THIS WAS THE PERFECT ENDING!
What a beautiful, sentimental ending. I confess, it made me tear up many times. Reading about Ted's death in the book is one thing, but actually putting myself in Andromeda's shoes and experiencing that feeling of loss is something completely different.
Bringing Narcissa back was brilliant. She never was against her sister, and I think everyone knew that deep inside. I love how you brought it to the light.
This story was brilliant, amazing, wonderful...I could go on and on. Please continue to write more stories, because you have a great talent that needs to be shown to the world. Andromeda and Ted, forever xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this wonderful review, and all your amazing reviews! I'm so glad you liked this story, it was a struggle at times but I'm glad it worked!
Narcissa was never going to figure big in this story but suddenly she became one of the most important relationships for Andromeda in this story, and I feel she just had to come back!
I will definitely continue to write, and if you feel like reading any of my other stories please do! Thanks again so much for your encouraging reviews! Report Review
Another amazing chapter that kept me squealing in excitement the entire time!
My absolute favorite part was when Ted crawled into bed next to her, oh my goodness my heart was beating so fast. Reading your story makes me want a guy like Ted. Wa, I'm so sad now :(
I love the way you portrayed the tension between Ted/Andromeda and the rest of the Slytherins. I pity Sally. She has no identity for herself and only cares about fitting in with the popular kids.
There were a few minor errors in spelling and punctuation, but nothing too crazy. I can't wait for the next and final chapter! Please update soon! I know I'm going to shed some tears :')Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like Ted, he always reminds me a bit of a puppy, he's just so cute!
I wanted to include Sally to show firstly how her friends easily replaced her, and secondly so she could see her knew life was so much better!
The last chapter is now in the queue and should be up at any moment! I hope you come back! Report Review
This chapter was so touching! My favorite part was the ending, when you so meticulously described Narcissa and how she felt about the family ritual. Honestly, I always knew Narcissa never outcasted Andromeda from her heart, and I love how you shaped that out. A beautiful chapter that made me tear up, so sentimental :')
Can't wait for the next one! xxAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! At the beginning of writing this story, everyone was just going to hate Andromeda and make her an outcast; but Cissy became such a nuanced character that Bella's role diminished and her's grew!
This chapter was also about her transforming from being Andy Black to being Dromeda Tonks, so I really wanted to show that! Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for all your wonderful comments! Report Review
MERLIN'S BEARD! This was THE most spectacular chapter of your entire story! Finally, what I've been waiting for is true at last! You shaped this chapter so wonderfully. From the beginning, where Andromeda was still unsure and insecure, to the middle, where the beautiful and luscious Lucius Malfoy pursued the love of his life, therefore unknowingly inspiring Andromeda to pursue hers, to the end, where Andromeda fought for her love and her life. It was written in the most perfect way!!
I'm so desperate to find out what happens when Andromeda meets Ted. It will be the highlight of the story! Well, the second highlight. This was definitely the highlight, definitely, no doubt about it.
PLEASE UPDATE SOON sigsghlskdjflkghs :) xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this review! I was really unsure about putting up this chapter, and there was originally the bit where Andromeda went to see Ted as well stuck at the end of this chapter, but it was too long and didn't work. I wanted this chapter to be about Andromeda and no one else! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I hope you come back for the last three chapters! Report Review
This is like the most perfect romance story I've ever read in my life. I'm on the edge of my seat here! WHY DID IT END?! Wa!! Please update soon I'm desperate! :DAuthor's Response: Aww :) I'll try to update soon, but school stuff if kind of crazy at the moment! Report Review
Another amazing, wonderful chapter that had me dying at the end!
I cannot believe that Druella Black was in love with the Dark Lord! I'm guessing she never found out that her Tom is actually Voldemort. How sad. And it's even more depressing that she is making her daughter go through the same hardship that she went through. That's just plain wicked.
I really hope that in the next chapter, Andromeda realizes that she's not being selfish for loving Ted. I look forward to their romance finally blossoming into a future! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Druella definitely never knew that Tom was the Dark Lord. I decided to put this in because the first fic I wrote on here was about Druella and Tom (amongst other things) and I wanted to create some symmetry between my stories.
I see Druella as very bitter, and is hitting out at Andromeda and Narcissa and not allowing them to be with the people they love because she never had that. I hope that makes sense!
Hope you keep reading! Report Review
Reading about Sirius and Aislin makes me so sad. I really want to see them together again. Honestly, I love the flashbacks. I really felt the emotion in the flashback where Aislin was crying. Please update soon!! xxAuthor's Response: Awww, I'm glad you like them though. I want to keep writing flashbacks, I think they really flesh out Sirius/Aislin's relationship. :) Next chapter is coming soon! Report Review
OHMYGOD! My breath is caught, my heartbeat is irregular, and my heart is flying *in a singsong voice*
I'm so happy (happy isn't even close to how happy I feel) that Andromeda has finally chosen Ted. I cannot believe he mustered up the courage to actually come to her house, and risk getting murdered by crazy hazy brazy Bella! I really thought Bella was going to kill him, I was so scared :O
I honestly cannot wait for the next chapter. I really hope she elopes with him. Once again, I was hooked till the very end, and I am dying for the next chapter to be up because I just can't get enough of this Ted/Andromeda fic!
Lots of love!! xxAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for yet another wonderful review! The next chapter is written, and will be up as soon as possible. I am going to upload a one shot before the next chapter, but then the next chapter will definitely be up! I hope you keep reading! Report Review
From this day forward, whenever I watch the fourth movie, I will imagine this entire chapter at the end of the second task. Before this, I never even paused to imagine what Viktor might have felt after saving Hermione. I see him as such a burly guy that sometimes I forget he can feel all this!
What a brilliant chapter! You really have a gift of delving deep into a simple moment and making a whole story out of it! You inspire me more than you know!
Please update soon!! I'm dying for the next chapter love!! xxAuthor's Response: thanks for the your review love:)) you are oh so sweet -insertheartsandhugs- and hurrah in imaginary scenes coming off good enough to be real. HURRAAAH Report Review
Before I start this review, let me say this.
A few days ago I was looking through my favorite stories and I noticed you had updated, so I added it to the list in my itouch notes of fanfics to read. Then I went on my review thread and saw your request and thought "what a coincidence!" LOL I don't even know why I said that.
Anyways, thank you so much for the shout-out, it means so so much!
Now, starting the review...I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! I actually got reminded of a situation I was in. 2 years ago, in my junior year, which is Hogwarts 6th year, I had an internship and was paired up with this guy I hated but secretly liked ;p The fact that James and Lily are now interning together so reminds me of that!
Second, I couldn't help but jump when I came across the words "Lucius Malfoy" *blushes*
May I add, your writing and style and descriptions are amazing as always, and had me hooked till the very end! Please update soon because I'm dying for more of your James/Lily romance! Lots of love!! xxAuthor's Response: I LOVE when things like that happen! Coincidence! puts a smile on my face :)
I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter! Hahaha you really are lucius obsessed arent you? :P He'll be making random appearances a little bit into the story. So keep an eye out :)
I love your reviews as always and I hope you can keep reading this story. Seriously your reviews are awesome and encouraging, and I love it. Thank you so much, I'm so sorry for the delay in response time. Report Review
Hey there! Let me start off by saying I LOVE Marauder fics. They're some of my absolute faces!
I love your OC's! They're witty, humorous, and remind me much of myself in so many different ways. Your writing style really engrossed me in your story, and your descriptions are great!
Keep up the writing and feel free to re-request :)Author's Response: thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Woohoo! First review here :)
Let me start off by saying that your writing style is utterly impeccable. Your descriptions are flawless, and the adjectives you use clearly carve out a lucid image in my mind. I hope that one day, my writing can be as amazing as yours.
This story was absolutely brilliant. The way you pieced everything together, and really delved into the mental connection between Voldemort and Harry, is truly original and inspirational. It really shows that you have an imaginative and creative mind.
Like I said, your writing style has taken me aback, and has greatly motivated me to improve on my own writing. I look forward to reading more of your works! xxAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked this, because while I live for these sorts of stories (mental instability, insanity, twisted things, all that) I never know if anyone else does, too. So your comments really are so encouraging and lovely!
I worked hard on this one-shot (and it sort of got away from me!), and it makes me beyond happy to hear that you liked my descriptions and writing in general. That's just, like... the best compliment, you know?
I honestly cannot thank you enough for how sweet of a review this was. And how much it means to me that you were willing to leave it, and add it to your favorites besides! Thank you so much!! ♥ Report Review
OHMYGOD NO! WHY MUST IT END? You don't understand, I'm dying right now because I can't possibly imagine what James is going to say.
Your descriptions are impeccable, and your style really stands out from other authors. I adore the humor in your story, especially the part about eating 3 pounds of chocolate and crying for 9 consecutive hours. Brilliant!
Your story is truly fantastic and is the essence of brilliance. I'm definitely recommending you to some of my friends who love hpff. Please update soon because I can't take the stress! :) xxAuthor's Response: Waaah thank you so much! :'D You're so sweet!!! I have another chapter in the queue right now, so the wait won't be too long! Report Review
I love this story, I love your writing, I love your wit, I love your humor, I love everything there is to love and more! This is amazing! I am so so so into this story right now, that I'm rushing this review to get to the next chapter! You really are so amazingly talented and I urge you to continue with your writing. Brilliantly done! xxAuthor's Response: Awww :'D Thank you so much!!! Report Review
I can't even begin to explain how many different emotions I felt throughout your entire story. You did such an amazing job at portraying Lily and her feelings. I felt as if I were Lily, experiencing the misery and mayhem that the war brought on. I felt fear for James and the boys (not Peter, lol) and for all her loved ones.
I thought it was brilliant how you tied this story to Vengeance. It made absolute perfect sense and made it more thrilling to read.
Another amazing story you have here, and it's definitely going into my favorites. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future. Great job xxAuthor's Response: Thank you for dropping by!
I'm glad you could feel Lily's emotions, because that's exactly what I was aiming for! And poor Lily, no? I have so much sympathy for what she goes through. And James and the boys, she was so worried for them, even Peter, because as much as I dislike him, the boys loved him.
This story was originally supposed to be a true tie in to Vengeance, but you can see that it didn't really work out that way. Lily kind of took over and went in her own direction with this piece!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!
~Cassie Report Review
This chapter made me tear up so badly. I could so vividly see Amber lying in the casket, her purity, her innocence, all of it taken away :'(
And for Bellatrix to have the nerve to send a note! That woman is really up for my distaste in this story.
I'm so glad Dorcas quit. I mean, I'm upset, but I'm also happy because I knew the Ministry would hold her back from seeking revenge.
I'm so excited to find out what happens next. Please update soon xxAuthor's Response: This story has been killing me emotionally lately.
Bella is crazy. To her, this is one great big game. So to her mind she is just adding to all the fun.
She had to quit! The Ministry definitely would have held her back, and she couldn't have that.
I'm working on an update, but it's been slow coming! This story is getting hard for me to write because I'm having a hard time accepting unavoidable truths.
Thanks for the review!
~Cassie Report Review
I think this is the most intense chapter so far.
First off, let me start with this. When I read this story, I can feel everything Andromeda is feeling, if that makes sense. I feel like I'm in her shoes, experiencing every happy moment, every darkness, every ounce of pain. I swear I'm about to cry after reading this chapter.
'Cissy wore a pale blue dress that made her a picture of tragic innocence, while Bella’s passionate red drew the eye.' I must say that I absolutely love this description. It says so many things, and I read it over a few times because it had such a nice flow to it.
I know this is random, but I hope that behind the scenes, Lucius experienced jealousy that he wasn't Narcissa's escort. Sorry, but as "luciusobsessed" I must put the word in :p
Anyways, I absolutely abhor Rabastan. He is such a prick! I expected him to say something hurtful to her, but not that hurtful! He completely crossed the line and really showed his true colors. It really made me feel so sad, and I wish I could save Andromeda from all of this, but then again, that's what Ted is for :)
Please update soon, I'm dying to read what happens next!! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for another wonderful review! I am so glad you like my description; I always feel like that is what I struggle with the most!
Andromeda, for me, is the most amazing character I've written. She suddenly just jumped off the page for me, and my writing has improved because of it!
I am a Lucius fan too, I've always thought he was just so suave. And I may explore a little of your idea in the next chapter :)
And yes, Rabastan is just horrible. I wondered whether he was a bit too nasty, but I feel his nastiness comes from a superiority complex, and his extreme arrogance, so it would have been fine (in his mind) to just say those things to Andromeda!
The next chapter is written, and I will upload it now! Report Review
What a beautiful first chapter. May I add, your banner is one of the most amazing banners I've ever seen on this site! Completely drew me in before I even started reading! Definitely adding this to my favorites.
As usual, your writing is pure genius. It improves with every story you add. I'm so excited for the future chapters to come.
It's so sad how her husband reacted to their new baby. What a sorrow how love can dissolve into emptiness. I really hope they work on their marriage :/
The poem at the end was so true and lovely. Really got me thinking about life...
Well, update soon love! I'll be waiting! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I know, isn't the banner just amazing! I saw it in an UFG and HAD to get it. That's what inspired the story :D
Thank you so much! I don't know when the next chapter will be up, but I'll be adding a next gen one-shot really soon called 'Silk Rose'
Well, idk if they work on their marriage or not. This was the prologue, so the next chapters are when Ever is grown up :)
Thanks, I'm glad you liked the poem, I wasn't very happy with it :/
Thanks again, I LOVE your reviews xx Report Review
Your writing really has a way or drawing me in. I love how your chapters don't drawl on for too long. They remind me of my own chapters. I like to write enough description to engross the reader, but not bore them. Bravo on that part.
I'm really liking your characterization. You do a good job of keeping me hooked with your writing and your use of words. Very meticulous.
Keep it up xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! You're compliments are really inspiring me to continue to strive at becoming a better writer! Report Review
Lucius is one of my favorite characters. I really really love and adore him, and I think he's seriously misunderstood by everyone. I'm glad you're writing a story about him, because he deserves to be recognized.
I really like your writing style and use of vocab, it really hooked me onto the story. I hope him and Narcissa grow closer, as they are my favorite couple ever.
Keep it up xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
This was really an amazing first chapter. I was completely enticed by the air of the story. Ron/Hermione, Harry/Ginny...I was so into it! And that girl in the end only added more mystery! Now I'm dying to know who she is! Also, I thought it was hilarious how Ron and Ginny were about to go at it on the train. I could practically imagine Ron's face as I was reading it. Keep it up and update soon xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much!
I shall update soon! I really appreciate your review! Report Review
Hands down, one of the best HPFF stories I've ever read. Amazing banner, definitely going into my favorites. I have to say, you had me hooked onto every word...no, not even that. You had me hooked onto every letter. I really felt different reading this story. It really opened my eyes to how James and Lily must have felt, watching over Harry and his mistreatment. It broke my heart thinking about it so deeply, but it's the truth, and it's inevitable. This was such a beautiful story and I'm definitely going to recommend it. It deserves the spotlight! I love love love it! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you!
I don't know why this story still makes me uneasy even when people tell me they like it. I think it might be because this was my first piece back in fan fiction in 3 years, and my style has changed a lot. Everything I write lately is out of my comfort zone.
It is such a sad but true story.
Thank you so much!
~Cassie Report Review
First off, may I say, fantastic banner. It really caught my attention.
Your story is so enigmatic, and it had me guessing till the end. I love how you twist the words down to the last meticulous detail, and yet keep the reader hooked onto every little thing. I absolutely love this, and your writing stye as well. This is definitely going into my favorites.
Great job xxAuthor's Response: Thankyou so much hun! :) all the credits go to ahoythere/peppersweet for the banner!
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OH MY GOD I'M ON THE EDGE! I knew it! I knew something was going to happen! And I bet the person who grabbed her was Scorpius. I'm so excited for the next chapter, please please please update soon!! xx Report Review
Wow wow wow this is definitely going into my favorites! You had my attention with the first word! Your grammar is absolutely flawless, and your writing style is so captivating that I'm already excited to read the next chapter.
You have such a creative imagination. I love how you tied the dream and the Slytherin conversation together. I have a feeling she's going to have to save Scorpius, or warn him or something.
Can't wait to read on xx Report Review
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