Heyy this is once again a great chapter. I love the way you write it. I can really feel the emotions of each and every character you describe!
Keep going this is a great job!
BS:)Author's Response: Heyy Thankyou sso muchhh.
Someone really likes my writing
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Ohmigosh cliiifhanger. Haha btw here for the review swap:)
This is a great start!! I'm totally going to read on. My only complaint, more, make it longerrr, haha good job, keep writing!
BS:)Author's Response: Haha! Hey! Thankyou soo much!
Thankyou for the swap! :)
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Hi, here for the review swap.
That was an amazing story! It is such a great idea, as there aren't very many stories/one-shots centered on Slughorn!! I had always wondered how it must of felt for him facing his favourite student in a battle to the death!!
There is nothing wrong with this, I love it!!
BS XoxoAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review swap! I promise I'll get on your review ASAP- school has kinda swamped my time more than I thought it would this week.
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this one-shot! I don't think that I would have explored Slughorn's character as I did here without academica's fantastic challenge- he was certainly a difficult character to write for me!
Thanks once again for your review- I'm so glad that you liked the story! Report Review
Hi. This is a really good story. I like the idea and it is a super plot. It's great how you keep building the tension and suspense, but I have one plea. Please, please, please, please, please, please, please enough with the spelling and grammar mistakes!! I'm not meaning this in a bad way at all but you may get HEAPS more reviews and reads. Whenever you have finished writing a chapter leave it for an hour and then go back and check a couple of times for any spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes or missed out words.
I do not mean this in a mean way at all, I'm just pointing this out in a friendly way to help you become an even better author:)
Goodbye and good luck!!
BS:)Author's Response: thank you and thank for the advice i know my spelling and grammar aint that good but im working on it Report Review
Hi I'm here for the review swap. Great job on this! It's such an original and funny idea. I've never read anything like it before!!
I love the way you make the ghoul think, it makes me giggle thinking of a ghoul talking of intelligence!! I'm not really sure if there is anything to improve on with this, I have only one plea, you should of made it longer!! It is great.
Ciao for now:)
BSAuthor's Response: Haha I'm so glad that you found it funny, as I'd never written any humour before, so I was rather unsure about it!
I've never read anything about the ghoul either, so I guess that's why I wrote it!
Of course the ghoul would be intelligent ;D No I know what you mean, and I thought it would be funny to make him be so!
I am considering writing a sequel to this, so it's nice to know that you would like to read it :D
Thanks for the great review,
Kiana! Report Review
I'm reviewing, please, please, please write more this is an amzing story I love it!!
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Heyy, I'm really liking your story. A brill plot!! LOL I love all of these crazy demon names!! Well done on thinking up an AMAZING storyline.
It is well written but I'd just like to point out that your grammar and spelling aren't that great. Maybe after you've written a chapter leave it for half an hour (this helps your brain to stop thinking about what you've just typed, so it'll be refreshed) and after half an hour read over it carefully again, or if you type out your story on Word then spell check it AFTER reading it over, if you're still not sure that you have got it all right. Trust me, this is an awesome idea and it is well written and you will get HEAPS of reviews if you just sort out your spelling and grammar:)
Another thing, to keep people wanting to read on maybe end some of your chapters in suspense, I KNOW that when authors do that I ALWAYS want to read on. I basically stalk the website until the next chapter is out!!
Anyways, good job and check out my stories, I know that there are a lot of unfinished ones, but I've been busy, so I'll be starting them up again soon, and maybe if you would be so kind to leave a review on them? ;)
Hehe ciao for now and good luck, I'll try and post another review on your next chapter:)
BSAuthor's Response: thanks for the advice ! Report Review
This is good. Keep going, I'm really enjoying it.Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it, keep checking in! Report Review
Ah, I love you too! This story is amazing! Such a brilliant idea! Keep on going, girl, keep on going!Author's Response: Thank you so so much :) Report Review
It's a great start! I loved 'Queen Of Gorgeousness' and was very excited when I saw this story! I think that you deserve to know that you are a very talented writer, and you WILL become a famous author someday, I am sure of it. Please keep going with this new story, it is different to other stuff that I read, but I am enjoying it immensely!Author's Response: Thank you very much :) my goal in life is to see my original work published even if I have to wait till I've 65! I'm glad to hear that you are enjoying this new story and that it's difference didn't put you off. Report Review
Yay! I can't wait to discover what happens when Harry and Ginny come back! Brilliantly written!!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D Report Review
I cannot belive this story is over! It is amazing, I love all of your stories!Author's Response: Thank you so so much :) xx Report Review
Once again, great. I love Luna in this, you have her so... so- Luna! PLEASE continue this story. I am really enjoying it.
(BTW love the banner!)Author's Response: Oh my, thank you very much!! It makes me really happy that you're enjoying it!!! :D Next chapter should be validated soon!!
(I really like the banner too)
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This is great for your first story. I really enjoyed it and it is different, in a good way. Good job!Author's Response: Thank you very much!!! :) Report Review
It is very interesting. I like it so far. But, to make it easier to read you should try to take a new paragraph whenever a different person is speaking. But, overall, it is a very promising story. Report Review
Great! This story has a lot of potential and I love it! I also love Selena Gomez, 'Love You Like a Love Song' and Taylor Swift. Report Review
I loved this chapter! This story has got me hooked! You're doing a great job!Author's Response: Thank you so very much!!
~Love, Zee Report Review
Awesome story! Love it already! Haha! I can just imagine what she will think of the Weasley's!Author's Response: Hey! Thank you for reviewing! Chapter 2 will be up soon!
P.S I love your username. Reminds me of Jesse McCartney. Report Review
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