Please please please please pleeeaaasse continue this story...and Unhinged while we're at it.
Belle's absolutely hilarious and I just love her relationship with Oliver.
btw...does he like her? I should hope so. I'm a huge romantic- and yes, I would consider that very romantic.
And I just love that last sentence... Yes, it was somewhat of a cliff hanger which means you'll have to update soon so you don't keep all these poor readers hanging... and hanging...
10/10 :D (update) Report Review
Haha! Smooth Ally. Real Smooth.
This plot is really cool. I would hate to be in Ally's situation. I really hope it isn't Cole or Albus. If Fred really likes Ally, I hope it's him ...unless of course, you're an author that likes a nice twist, and Cole ends up being that dad.
Just DON'T have Albus as the father IF Fred likes her. Please? That's a lot of Drama. I think I like the Cole father thingy drama better.
Better yet, Fred! (If he likes her, I would like it officially confirmed at one point of the story please.)
I'm Really curious to see what happens next, (especially at that huge cliff hanger) so update soon! :D
10/10Author's Response: Hey, :)
Thanks, I'm glad you think so! Same, I don't think it would be much fun at all. Just think of all that drama!
I think if Al was the daddy and Fred dates Ally it would be so awkward but again think of all the drama it would cause. But then again having Cole or Fred as the daddy will cause alot of drama no matter what. :)
I won't sat too much because of spoilers but there is a little moment... ;)
Hopfully once I update my Al/OC this will be next!!!
Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Soph x Report Review
I like happy endings. Pwease?
( . .)
Best Case Scenario: The Potters forgive each other. Nick and Owen. Albus and Piper (by far the best pairing). Everyone sees how much the Slytherins have suffered. Nick is NOT send to Azkaban. Nick is also not rendered insane and comes out completely fine. James and Albus reconcile. Creevley... well don't be too harsh, but a nice prank on him perhaps?
Worst Case Scenario: Nick dies ...and that alone is pretty depressing.
P.S. Can we see a little glimpse of Lilly? Just a little one would be fine.Author's Response: Happy endings? What are these mythical creatures you speak of?
I believe I can speak without spoiling when I say the best case scenario can't happen realistically with this story. I can't say how it will end, though...
And lily will be in the chapter after the next. I promise. :) thank you so much for the review!
Ellie Report Review
Yes!!! Bryan and Stacy!!! I actually wanted that pairing in Fighting Temptation, but thought it was unlikely you would do it. But guess what? I was RIGHT. Ha!
My victory aside, this chapter was very sweet. And Bryan has definitely won his way as my favorite character. I love that he's still like his old self, when everyone else has changed a bit. Thursdays. *snort*
Until next chapter my dear awesome person! We shall meet again. (hopefully very soon? :D)Author's Response: Yeah a lot of people really wanted that pairing and I am not going to lie that was one of the few times that I let reviews influence my story, because I had honestly never even considered that pairning until the Paranoia and Secrets Revealed chapter in Fighting Temptaion when so many people asked me about it. Then I started to think about it and I saw the light in a way, after that well my mind had been changed.
Bryan is one of my favorite characters as well, probably because he really isn't that complicated to write about, sure he s put into a lot of complicated situations but he just takes them so lightly. Marrying Stacy has matured him some, obviously not a whole lot but she has grounded him a bit which is a good thing.
We will meet in two weeks, thats my goal, every two weeks. Thanks for the review you wonderful person. lol. Report Review
"Rose is with a boy, and they're...snogging. That's just wrong." Scorpius put an arm around me, smiling softly.
James was lying on the ground, rubbing his forehead, while ROSE put her wand back in her dress pocket. I cheered, then stopped myself, but it was too late. Scorpius gave me a victorious grin.
"Oh, stop it. I'm proud of my baby cousin
...wait. Do you mean Lilly??? This part got me terribly confused, you meant Lilly, right?
But otherwise, I absolutely loved your descriptions on the costumes, and how is Vera not a Slytherin?!? Honestly.
Hope you update soon!
toodlesAuthor's Response: Oops. I'll fix that. Yeah, I meant Lily. Yep, Lily. Definitely Lily. I'll fix that right away. Like, right now.
Thanks. I love the costumes. I'm tempted to try and get a Venus costume for myself.
I don't know how Vera isn't a Slytherin. I think she gradually got evil, and by then it was too late. Besides, it works with her being in Gryffindor.
I will update very soon, hopefully.
Cheers, Phoenix Quill :D Report Review
Oh god, you had to end there didn't you. You just gave me a minnie freak out. Is the baby Ok??? And Violet too of course. What happens to Chasity? James finds out about the baby in next chapter right? If so, how does he react? *sigh* I guess I have to find out in the next chapter. In all, this chapter was a real twist, and I hope you undate soon :)
toodlesAuthor's Response: Haha yes, you'll have to wait for the chapter! Hopefully you won't have to wait too long ;) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
And finally! The great Sirius Black has decided to grace us with his presence! I was waiting for that part. Though him being the "stalker" is quite a twist. This chapter just aroused more questions. How are Daphne and her friends any different from Wizards, and why would they be slaughtered if they stepped into Wizarding World? And "the last of they nine?" wah??? And this is a Sirius/OC fanfic so... Daphne is going to meet Sirius soon I'm guessing? There's just so many questions out there, and they all need to be answered SOON. So, UPDATE (soon) PLEASE!!!
P.S. Are you going to stick with the Voldemort is an evil wench, and Sirius is from a pureblooded family and friends with the infamous marauders, making him a Gryffindor traitor plot?
100/10 Report Review
You updated!!! Happy Dance, happy dance happy dance- ah, I'm getting stares.
But let's get back to the chapter! Sweet Circie Sirrah is cruel... I'm quite glad she felt 'abandoned' but I hope James doesn't give up!
hmmm... Well, I guess that's up for you to decide.
Now please update the next chapter quicker.
toodles!Author's Response: First review! Squee! lol.
I know. Sirrah's cruel. I don't know what it is. She came up with that idea, not me. Of course, I don't really know what happened in this chapter either, not what I planned, but oh well. There's more too come that Sirrah will regret, just you wait.
Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon! Probably not before the queue closure as said in the author's note, but hopefully I'll muster up the strength to write it and finish it during the closure.
And I'm so glad you're still reading and I hope to see you again! Until then.
xxEnigmaticEyes16 Report Review
YESS!! you updated!!! Now. Chapter four. Come aliiive.
It's awesome how more Al showed up, but not too much about his reaction. Grrr. I still feel that Dee should be furious with them. Not run from them! She should- I don't know, curse them into obliviation! And what happened to her cousin...?
"He tried to kill you, Deandra, and then he got mad at you for wanting revenge! A normal person would be angry!" -Cinda
And I'm like, Yesss. I still find it unbelievable that she fell for Al. He does NOT deserve her, what-so-ever. Do NOT know why he doesn't feel any guilt at all. Hmph.
I REALY hope:
a) Dee comes to her senses and blows up on Al.
b) Al starts feeling GUILT. I tell you. Hard. Core. GUILT.
And the biggest question of all, is, WHY did they start tormenting Dee in the first place!?!?!? Meh. I guess that will be explained later on.
Hope chapter four comes up sooner than this one.
-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~ Toodles! ~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-Author's Response: Thank god someone is still reading this underupdated story.
And yes, I know underupdated is not a word. But it is now.
I promise that Dee will get angry. I swear. It's part of the story. Al will feel guilt. I promise. There would be no point in this if there was no guilt or anger or finding out why all these events went down in the first place. Pinkie swear. Report Review
HA! The letters were the best part if I say so myself. They all rather fit into the person's personality. Great job on that.
Hope you update soon :)
10/10Author's Response: Thank you sooo much! I did try my best to fit the characters' personalities. I'm updating ASAP :) Report Review
Aurgh! Human! You can NOT just go and leave a cliffie like that! That is adjhgnkagruadgk... not nice.
And then, she's about to tell James! *insert squeal* About bloody time!
And HA! when Rose said "as much as I know you would like to go in sweatpants, a ratty t-shirt and no makeup" to Violet... WOW. That was totally my friend and I. (Me being Violet) Though BTW, I did still love the dress description.
so, you BETTER update soon, I HAVE to know what happens next. Have to have to have to have to have to have to have to- you get the point. UPDATE.Author's Response: Haha, my relationship with my bestfriend is the exactly same :) thank you so much for your review! I will updating as soon as I can! x Report Review
bitch wrangling. ROFLMAOAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH. That. Was. Hilarious. Can't. Breathe. Laughing. Too. Hard. OMG THAT WAS EPIC. Brilliant!
And I'm so happy that Al actually likes Kyra... but I'm still confused as to Albie's problem with rejection... apparently, again. hope it's explained soon?!!
And someone KISSED Al in the end? Who? The suspense is stabbing me. With a fork and all. ;)
Ah. Just update soon and all. Can't wait for ch 7. :DAuthor's Response: Yeah... I'm not even sure how i thought of bitch wrangling it just kind of 'popped' into my head... yeah... I don't know xD I'm strange...
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and thank you SO much for the feedback :D Report Review
WOW. You're an amazing writer. Never have I ever wanted to punch someone so much. And by someone, I mean Sirius and James. You portrayed them in an entirely different way than I'm used to seeing. They're rude, cruel, conceited, moronic, idiotic, bozos...ect. And Black stealing her necklace! Urgh I can understand Lily.
And then on the other hand, I just want to punch and hug Remus at the same time. I mean can't he bloody stand up for Beatrice a bit more? Honestly! But then, i just want to give him a big fuzzy hug every time he comforts Beatrice.
And BTW, Beatrice is a lovely character. How she stood up for herself and stated the ugly truths Sirius didn't want to hear. I love her more after every argument.
Anyways, I hope you update really soon!!! Another chapter would be lovely.
10/10 Report Review
Hahaha. Albus's and Scorpious's duet was hilarious!
So i'm reading this when O class git says "She asked and I didn't say no; it was a moment of weakness, Rose, nothing else," and OMG i just HAD to turn on Taylor's swift's song Should've said no. "You say that the past is the past, You need one chance. It was a moment of weakness and you said yes"
so yah. And Skip and Min are single again! Hurry up and get them together will yah? It's about bloody time.
Oh and i can't wait for Rose's cousins to find out about Joseph cheating on her. It's going to be... interesting i guess.
So yah. I hope you update soon!
11/10 Report Review
YYYAY! James kissed her!!!
Happy dance! It was about time. Now i can't want until Andrew finds out. And it won't be pretty! Unless, of course, he's had a random change of mind... but seriously doubt it.
Update! (though you're already doing a wonderful job of it)Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you think I'm doing a wonderful job :) Don't worry, Andrew will be finding out soon enough... and it's going to be interesting... Anyway, I hope you continue to read and review :D Report Review
That is, unless that idiot Potter goes and has a son with some poor, incredibly Confunded girl, has the ego to name him after himself, and sends the boy in question off to Hogwarts, where he, like his arrogant toerag of a father, revives the cycle of torture for some poor girl and pesters her to death by asking her out on a daily basis.
Well, she practically hit the nail on the head with that one.
Oh My GOD, i have trouble breathing! That. Is. Hillarious. Pure. Brilliance! I just love this chapter. Really shows how Lily and Rory pretty much have the same situation.
Anyways, Update soon! Please? Report Review
"Kiss him." Carrie said matter-of-factly.
"What?" I stared at her, startled, my hands frozen in the air from when I was demonstrating the best way to strangle Potter's neck
Sweet Circe, that was hilarious. I really really really really love this story! So Update soon!!! Report Review
1) this story siriusly needs a banner
2) GRYFFINDOR WON! Woot woot!
3) you are awesome at updating fast
4) Even More James/Kristen please?!?!?!?!
5) How does "Kristmes" sound. Surprisingly, it's pronounced *Christmas* meh.
6) James is just too cute
7) Next chapter soon pleaze?Author's Response: That would be pretty awesome if this story had a banner. I'm not too sure how to make one though... I'm glad you're enjoying it though :) and I'll try to continue updating fast. I hope you continue to read, review, and enjoy :D Report Review
O MY GOSH PERSON! YOU CAN NOT LEAVE US HANGING LIKE THAT!!! LEAVING US ON A CLIFF! THAT IS CRUELTY! especially since this cliff is taller than Mt. Everest. UPDATE!
ehem. I apologize for the excessive caps, but honestly! You must update soon. So many questions to be be answered. Who was the person that punched Scorpious. Is it linked to the person that gave Arwen her scar? How will Rose take this? Albus? Everyone? Basicly. WHAT HAPPENS NEXT.
Update. The suspense is KILLING me.
10/10Author's Response: Damn I am so sorry!!! I couldn't help but end the chapter there!!
The next chapter has a lot of emotions and stuff...cough! cough! *Rose/Scorpius* cough! And a few others.
I'll update soon enough! =D
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Please please please please please please update!
I HAVE to know what happens next. Siriusly. It's only been two chapters, and you got me hooked. Big time. I need more!!! :D
100/10 Report Review
You. Must. Update. Soon.
Siriusly. You can NOT leave me hanging like that! It's cruelty!
And gee, I never knew forks could be that violent. Gives me a whole new view on them. And i use to think spoons were the most violent one out of all those utensils. You know. How the round side wonderfully connects with the skull with a nice 'bang'.
Back on track. UPDATE! The change of POV was great, and i hope you continue to do that with the rest of the story!
The violence of this story is wonderfully... wonderful. Mia and Kyra reminds me of me and my friends actually :D
Toodles! 10/10Author's Response: This was an amazing review. Seriously- I burst out laughing xD Thank you SO much :D
"Siriusly" ...I see what you did there...
I was really quite worried about the change in POV so i'm glad you think I did a good job :) and I promise I don't mean to be cruel! I'm just have low confidence about my newest chapter! It should be out soon however... pinky swear. Report Review
I'm intrigued. Big time. I honestly can't wait to see "what's coming", and what happened, and how Rose came to be like that. So update soon! I'm dying to know :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! The next chapter will be up really soon! :) Report Review
Say hello to your newest fan. . . . me.
The beginning of the story is AWESOME! not boring at all, like what i sometimes experience. And you managed to sum up her family history very nicely.
I actually cried at the father's letter part. . . Though i was already a bit emotional at that time. . . .
And OLIVER WOOD MAKES A COMEBACK!!! Yay! He was always a favorite of mine in the series.
Can't wait for Fred to show up, and this story to progress.
10/10 ;)Author's Response: Hello!
It makes me glad that you didn't find the beginning boring. I know that the first chapter often makes or breaks it for most, so I'm glad this one didn't make you just want to exit out of the story.
Aw. It was sad, huh? It upsets me too, because they never got to reconcile.
Yes, Oliver. I love me some Oliver Wood, and I hope I do the older, a bit more mature Oliver justice.
The next chapter should be up within the week. Thanks for reading, reviewing, and adding this to your favorites!
~Leigh Report Review
Ooohh!!! this is such a good beginning chapter!!! I can't wait to see the story progress and more of Al/Violet
10/10 ;)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm actually quite excited about this story (and the impending Al/Violet fluff), so it warms my heart that you're looking forward to it as well. Thank you for reading! :D
- emma Report Review
"Oi! Leave her alone you Fwoopers!" I screamed with a shrill voice.
Hi-lar-i-ous. Man, i love that part! and i hope you update the chapter three soon. Can't wait for it. =)Author's Response: Glad you loved it :) As soon as possible ;) Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection