Haha drunk texts are the best!! It's probably a bad thing that I can read them without any trouble even if they make no sense.
I Love Reese, and for her choosing the second option, to be honest I would have as well. Much more fun :D
"He took his pants off and showed me the scratches" - I laughed so hard at this for no real reason, but I think you mean trousers rather than pants.
"Do I just throw it to you like a Quaffle? What the hell is 'catching' a baby?" - Oh god, funny thing is I could imagine them doing this though :)
Aww bless Reese for freaking out so much. Although if I was her I would probably be freaking out even more.
Awww, I got a fuzzy feeling inside when they Weasley women threw Reese a baby shower. That is so sweet!!
I love the whole Fred was meant to be a girl and Fleur thinking Dom was gonna be a boy. It just makes me laugh especially after the day I've had because we were on about it with our one tutor.
I'm with Reese baby clothes are too cute, I mean it's mad to think that something so small will into them.
Reece...Awww :'( juts aww, I could never imagine losing any one of my lot. Aww. ♥ Hugs to Reese.
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I think it's quite sweet that Al has gone out of his way to track down Phina and sort of kidnap her just to tell her they need to talk.
"it isn't as if he's the one carrying a child that he's going to be pushing out of his . . . manly bits." - I love this, gotta love Phina :)
I love Lysander, he's definitely his mother's son. What's not to love.
I LOVE that Lily finds out, I mean slightly awkward because your baby's auntie finds out before their father but still I think it's great.
"It's like a ripping off a band-aid. Except, this time, the pain lasts for nine months instead of a few seconds." - This is another of my favourite lines, I mean it's true but funny at the same time. Although you might want to change Band-Aid to plaster as that's what they're called in the UK.
I love Phina and I love Lily, I can't wait for her reaction in thee next chapter!
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This is really, really good!!
It's also really original, I've never read a story like this before so go you!! :D
I think your characterisation of James is really nice and the fact he was married and is now a dad. It'll be interesting how him and Kay's relationship with each other will play out, especially if they become more than brother and sister in laws.
I really like your OC's Kay and her best friend Aura (Awesome name by the way!!). I love that she's bubbly and happy and I like that her and her sister were never that close because of the magic thing and before the magic thing (I mean look at Petunia and Lily, they were close before Lily found out she was a witch)
When James was on the phone to Kay and he was shouting all I could of was Ron when he rang Harry at the Dursleys, I dunno if it was intentional or not but aww, I love it when there are little things like that, that relate to the books :D
Michaela is adorable, aww. Babies are so cute, especially if James Sirius is their daddy!
This is a really good start and I really, really like it so far, I also thought it was a nice touch that the Weasley's were there to support James.
I can't wait for the next chapter. Definitely adding this to my favourites!!
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Ohmygod, yay an update!!!
James is just the cutest when he sleeps, aww. I love that he tries to hide under her bed, "Why is there a foot sticking out from under your bed?" Haha, love it.
Aww, James and Vi at the scan = asdfghjkl perfectness. ♥ ♥
seriously they need to date not pretend date. I will be over moon if they date but they have to become a couple!!
Cannot wait for the next chapter!!!
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"some cool peeps I could hang out with, yo. I should be a gangster. It works really well, yo." - This just had me giggling so much, but I'm not 100% sure why, although it may have something to do with my friend saying something like this when we were on the phone the other day :)
I absolutely love right now, it's so nice to see him in a different light and he and Nicole seem really good together.
Drunk James - I just want to pick him up and squish him, he truly makes an awesome drunk (if that's possible?)
Oh god, Scorp being British = best thing :D "It's just bollocks that you can't drink tonigh', innit" -No one can say bollocks quite like the British :)
OHMYGOD!!! SAY WHAT!!! Are you kidding me, Al is in love with Reese!
I'm not fond those Weasley boys right now, nothing can ever happen to Jarissa ♥ I genuinely though he was being serious and I kept whispering 'no'
Good on Reese for whacking them both around the head.
Awww, the ending aww. So sweet!! I love them so much, Jarissa ♥ ♥
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: ahahaha I must be psychic! :p I just wanted to add it in because I'm a bit weird. :p
I'm guessing you meant Fred because of the Nicole thing, you've just forgotten his name. :p Yeah, they are sweet together. I really like writing them! :D
haha I just imagine Drunk!James to be the 'I love you' type. I always have haha. :p
That was my most favourite part. I think I'm going to write another scene where Scorpius is drunk just so I can write him again. It was SO fun to write! :p
hahaha there are so many fanfictions on the James/OC/Al love triangle so I thought I'd do a mini parody. I've never really liked those types of stories (mostly because I hate all love triangles :p) so I thought I'd pop that in there for a giggle. :p
I'm so glad you liked it!
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Aww Emma, awww. :'( Poor thing, I just want to give her a massive hug. *Hugs*
I like that Scorp went into big brother panic mode, "then I convinced him you werenít dead" - Hehe, I don't know why but it made me giggle.
I really like that Emma spent time with Al, (there really isn't enough him) but I wished she told him how she felt.
James and Alice = yay!! I love these two.
WHAT! How can you leave me hanging like this. EMERALD!!! IS SHE OK, I HATE DRACO RIGHT NOW SO MUCH!
I have to know whether Emma's ok, I really do!!!Seriously cannot wait for the next chappie.
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this review! ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter because I wasn't so sure (I never am -_-) but I like writing dramatic chapters :) It makes me really happy to see how you respond to different characters, it really helps me out, so thank you very much! :) xx Report Review
I really like that there's information on her parents and that we've learnt more about them.
An American term caught my eye -
'sneakers and tied' - Trainers
I think her parents reactions were spot on although I really dislike her mother. Her father seemed a little too calm but he might not want to show his disappointment in front of her. I like her dad, he seems like he'll support Ava and stand by her, which I'm glad.
It'll be interesting to see if see tells James when she gets back, I can't wait for his reaction!!
Soph xxAuthor's Response: I thought it was time for some background information on Ava, seeing as she's the main character.
Ugh, it really annoys me when I use American terms because I am actually British, but for some reason I call them sneakers(?) I mean those converse-type shoes, but I don't know if I can say "Converse" in case of copyright or something?
Yeah, I was aiming to get people to dislike Eloise :P Her dad is one of those calm, kind people, quite like Remus Lupin, actually, but he wouldn't go off on one in front of Ava like her mother did because he does genuinely love his daughter and she's actually quite a typical daddy's girl.
Ooh, you'll have to wait and see about James! I've not quite got to that bit in the next chapter yet and I'm still trying to formulate if she tells him or not.
OMIGOSH A TEN! Thank you so much! Hopefully it won't take as long to update for the next chapter
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The truth is revealed, Nell and Louis!!! Yay :)
Ohmygod, ok if Scorp isn't gay and he's waiting for the right girl, please, please say he likes Rosie!!! They both like each other but neither will say, I hope Scorp goes to Coral for advice!
Haha, loving Rose's reaction to Coral's confession.
James and Fred doing yoga, now that's a very nice mental image ;)
Apart from my 'Albus doing drugs theory' I'm now thinking he might have gotten caught up in something with Abacus and he was trying to act 'hard' in front of him by being mean to James.
My favourite line - "You donít choose the thug life.The thug life chooses you."
James and Fred are by far my favourites as well as Coral and Kenny.
Love it, can't wait for the next chapter!!! :)
Soph xx :)Author's Response: Hello Soph! :)
Haha Rose and Scorpius! I have so much planned out for them! :D
James and Fred doing yoga is indeed quite a nice image ;)
Hmm your Albus theory is pretty interesting too! Different and interesting! I wonder what it is... ;)
That was my favourite line too :D The next chapter may take a while but do keep reading :)
Thanks for reviewing! :)
Oh god, I LOVE Scarlett, she's bloody brilliant. And she reminds me of myself (Minus the pregnant with James Potter's baby part).
I like that James says congrats as though it's no big deal.
"I see now, that thickness runs in the family." - Oh my god, that line, talk about making me giggle. By the seems of things it definitely does. I think it's kinda sweet they both say congrats and it makes them seem like they have an invisible bond/in the way they think.
It will be interesting to see James' actual reaction when he finally realises/the news sinks in.
Oh and yay for the formatting thing!! It's been happening to me as well but I think I've fixed it as well so yay!!
Can't wait for the next one!!!
Soph xx :)
P.s I've never done the pregnant thing but if you need help I do know a lot about it. Find me on the forums (potterfan310) or my blog, (links in my author's page).Author's Response: thank you :)
and yeah, help with the pregnancy thing would be good. Christian schools like mine dont give us real information hahaha
but thanks :)
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I LOVE Lily, she is one of my favourite next gen kids. She's brilliant.
Fred with a girlfriend, the shock. I've always read Fred II as a prankster along with James and half the time he's always chasing off fan girls with a stick so it's so nice to see him with a girlfriend, a serious girlfriend!!!
"with a frypan" - I was reading this bit and I got totally confused and kept thinking what the hell is a frypan and then I realised. I think you mean frying pan not frypan.
Oooh even better, I hope Fred's girlfriend is a muggle, I mean it's rarely done one of the Weasley/Potters with a muggle so it'd be really interesting to see. Aww Freddie, I love you right now. And you, Kayla that's so original!!! I really hope we get to meet Nicole, although it may be tricky to write???
"because Fred or Louis was getting" - Try changing 'was' to 'were' so it flows better.
I'm wondering is Jordan the daughter of Katie Bell, I know it might not make sense if she moved to France when Reese started Hogwarts, but maybe she went to Beauxbatons???
Jarissa = ♥ ♥
Lionel is just adorable, I love that he's stealing James' socks. Haha :D
Can't wait for the next chapter.
-Potterfan310Author's Response: haha I love Lily as well! She's adorable!
I've always seen Fred as someone who just 'accidentally' gets into a serious relationship. He always tries to be flirty and a bachelor but then some awesome girl comes along and WTCHHH! (whipping noise) :p
Er, no. I call them frypans. I just asked my brother and he does too. Maybe it's an Australian thing? :p I'm pretty sure it's a word, as it doesn't come up with a squiggly red line in Word? :p I don't know, but yeah. Frypan=frying pan.
She is a Muggle. She's not that tricky to write (I've already written the next chapter) but yeah, I found something on sign language on Tumblr and I was like, "What if one of my characters was deaf?" So yeah, that little tidbit popped up! :D
UGH. Thank you! I usually write these chapters when I'm half asleep so thank for pointing that out! :D
Nah, she's just a normal Muggle. I really just wanted to use the 'Bell' pun hahaha :p
The next chapter will come when I have finished writing my essay. Those are the terms that I'm currently sticking to. :p But I've only got a little bit left, so hopefully it'll be up soon! :)
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Ooo pretty new banner!
I love Bill, and Dom. I like that she is capable of taking care of herself rather than being a typical girly girl who can't fight her own battles
Horatio is a mad one aye, I love that he's sort of like Ron with his relationship for food and I think it really makes him seem like part of the Weasley family even though he's Louis' friend.
I reckon Horatio and Molly should just go for it, and they would make a good couple.
Ee! I am SO, SO, SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!! I'm so glad that Freya turned up at Louis' house. Ok it's bad she and her dad had an argument and left her house but yay she's at Louis'!!
Argghhh, you can't just leave it like that. OHMYGOD!! That's just evil ;)
I honestly cannot wait for the next chapter because there is bound to be Leya action ♥ and I seriously can't wait to find out what Freya has to say.
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Yep a new banner :D I keep making them for this story, I really need to stop haha.
Oh yes Dom can definitely take care of herself, she was taught well by her father and uncles :D
Horatio is definitely mad, and yes you're right he does have a relationship with food, not as bad as Ron mind you, but yes he would really fit in with the Weasleys.
They should go for it! Sadly we just need to push them together to make it happen at the moment.
:D I'm so glad that you're happy, she has finally seen sense and left the house to go to Louis's.
I'm sorry! I will have the next chapter out soon I promise, I just need to write it. I'm about two sentences into it so far.
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Jarissa = perfect ♥
They are so adorable together, as well as Lionel who is a cute kitty :)
I'm kind of with James on this, I mean I was Christened and my Nan went to church but the sentence James said sums me up, "Well itís not like we go to church every Sunday butÖ I donít know, I still consider myself as a Christian"
Hehe, it's strange reading about Christmas when it's the start of March :)
I really like that Harry (and the family) keeps in touch with petunia and Dudley but happened to Vernon? I'm curious.
Dudley's wife seems a lot like Reese's mother, any relation? lol :D
I love Lily and Al, they're such great characters!! Especially Lily's reaction to feeling the baby kick and what she said to Reese about her Lysander breaking up, it made me giggle!
Can't wait for the next one!
Soph xx :)Author's Response: haha I'm glad you enjoyed!
I was Christened (but as a Greek Orthodox) so I've just grown up with the notion that your baby gets Christened. Even though I'm not particularly religious (sentence with James also sums my religious beliefs up), I still feel like babies should be Christened. Just my belief though. :)
It was so strange writing it! I kept getting excited and then remembering it was April (that was when I wrote it) and getting sad. :p
DAMMIT I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART IN! D:
Well basically, Vernon (sadly) died when Lily was about 2-ish. I was going to make Reese ask but I completely forgot! Thanks for the reminder!
No relation, just arrogant haha. :p
I love writing Al and Lily, I really do. They're so much fun! :D
I'm going to put the next one in the queue right now! :D
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Insomnia is so not fun, but on the upside it means you can do a lot of writing and reading :)
I swear to god I nearly started welling up when Rose said she was bleeding, but I'm so glad her and baby Malfoy are ok.
Oh god, way to lighten up the moment Chase. "Thatís a pretty nightgown,"
Oh my god, what!! I had to re-read this sentence at least three times, "Whoís a better kisser, Louis Weasley or Danny Boot? Or is Albus Potter a contender?" - Needless to say each time it made me laugh, just oh god...
The fact they even have a bet, oh god. I can't handle this right now.
Louis and Chase = Awww. ♥ ♥
CHASE IS JUST AWESOME SAUCE, I LOVE HER SO MUCH AND RIGHT NOW SHE REMINDS ME OF ME BECAUSE I AM IN AN INCREDIBLY WEIRD MOOD!! SO YAY!!
James and Maylin, how the hell did I not see that coming??
Can't wait for the next one, Chase just give it up and get with Louis already!!
Soph xx :)Author's Response: I write from experience when I say that insomnia is NOT fun, but I can say that it's resulted in many of the chapters of this story x)
I heard somewhere that it's normal for pregnant women to encounter bleeding around the eight weeks stage, and I thought "Wow, that must be so scary" so I really wanted to write about that.
Lol I'm honestly not sure WHAT inspired me to write Minnie and Poppie as such a crazy pair, but it just kind of worked out that way.
I'm glad you can relate to Chase :D
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This chapter is just one big bag of fluff, which is so good!! ♥
Aww Chase and Albus (Chase and Louis are so much better though) so awkward, bless them. Although I'm glad that Louis is jealous!!
"Donít they know that that kind of activity as a teenager can lead to pregnancy? Leave it to overly hormonal kids like Molly and Ollie not to think about something like that. I know that girls like Rose and me are far too smart for things like that." - Oh god, the irony, although somethings do tend to have a habit of coming back to bite you on the ass so maybe it's just Karma :)
Oh god, I love James' story. Such a cocky twleve year old boy, randomly asking the first girl he sees to kiss. Sorta reminds me something Sirius would do or even James when he was trying to get a kiss of Lily. Haha oh the irony of Maylim being Cho's daughter, pure brilliance. At least it was as awkward as Harry and Cho's though. I think it's sweet they became friends after wards :D
Rose's middle name, if it was Hermione who suggested it, I bet Ron had a fit or it could work out the other way as well.
"I'm buying a pet elephant, Malfoy." - I might have to pop to a bookshop now, I never knew they sold elephants :D Lol
I think Rose/Scorpius is quite cute. Especially since it's sorta got a Romeo/Juliet theme to it where they hate each other but go for it anyway. ♥
"Hugo, the easily distracted kid he is, falls over and starts rolling around in the sand for no apparent reason." - Hugo is one of a kind isn't he :D This sentence reminds me so much of my one friend since it sounds like something she would do :) Then again I get easily distr- Is that a penguin?
Louis and Chase = perfection ♥ Their kiss is just perfect, I mean sun, sand and the beach it's just so romantic. I have to say their is my favourite by far.
"Smiling, I do what I always do. I chase after her." - This just about sums up Louis and Chase I think. It's so sweet and aww.
Nothing major but I spotted mom again, at the start of James' story and in Louis'.
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Yes, if you couldn't tell, I was in a serious mood for fluff when I wrote this, haha.
Irony is fun x)
Haha I wanted to make James's story kind of sum up his friendship with Maylin, since she's going to be a more prominent character in the story overall.
I thought that, after what happened to Lavender at the battle of Hogwarts, both Ron and Hermione would develop a deep sense of respect for her so I wanted to show that in the best way ^_^
Hugo is kind of based on my cousins... which I suppose is slightly unfortunate, lol.
The basic purpose of all these stories wasn't just to show the character's first kisses, but to represent their relationships with each other. That's why I needed Chase and Louis's to be cute and sweet and fun.
I swear, if it weren't for your cc's I would have a LOT more grammar problems, so for that I thank you and apologize.
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Whoop, whoop. Go Louis!!!
I'm so glad he stood up to Mr. Jackson, I mean he has a valid point. I'm so proud of him *squee* ♥
Mr Jackson is horrible, poor Freya for having to live/put with him. Not too mention he's putting mad ideas in her head and making her feel like she has to hide her pregnancy.
I'm hoping that Freya will leave her parents and turn up at Louis'. Especially since Dom gave up her room for Freya and the Baby.
This chapter is just asdfghjkl, I don't know whether it's just me but I was getting teary reading it.
Aww Arthur ♥ That's just adorable, making the baby a cot. I always feel that Louis is left out a lot in stories and the moment with Arthur is just perfect ♥
There has to be more Leya (Louis/Freya) action!!! ♥ Hopefully Freya will come to her senses and just leave home and move in with the Weasley!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter!!
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I'm so glad Dom's taken it better than Rose. It sorta shows who Scar's real friends are.
I really hope that when Dom said she told Fred not to leave them alone that it means that James already liked Scarlett without having been under the influence of alcohol.
"She pulls out a screen and waves it at my stomach" - I though this sounded a bit strange, I think you've missed out the word 'wand'.
If she's 4 months/20 weeks then baby will probably be bigger than a peanut as you can normally make out the shape/arms/legs and their private parts.
"But Scarlett, are you keeping them" - Is she having more than one?
There were a few missing capital letters/apotrophies, nothing that a read over won't fix.
"And it's all Harry Potter's fault. Somehow" - This is one of my favourite lines!! Love that she blames Harry :)
I really love Dom right now for being so supportive, I hope Scarlett tells James soon. I can't wait to see his reaction.
Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Hey!
I've missed you and your awesome reviews!
Thank you for pointing that out. I changed this chapter around HEAPS so everything is weirdly out of place. Yes, I did miss out the word "wand" (corrected)
And thank you for your help with the baby and how it's coming along and stuff like that. Christian schools/colleges like mine never do S.E./health.
Ah yes, in the first drafts of the story, she was having twins, but I thought that was a bit over-the-top or clich√É¬©-ish, if you know what I mean.
About the formatting/grammar/punctuation, I'm really sorry. My computer is first-generation-rock-hard-thingy and I have to go through and put all grammar and punctuation in by hand, which is extremely annoying.
Also, that line is one of my favourites too. I really enjoy writing Scar and I feel like I actually know her, if that doesn't sound to creepy or weird or something.
Thanks for your awesome review
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Louis is a mad one!! I've never seen such a hyper Louis before. It'll be intresting to see how him and Nell work out. I mean did they just randomly happen or are there feelings somehwere deep inside of it all.
I somehow have a feeling that Jake's surname might be Creevey?
Aww poor Coral, I think her backstory is pretty intresting, not too mention her brother Seth sounds like a hunk! ;D
Big brothers: a pain in the bum but at the same time you can't help but love them, not matter how annoying they are. Seth seems really intresting and I like him so far.
Albus, Albus, Albus. Where do I begin, he's such a troubled person, bless. I think deep down he might want a little help but being 1) a boy, 2) a teen and 3) upset/angry all the time he is probably not going to admit it.
Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Ahh. Yes, everything about the Louis and Nell relationship will be explained :)
Actually, Jake's surname is 'Matthews'. I mentioned it in the first chapter!
Ahaha i love Seth, he's just too awesome :) I'm glad i got their relationship portrayal right! I'm an only child so i was finding it a bit difficult to write out that part.
Ahh Albus. The boy's got some issues. But that's what Coral is there for - to help him out :)
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"beautiful young mattress-tulip" - Luna, what's not to love!! :D
*Grins manically* Me thinks I have and idea who Gabi's father is!!! But who knows, I might be wrong :)
Aww Louis, so much love for him right now. All his feelings for Chase, just awww! Can they get together already! They're so perfect for each other.
Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Hehe, Luna is such an adorable oddball x)
Guessing is half the fun ;D
Louis IS a sweetiepie, isn't he?? haha
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I Love that Dom's going crazy about baby stuff and she's not even the one having it. And poor Al having to get dragged along, although if eveyone's thinking the baby's his then it's probbaly a good thing he went.
I'm glad James is taking an intrest even if it is only for show and to prove to Ginny he cares. Although part of me hates him for not caring like Al does.
YAY!!! I can't believe Al and Lexi kissed again. YAY!! They have to get together, I mean everyone thinks the baby's Albus' and it's perfect.!!!
There were a few missing apostrophies but other than that, perfect!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
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"Sherlock came over to my old apartment and found that I had left the baby there, along with Merlin. And John just sat in the corner sipping tea as Arthur tried taking the sword out of the microwave." - AHHH, SO MANY FEELS!!! I LOVE THESE SENTENCES SO MUCH!!! Yay Reese!
"So then I turned to Muggle television shows. And it may have been the worst decision of my life." - I feel for Reese I really do, not only do I agree I feel her pain as well. So many Tv shows/books have ruined my 'life'.
Aww bless James, for sorta keeping calm. God knows what he'll be like when Reese is in actual labour.
Poor Reece having to put up with her mother, who seems like such a cow. *Hugs and squishes her tightly*
Zoe's dress sounds so pretty!!!
I liked the wedding and thought the henna and stuff was cool! :) Nate is as awesome as he normally is. ♥
Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: ahaha I had just finished watching Sherlock that day and I always cry/talk about Merlin so I needed to put it out there. I was having a very feel-y day that day. :p
Ah yes, that is a quote from my life. I just sit in a ball and sob over everything now. It has also ruined my 'life'. :p Good to know we're both fangirls! :p
Reese's mum is a cow. I considered having a reason as to why she's a cow but I was doing some stuff for school and found out some people are cows for no reason. So yeah... Reese's mum is a cow for no reason. :p
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OHMYGOD!!! YAY! :D
Bless Louis for taking the bull by the horns and deciding to go to Freya's despite knowing her dad may be there and not let him see her.
I'm so, so, so glad that Louis got to see Freya! I'm so happy for him right now.
N'awww, so much Louis/Freya I can't handle the cuteness and their having a baby girl!! *Insert me awwing about a zillion times here*
Shame her dad had to ruin the moment, It'll be interesting to see what happens next since Louis has been caught. I hope he allows Louis to be a part of Freya and his daughter's life.
I can't wait for the next chapter and fore more Louis/Freya action!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Louis really wanted to see Freya, so he didn't care what he would face in going to see her.
Aww Louis and Freya are cute together, but there's a lot of issues at the moment that they need to sort out, which her father won't let them do. And yep a little girl :D
Her dad is not a nice person at all! The next chapter is up my lovely! So I hope that you like it.
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I wondered where this had gone, but I'm glad it's back!!!
I LOVE Seraphina, she's awkward, determined and head strong and I really like that's she head girl and has never done drinking/parties before.
Albus is really nice and I really do hope she tells him soon. I think he'll make a really good dad and I hope he and Phina will get together. Because who doesn't love a happy ending. :)
Britpicking - There were a few things you mentioned such as the couch, cot and making out that are American terms that can be easily changed to the British versions.
Backstory - I think you said before there is more of Phina's homelife in later chapters
It'll be intresting to see how Phina's mother reacts especially if Phina says its her fault for telling her to go to a party.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Soph xx :)Author's Response: OH MY GOSH HELLO AGAIN! IM SO GLAD YOU FOUND YOUR WAY BACK!
Okay, anyway, moving on from my excitedness (and if that's not a word it just became one).
I always find it unrealistic how a lot of fanfictions have these characters that dunk all the time. I don't really understand why there's always alcohol (which sounds hypocritical considering this chapter but it was important for the story!) There are teenagers that exist who haven't gotten drunk in their life.
I'm not entirely sure how everyone will feel about the ending but I can tell you that there's going to be a sequel (and maybe a final book after that) so there's always that to look forward to!
Thank you for the Britpicking! I was hoping someone would point out any stuff that I could change! I'll get right on fixing that!
There will indeed be more backstory as more chapters are produced!
I had the scene where Phina tells her mother all written out but I lost it so I'll have to rewrite it again!
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I LOVE George, he is like the most awesomest father in the world. He's amazing and I can see it now, he would be the 'cool, hip' dad.
Ooh I sense that maybe Roxy and Scorp are in a relationship, that's why their always together. It'd be an intresting thing to happen since it's normally Rose/Scorpius.
Aww, Freddie is so adorable bless him. Reading up on pregnancy and telling James all the different things. Well done him! :)
I feel bad for Annie since Freddie is sorta leading her on, because deep down he knows he really loves Ryan. Fryan for ever! ♥ ♥
"Painting my chest was a bad idea?" - I think this just about says it all about George!!! Crying with laughter :D and this is why I LOVE the Weasley family. ♥
They should definitely get a dog 'shop mascot' and it should be a Lab. ♥ It'll be fun to see Freddie trying to take care of a dog before he has to take care of a baby.
Just one little thing, 'my pants were torn' Britpicking, it would be trousers not pants.
Can't wait for the next one, I'll certainly be on the look out for the Doctor Who referance!! And I have and inkling that the something that catches Freddie off guard is Ryan, maybe?
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Reviewzilla! YUSS.
George is definitely one of my favorites. I love writing future-George. He's so complex, which I love.
I'm sick of all the Rose/Scorpius. Just becasue they are almost the only canons of a similar age that aren't related. More Scorpius/Other Characters! Revolt!
Freddie would just sort of poke at the dog. "What do you want? USE YOUR WORDS." and so on.
Britpick away :) I am not British and therefore most of the story will have plenty of words I am very used to. I have also never been to Great Britian. I should have disclaimered that. but thank you all the same!
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I am a huge fan of James II stories and teen pregnancy ones so this is great!
Oohh I really like that it started off as a summer fling, that's really original!!
I really like your OC, she seems to have a great personality and it's nice to see she isn't from a wizarding family as well!
It's really original that James and Scorpius are friends rather than Scorpius and Albus which is usually the norm, so it's nice to seem something different. :)
- There are quite big gaps between sentences and paragraphs and it can sometimes make it ard to read.
- "So we are completely" - Might just want to change the 'we' and 'are' around so it makes more sense.
- 'my mom who' - Brit picking, I notcied you did it a few times, I'm guessing this is set in the Uk so it would be mum not mom.
- 'are over I reminded myself' - To make this flow a little smoother, perhaps add a common between 'over' and 'I'.
- 'I don't normally shag around' - Again to make it flow a bit better try sleep around rather than shag.
It'll be intresting to see how things turn out, if they're just 'friends' and Claire finds out she's pregnant. I have a feeling that James will stick around since he really seems to like Claire and Claire really likes him back from what I've gathered.
Your charcaters are really interesting and I like your take on James so far, and Dom. And your OC's Claire and Emily are great too!! I can't wait to read more about them all.
I think this is a really great start and I can't wait to read more. Deffo adding this to my favourites!!!
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! Gosh you're so nice. My poor American speaking habits--yikes haha. I'll try to fix those for the next chapter ;) Report Review
Aww Maisy is adorable!!
N'awww Neville, is so asdfghjkl. His speech to Emerald, aww.
ASDFGHJJKLASFDGHJK! THIS CHAPTER OHMYGOD!!!
I can't believe James knows and how calmly he took it. And that he's always loved Alice!! Jalice for ever!!! ♥ ♥
"Albus that Maisy was his nephew" - Think you mean niece not nephew :)
I can't wait for the next one, is Draco really coming back?? Please say he doesn't Emmy and Scorp are happy, Maisy, James and Alice are a little family and it's all perfect!
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this review ^_^ I'm so glad you liked the chapter! Thanks, I didn't see that, haha, I have to concentrate better o_O Your reviews always make my day :) Thanks again! :) xx Report Review
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