I've been reading this since it first went up and I've enjoyed every chapter but this is my first review.
I just loved your very unique take on how a magical pregnancy test would work, I've never seen one like that before!
Also, I've been wondering who the Scorpius in your banner is?
Looking forward to the next chapter :)Author's Response: Thank you so much, I love to read reviews and I'm so glad you decided to review! Thanks, I wanted to be as original as possible I'm glad you liked! His name is Boyd Holbrook :) Please keep reviewing I'd love to hear your opinions :D
Another brilliant chapter. Really liked the thought of Remus and Antonin running through the underground tunnel, completely in the dark, flinging curses at each other.Author's Response: thank you so much! glad you liked it. :D Report Review
Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant stories of what went on between what's in the books. Loved the scene with the ministry-sanctioned death eaters at the Burrow. Dora's surety that Remus will come back was so touching and sad.Author's Response: thank you so much, i'm glad you're enjoying the chapters. :) Report Review
I'm liking this story so far :) I particularly like the way you end the chapters with a little message from Nikkole to Tyler.
I remember reading the first chapter a while ago, and when I read it again recently I liked it better (is that because it was different or am I just being weird?)Author's Response: I have re-written it ang changed the plot :) Report Review
Oh no, such a sad chapter! I can totally get where they are both coming from, I hope they can come to some sort of compromise.
PS Sorry not not reviewing for a while I was a bit behind on reading all my fanfics and then my laptop broke for nearly a month :(Author's Response: No problamo! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Glad you like it! Report Review
Still loving this story. My favourite part of this chapter has to be the scene with Scorpius and Rose (closely followed by Dom rolling off the bed, Louis being thrown off the bed, Victoire letting out Lily's secret in French and all the swearing on the morning of the NEWTS and OWLS results).
Sorry for not reviewing much recently but my laptop was broken for about a month :( only just starting to catch up on all my fanfics now.Author's Response: thank you! It's alright for not reviewing, you've reviewed now so that makes me happy :D Report Review
Yes! In your fat ugly toady face Umbridge!
Sorry, just had to say that. So good to see Umbridge lose the battle with Remus and Dora. Hooray for Kingsley!
After everything they deserve to be happy. And YAY for the baby hint :)
As always I'm already looking forward to the next chapter ;)Author's Response: yay, thank you! :) Report Review
Awww I love this! I really like this pairing for fanfic, and that was beautifully sad. I was nearly in tears by the end!Author's Response: oh, thank you! i'm so glad you love it. :) Report Review
Hou did you do it? This is exactly the way I've wanted it to go from the start, I didn't like Tom, ever, yet somehow you made me feel sad that he and Rose broke up!?
I got over it pretty quick though (about the moment Rose walked into Scorpius's room).
Now I just feel horribly sad that it's all about to be over - how am I supposed to live without the anticipation of a new chapter Delicate/Still Delicate?
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Wow, how emotional! Ugh, her parents seem really awful people to treat her like that, and then to still let her walk out of there after being told how they've made her feel (though they must have known/suspected all along). I don't know who's worse, the uncaring mother, or the father who cares a bit but is too weak to act on it. At least she has her brother and the 'Peasleys'.
I'm sad there were no laugh out loud moments this chapter (though totally understand there would be no way to mix that with the sheer emotion of the chapter) as I think you've got a real knack for humour. Hope things get better (and funnier) for Reese soon ;) xAuthor's Response: thankyou! yeah this chapter was quite depressing, reason why I made it short..
thanks! most people tell me my jokes are lame so telling me I've got a knack for humour makes me happy!
the next chapter is a bit happier :D
but thanks for reviewing :D Report Review
"Merlin's leopard print mankini" *wipes away tears of laughter*.
You got the height thing fine. Hospitals/doctors here use the metric system for heights and weights now though the general public use feet and inches, stones and pounds. (You tell a parent their child is doing well and now weighs 7.5 kilos and their immediate response is "how much is that in pounds??"). I'm rambling now, sorry!
Look forward to reading more :)Author's Response: ahaha thanks! I thought so, but I just wanted to double check! thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
Hey, I know I promised to review every chapter but you've updated the last few so quickly I'll probably just leave one, now, hope that's ok!
It was really nice to read how Hermione and Draco's relationship came about in the flashback, their story is really sweet.
Some of the details/timings of the labour and delivery are maybe a little off, but as you say, it's not something you've got a huge amount of knowledge about. It really doesn't detract much from the story, I doubt many people reading will be looking for a medically accurate portrayal of a birth, so I really wouldn't worry about it. It's more about Alix and Tyler's relationship and their relationship with their baby, and you've written that really well.
The only thing I'd say wasn't quite right in this chapter would be the mention of the epidural. Generally if it's time to push, it's too late for one. I doubt any woman could hold herself in the right position and stay still enough for the needle to be inserted into the spine while having the urge to push. But that's a minor detail and it's really not important. I can have a quick re-read of the past chapters again and maybe make the odd suggestion if you'd like? (Not that I'd claim to be an expert! Haven't had a baby yet myself, though I have studied it briefly at uni - I've trained as a children's nurse - and I do watch a fair number of documentaries etc on anything to do with health including pregnancy and birth.)Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! It means sooo much to me! I'm really glad you like the story and it means alot to me that you liked Draco & Hermione's flashback and how I'm portraying Alix & Tyler's relationship with their baby. :) I tried so hard to do that right, and Im glad to know its being appreciated. Thanks for your suggestions and I'm going to try to go back and fix some of those points that I can! :) I would love to keep hearing your constructive criticism if you'd like to keep giving it! Thanks so so much!! Report Review
The mushroom conversation was just too, too funny! I also loved the 'you shall not pass' using a broom scene.
[The following applies to both chapters]
I'm the first to admit that I'm a real grammar nerd so I can't help but point out that if you're talking about the Weasleys or the Potters as in "there were ten Weasleys in the room" it doesn't need an apostrophe. Also you've confused their/they're a few times. Most people won't notice/care but it makes me sad. Sorry!
Look forward to reading more :)Author's Response: THANKSSS :D
I know, I get really confused with that sometimes because when I re-read it, I overthink it. And, my English teacher's sucked so I blame them for my incapable grammar :p thanks for picking that up though, I'll definitely fix it soon :D Report Review
Love, love, love the last two chapters!
A brilliant account of what was happening around Remus during the skirmish at Hogwarts, it really seamlessly fits with and fills in the gaps of what we know happened in the book.
I'm beginning to see faint traces of hope for Remus and Dora as well which is always a good thing.
Lovely to see Neville being a hero earlier than most people would give him credit for.
Absolutely adore this story and I'm already awaiting the next chapter(s)!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll try to have the next few chaps up soon, so keep an eye out. ;D Report Review
Great first chapter :)
I really like the narrative style, you've done it really well.
I like next gen fics, it's nice to see one of the 'other' Weasleys getting a story of their own, usually Lucy and Molly are the annoying ones in the background of a Rose/James/Albus/Lily story.
I look forward to reading more
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Honestly, I'd rather not read about the Golden Trio v2.0. That's what I feel like a lot of Next-Gen fics turn into. For this story, I really wanted one of Percy's daughter to be the main character. Originally, I was thinking about Molly, but Lucy kind of stole the story from her sister. (It happens.)
Hope you enjoy the rest of it. Report Review
Nice start to a story, look forward to reading more :) Report Review
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