Hello from the review tag.
It was adorable and it made me smile even though I hate smiling.
I actually liked that Narcissa and Lucius didn't know about each other's family too much. Many writers make all the purebloods know one another. Something that I think at this time wasn't too important. Yes, they made sure to marry purebloods, but I don't think they made sure to hang out with each other every week just because they were high and mighty purebloods. I like to think it wasn't until Voldemort's rise that they began to worry about that and especially after his first fall when no one was sure if he would return. But of course, this is all in my head so it doesn't really matter.
You were really good at keeping the reader from finding out it was Lucius who was her lover all along. I was at first under the impression that she would meet Lucius and end up loving him and being the Prince Charming or something. My mind tends to assume that the author is going to try to lead you away and then attempt to throw something unexpected toward you, so it wasn't until after she mentioned family honor that the idea that it may be Lucius popped into my head. Before that, at the very beginning, my mind decided to entertain that idea that maybe she was thinking Lucius as a different person after he joined Voldemort but it was dismissed as I read on, so no, it wasn't easy to find out it was Lucius all along.
Wow, I ramble. Anyway, Narcissa's thought process is what I think would really happen if something like this actually occurred. She does, after-all, think about her family first.
The ending was sweet and much better than those who make it as though they don't have any feelings for one another because of the giant icicles stuck permanently up their bums.Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you SO much for review-tagging me!! :)
Haha; I'm not sure whether I should say "Yay" or "I'm sorry" that it made you smile! :P
Wow! What you said about the purebloods not hanging out all the time is really insightful and is honestly something I hadn't thought about before. A lot of people who have read and reviewed this have commented that it's not very believable for the two of them not to know each other, so it's great to hear (or read, rather), a different opinion on that! Thank you SO much!
Hehe; I tried REALLY hard to keep Lucius anonymous until the very end. I had the ending planned out before I really even started the piece (if I remember correctly), so I basically just had to figure out how to get there without revealing who he was.
I've always thought there was a bit of a 'softer' side to the Malfoys, and in general, I try to portray it. I completely agree that Lucius and Narcissa definitely have feelings for one another.
Thank you So much for your kind and thoughtful review!! :) Report Review
Hello, KCKibbles from the review tag :)
I'm pretty sure I'm not the only one who thought that Ron and Hermione would eventually drift apart after they got together. Of course, this didn't happen in the epilogue of the books, but to me it just seemed likely. As if there was a lack of options for the two of them. I mean, surely they must have met someone else who appealed to them in some way? I've thought the same with Ginny and Harry.
Anyway, I thought you portrayed how their relationship could have turned out very well. I don't blame Hermione for wanting to run away from a marriage that has fallen apart. If Draco and Hermione ever did get together, I'm quite sure that Draco would have run away if she said she loved him, especially with their history.
It was nice that Ron- Oh wait, I just reread a line. Ron says, "and you can go find him." Wow. He knew? That's surprising. It was nice that Ron actually gave her a chance to leave instead of being completely ignorant of what was going on with their relationship like other writers make him do.
This made me want to read more of this story, but at the same time I feel like any more would ruin it and make it seem less interesting. You've said enough to make a reader interested and satisfied. My mind tends to wander so I think that was a good quality of the story.Author's Response: Thank you so much! What a lovely, detailed review, which is always a wonderful thing to see. I really appreciate you taking the time to write so much, and I'm very pleased that you seemed to enjoy the story.
I've always felt the same about Ginny/Harry too. High school or teenage relationships rarely last, and I was surprised that JK made it so they did. I don't know, it always seemed too perfect to me.
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I really did like this since the Malfoy family has always interested me with their haughty attitudes and I just love jerks. Narcissa's desperation to reach her son was also very believable, especially after you see how much the family cares for one another in the books. Despite how much I like them, I've never read a story of them that took place in the first war so I did look forward to this.
"She wasn't a coward, she just was not one to endanger her son's life."
That part is pretty much what I think all Slytherins stand for (not endangering their lives), so I enjoyed that line.
How she guarded Draco was actually both amusing and impressive. Amusing because it seems overdone and impressive because of how much she cares for Draco and that she used all those enchantments and creatures to protect him.
It's sad that Draco was not able to avoid Voldemort in the end and the family got dragged into his service. This story really makes you sympathize with the family.
Although this isn't canon-compliant, I still enjoyed it.Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
I am glad you liked it. The Malfoy family has always interested me too xD I am happy that you liked this especially since it was your first story reading of a First Wizarding War.
I kind of agree with you there, that line does stand for all slytherins.
Hmm, I didn't think of it as "amusing" but now that you explain it, I can see why it would be xD
Its good to know that the story made you sympathise with the family as that was my intention.
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Hello, KCKibbles from the review tag.
Not as I imagined it would have played out, but interesting nonetheless. There were only a few typos such as punctuation or a misspelling, but they weren't too noticeable.
Neville seems a bit more cautious than what we see of him in the seventh book. It really makes you think about how the year changed him. I like that he isn't suddenly brave and confident. You sort of put him in-between those two personalities of his.
Why didn't you hear Snape, Neville? Because you were so busy touching everything and talking about it. I found that funny.Author's Response: Hey there Kibbles.
I've had other pointing out some typos so I should definitely go back and look over the story again and correct them.
Yes, Neville is cautious in my story and I think in his seventh year as well. Being put through everything that we know happened at Hogwarts in his seventh year is no little thing so even though he breaks free of his flinching, stuttering self and transforms into a brave Gryffindor, I've always imagined there will always remain something of the old Neville. The bravery has been inside him, buried deep down in his being, but most of his childhood he has been a shy boy, never putting up a fight or standing up for his beliefs and as we know (much to our sorrow many times) it's hard to discard your old self as much as you'd want to and despite anything that comes across your way :)
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