The hate I have for Alexia, she's such a horrible, horrible person. Who can hit a toddler and not feel bad about it. Can I please push her off the astronomy tower???
OHMYGOD, OHMYGOD, OHMYGOD!
I AM SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW *insert fangirl squeal here* I can't believe they kissed!!! ♥ ♥
I really hope they get together and then they can be a happy family. I'm so glad James has dumped Alexia, hopefully she's gone for good.
I can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens, will James and Nikki be cival towards each other or will they be a couple!! :D
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This chapter, OHMYGOD!!! My heart was racing as I read it. James knows and he's completely freaked out. No surprise there, I mean if you found out you were gonna be a dad when she's already four months pregnant, that's gotta be hard.
I squealed when James' entered the office. I'm so glad he wants to know. I offically love him now!!!
I really dislike Violet's mum. She really mean. Poor Violet, I just want to give her hugs.
ASDFGHJKLASDDGFHJKL! THEY HAVE TO GET TOGETHER, THEY WERE MADE FOR EACH OTHER!!! I'm so, so happy right now. James wants to be a part of it and I really, really hope they get together! :) ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
"raiding a child" - Think you meant raising :)
I love this chapter so much and James is a cutie. Really can't wait for the next one!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Haha, I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I agree with you about James finding out; one of the many reasons I am glad to be a girl ;) And I noticed the "raiding a child" mistake after I had submitted the chapter, and I didn't want to edit it and sent it to the back of the queue since I had already waited so long to update the story! I'll fix it soon :)
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Your summary was really unusual and I was so intigued that I had to read it, I'm so glad I did :)
I LOVE Coral's name, it's so unusual and unique. I names that no one else is likely to have!!
Until I read that Coral was 16, I really thought that she was in her early twenties/middle aged or something.
I realy like your characterisation of her, she seems like a fun person as well as being sorta of a mother hen because of giving advice and that she loves to help people.
I really like this so far. I think this really original and I've never read anything like it.
I'm curious as to why James calls her Coco?
I like the reasons behind their nicknames, espcially Coral's being Rocky!! :D
I'm in agreement with Rose, seeing Mcgonagall drunk would be way funnier than Slughorn.
It's nice to see Albus in a different light, okay so he's the golden boy but now he's turning bad and it's just really unexpected. I like it!!
"Hold up. They want me to help HARRY POTTER?" - Haha, love that she thinks she has to help Harry.
For some reason I think that Albus' change might have to do with drugs. The mood swings, violence, totally different personality. I don't know why but I have a feeling.
I can't wait to read the next chaprer and see more of Coral's personality and how their relationship develop as a counselour/patient and of thet become a couple.
Definitely adding it to my favs!!!
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Thank you for such a long lovely review! :D
I totally agree with you - I too, find Coral a really pretty name! And i got another reviwer confused about Coral's age. Maybe i should change that in the summary..
Thank you so much! I tried to keep the idea as original as possible and i didn't see any other story on hpff with this ides - so i thought i should try it out! I'm so glad you liked it :)
Well, Coco is one of her other nicknames which James has taken a liking to. So. I too wanted to portray Albus differently. In very few stories he's been portrayed as a bad boy so once again why not try a new idea! As for Albus's problem - you'll just have to wait and see ;)
Thank you so much for reading! I'll try to update as soon as i can :) x Report Review
I'm so, so glad James has taken to father hood so well. He's such a cutie around Tyler. Who is so adorable!!!
Urgh, Alexia. She's so horrible and mean. I can't believe she insulted Tyler, I mean he's the cutest little thing.
"St. Mungo" - Add an apostrophy and an 's' on the end of Mungo's
Brit picking - Diaper bag - It would either be a changing bag or a nappy bag. I think you mentioned it in the previous chapter as well.
So glad you're back, I've missed this story a lot!!!
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"I heard him mutter 'and I want you.'" - Yes!! Albus and Lexi have to get together!!
"her want in it." - I think you mean wand and it might might a bit more sense if it was 'to' instead of 'it'. Her wand to it.
"smiled and pit them in the" - I think you meant 'put' not 'pit'.
I really thought it would have been a boy (because surely if James saw a mini-him he would change his mind) but I'm glad it's a girl and that Lexi is happy.
Oh Lily, I know she crazy and excited but she spilled it. Although she didn't say which brother. I love that they think it's Al instantly and that he stuck by Lexi for saying it was.
I really hope that Al and Lexi get together because at least then, the baby can call Al daddy and it won't be too suspicious if the baby looks like James.
I hope that James tries to talk to Lexi at least, especially now he knows it's a girl.
Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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Aww bless Lily, at least she was making some progress. Speaking to those she doesn't know.
I'm curious is the guy who jumped at her Jake or Jason?? :/
"Mr Dudley's so much hotter than Zabini!" - For a second I thought is said Dursley not Dudley and I just burst out laughing. And then I realised what it actually said. :D
I like doctor Lupine, she's helping Lily a lot and I think that she may eventually get the truth from Lily about why she does it.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I hope that Harry and Ginny come and visit Lily soon.
Soph xAuthor's Response: Yeah, I kept on wondering why I did a double take whenever checking this chapter- Dursley, Dudley. I'm glad you like Dr Lupine, and and are still enjoying the story! I think it was Jason who jumped her, not Jake, though the names are all sort of similiar. Thanks for reviewing, it'll be updated soon! :) Report Review
Poor Reese, freaking out like that. She sure does have parental issues if she feels that way about marriage.
I thought it was such a British thing about the tea. One can never have enough cups (Or so I'm told, since I don't actually like tea).
Reese you little beauty for working it out, not too mention my prediction was right!!!
I panicked alot when James was telling Reese that they might be too serious. So, so, so glad there won't be any break-ups. (At least I hope not)
I have so many feels for the chapter because it's just so adorable and filled with fluff!! Jarissa, Scorose and the Weasleys = Perfect and a very happy me!!! ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Can't wait for the next chapter, I'm guessing it's going to be James' birthday dayout.
Soph xxAuthor's Response: ahaha yeah... Let's face it, most girls that get pregnant at a young age have A LOT of problems. :p I wanted to try and portray that in here. And parents, they fight and FIGHT AND FIGHT and then act normal. :p It's normal, but when people suffer from mental issues they don't realise that... :/
So yeah. :p
Personally I hate tea, but everyone I know LOVES tea. I don't see the big fuss of it, but everyone seems to love it. :p
Yes! You were right! :D
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Oh god, the twins seem like such lunatics. What with backwards flying and poisoning people.
Aww Louis, can I hug him because he is seriously cute. Not a bad word to say about Chase, me thinks that boy has it bad for her ;)
Chase and Louis = can they get together already, they are so cute!!!
What does the letter say???!!! I'm so, so curious. From Neville's reaction I'm thinking maybe someone died?
Why did you leave it hanging there!!! I have to know what that letter says and why Chase's life is gonna change forever!
Seriously cannot wait for the next chappie!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: I know, I know, but I imagine that the offspring of Luna WOULD be quite the oddballs, haha.
Yes, yes, Louis is an absolute sweetypie xD
You'll have to wait for the next chapter to find out what it said!! But I promise I won't take forever to update this time!
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My 300th review :)
Squeal of joy :D Thanks for a dedication I think I may have just freaked out a teeny tiny bit :D You're welcome!! because this story is simply awesome!!!
N'aww Freddie sorta taking care of Ryan. Aww Freddie being so worried about her, so adorable. I want him!! ♥ ♥
Mox and Gemma?? I was not expecting that. :)
So much Fryan, I don't think I can cope ♥ ♥
I'm really intigued about Ryan's backstory. And I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: WOW THREE HUNDRED OMG. Congrats! That's a serious milestone and I'm honored it's on my story!
I appreciate all of your stellar reviews :)
I love how much Freddie cares. And it's confusing HIM how much he cares.
Thank you so much for the review! And the wonderful rating! Report Review
Oh my gosh, Al is so adorable for trying to get James to se sense. He's such a cutie.
I really like your take on why Alexia's bump isn't show. It's really original and sounds believable. :)
I did notcie a few little mistakes but nothing a read through won't find.
I really do hope Al and Alexia get together, they're so cute together!!
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N'aww this chapter is so adorable. I love that his family are so supportive!!
Louis and Horatio = awesome bromance! :D
Louis, Vic and Dom = cuteness overload, so adorable. I love that they're willing to share so that Freya and the baby can have a room and stay. ASDFGHJKL!! I love them so much. If Freya's parents do kick her out at least shelll have somewhere to stay .
Can't wait to see more progress on the Freya front. I really hope she and the baby will use the room at somepoint :)
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Louis's family are very supportive, they're the best family :D
Ah yes Louis and Horatio do have a good bromance. They're very good for each other.
I'm so glad that you like Louis, Vic and Dom, they're such good brothers and sisters. Aww :D I'm so glad that you love them :D
I hope you continue reading to find out more :D All of your questions will be answered.
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I really like this chapter because there's more of Lexi and of Al and of course Lily.
I think it's great that Lily's trying to fix their love lives since she probably hasn't got that much experience herself.
My favourite line has to be "James just donated some DNA." - It's brillant and I love Lily for saying it. :)
I can't believe Lexi and Al kissed!!! asdfghjkkl!!! I hope they stay friends, and maybe become smething more ;)
Again you could do with a few more description, perhaps describe what the boys dorm is like. Is it messy?, does it smell? that sort of thing.
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I'm glad most of her friends know.
I really can't wait for her parents. It'll be interesting how they treat Ava, will they disown her?, will they be angry?
I'm really excited for James' reaction since A) He's the daddy and B) From the looks of it, he'll be the last to know at this rate.
Where stop one scene and end another, perhaps add a page break or a few stars ** to idicate a new scene instead of just a big gap.
Perhaps few more descriptions of what the characters look like or where they are.
Can't wait until the next one :)
Soph xAuthor's Response: Oooh, I'm excited for her parents' reaction too ;D
I don't usually do this, but I was planning to put up a few chapters then go over and edit them - going over things that might not make sense and putting stars or something between paragraphs.
I think I might put in a few descriptions later on ... but I'm not sure. We'll see :)
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THIS CHAPTER!!! ASDFGHJKL!
Louis and Colleen, Lily's letter, Albus sending Lily pictures of cats, Reese finding the ring box!!! So much stuff, so little time to fangirl.
I have doubts about who's the ring is. It may be James' (which I hope it is) since it fell from his stuff but what if it fell from Scorpius' jacket and it's meant for Rose. I have all these feels right now and it's just asdfghjkl!!
You wondeful/evil person for leaving such a cliffhanger!
Seriously in need of the the next chapter or I might go insane/die. I need my Jarissa ♥ ♥
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it!
All will be revealed in the next chapter, never fear! :D
Thanks for the lovely review, again! :D Report Review
The summary for this chapter, OHMYGOD. I THOUGHT FOR A MOMENT THAT ALICE WAS DEAD. SO GLAD SHE ISN'T!
I was right about James being Maisy's dad. I'm really, really excited for the next chapter to see Emma's reaction as well as her telling James and what his reaction will be.
I'm also really, really excited to see if James and Alice get together and how their relationship will play out especially if Alice is a muggle.
It'll be interesting to see how James reacts and if he'll take to father hood easily. I can't wait to see Harry and Ginny's reactions. My bet is Ginny will probably hit him and ask him why he didn't tell her sooner. :)
I lvoe this chapter so much!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this review! ^_^ You just made my day :D I had high hopes that the summary would crush peoples' souls so I'm really happy that worked out ^_^ Thanks for the review, I'm really glad you're enjoying the story :) xx Report Review
I read this the first time, and I was completely in love with Skylar and Albus so do forgive me if I forget she isn't Skylar anymore.
I was really interested by the new summary as well since I LOVE Al/OC.
I really LOVE the start, it sets up this potrait of what her life was like. I was slightly confused as to why she's called Daisy if her name is Theodosia but I think it might be a nickname?
I really like the dynamics of the sleepover because it wasn't just your average girly get together because the boys were dare and it turned to truth or dare. (Which can be a dangerous game ;))
Oh god James in Ginny's underwear, too funny for words to describe!! I love James and he's such a brilliant character :)
One thing, I think you missed the s of it's - "It' simple."
I'm really intrigued about Daisy's background what with her alcoholic father and evil step-mother. I kinda have an inkling that it might have been her dad who gave her the bruise on her arm.
Way to go Daisy, all I can think is famous last words. She said she wouldn't kiss Al and then what does she go and do: kiss Al.
Love it and I can't wait for the next chappie!
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Why hello new chapter, it has been awhile :)
"brother nocked" - You forget the 'k'
"you can’t undo a kid," - I don't know why but I feel Harry would say child rather than kid. Maybe that's just me.
"Albus is on James’ back and James is trying to get him off by rubbing his back on the wall. To say this looks wrong would be an understatement." - I love your mental images, fairplay they're the best!!! :D Especially when they involve James and Al ;)
I like Al' Point of view and it was a nice change from Izzy's. I think it was kinda nice of James to come and see him but I do sense something going on between him and Izzy. More than meets the eye, it seems.
Alisa, I'm really intrigued about her and Al. I'm guessing Al proposed but I'm slightly confused, how did he ruin her life? Did he cheat or something?
PREQUEL, PREQUEL, PREQUEL! I want to know what happened between Izzy and James.
Glad you're updating again!!!
Soph xAuthor's Response: It has been so long I have forgotten how much I love your reviews! I'm happy you like my mental images, I'm a very visual person so I try to make my writing visual... If that makes any sense lol.
Al and Izzy both have stuff from they're past that I am waiting for the right moment to reveal. And James is probably one of my favorites to write about, because I'm trying to hint that he knows a lot about both Al and Izzy, I'm hope I am succeeding. And as for Alisa, that is something, or rather someone, that I am really excited to write about. It's certainly going to be an interesting next couple of chapters(:
And I can't write a Prequel until I finish this one or else you'll get smashed in the head with a box of spoilers, and the only reason I thought of it was because I didn't want to write a sequel, and I figured if I did a prequel it would be a James/OC. Which I really want to do, so I will probably do that. At some point. ;)
Thank you so much for still reading my story even though I haven't updated in months, I love you a lot,
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I can't believe Al is in love with Lexi! But does Lexi feel the same??
I think Ginny's reaction was spot on, so well done :)
I'm really curious about where Al and Lexi's relationship will go now. Will they get together? (I don't think they will since this is marked as James/OC, so I'm assuming James pulls his socks up and helps out) Is Al going to be there for Lexi and the baby?
I'm intirgued for the next chapter because I'm guessing it has more of Al's reaction in it. I hope he and Lexi have a good chat and that they stay friends.
"They just need us and then" - Put an 'ed' on the end of need.
As much as I love this I do feel that it is lacking descriptions. Things like what Al/James looks like or what Lexi and her parents look like. Or even her parents names or some of her background. What the office looks like. Were all the portraits trying to cram into each others frames to see why Harry and Ginny and the other Potter's were in the office?
Hope you don't think that harsh but to fill out the chapters you need more descriptions :)
Soph xAuthor's Response: Hmm, you never know ;P
Thanks for the advice. Sometimes i just get in such a rush to get the chapter up. So thank you :)
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"you sound so whinny." - Oh god I've been laughing at this for a good couple of minutes. You added an extra 'n' in whiny which made it whinny which is the noise a horse makes. So yeah even though you didn't intend it to be funny I found it funny because I'm that mature. Lol :D
"The farther up the stairs" - Change the 'a' in father to a 'u'
I really like Alexia's character, she's pretty strong willed.
"That’s a baby that is currently making a home in my uterus." - This has to be my favourite line of the chapter although I feel you need a comma between baby and that.
I kinda have a feeling that Rose, Ginny and Harry will have a lot of feelings about James saying he doesn't want it and I can't wait because it means a whole load of drama and I LOVE drama!!!
I think that maybe once Ginny has spoken to him (or even Harry) or if he goes to a scan with Lexi then he might feel different. Hoping he isn't gonna be a git throughout the whole story and at least become involved.
Loved it :)
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Thanks :) I appreciate your help and suggestions too :)
I really like this chapter, because Lily's getting more mobile and I think she's met the people who will become her friends/boyfriend.
In the first part of this chapter, Lily seems to remind me of Tix from My Mad Fat Diary in the way she's questioned.
I have some CC for this chapter ~
"Everyone stares at me, eyes turning" - I think there was a change of tense here, stares needs to be stared.
"I snort, much to the surprise" - Same here, snort needs to be snorted.
"I digress. Seriously" - I think this is meant to be disagree.
"hair in two plaits by her" - This could just be me but it might make more sense if it was 'down' not 'by' otherwise it could be indicated that her plaits were floating by her shoulders.
"as Luna and her husband Roy" - I'm a canon freak at times, Luna's husband is Rolf :)
"he suddenly leapt across the table until his nose was against mine." - I really love this line. I'm not sure why but I do.
I think it's either going to be the crazy one who jumped at Lily or the boy with black hair will be the one she falls in love with. Hoping it's the crazy one though :)
Glad we got to see more of Lily in this chapter and I hope she is able to get out more in the chapters to come.
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Thank you. One of my problems is that I have a habit of changing tense, the only thing Word doesn't notice. Can't believe I put Roy, I've always thought of Luna with Rolf and Neville with Hannah (Abbott). It's wonderful to know what you think is going to happen, thank you for still reading and reviewing! Report Review
Oh Oliver, you little beauty. Horah they're together at last!!!
Cat, asdfghjkl, poor her :(
I love your Katie Bell, I've never thought of her and Oliver as being cousins and the fact she's paralysed somehow made ehr mroe real.
Grace is so bloody adorable!!! ♥
"he had just made you up to cover the fact he was gay" - Have to say this is my favourite.
ASDFGHJKL! THEY'RE ENGAGED, I DON'T THINK I CAN TAKE IT MUCH LONGER BUT THEY'RE FINALLY TOGETHER AFTER SIX BLOODY YEARS, HAVE A DAUGHTER, A BABY ON THE WAY AND NOW THEY'RE FINALLY ENAGAGED. IT'S PERFECT!
A sequel? Girl you better get writing fast because adorbale Grace getting her own story = perfection. So in other words, hell yeah I'll read it :)
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Hoorah indeed! This chapter was relieving to post, after torturing you and myself for so long!
Weeell, the sequel won't be my priority, because I've got two novels going on and those are my priorities. I will write a sequel though, I promise!
THANK YOU FOR THE REVIEW AGAIN, YOU ARE AWESOME! :) Report Review
Ohmygod!! Freya's letter!! All the feels.
I really hate Freya's dad for making her think like that. And I hope to god she doesn't choose adoption, but somehow I can see her either listening to her father or just leaving the baby on Louis' doorstep and then her parents whisking her far, far away.
If Louis does have to raise the baby then Horatio can definitely be mummy. He'd be great :)
This chapter is just perfect! and I LOVE it!!
Can't wait for the next one
Soph xAuthor's Response: It's so sad!
It's definitely all Freya's dad that's making her act like this. I hate him too, he's not a nice person, he doesn't realise what he's doing trying to protect his daughter.
Something is going to happen, that will change everything.
Horatio would be the best mum in the world! He's awesome!
Thank you so much for the review and I'm so sorry that its taken me so long to reply to it. The next chapter should be out soon :D Report Review
"MSMG – Malfoy Senior Murderer Guy" - I love it, Willow comes up with the best things ai.
Nathan, no! Poor Willow losing her brother like that. Poor Lucy, I can't belive she loved him :(
Yay!! Fred finnally told his parents about Bella being pregnant :) Aww Bella, this chapter JUST BREAKS MY HEART! WHY?
ASDFGHJKL, I cannot cope. I think this chapter has killed me.
You should have a purple potato afro, or maybe get Fred to wear one ;)
I'm really tempted to go read It's Complicated to see more of jared and his fiancé. Is Bella mentioned in that story??
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Willow is the best character to write, when she's like that *smuggly smiling because she's mine* . That's not weird, right?
Nathan... I cried. Did you cry? It just made it more personal for Willow, I think.
Fred and Bella, those poor guys. They're going to have it real tough now. I liked writing that scene between Bella and her bro. Does that make me a bad person? I just wanted you guys to have more background on Bella. And Jared is an interesting character. I haven't decided if he's going to make more appearances or not yet.
I'm sorry for killing you, though :( .
I should definitely get that afro ^_^ . Maybe Fred will get one! That's a good idea.
It's Complicated doesn't have Jared and CakeFace. But it has CakeFace's older brother, who is just plain vindictive. Flynn Allen.
Thanks for reading!
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Ooohh I'm so, so, so intrigued.
I'm glad we got a bit more of her backstory and it's really intresting.
Looking forward to see her interacting with the Potter/Weasleys. Especially James since this is marked James/OC and I LOVE James/OC!
Can't wait to see what happenes next :D
Soph xAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I am glad that you are liking my story so far. Lots of Weasley/Potter interactions to come. And lots of James!
Thanks again for reviewing!
Becky Report Review
I really, really Love this chapter. We can see more of Alexia and her relationship with Rose.
Looking forward to seeing Al and his reaction when he realiises his brother knocked up his best friend. And I'm looking forward to James' reaction as well, should be good :)
I like the way Madame Pomfrey thinks it's Al's because of their friendship and that their close.
"You got to be kidding me. Now I got to tell Pomfrey" - This didn't sound totally right to me, perhaps change 'you' to 'you've' and 'got' to 'have'
"And Aunt Ginny is a Weasley. She'll destroy James." - I have to say this is my favourite line because you can tell Ginny's going to throttle James when she gets her hands on him :)
Looking forward to the next chapter
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