This was the cutest story I have ever read. Rose and Scorpius have never been more adorable as a couple and you know, I did actually think that Rose had a stomach flu until the healer asked when she last had her period so...I wasn't really expecting the whole pregnancy part. I really liked the way you portrayed them as a couple, still with the banter and the witty comebacks but sort of still in the honeymoon stage of their relationship and on a high.

I didn't spot any grammatical errors and this read really well and comfortably. The dialogue felt really natural and uplifting - kind of like a story you would read on a rainy day as a pick me up. I thought that the way you wrote Scorpius's reaction to finding out Rose was pregnant was really cute, I kind of had a flashback to watching a video about this couple finding out they are pregnant after thinking they couldn't have a child. It made me feel all fuzzy inside which is a nice feeling to have :P

Super adorable and downright perky - I'd love to read some more of your work in the near future, really great job! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed it! I wanted it to be sweet and just happy, even though the couple had to face some nerves along the way!

Thank you for the review!

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So I read this twice because I enjoyed it so much although I can't figure out who it is...is it Scorpius and Rose? Or one of the Lysander brothers? But it doesn't really matter cause I loved this. I like the way you interwove present with past and you truthfully told the story of a breakup. I felt so sorry for the girl, she just wasn't expecting it at all and that's always the worst - even worse she feels unwanted and rejected which is even more painful. I love how honest this story is, the writing is delicious however sad and angsty. The final goodbye is really heartbreaking and cold, and throughout the whole fic I was glued to the writing. You write with originality and honesty and its truly refreshing from other fics I've read.

I do not usually read fics like this but this is enough to change my mind and actually inspire me to write something like this. I did prefer the break up snippets more but that's because I'm a sadist;) I was a bit wary at the beginning how you were going to end the fic but I like the way you ended the relationship because sometimes, no matter how hard you try there just isn't a happy ending and I believe a happy ending would t have given the reader the same effect. It's written so well and I felt as if I really knew the characters by the end of it and I was watching a breakup between friends. I must commend you on your realism, it's really amazing how you use it so effectively.

Love this story, I'd recommend it any day,
Mazzayyy

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Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much, seriously, I know I've said that already, but this particular story is very dear to my heart and it's definitely my favorite. And I think that's because some of her feelings were really my feelings and it made this so much harder to write.

But moving on, I'm surprised you can't figure out who it is, I've only had one other person tell me this. But here's a hint: it's not Next-Gen, it's Post-Hogwarts. And the girl is someone most people loathe.

I'm glad you think the break-up and story is honest though, and that you called my writing "delicious," lol it made me smile. And you are right, there isn't always a happy ending and this one was certainly not happy, but maybe it was for the best.

I love that you love this story, and please feel free to recommend it. Thank you so much for all the wonderful reviews! I enjoyed every word of them. They definitely made my day.

xxEnigmaticEyes16

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This was a hilarious story, I started to imagine afterwards what it would be like for me if Sao done just randomly ran up to me, grabbed me by the arm and told that I was now a hostage and to become part of the traditional 'Bring a muggle to school day'. I love the way Fred and George don't even really question it, just follow Melina and grab a muggle. But I have to say my favourite part was when they couldn't see the castle and there was a momentary panic in all of them and then they finally start questioning the validity of 'Bring a muggle to school day'. So is there such thing, I'm guessing not since mcgonagal goes skitz when they turn up, but why would Melina make it up? I would have liked to find out I'd she was tricked or something into believing that this was a real tradition or if she had just made it up as a prank that went wrong or something. But I do like Melina and her impulsive nature:P

Your writing, again, is flawless. I loved the little interactions between the muggles and the wizards and the comments that were made by the 'hostages'. I think you ends the story quite cleverly with the muggle managing to cause mayhem for the Wizards and not the other way round. Poor Minnie, she probably isn't best pleased with whats just occurred. I really like the way you tell a story, it's got a lovely organic process and this story was especially original. I really enjoyed it and I hope you write more humour because personally, I believe it's a strength of yours.

Lots of love,
Mazzayyy

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Author's Response: Aww, you write awesome reviews. I can't even imagine what I'd do if someone actually grabbed me and apparated and told me all this stuff I didn't understand.

This was so much fun to write. Although in the beginning I really didn't think it was that funny nor did I know what sort of response I would get.

I love the bits with the muggles too, and not being able to see the castle. I had so much fun writing it, but I knew I had to take into consideration everything I knew about Hogwarts and the Wizarding World's protective charms so that I wouldn't get yelled out from some serious by-the-book devotee, but all in all I think it worked out really well. I was going to have them drag the muggles into the castle, but the thought of McGonagall finding them first was so much more tempting.

Just to be clear, I don't think there is actually a 'Bring a Muggle to School' Day considering all their wizard statute of secrecy and all. But did Melina just make it up? Did someone else tell her about it? I don't know. I too like Melina though, I'd like to write another one-shot of her. Actually I've started one, but it's not so much about pranking as this is.

Haha, the muggles do cause more mayhem for the wizards than the other way around. That is true. The trio is clearly in trouble at the end and the muggles will have to be obliviated and sent home.

And, again, I'm so happy you like my writing and thought the story was original. I had a lot of fun writing it. I didn't put as much planning into it as other stories, I just sort of let this one flow. I would like to write more humor, but everything always turns into angst for some reason.

Thanks so much for the amazing review!
xxEnigmaticEyes16

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This was a gorgeous piece of fiction about feeling like you didn't fit in in the worst place - your family. The story is very relatable to anyone because so many people believe that they aren't good enough or not as clever, funny or pretty as other people but it hits you a lot harder when you are comparing yourself or are compared to people in your family who you shouldn't hate but end up hating due to this. This story is fantastic, you explain in detail all the flaws that Lucy feels in her and talk about her home, the people surrounding her and her sister. I loved the way you portrayed Molly at the end, helping her sister to strive to be better for her own sake and not for other people's, it sends out a good message to readers and its such a lovely moment between the two.

I think Percy is a harsh father and it is exactly how I would have portrayed him. Percy was always going to be a strict father, even Fred's death wouldn't of changed that so I'm glad you thought his character through and his phrases sounded realistic and pompous. Your writing is so lovely, it flows so well and so many people try and throw in odd, long words to make themselves sound like they know their Collins dictionary but when you do it all fits and gels and compliments your writing to a huge degree. Overall, this is a lovely story which is superbly heartwarming and readers are drawn to Lucy even though she doubts her qualities. Also she wants to be an actress, like me, so there's that;)

Brilliant Story,
Mazzay

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Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Your review's made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. I know I've said this isn't my favorite, but I just reread it because it's been a while, and even I have to admit, it is good. You're very right in your observations about how hard it can be to fit into a family you don't feel you fit into. She's like the next-gen's Ron. And my Lucy felt a lot of jealousy and hate towards her own sister. I'm glad you liked the end where Molly strives to help Lucy and make a real connection with her. I have to agree that it does set a good message for readers to take into consideration for their own lives.

And I think Percy was always going to be a harsh father and so naturally it'd be hard for someone like Lucy to grow up as his daughter since he's such a stickler for perfection.

I'm so happy you liked the writing style and the story overall. It means a lot to me.

Thanks so much for the lovely review!
xxEnigmaticEyes16

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I really like this story, and I find Ava to be a very loveable although clearly she has some real problems with alcohol;) as does Louis. The way you put so much detail in makes the story really thought provoking and addictive. You have quite a flair with humour, the banter between Louis and Ava is really hilarious! I hope you continue with this, as I really think that this is a story to look out for. Also there are already some secrets that I'm dying to see uncovered like the elusive Ian and why they are working in a diner and not the wizarding world. Love this!

Author's Response: Thank yoouu ♥ I do love Ava as well, although she does have some... issues. I've tried really hard to work on writing details into the story, so thanks for mentioning that! Ava and Louis are just so much fun to write that it's easy to make the banter come out ;) I am definitely continuing with this, so don't worry about that! Thank you so much for the lovely review!

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Oh my god. The language of this fic is absolutely exquisite. I'm literally sitting here just.marvelling. There are some really stunning sentences, and as a Podcaster, I suggest you volunteer this story over at HPPC because people over there will be clawing each other to read this. Some of the sentences in this are so perfect and eye opening. The way you refer to him as a Mosaic, and your subtle references to Myths really add a lovely effect to the antsy-ness of this fic. Really, really lovely. Off to go and check whether you have a couple more fics because you have won me over with this beautifully crafted piece of art. Ah, it was so good!

Author's Response: wow this review just cheered me up so much, i really have no words i'm blushing too much right now! thanks so much for the words of kindness they really mean a lot to me and i'll be sure to check out hppc :) thanks for stopping by, it really means a lot.

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Submitted this chapter over at HPPC and I have to be honest with you Jess... It's totally legen-wait for it- dary. Although I redid this chapter about 5 times to make it all smooth, some of Spencer's rants make me start giggling I the middle and then get mad at myself for not having enough self control;) I love how this chapter is just centred around the two of the chasing each other and yet you get so sucked in that it literally feels like they've been going from scene to scene and all over the place and what not. James makes me shiver when he has a go at Danny. Danny was particularly inappropriate in this one but his line is pretty hilarious.,"this is boobguy isn't it?" Love that line. Oh they are so cute but I am definitely like spencer,I can't stand being tickled.unless its by James potter. Then I think it could be bearable...sorry about the mistakes but I am typing this on my phone hahah

Author's Response: IT IS LEGENDARY MAZ; I LISTENED TO IT AND I LOVED IT!!!
Gaaah Maz, you're just so wonderful :) And I would LOVE to be tickled by James Potter; everyone else is not allowed to, however. And Danny...that boy is so weird and creepy but I just can't help but love him xD
Thank you so much much for reading and reviewing!

~Jess :D

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Such an amazing chapter. It was so hard to keep my face straight when Spencer started to interrogate James and totally thinks he is a stalker or thief of some kind. He is so adorable, I wish I could have my own personal James to stick in my back pocket and cuddle hahaha, love the part when spencer goes , "I love cheesy rom-coms from the 90s!" Definitely one of my favourite lines ever, mainly because it totally applies to me! Reading it allowed definitely let me listen out for the epicness of this story, when I first read it I missed out some thing's but oh my god, Jenny has already picked up on how much of a fan girl I am...I'm your Danny.uhoh maybe I should start making inappropriate comments, but I already do that I real life so...;) anyway, adorable chapter, love it to the max!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm personally not a fan of this chapter at all, but I'm glad that you like it! However, I do love the way that you read it :) I would love to have my own personal James; we're on the same page right there haha! We'll find him Maz; he's somewhere ;) And I love cheesy 90s rom-coms too! They're just so cheesy and so perf xD
And I would be honored to have you as my Danny haha :D

Love you girlie!

~Jess :D

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Love this one shot even though it made feel really really blue. I don't think i'd ever want to experience the pain that Lysander is going through and hopefully I never will have to. This is written so realistically and beautifully, I honestly felt heartbroken after reading it. The reader can really get into the headspace of Lysander and the agony he feels. I think you used your quote really well. Lorcan and Lysander, being twins, will always be compareable as twins always are. It's a sad reality but I do believe that having a sibling already starts off the comparability and being a twin would double it. Love this one shot, it's so captivating.

Love Maz x

Author's Response: Hi Maz! Thank you so much for stopping by and reading this! I really appreciate it :) And I'm so glad that you liked it - that makes me so happy! I've always felt that being a twin would be very hard; Fred and George were very lucky that they just ended up being built-in best friends, but not everyone is so fortunate. So I wanted to write about twins that had a rocky relationship.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing deary! Lots of love!

~Jess :D

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I really love the way this is presented and, although short, it is engaging and completely fabulous. I adore the way you have made Georgia an innocent victim, it's kind of like they're putting innocent people in askaban instead of finding really vicious killers. The whole boat journey reminds me of the river Nyx in greek mythology, the whole thing where you have to take a boat to get to hell or the underworld. Overall, a sad and agrivating story that really makes you kind of angry at the world, which I don't knoww if that was your desired effect but...yeah... Love it Jen!

Author's Response: Wow, Maz, this is deep. And also very cool. I will tell everyone now that I tried to make it like Greek mythology. :D
Georgia's innocence was intentionally supposed to be vague/confusing, but I'm glad you thought she was innocent, because I kinda think she is too :)

Thanks for reviewing, Mazzie xD

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Love doing the voices of Spencer's father and Danny so much, in fact, Danny's voice is my favourite one to do because his lines are so rude and hilarious. I have a Danny at home however he is less the stalker more the village idiot... The bit with spencer and James is such a lovely bit, I really enjoyed reading it because I think it gives so much more depth to the story plus it's kind of magical how Spencer can imagine things like that.it could be what actually happens? If it doesn't then I'm a bit of a plonker but hey ho;) onto chapter 3 which is coincidentally, my favourite

Author's Response: Thank you! I actually love you doing everyone's voices!!! They just make me really happy! I've started writing this story with your voice in the back of my mind (is that weird? haha)!!! I seriously adore your podcasts :D

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So, I've joined a reviewing competition and opened up an account on HPFF and so I thought what better way than to review the story that I podcast because it is so amazingly awesome. I remember recording this slower than the rest, getting used to the rants that spencer has to do and trying really hard not to laugh. My favourite moment has to be, because I am such a romance addict, when Spencer meets James...all I could think about was, THIS IS SO CUTE BUT SHE'S A MUGGLE, WHAT? I had never read any muggle stories before this, I decided to give this one a shot and I have to be honest, it's because you're banner was so frickin cool. Gotta love Gaspard and Lucy Hale as a couple :P such an amazing start to a story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much Maz! I'm so glad that you enjoy this story, that you podcast for it, and that you've decided to review it for the competition! Break a leg! (I'm a theatre performance major; "Good luck" isn't a part of our vocabulary haha) Thanks again, deary! :D

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So! Louis wants to clarify things? Eh, eh? That can only mean one thing...it's love, love, love;) yeah okay, I am in a sappy mood. Love your description of how Ciaran explains the feeling of blindness, it's really intriguing and gives you an inkling of how he must feel, however one never truly knows until it's happened... Jack is out of the hospital wing! I'm expecting a lot of arguing between him and Lucy, seeing as they seem to wind each other up hahaha, and Ciaran seems to want Louis added to the gang? That's a nice touch, shows Ciaran is growing fond of Louis:)

Author's Response: Haha. Not yet. :P

I'm glad you picked up on how he feels about being blind, the little hints will lead to the big explanation eventually. :)

Expect the arguing. It's sad that you don't see most of it from Ciaran's POV. But they'll be in the missing moments. :P

Thank you. :)

Sam.

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Louis's first day on the job and Ciaran certainly isn't making it easy for him hahaha, tbf to Louis I probably would have taken the blanket too although it doesn't sound like it was the safest option. I'm starting to see glimpses of a romance here but I like the way you take it slow, most of the stories I read make the romance happenso quick that it's like one day they are in love. Really love the way you write and the story is slowly becoming addictive to me. Soon I will be attending meetings. For realsies. Dom is a bloke? Who'd a thunk it? I actually really like that, don't think I've ever read a fic where Dom is male...LOVE IT!

Author's Response: It wouldn't be very fun if Ciaran made it easy, would it? :P Definitely not the safest option, but safer than some, and one I'd go for, too.

Yay for glimpses of romance and, yes, Dom is a guy! Thank you!

Sam.

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And we get to meet the great Louis Weasley in person! Ouch, poor Ciaran getting blackmailed by Lucy, I guess his mum would be really over protective. I kind of wanna know who the ravenclaw girl was... Louis got pwned. Still, he shouldn't have been so careless, but I reckon Ciaran is milking it slightly as punishment to Louis. Well, let's see if he can figure out his name, I'm guessing that he isn't allowed to ask Lucy so let the games begin, Mwahahaha!

Author's Response: The great Louis Weasley in person? Well, he is awesome. :P Yeah, Ciaran is overprotective; Ciaran is an only child and she's a natural over-thinker. The girl might come back, with a name and everything...

He's definitely milking it a bit. :P

Oh, this story is full of games. ;)

Thank you.

Sam.

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Hahaha, I really like Ciaran's sense of humour! Sticking his cane out for his enemy to trip over -- classic. And we find out Ciaran is gay and that he might be getting to know a certain Louis Weasley soon. Exciting stuff! I wonder whether he fancies Jack or whether Jack fancies him..? Maybe that will happen later or maybe not, ooh and Roxy seems to fancy him? It must be kind of frustrating not knowing what you look like, but the way he thinks is just so originally written. I think me and this fic are going to be very good friends.very good friends indeed :)

Author's Response: Tripping him over, as you do. Er... Jack and Ciaran do not fancy each other and never have, but I can tell you that they make jokes about doing so. :P

Ah, Roxy... ;)

Thank you.

Sam.

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This is such an interesting idea and I already really like the OC you've created. Jack sounds quite interesting too and hopefully I'll get to meet him as I go along this story. Is he completely blind or does he see flashes of light and any points? I love how you add so much detail to the story and it's only just begun! I feel the frustration oozing from Ciaran by the way you write and I sense his displeasure at the fact that he feels slightly coddled by the way Lucy does certain things. Can't wait to take a look at chapter 2!

Author's Response: Ciaran is completely blind, but his eyes are still sensitive to things like light, so he has sunglasses.

Thank you so much for reviewing and liking this story. :)

Sam.

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Wow. One of the first one shots that I've ever read about the relationship between James and Al and I really really enjoyed it. I love the spin you put on it, it makes you feel all warm inside when you read the parts where James helps Al overcome his fear and learn to enjoy flying. Normally James is teasing Al or pulling pranks on him but in this fix, that side of James took a back seat and I think we got to see what James's core character is. I didn't think the romance side was strictly necessary as you pretty much sold the relationship to me without even having to go into humongous detail but it was a nice touch. Really adored this fix, I hope you write lots more in future.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this amazing review :) I don't even know how to start responding lol. I'm so glad you liked it! James usually is characterized as always pulling pranks and what not, and while I can totally see that side of him, I love to think that James is very caring, especially when it comes to his family.

The flashback with Chloe was actually a really last minute addition--I'd only planned on mentioning her name but I'm glad it didn't take away from the plot! Thank you so much again for taking the time to read and review! :D

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Holy poo! So if violets fired her doesn't that mean she can't work for them anymore? Or is she in a contract with the whole film? Violet is a big poo face either way and a jealous little cow at that. Charlie is clearly better for mellie and yay he manned up! They are officially going together! Excited to see how the whole party thing is gonna happen and for realsies? Did he just apparate into get room? Oh god yeah Charlie is the one who can't apparate or had to take his test 3 times or something! Ooooh, excited to see what happens next! Xx

Author's Response: IT'S OKAY, NO WORRIES. I'll sort it. Violet can't get away with this. *nods*

Thanks for reading and reviewing everything, Maz! Love you :)

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Ooh this chapter was interesting, Germans and austrians are definitely a fan of the word burg hahaha and yay Charlie has.sort of asked her out? Man up charles! Mellie sounds really confused, and omg violet! Is she threatening mel? Better not be or I'll cut her hair off. Really enjoyed this chapter and I'm especially eager to find out what happens in chappie 5 (last one :( ) I hope it's the party scene! I like party scenes they always seem to be the craziest!

Author's Response: I love the word 'burg', actually, it sounds funny :P
Charles really should man up, and yes, Violet is a horrible person and is terribly cruel to Mellie. :(
Thanks so much for the review :)

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Hehehe really really like this chapter although Charlie really does seem to fancy Violet :/ but hey hopefully he shall come to his senses soon. I loved the whole meet becky bit;) woops sorry, rebecca haha and the plane saga where they were calling him chicken. The fact they don't know he is magical makes the story more interesting and intriguing. I totally fangirled when he held her hand! So cute! Onto chapter 4!:)x

Author's Response: I FANGIRLED TOO, I LOVE CHARLIE SOO MUCH.
Charlie is a little hung up on the perfection that is Violet, but don't worry, Mellie is awesome too.
Becky/the plane bit- they were a lot of fun to write.

Thanks for the review! :D

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Ooooh Rebecca seems just as snide and prissy as Violet! Match made in heaven I can only assume. Charlie and Violet kissing! I have to say that I agree with Marty and Jess, I thought he would have had a stronger will than that but I guess boys will be boys. But I'm hoping he just had a lapse in judgement and that he really fancies the pants off Mellie :D and he's drunk? How? What? I'm Reading on!

Author's Response: Rebecca is very mean, just like Violet. A match in heaven indeed!
Glad you like it, thanks for the review Maz! :D

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The writing of this is totally amazeballs. I absolutely adore the whole story line and whenever I read Mellie's voice in my head, it sounds like you speaking Jen! Really love it, although I loathe Violet. Barely met her, already think she's a prissy little cow. It's really impressive how realistic the story is and how it's done so professionally, the lack of errors is incredible. Although I know that you are pretty awesome at grammar and stuff :P can't wait to see what happens in the next chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks Maz, you're so wonderful. I'm really glad you like the plot, and Mellie sounds like me? Whoops. :P

Thanks, you know I like to get my grammar right :D

LOVE YOU MAZZIE :D

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