Reading Reviews From Member: ravingbumblebee
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Review #1, by ravingbumblebeeBroken Hearts: Safe and Sound

22nd April 2012:
Beautifully written!!

I've read a lot of stories where Lucius/Narcissa aren't madly in love, that Narcissa is only with Lucius because her parents made her or because of money or whatever, that Lucius is an abusive, heartless husband/father. I, myself, have even portrayed Lucius as a heartless man, so it's really, really refreshing to see this loving, sensitive side of Lucius.

The descriptions were great, the vocabulary used was amazing. It's all just.. gorgeous writing!!

Excellent job!! :D

Author's Response: Thanks! I wrote this this particular way because that was how I always thought the Malfoys were- self-centred and on the wrong side. I don't think Lucius was born heartless, anyway!

I'm very glad you liked it, thanks so much for the review :D

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Review #2, by ravingbumblebeeDivided We Fall: The Fourth Horseman

21st April 2012:
This was excellent!!!

I was drawn into the story right from the start - it's amazing, really!! There weren't any errors that I saw and you used amazing detail!!

I really, really love how you've made Godric and Rowena have siblings because we really don't know too much about the founders (unless more information has been given on Pottermore?) and not many people think of them as people with families before they came together to create Hogwarts. And I definitely love how each founder is a different person in the hierarchy of a kingdom, like a princess and a lord and a squire.

Hopefully that all made sense - I tend to ramble. xD Either way, excellent job!! It was amazing and I can't wait to read more. :D

~Bumblebee [10/10]

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much for this review! I don't remember whether we learned more about them on Pottermore, but I made up Godric and Rowena's siblings myself to flesh out their backgrounds and also as devices to move the plot forward. :)

The second chapter is awaiting validation, I'm sorry for the wait and hope you will come back and read it! :)

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