That was such a cute story! I loved it! :D Report Review
I have to say, I am very impressed. Your banner intrigued me, so I thought I'd give your story a shot, and I'm sooo glad I did. I haven't really encountered very many stories about Bill and Fleur's family, and I'm very happy I found yours (it's definitely going into my favorites) it was amazing. Your writing is incredible, it's not too descriptive, nor too vague. You used the exact right amount to paint a beautiful image in my mind without overwhelming me with too much detail. I read this three times, and each time it only got better. I really wasn't expecting the ending with Lysander being the one alive and Dominique the one dead, but it actually worked really well and touched my heart. So many little details through out the entire piece hinted at it, but I didn't get it until the very end, which made it soo much better that way. I absolutely adore this piece, and I'm definitely going to read more of your work. Why would you ever dream of burying your work for woodlice? You're incredible! This is amazing just as a one-shot, and I would love to see what you could do with a longer story. :) I especially love the ending where you had the bit:
"He promised her the world, once.
He never expected her to become it."
That part was my absolute favorite. Totally loved it! You definitely should keep writing! You've got real talent, and you make me super jealous! Please, don't stop writing, you're awesome! :D
~Roze Del Imperator Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review! I'm sorry it's taken so long to reply. I'm drowning in exam revision at the minute so I've not had time to sit and spend time replying to my reviews.
I can't even tell you how much I appreciate your comments on my description. I do wonder sometimes if there's too much going on in it for people to get their head around so when somebody says what you've just said, it really puts my mind at ease and makes me feel quite proud of it.
I'm really glad that you understood the story, actually; that was another worry I had. This was quite clear to me (the plot changed a few times in the course of writing it) but whether that would come across to the reader, I wasn't sure. I wanted you to get to the end, go 'erm, okay', read it back and then understand. It apparently works!
Haha, I'm quite picky about which of my stories go up, especially if I've spent a long time on them (some of my better stories, in my opinion, are the ones I wrote in a short space of time). Sadly my ability to write like this doesn't seem to stretch to my longer writing but I'm working on that!
So happy that you pointed that line out - I really like it and I spent some time getting it right.
Thank you so, so much for such a lovely review. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it! Report Review
Please, please update again soon! I see that this is your newest chapter to date, and I'm really in love with this story! I read it all in one sitting, and I can't wait to read the rest! You're an incredible writer (jealousy incarnate here) and I really really REALLY want to find out what happens. Your story has been so touching and sad and funny and inspirational, I just can't believe that you're not doing something like this for a living! ;) Keep it up! If you dare stop, I will be forever sad, and I don't like being sad! Please, pretty please, write some more! I know writer's block sucks, but you're an amazing writer (promise) and I know you can do it! You're incredible!Author's Response: Haha, maybe someday. I right fiction, just nothing published or even trying to be published. But thanks a ton for the confidence! I would never think about stopping before it's finished, don't worry. Thanks for this great review! Report Review
You were right, this chapter was incredibly sad! You have a real talent for writing, I cried at the end of this chapter. You have a gift for this, I mean it. Please don't stop writing! Draco's presence at the end of the chapter was a real heart wrenching moment, and it totally completed the image in my head. It was terribly sad, but also incredibly touching.Author's Response: Yeah, sorry about that. :) I cried too. Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
This chapter was very sweet and touching, I loved it! :D It balances the despair of Hermione's mother fight cancer with the love between her and her family. It's so great! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
The part about Hermione's mom having cancer totally surprised me! Which is good! But also bad, because it sucks for Hermione! D: But on the bright side, it gives the characters a chance to grow closer together! Your story just keeps getting better and better! :D Please keep writing!Author's Response: Don't worry, it surprised me too! Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
Loving it so far! I'm really glad that you're taking the time for them to develop their relationship from enemies to friends. :D You're really good at this, and I'm really happy that I'm reading your story! :D Keep up your awesome writing! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks, I've read too many that unrealistically rush things. Glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This was a good chapter, too! I lover your subtle hinting at who Damien really is, and I think that the two sides to their relationship are great! :D I'm really enjoying the story and can't wait to read more! Keep it up! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you for continuing to review, it means a lot to me. :D Report Review
I liked this chapter a lot too! :D Your writing seems to be getting better, and I'm really looking forward to reading more! Your characters are really close to the ones created by J.K., though Harry and Ron seem slightly transparent compared to Hermione. Though, that might actually be a good thing so that the reader focuses on her more than the others. :) Keep up the great work!Author's Response: thank you so much. I'm so glad you like the story so far. Thanks for the review! Report Review
I actually really like this story. :) With a lot of the fanfics I've read on this site, they didn't make a lot of sense, nor did they take the time to show the developing relationships between the characters. Your story did both, and kept me interested the entire time. I'm really looking forward to reading more. As to you writing in an American style, I barely even noticed, and anybody that gets upset over that is just silly.Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it. I'm so glad that you like it so far. Report Review
Even though you said at the end that you aren't very happy with this chapter, I think that it's rather cute and sweet. It may need some editing and maybe a little tweaking, but over all I think that it's fine just the way it it. :)Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much. I think I will complete the story and than go through and edit all the chapters. Look for mistakes and whatnot, you know? Report Review
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