She is going to pass out one day. Cadence, stop!
I read her counting calories and get legitimately worried about her, lol.
Love the chapter and Miles! Report Review
TELL HIM YOU LOVE HIM CADENCE, GOOD GOD.
Great chapter! Report Review
Sirius is in serious trouble (pun intended).
Hope you update soon - I love your portrayal of Regulus. It's such a turmoil to watch Jada go through and see both sides. Report Review
Excited to see what happens next! Even though, I have the feeling its going to be something bad for poor Griffon. Report Review
It is seriously driving me crazy, and making me so sad, to read what she thinks about herself. But I must say, your story is making me LOVE Charlie - this is a nice change up from the usual pairings - great job! Report Review
I love her defending the Hufflepuff - go Cads!
&I adore her reaction to the kiss. This is so flippin' adorable! Report Review
I love it! Go Cads! Report Review
I just started reading and am really enjoying it; I love your characters thus far and things from Cadence's POV - she's an entertaining narrator, but very relatable.
Maybe this will be answered later on, and its not really important, but I am just curious as to what she looks like (since she keeps thinking she's chubby). I'll keep reading to see!Author's Response: Thanks so so much for this review and all your reviews! I was going crazy not knowing what anyone thought of it. Hopefully you got your question answered about what she looked like, I think chappie 6 had her image? Report Review
Uh oh... I wonder where this Sirius thing will lead to, very interesting indeed.
Lovely chapter - the buildup is good without sacrificing anything. Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: Thanks! That means a lot to hear. I'm working on a new chapter now. Hopefully I'll have it up soon! Report Review
I want Jasmine to get tough and real hot so she can find a new guy better than that rude-o, James. Of course I'm sure James has his reasons (whatever!) but its ridiculously easy to dislike him right now.
I liked your banner before, but it was too-fast so I literally had to stare and read over it to get everything - that being said - I like this one also.
Post soon!Author's Response: I think I portray James too badly. Haha! And yes, Jasmine tough and real hot...well, I'll work on that. But haha, I find it funny cause Jazzy is more like, I dunno...She doesn't care much. But maybe she will. ;)
I'm sorry about changing the banner! I knew you liked the previous one. I just personally think the animation sucks. Hee, but thank you for liking this banner, too! You're amazing! MASSIVE thanks for reviewing! And yes, chapter 4's in the queue! :)) Report Review
I'm really enjoying your story. I've never read another story with Regulus as a central/background character before and enjoy how you've portrayed him as kind while still being true to his ties to Voldemort.
I also really like seeing the different side to the Marauders and Lily.
Wonderful chapter and great build-up.Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! I think that J.K. Rowling made such complex characters and placed such emphasis on the shades of grey between good and evil; right and wrong. That is what struck me as the most important message kids can take from her books, and that message is what inspired this story. I hope you keep reading! Report Review
I really like your story so far!
It's a new take on everything and I thought your description of her thoughts was excellent. Lilly's thoughts are warped and very self-influenced right now because of her state of mind, so I thought it was great how everyone seems to be against her but that may not be the case.
Post soon! Report Review
I'm loving your story so far!
Hopefully we'll go more in-depth on Jasmine and James' relationship next chapter (maybe?... please?) or perhaps James.
I love Seed and Tristan but I want to know morrree.
Post more soon!Author's Response: Yeah, I'm working on that--on James mostly. cause I seriously don't know how he would act around Jasmine. Aaaahhh, it's kind of frustrating! But anyways, yeah. Working on it. Thanks for the reeevvieeww~ :)) Report Review
I just started and I love it so far! The characters are very well-written so far, ANNDD I LOVE your banner.
With it - I'm off to the next chap :)Author's Response: Awwshies, thanks! Haha, I'm happy you love it~ Oh and the banner, really? Haha! I think it rather sucked. haha! thank youuu so much for the review! You made my day! :) Report Review
1) I cannot wait for the next chap!
2) The entire time it was happening I was thinking that sneaky Al had changed up his game. He is a good actor after all!
3) James + Rory (?) If so, why she was kissing Al?!
4) Emily is my fav. Actually, I pretty much Cleve everyone in this story. Especially Freida, haha.
Post more soon!!Author's Response: Ahhh!!
1) Ha, you and me both.
2) Hmm. Interesting thoughts. We're going into his head next, so we'll find out soon :D
3) Ah, the great enigma of James and Rory. You're the first person to pick on the fact that something's going on there. But what, I cannot say.
4) Emily is... interesting. As is Frieda. And everyone else. Yeah.
I'll try to post soon :)
Thank you for the review! Report Review
"How does she expect me to not think about my bossness?"
Love it (mainly because I love the word "bossness"). It's very... boss.
Can't wait to keep reading!Author's Response: Bossness is such a boss word. And Al uses it like a boss.
:D Report Review
I was incredibly entertained by how outrageous Al's behavior is, it's just obnixious enough to be just too much. I'll definitely keep reading if you keep writing!Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad he entertained you :D He definitely is an obnoxious little brat. I'll keep writing, so I guess we have a deal :) Report Review
I agree with a previous comment about pointing out Aimee's strengths. I really like her (like I want to be friends with her!) and I want James to see her as more than this clumsy, scared Hufflepuff.
Besides wanting to see Aimee in a better light, I absolutely adore your story :). I hope you continue writing and post soon!!Author's Response: i also agree with the previous comment about pointing out aimee's strengths ~ this is in the next chapter a lot more than it is in this one, which is good :D james needs to realise that he barely even knows her before he goes and stereotypes her :P
thank you so much :D aimee feels very sorry for herself all the time ~ hence why the story seems very negative. but hopefulyl it will get better :D thank you!
ellie :) xx Report Review
i thought your story was adorable!
it was a good short story and had very good potential for a longer story if you wanted.
very cute. i really enjoyed reading it :)Author's Response: Thanks so much! I probably could have written a longer story, but I just didn't have it in me! Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) Report Review
I've spent all afternoon catching up and I love your story! There are minor grammatical errors but they do not lessen how good it is 'cause I love me some good ol' fashion drama and love!!
1) I'm very excited Scorpius and Rose are finally together, may I make a request to keep them together? Haha, I do not like when my favorite couples are broken up by stupid drama.
2) I was thinking this the entire time the family was being mean - it was almost too mean. I mean, honestly?! I have 3 sisters and 1 brother and if they ignored/treated me the way they did Rose, I would be so angry at them, deserving or not (and what she did was not deserving of their actions). It actually made me like ALL of them less and James more.
Just had to get that out there. Loving it! Report Review
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