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Review #1, by palespiritReturn After The War: Epilogue - Expecting the Unexpected

20th July 2012:
I'd just like to thank you for writing one of the best fanfics I've ever read. Keep up the good work!
~Ryn

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Review #2, by palespiritThe Perfect play: on the train

20th July 2012:
This isn't the best or the worst thing I've ever read, though it is on the lower end of that scale. You should describe a LOT more, maybe try some of the writing guides HPFF has, and also try getting a beta reader (If you don't know, they look over and edit your work for any mistakes you might have missed before you post it)- I'd be happy to do that if you can't find anyone else. I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings (I'm just trying to help, really).
It's a good try for a first story, it really is.
Good luck writing!
~Ryn

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Review #3, by palespiritJust a Ravenclaw: Chapter 1

20th July 2012:
This isn't the worst thing I've read, not by a long shot, but I'd recommend you edit your work a lot more (Style and description wise, not grammer wise). I know you've probably heard this a million times before, but show, don't tell. Being a Ravenclaw myself, I love the idea here, just as I'm sure any Hufflepuff or Gryffindor would. You're doing great for one of your first tries- Keep up the good work, and, please, take my advice.
Good luck!
~Ryn

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