I like it so far. But here is a tip, try to put some description between dialouge. Say like:
“OI! HARRY, GINNY, ALBUS, LILY, OVER HERE!” screamed Ron Weasly
Hermione rushed over and silenced him with her finger.
“Oh Ronald please keep your voice down!” whisper-scolded Hermione!
Just a thought :) Report Review
Aw thanks for staying up for us! It was worth it! My eyes have just read an amazing chapter. What am I saying? They are ALL amazing!Author's Response: Hermmy, you are too kind! I'm glad you think my chapters are "amazing," that's great to hear!
I am pleased to say I got a solid eight hours of sleep last night and am feeling very good.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, dear! And as always, next chapter will be up as soon as possible. :) Report Review
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