I really like the idea of the story and the pairing. God, I love the pairing. I always thought Draco would end up with Pansy.
Now, I'm not going to bash your story, I'm only giving you some constructive criticism.
You have lots and lots and lots of text, but because it's all cramped together, people tend to look past it and get bored after a while. If divide it in paragraphs, it'll seem much lighter and it's easier to read.
Because of the bunches text, you tend to make some grammar mistakes. If you divide the text into paragraphs, as I said, it's much easier to spot those mistakes and correct them.
I really liked the beginning, the notes they sent back and forth. It was flirty and cute and fluffy and I just liked it. What I also liked is the fact that Draco has these doubts about being a death eater. He seems so real, though you have to consider he's still a Slytherin. Slytherins tend to be egocentric.
Overall, nice job and keep it up. =)Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you! Im glad you like it. Its my very first time making these, i really have no experience at all, so your opinion is very important to me :) Report Review
He obviously said it. He had to. He's supposed to. At least, in my opinion.
I really love the story so far, you've never dissapointed me whenever a new chapter comes up. That's talent, just saying.
I feel sorry for Aria, my heart broke a little at the end.
Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Haha, he's supposed to say it - I like that reasoning. But I'm not giving up anything. I'm really glad to hear that I haven't disappointed you - that means a lot to me, really.
I think everyone feels sorry for Aria :(
Thank you for the lovely review! Report Review
I've got to say I love this story. And Nata ofcourse. But if she's going to the quidditch match, isn't her mom getting her out of hogwarts?Author's Response: Aw yay! I'm so glad you like the story and Nata. It's like one of my children.
But yeah, if Nata goes to the Quidditch match her mum will definitely freak out and most likely pull her out of school.
Thank you so much for reviewing!
-Rebecca Report Review
I think Tasha wants to know what happened with James. And so do I.
Love your story, I really wish Natashe would stand up against her mother. And Molly and Gryffin should get together. hehe.Author's Response: Hahah you may or may not be right about the condition ;) But I have the next chapter written so I'm going to post in into the queue either today or tomorrow! But yeah, lots of people want to know what happened with James and all I can say is it will be told very very soon.
I'm so happy you like my story and I hope Natasha stands up to her mother too! And it's funny that you say that about Molly and Gryffin because I ship them too!
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