face, but at the beginning of this, you have it as slime-face. Also, your story is very confusing, such as when you switch the POV, you also switch the time, then you switch POV again, and the time is switched again. Therefore your story is not going in order and you have a bunch of different times mixed in with every other time. Do you get what I'm saying here?
Plus your grammar and punctuation need a lot of work. You use contractions in the wrong place (You'll won't be), you forget to end words properly (Wouldn't be surprise if), and you switch from present-tense to past-tense in the same sentences(flushes red, glared at). And if I got all that from the first paragraph of your story, the rest must be riddled with mistakes.
Personally, I think the idea for the story/plot was good, but maybe you should take some writing/english classes and get a beta or friend to read over every thing you write.

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Review #3, by Sparxfly93Rolling Stone: Chapter 18

16th July 2012:
the chapter seemed perfect to me. but if you are going to re-write it, maybe you could add some detail about Ginny's costume(the color, bows or not, length, etc.) and the outfit Draco will be wearing. There are many different colors of suits and is he wearing a bow-tie or a regular tie? Anywasy, like I said, great chapter either way and I hope you update soon.

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Review #4, by Sparxfly93Scars: Revelations- Part 2

10th July 2012:
I'm gonna pull a Ginny Weasley and bat boogey hex you if you don't update as soon as possible :)

Author's Response: Eek!! Please store your wand safely away.
Don't worry the next chapter is coming. I will definitely be posting before Friday. It just needs a few tweaks and then it will be ready, but it will be worth the wait. ; )


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