YUSSSHH ... FIRST REVIEWER! (Unless someone posts a review while I'm typing this -_-)
Haha, it's hilarious that James *discreetly* hid under Vi's bed, but they found his foot :P
Oooh, James and Vi pretending to date? I wonder where this will go! *coughcough*eatyourheartoutChastity*coughcough*
Aww, baby scan! I want to know if its a boy or a girl! OMG, twins? *gasp* Triplets! OMGOMG octuplets! Probably not, but hey, a girl's got to dream!
Another great chapter, can't wait for the next one!
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LOL ... Momma Sirius! I can totally imagine him saying that to Lily :P
One thing ... there's six people in Lily's dorm? Lily, June, Marlene, Dorcas, Mary and Emmeline? Meh, OH WELL NOBODY CARES
LOL SEVVY FLIES!! That was hilarious! I love the way Lily wants to try to be a prankster like the Marauders XD
Remember to actually go over the thing once you've pasted it and redo all the italics instead of writing (Italics) in there. Other than that, it was really good! I can't wait for the next chapter!
xxxAuthor's Response: Thanks!!! Yeah I wanted to add lots of humor ;) thanks for the advice. Oh well about the dorm!! Maybe they decided to change it to 5 when harry joined the school! And sorry I forgot about that!!! I copied it off of notes on my iPod so it doesn't let me put italics in. So I decided to put that and then go over it on word on the computer. I forgot!! Oops x Report Review
Hola! Thanks for entering my challenge!
Wow. That was very ... deep. I love the way Voldy is so interested/obsessed with the nature of the Sorting Hat. It made me very curious too! Poor old Sorting Hat - taken down to the Chamber of Secrets and basically tortured for information :( But that just shows what a horrible person Voldemort was and you wrote that perfectly.
I also loved the way Macnair and Avery were in awe of Tom and Macnair was relieved and pleased that Tom had smiled (albeit a very tight-lipped smile) at his comment.
"His thoughts were his and his alone." I don't know why, but this little sentence gets me and makes me think about his whole being. He's able to remove his emotions from his face, make sure nobody knows what he's thinking. I think that really defines his character.
The Sorting Hat's song ... it was really creative! "Their tombs lie side by side, they met again in the end". Before I read the rest of the story, I wondered what "they met again" might mean. Perhaps one killed the other? And they did! I never really thought about what happened to Slytherin after he left the other three. I knew he and Gryffindor were best friends, but they ended up duelling. I'm guessing this story was passed down and that was why Gryffindors and Slytherins are now enemies.
Gosh, Tom really knows what he wants, doesn't he? He seems very set on getting to the bottom of the Sorting Hat. I can really understand his determination - it's kind of like the way he was intent on killing Harry, even after sixteen years (except that his curiosity with the Sorting Hat and discovering its secrets didn't take sixteen years.)
The Sorting Hat is a Horcrux?? :O!! But ... if the Hat isn't destroyed, does that mean Godric is still alive? Not much is known about his death, so you never know! That little idea of the Hat being a Horcrux could be another one-shot, or even a whole story. J.K. Rowling once said that if Godric was still alive, he'd be the giant squid that lives in Hogwarts. She was joking about that, but if she wasn't ... :O!!
The Hat gave Tom advice - it told him not to make Horcruxes and I love the way Tom didn't listen to him. From this, he sounds like a really stubborn person, which was basically his major flaw.
I thought this was a really creative, enjoyable one-shot that was very mind-delving (is that a word?) and deep. Well done!xAuthor's Response: Hello, thank you for your challenge which gave me an opportunity to explore these ideas, and for leaving such a long and thoughtful review!!! :)
Yay, you liked the story!!! It's funny, I had this idea of the Sorting Hat being a Horcrux, and kind of combined it with ideas about the founders AND a young, developing Riddle, so this story was kind of a combination of all these different ideas floating in my head.
It's a relief that you thought Riddle was portrayed well. I usually write first person but for some reason just couldn't do it with him. So good to hear you liked the line about his thoughts being his own: I agree that his projecting of a persona onto the outside world and guarding of his inner self just defines who he is. Nobody could ever really know who the true Voldemort was, I guess.
I'm glad you liked the hat's song, I had so much fun writing it and trying to imagine a tune to go with it :P I thought that since Gryffindor would never make a Horcrux to save himself, making a Horcrux was kind of penance for him for killing his best friend, and preserving some piece of Slytherin within the hat as well. The whole Horcrux thing is actually really confusing to me, but I enjoyed imagining how it could have been created!
Maybe I'll have to write a sequel someday explaining more about what happened to Gryffindor!! Him being the giant squid is a wonderful idea, haha. I love the idea of Gryff swimming about, watching Quidditch matches from beneath the water... too good!
Thank you so much for this review, and for the challenge!! :) Report Review
THEY BOTH LIKE HIM?! Do you understand what you have done to me you evil child >:(
Can't wait for the next chapter!xxxAuthor's Response: Hahaa!!! I know!! That just randomly came from the top of my head!! LOL! Will start writing the net chapter soon!! I can't believe how quickly this chapter was validated!! Like only two/three days! Anyway thanks for the review!! :) Report Review
Hello! I read Mistletoe and ever since I've been waiting for the sequel!
I love the way Hugo finally learns her name (Daisy Arabella Dare? Great name, by the way). This Will guy seems like an idiot. -_- *punches him in face*
I loved this first chapter - can't wait for the next one!
Summer xxAuthor's Response: Sorry I made you wait for the sequel quite a bit :) I'm glad that you liked her name, and yes, Will really does deserve a punch in the face doesn't he? I'm not sure when the next chapter will be up I'm afraid, 'cause I'm really focused on 'Daughter of Earth' at the mo' (my other story), I hope I don't keep you waiting for too long :/ xx Report Review
Thanks for entering my challenge! I absolutely love the idea of this - the only one Tom loved had to be killed for her own good. It's short and sweet. There's not much detail about what has happened, but it's enough. From a few sentences I can tell what's happening: the family of a girl Tom loves has been killed by him because her mother was a Muggle.
From the description of Voldemort/Tom JK Rowling gives us says that Tom never loved anyone and didn't care who he hurt. This shows a completely different side to him - the side who loved someone, who wished he could be who she wanted him to.
It shows that he really did care for her, even through the murders. It was odd how he switched between crazy rampaging killer to the caring, loving man Olivia wanted him to be. I think it was quite sweet, if a little overboard, that he killed her to keep her safe.
Overall, I loved it.
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ZOMG I LOVE IT!!
I love the way Al didn't think of Harry as famous ;3
The sad thing is that Rose's iPod wouldn't work at Hogwarts because there's too much magic and it would interfere with the electricity. Otherwise we could have facetimed her :(
Loved it! I'm glad your chapters are all sorted out now! Can't wait for the next chapter xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you love it ð Yeah I thought it would be nice like that so James would be the one who loves being famous (like usual) and then Albus could rise up somehow! Oh yeah that's a shame!!! We would have loved to meet her!! But let's say it did work outside of Hogwarts!! Hehee x Report Review
Yesshh ... first reviewer :P
Ugh, you finally updated this! I've been checking like, every day to see if you've added another chapter ... and you finally did!
I love the way you made Teddy the defence teacher. I guess he would be pretty attractive haha
I loved this chapter, can't wait for the next one xAuthor's Response: Yay first review after like five months of not updating (Yeeesh) Thank you so much for sticking to it! :D Hopefully the next chapter won't take as long x Report Review
Omg i love it!!
Try to make the paragraphs a little shorter, but apart from that it was so cute!! Cant wait for the next (or first) one! XxxAuthor's Response: Thank you! Okay I will, thanks for the advise. Yeah I will start writing the next chapter soon!! I also wanna start a new fan fiction on James and Lily - their school life then if Voldemort didn't kill them and killed someone else... Report Review
Darling ... that was not cheesy at all. Well ... maybe ... but it was really sweet! I love the way Ellie arranged that all without telling Phoebe. I wish I had a friend like Ellie - but not a hormonal pregnant one. A crazy one. Wait - I've already got two of those.
OMG. If you did a sequel of this sequel, about Bee and Louis after their marriage, I think I'd cry because I'd be so happy. (I think I said this about Blossoming, didn't I?)
But anyway, this was really cute and fluffy - and I love the way Jack got fat :)
Summer xxAuthor's Response: ahaha I think it was quite cheesy, but I loved writing it! :D
I'm the Ellie of my group ahahaha (well, aside from being pregnant and being in a relationship :p)
I don't think I'm going to do a sequel of this. But you never know, I might if I ever get inspiration... :p
hehehe I just imagined Jack to be a little fatty. :p
Thanks for the lovely review! :D Report Review
Vi's mother ... what a damn bitch! If my daughter got pregnant at sixteen, that is NOT what I would say to her. Damn bitch. Throw her off the Astronomy Tower with Chastity!
I'm so glad James and Vi have sorted things out. When he got mad in the Hospital Wing, I was scared he'd say "I'm not raising a kid. You're on your own", but hooray! The ending was really sweet *tears up* I hope everything turns out okay for them
Great chapter xxxAuthor's Response: I'm so happy you liked this chapter :) Your comment about throwing Violet's mum off the Astronomy Tower with Chastity made me laugh! Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to review x Report Review
Hello! Thanks for entering my challenge!
I understand this was originally for another challenge, which gave you the first sentence or so, and I think that really helped set you off for a really powerful story.
I really love the way that once Tom found out about his heritage, he wanted to hunt down his father. That was very Slytheriny (If that's a word?) of him. And the way he felt no guilt shows the way he later felt neither love nor remorse.
I never thought Voldemort really considered the names people called him, apart from the Dark Lord. I guess it makes sense he'd like that one. But I didn't think he thought "You-Know-Who" would sound disrespectful - I'd have thought he'd just be glad that people were so afraid of him that they didn't want to use his name.
This story delves deeper into Voldemort's mind than most I've read. I've always been curious as to what he thinks when he plans a murder, or something like that.
I especially like the way Voldemort was so confident he would succeed in his plans to become the most powerful. The last sentence was as gripping as the rest of the story. I think it shows how he knew people would be afraid, how he could get followers. I think those twelve words could open up a whole new idea into his mind.
Overall, it was a brilliant read. Well done!Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I'm finding it a bit hard to respond, because I wrote this so long ago that I've forgotten what I was thinking and so on writing a lot of it. But I'm really glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for all the compliments.
I remember it being surprisingly easy to get into his head, which is a little scary really. *laughs* Report Review
I discovered Being Summer (that's my name too, by the way!) when chapter 30 was up and it took me about three hours to read it all, but I'm so glad I did. It was a really funny, enjoyable read and I'm going to miss it terribly :(
You're an excellent writer! :)
Summer xx Report Review
Well, thank goodness it wasn't 500 words like Special and Teddy Lupin were! It's really cute that Hagrid and Madam Maxime got married! I always knew those two had a special something! *fangirls*
It's a great chapter! The story sounds great from what you told me yesterday and cannot wait for the next chapter!xxAuthor's Response: yes, they always had a special something!!! xx Report Review
Firstly, thanks for entering my challenge!
I think the issue of Tom Riddle is kind of a sensitive one, given he's a troubled kid and he turns into a crazy weirdo. I always find it hard to write him, but you've done a marvellous job of it.
I especially love the line "When people repeatedly call you by the same name, you tend to morph into it." I think it shows that from an early age, Tom hadn't been completely normal and he'd even been seeking power and revenge.
I can completely believe that people would call Tom "the odd one" because of the way he could talk to snakes and when he lead Amy and Dennis into the cave. I like the way you said they taunted him and he decided to seek revenge on them.
I always thought there was a reason behind Tom taking people's things (not just because he was a kleptomaniac) but I didn't think it was because he thought everyone else deserved to feel what he felt - that something precious had been taken away. I think that perhaps if Tom's mother had lived, or at least if Tom Senior hadn't run off, that maybe he wouldn't have turned into what he did.
I like the way Tom believed what people said about him - "He did seem a little worried about the extent of my powers already, but I don't see why he should be, after all I am the odd one."
Overall, I really liked this. I understand this was also for the Every Word Counts challenge which also included for it to only be 500 words. I think if you'd done any more, it might have been ruined.
Well done!xxAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you liked how I wrote him, I agree he's such an odd character, it's so hard to make him believable as you never what he's really thinking. so yay for that!
Yes I do like that line too, I think it just showed that he could have gone either way really, and unfortunately he went the wrong way.
I agree, that there must have been a reason behind him taking those things, as it just seeme odd that he would go to such lengths to do so, and it made him more human, which I liked doing :')
I'm so glad that you liked it, and I agree again that if it was more than 500 words it might have lost it's power.
Thanks for the review,
-Kiana :D Report Review
This is so cute. I can really imagine Harry and Ginny's life like this.
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I know I read this chapter before, but I didn't see all of it ... but it was really good! If I was an artist, I'd make a banner because I've got this mental image in my head and it's perfect for the story ... but unfortunately, I am not an artist on TDA :(
How do you pronounce euqinu? I've been saying it like yoo-kwin-oo (LOL), but idk if thats right? Seeing as you're the author, you might (should) know?
Anyway, loved the first chapter, but make 'em longer next time! Can't wait for the next one xxxAuthor's Response: sure will sugar xx Just requested a banner! I didn't know how long to make it but I assure you the next will WAY longer! Report Review
Lavender is very ... troubled. Seriously. I'd suggest a good psychiatrist.
But a poisonous candle is very imaginative. If I was going to kill Ron, I'd probably use a poisoned chicken drumstick or something.
I never thought Lavender would still be so cut up about her pitiful relationship with Ron - I mean, I knew she'd resent Hermione, but the fact that she'd still hold a grudge even after they were married is slightly disturbing and ... stalkerish.
But it was definitely an incredible story and it gave me the chills. You're very good at writing this sort of thing :) xxxAuthor's Response: Lavender is very troubled indeed, although at this point, I think she's more bound for jail rather than therapy. :P She needs both, to be honest!
A poison candle was one of the objects suggested in the prompt, and the minute I looked at it, I thought it was so cool and knew I wanted to use it. (Though a poisoned drumstick would be genius!)
I definitely don't think Lavender's right in the head, and though I don't really get into it in this story, I'm under the impression that, as I've written her here, she suffered head injuries and a bit of brain trauma when she was attacked by Greyback in the Battle of Hogwarts. The movies made it seem like she died, but we never find out in the books; if she did survive, she's likely to have suffered. This is one interpretation of that suffering!
Anyway. I'm really glad you took the time to leave me a review on this, and I hope you know that it truly made my day to see you'd come by. ♥ I hope to see you back soon! Report Review
Loving this!! I watched the video and I was picturing Harry singing instead of Kelly ... it was sort of disturbing but hey ho!
Anywazzy, I think you told me this was up before (or maybe you didn't? o.O) but I didn't get a chance to review because I had this huge headache. Luckily it's gone now and I read this. I loved that last sentence. The whole thing was short and sweet.
Love you!xxAuthor's Response: aw love u to babe! yeh I had a really distrbing dream about harry singing this to voldemort when i wrote this!! xx Report Review
yaaay, first chapter for your first proper story!!! It was really good!!
'I began to breathe so hard snot threatened to come out of my nose'. Lol. Just ... LOL. It's the -ahem- yesterday thing all over again. *dies of laughter*
Can't wait for the next chapter xAuthor's Response: ahh so glad u likeyed it! i am kinda dying of laughter here too!! just requested a banner xox Report Review
What? Completed? NO!!!
That last chapter ... OMEIGFZDHGLRHGVADN!!!
I loved the whole story. I'm kinda sad it's all over ... but it was happy times when it wasn't. xAuthor's Response: Yes, it's completed...I know, I'm sad too. I'm delighted to hear that you loved this story; it means so much to me that you guys are liking these stories...honestly, I don't have much experience...But thanks for the review! :D Report Review
EHEHEHEHEHE!!! I AM TE FIRST REVIEWER!!
LOL! "Albus 'butter wouldn't melt in my mouth' Potter"! Haha! You is funny XD
P.s. GET THE FIRST CHAPTER OF THE OTHER STORY UP NOW BEFORE I WHUP YOUR BUTT!!XXXAuthor's Response: just writing it!! calm xx Report Review
OMG!! WHY SO SHORT!???!?!?!
I loved this chapter. I hope Chastity gets thrown off the Astronomy Tower. Grr.
I wonder what James will say to Violet now he knows? I hate you for all this suspense!!
P.S, that quote I used in my last review was from a "Dork Diaries" book. I don't remember which one. But It's a good book ;)Author's Response: I'm sorry for the short chapter! And I hope so too, but unfortunately things aren't always that simple :D The Dork Diaries sound funny, I think I'll add them onto my list of books to read! Thank you for reading and reviewing x Report Review
Your first story!!! YAAAY!! And I'm the first reviewer!! YAAYYY!! It was really good! YAY!
Learning you are, my young padawan (Sorry, star wars quotes do not belong on hpff!)
*is very excited for your next one*Author's Response: aww thanks and I am already writing my next story xox I hoped you loved it. Report Review
There aren't many stories that could make me feel emotional (heart of stone, me) but yours was one of the few that did. I've always pondered on the subject of Alice and Frank, but I've never really gone as far as after their torture.
It's so sad that Neville was like a stranger to Alice. Yet she still had that feeling only mothers get about their babies. It was so simple yet so ... effective.
AND IT WAS BEAUTIFUL!! you're really good at writing sad! xAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review dear! I think I have to write more depressing, sad stories now ;) Report Review
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