yay! i get to see rose and her relationship with her cousins. i really liked the chapter, and i liked the development of henry's mom, it really amplifies henry and cassie's characters. can't wait to see the next chapter. :)Author's Response: I am glad that it is improving, thank you so much for point out that area that I needed to improve! I am glad that you are still reading, and thanks for your review! Report Review
i liked the beginning of the chapter, it was pure and sincere. but during the middle, i kinda got the vibes that harry was a tad too bossy, which was something that i had trouble imagining.
i think that you could add a bit more conversation in the story, i like your use of vivid description and detail. can't wait to read next chapterAuthor's Response: Fair comment I guess. I rewrote these first four chapters because I was told (correctly) that my earlier story was not descriptive enough. So I was still trying to find the right balance and also try to describe what they were feeling. There are lots of conversations later. Some chapters work better than others and I definitely have my favourites.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback. Glad you're enjoying it so far. Report Review
wow! this story made my day! you pointed out all the things people change in other ships that make the characters unrealistic and completely mary-sueish! i applaude you for that!
i give this story 10/10 mate! its wild, wacky and breaks all the rules!
i hope you write another spoof fanfic soon.Author's Response: Thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
lol! okay, is this story supposed to be like a spoof of all the sappy romantic fanfics?
its silly, wacky, crazy and alot of fun! i love itAuthor's Response: Yes this is definetely a spoof. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
i'm happy to see more of rose this time, though you need to work on the conversations a little more to make them have that natural feel. otherwise, its great! i hope you keep roxy in the rest of the chapters because her rambunctious fun behaviour does bring a lot of life to the story. i can't wait to read the next chapterAuthor's Response: She will definitely stay around for a while, I like writing about Roxy! I am glad that you are planning to keep reading, and I am working on all of your suggestions, which are really helpful! Thanks :) Report Review
third chapter down the line. i like that you've shrunk roxy down to 7, many people, including myself, always imagine her as older.
again, i'll say this, i like the story. it's coming on to me like an abstract painting: i imagine rose and henry's lives having a lot of grey, but their are some life-giving themes underplaying the grey background, such as the bright red door and the yellow boots.
i like it, and i'm moving on to the next chapterAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for sticking with the story! I really like to hear how it progresses, so thank you so much for your help! I love reading your reviews and trying to alter my writing! Thanks again! :) Report Review
it's a really good chapter. dare i say, your writing style is better than most of the veteran authors here. i still think you need to work a little harder on shaping rose's character but as for henry, you have it spot-on. well doneAuthor's Response: Thank you, again! I will continue working on Rose, but thanks for your advice, and I am glad that you like Henry! This means so much to me, thank you so much! Report Review
i really like where this story is going, i hope rose ends up with the muggle boy. i give this 8/10 because the first part- rose's part- felt a little two dimensional, but henry's part i feel is excellent and was airtight, it was like looking at the magical world through a window.
anyway, let me proceed to the next chapter and seeAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your review! It really means a lot to me! And thank you so much for your advice about Rose's character! I will definitely work on that in the proceeding chapters! I am glad you like the idea for the story, and I hope you continue reading! Thanks again for your advice! Report Review
i like it! i can't belive that after 22 chapters, this is the first review, especially seeing as this is such a great story, i cant wait to read the other chaptersAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for commenting. I was begining to think everybody hated it! Hope you enjoy the rest of it. Personally I think the later chapters get better and better so if you liked the first one you should be in for some fun! :) Report Review
i love it. i like the new approach to hermione's character, it's fresh and entertaining. the michael jackson bit cracked me up, i want to read more!!!Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reading, glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
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