This is good but you need to work on words like 'eated', 'hided' and 'sended'.Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you think it's okay. I deliberately used words like 'eated', 'hided' and 'sended' though, they were used to convey the child's young age. He is only three and doesn't have a good grasp on language. I used words like that to help the reader see things from his point of view. He doesn't have a very wide vocabulary or proper grammar yet, because he is still learning. I am sorry if you found them annoying or repetitive though. I just based this on how my three year old cousin speaks and she talks like that so that's why I included words like 'eated', 'hided' and 'sended' - the child just thinks to put things in the past tense you add 'ed' to each word, which works in most cases, but not all, and the child just hasn't learned the exceptions to that rule yet. Report Review
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