Oh dear god that was fabulous! It had me in stitches the entire time! I love the last line and the part about McGonagall's ankles. It was absolute genius! Thank you very much!
-Jess/ Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad this made yo laugh, and who doesn't love Mc Gonagalll's ankles?
Thanks again for to review! Report Review
WOO! *Totally snags first review ever*
Ahem. Anyway, I really liked the preface! I'm a total cynic when it comes to love and relationships and I felt like she was quoting me.
I also really like your writing style. It flows and is easy to read but almost mature? I don't know how to explain it but it's good :D And you don't give too much away just yet. I hate it when a summary sounds intriguing, you read it and then the writer has told all of the secrets in the first chapter; so the mystery is gone.
Sorry if I bored you ;) Please update soon! I want to read about Marnie some more.
~JessAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review my story that means so much!
Haha I am too! Not as severe as she is at this point but close enough to know that I'm probably going to live with a million dogs...because their cooler than cats in my opinion XD.
Thank you! my style has grown a lot since my earlier years and I'm glad it sounds mature! haha I got what you were saying no worries! I hate that too trust me! A lot of authors do it sometimes so it's awesome when you find someone who doesn't! Glad you liked the preface and I'm so happy I left a bit of mystery for my readers!
You did not bore me at all! I was so happy that I almost did a girl squeal in Barnes and Nobles XD I'm writting the first chapter as we speak!
Hugs and Butterfly kisses (XD) Morgan Report Review
I'm really interested to see where this is going to go. Your final line, Cara Palmer is dead, made me sad because I kind of hoped things would work out with her Danny. They sounded very close as kids and its pity they argued. I wonder if they ever reconciled before she died?
Can't wait for the next chapter!
-Pottergirl7Author's Response: I hated the idea of having to kill Cara because I actually had a whole plot planned for her and Danny but the story just worked out better for me to have her murdered :( thanks so much for your wonderful review! (: Report Review
OHMYGOD WHAT HAPPENED TO JAMES?!?! No! Please update quickly as I MUST know why James didn't show! Personally I think Summer should be incredibly angry, I mean he stood her up and gave her hypothermia! But I must know why he never turned up!!!
Fantastic chapter! (I think I may be in love with Freddie just a lil bit ;) )
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I absolutely loved that chapter! Awesome as always! My favourite part was when Scorpius came round for dinner and Hugo was being such an annoying little brother (aren't they all?). I really like how you portrayed Ron as well, when Scorpius walked in he was a little apprehensive but he acted fine. I hate how in some stories he always loses it and doesn't know how to act civil. And yes, when Rose and Scorp kissed, I did squee a little bit :D
Its awful that someone plagiarized your story! Was it someone on this site? Was it the same person both times? That happened to my friend on a different site and she was really angry about it.
Really great chapter and I can't wait until the next one!
~ Pottergirl7Author's Response: Haha, Hugo absolutely cracks me up. He is so funny and annoying. He's like ellis... but Rose's brother. Love that about him.
I'm glad you liked their interactions. You know, I have noticed that about other stories where Ron just loses his marbles. After all of the interactions Ron has had since graduating (ie a LOT) I'm pretty sure he wouldn't freak out over that. Sure, it would catch him off guard in the "how many kids are there at that school and she comes home with that specific one" sort of way... but imo, that's it.
It was on a different site. I have no idea who it was, but I lost it for a while. I was so mad. I don't understand the point of stealing someone's work and passing it off as your own. Getting reviews you know you did not earn. I would love to say more, but I don't think it's wise.
ANYWAY, thank you for the wonderful review and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Report Review
Pottergirl7 here with your review for 2nd place in my 'Broom Cupboard Challenge'!
I really like Autumn, I think she's very clever and funny.
I loved when you added in Roger Davies. I saw his name and immediately thought ladies man in his Hogwarts days and now he's gay! Pure genius I tell you.
I also really like all the girls names. I thought it was very clever.
My favourite part would have to be when Roxy hung up Dom's bras and she had one with 'property of Daniel Smith' on it!
I was a little sad with the whole Fleur and Bill divorce, I really like their pairing and that made me sad.
Overall I really liked it and I can't wait to read more!
I can't find your story 'Betrayed' which you requested I review. Your author page claims you only have four stories and I scrolled through my reviews to see if I could find it but to no avail. I'll find two random stories and read/favourite them!
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-Pottergirl7Author's Response: Maybe the ladies' man type of personality was to hide his true attractions? ;)
I also really like Bill and Fleur, what pushed me into splitting them up I have no idea, but now here we go!
(Betrayed was deleted, then reupdated. It's a long story.)
Thank you for this review :) Report Review
Well hello there! I thought this was a very clever idea! I like Risus he reminds me of a combination between Sirius and Regulus, against the Pureblood mania but quiet about it. Until of course there's that last act of defiance. I liked it a lot and thought it was really well written.
(4 down 1 to go but because you haven't requested a fifth story I shall put my hand into the chocolate box and pick out a tasty treat!)
-Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thanks so much! Haha yes I did try to make Risus unlike Sirius and I guess he ended up a little like Regulus because of that. I'm glad that you liked it. Sometimes I forget abou this one-shot because it was so long ago that I wrote it.
Can't wait to see which one you pick! Have a very Merry Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanza, or whatever it is you celebrate and a Happy New Year!
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Well here are my thoughts! I thought it was beautiful. It made me sad yet happy that Neville still loves his parents and that he's so sweet with his mother. I love how you showed the fact that in his mind they have Christmas traditions whereas in Alice's she's all about the cornflakes. It was sweet and very fluffy, I liked it a lot.
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-Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! I certainly enjoyed writing this one-shot and it made me really feel this gut-wrenching feeling of sorrow for Neville and all that he's been through. It was both fun and sad to write.
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My second review! Well let me just say that this is a fabuliscious idea and I really love this blonde girl. I admit I'm one of those fans who fantasize about changing dramatic scenes to avoid conflict and a horrible chain of events. I loved the three stories and I had a grin on my face the whole way through! I also like how she never reveals too much but just what's necessary. Great job, I can't wait to read more!
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-Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thank you! I have to say I loved this idea when I thought of if because honestly I don't think it's possible to read a book without wanting to stop certain events. I just thought I'd hit some of the important ones in Harry Potter.
Thanks for the lovely review!
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Hey there! It's Pottergirl7 coming to you with your promised five reviews for my Broom Cupboard Challenge, I'm so sorry it's taking so long to finally get around to doing this but I'm really terrible at juggling my time. Well let's crack on.
I really like the way you portrayed Ron, the way he spoke and acted was perfect!
I also thought his reaction to Ginny's pregnancy was great, true to his protectiveness.
The only thing was I thought the one-shot overall was a bit rushed. It felt a little frantic to me so maybe you could add a little more and try and slow the pace a bit?
But overall I thought it was a nice sweet little story!
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-Pottergirl7Author's Response: It's quite alright! The same thing will probably happen to me when the deadline of my own challenge comes along, haha.
Thanks for the lovely review! I do see what you're saying about it being rushed. I think the problem is that I just got the general idea in my head and didn't really stop to think what I wanted to write.
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Well I hope you get your guy!
And I really liked this chapter but there wasn't much internal comedic genius on Rae's part and I'm not quite sure about the POV change... Just thought I'd share some thoughts, it may just be me but I love criticism!
~Pottergirl7 (Jess)Author's Response: No, constructuve critisim is great! I'm working on POV, hopefully I'll get the hang of switching them. And yeah, I'm trying to space out her humor a bit, you know the whole 'too much of a good thing' thing :D Report Review
Well hello there! This was seriously funny! I loved how Rae was so against Rose changing/covering herself up. I also love the Al/Rae bits and I can't wait for the next chapter! I just have to know what's going to happen between them all! And I hope your week wasn't too bad. It's always hard settling in at first.
Please please please update as soon as possible!
~Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! I'm updating now so :D and my weeks are getting better so :D thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Hey hey I'm here with your review! Well that was just awesome! It was so well written and actually very humorous. I like that when James mentioned Lily, Snape went off on one and tried to attack him. Also when Snape fell asleep on James it made me laugh. Really well done!
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Well here I am! And I just want to say I really loved this! It was simple but really lovely.
I love how you showed them ten years later, shooting death eaters and Emmeline getting some revenge on Malfoy!
Plus Fabien and Gideon were joking and pranking a lot like Fred and George. I think you portrayed them really well.
It was light-hearted and fun! I liked it a lot!
~Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Can't wait to hear the results of the challenge.
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Here I am with le review! Aw that was cute!
I love how you made Harry stumble over the words for the spell and then Ginny remembers it.
I also like how he tried to ask about Cho Chang and she left real quick.
Nice one, very sweet!
~Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thanks and I'm glad you liked it. I think that Ginny wouldn't have liked to stay and talk about Cho for very long :D Report Review
Well hey hey! Oh yay *totally scores first reviewer spot again*. Ahem, anyway I loved it! I love her thoughts and feelings, she's the perfect comedienne.
On another topic, have you thought of getting a banner? They really attract a person to a story, having an eye-catching banner. If you need help on getting one, then reply and I'll give ya hand!
So overall, great chapter I really can't wait for the next one!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm updating it as we speak, but I have no promises on the validation, unfortunately! I'm so glad you like rae, I'm rather proud of her. On another topic, I have gotten a banner and I've hosted it and all-but I have no clue on how to upload it! Report Review
This chapter was awesome! I can't believe Malfoy stunned himself! One thing though, the revival spell for being stunned is 'ennervate'. Just so ya know! Loved the chappie!!!Author's Response: Good catch on that spell! My bad. I've made a few changes (when they come through) to justify Rose using Finite Incantatum. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
As amazing as ever! I loved this chapter, it was better than the first! I love how freaked out Rose got at the mere mention of commitment, I guess it shows a little bit of insecurity she seems to have. She seems like a very confident person but in actual fact she appears to be doubting her future. Nice one :)Author's Response: She definitely does have an insecurity there! Thanks so much for the review :) Report Review
This was lovely! I really can't find anything to criticize you on, it was very sweet! I love your style of writing so I shall have to take a look at some of your other pieces! Well done, this was a really well written, sweet story!Author's Response: Thank you so much, both for the reviews and the compliments! :) Report Review
I liked it, it was very sweet. I just have a few pointers for future stories.
-Always make sure you check your spellings. Stuff like minuets is minutes.
-Loosen up with your writing. When you write dialogue instead of saying "yes I will do the spell" try saying "yeah I'll do the spell". Y'know how people speak normally.
-And finally, don't rush through your story. Include description and maybe some more inner thoughts.
Overall I liked it a lot, I'll have to check out some of your other stories too!
-Pottergirl7Author's Response: :O!! Thanks so much for the review!! :D
First, my spelling SUCKS. I am done with homeschool now, so I should be better since I have real teachers. (Not that you are bad dad!)
And I am also bad at dialogue. :P My bad.
Thanks so much for the review!
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I think this is an awesome idea and i'm desperate to see how it develops! Please hurry up and update because i thought that chapter was amazing and that the story in total is just amazing :) Report Review
IT'S A DIARY! I'M SURE IT IS!!! I am positive the clue is talking about a diary :) Nice chapter! Report Review
This chapter was, as always, amazing. I love Dom, she's just so bright and bubbly and fun! I'm very curious as to why Eddie didn't show... he seemed really into Rose before so i think there's something fishy going on. and yay finally some ScoRose development! Awesome chapter, please update the next one soon, these always make my day!
-Pottergirl7Author's Response: Thank you so so much! Eddie's actions will be explained in the next chappie, which should be up soon. I love Dom too :)
And yes, the ScoRose is always good. Thanks for another lovely review x Report Review
Twas awesome! I liked that there was fun banter during the date and they seemed to get on so easily. I'm quite excited to see how the parties will turn out; i think there will be some Scorpius/Rose during them. Nice work can't wait for the next chapter! :)Author's Response: Yes, there will be much Scorpius/Rose, especially in the one coming up. Thanks for the review, too :) Report Review
I loved the prequel Just Rose so when i saw this i got really excited. It's very funny and i can't wait for your plot this time around! My favourite storyline was definitely the whole Teddy/Dominique thing, and i hope there's more drama involving them as well!
-Pottergirl7Author's Response: There will be plenty of drama, I promise :) I'm glad you enjoyed the first story, hopefully you'll still enjoy this one :) Thank you so much! :D Report Review
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