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Review #51, by hollysmithTimeline Lost: Chapter Two

23rd March 2012:
Really good start to a story. I was worried that Lily Potter wouldn't get along with Lily Evans. Please don't be cheesy and have her mission be to get Lily and James together.

Your story summary is confusing with regard to which Lily travels back in time. You might want to make it a little clearer.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Don't worry, her mission is not even close to that... it's much more action-packed, like a legitimate mission for The Order. :D I'll make my summary more clear on protagonist identification, thank you so much for pointing that out!

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Review #52, by hollysmithA Woman's Guide to Professional Quidditch: Meeting the Potters

22nd March 2012:
Wow...Brilliantly written. I'm so ready to dive into James' head and find out what he's thinking. I wonder why he's stiff around Harry. I always thought Harry would be the ultimate dad. I really like you're angle on his relationship with his kids (at least him and James). In JK's epilogue, he has such a sweet moment with Albus and even a little with Lily. Maybe James is just so different from Harry that they don't click. Maybe James is a prankster and carefree and secretly feels like a failure when compared to "The Boy Who Saved the World at the Age of 17." Ooooh there could be some really good interactions between James and Harry as they sort themselves out!

Sorry for the ramble. You're story and writing is really great and makes me think. Please keep the updates coming.

Author's Response: I'm actually going to explain the relationship between Harry and James in a few chapters, you just hold tight! You'll have all your questions answered. You'll see why James is so stiff around Harry and why Harry didn't interact much with James. I know he wasn't in it much, but I actually did do that on purpose. I like rambles, so keep rambling!

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Review #53, by hollysmithThe Art of Surviving.: Sincerity.

22nd March 2012:
Wow! This story is so good. The Art of Breathing is one of my favs on this site and this sequel is going just as well. Please update again soon.

Author's Response: Thank you veyr much Hollysmith! I'm glad you enjoyed TAOB and there's already another chapter up. Enjoy :D

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