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Review #1, by Female_WarriorPost Scriptum: To the Top of the Cliff

1st July 2013:
Hey, just dropping in to say that I really like what you've done with this story so far.

Regulus is one of those minor characters who doesn't really have a whole lot of background laid out in canon, and there's so much you can do to write him creatively! He's definitely one of my favorite characters, and I love that you're developing him and telling of the marauders era from his point of view. His relationship with Lily is such a lovely thing as well. It's believable, and Regulus's compassion for her definitely puts some distance between him and the whole pureblood-supremacy set of ideals. It makes him seem more reasonable and human than, say, Evan Rosier, and also superior in his quiet little way. :)

I adored your take on how one joins the order. Alastor Moody's whole character just makes him the perfect drill sergeant. The line a few chapters back about him telling Emmeline Vance to make some of the potions deadly, but not knowing if she listened, made me laugh. You can't be sure whether Moody is serious or just trying to scare the recruits, and I think he'd like it that way. ;) The tasks you put the potential Order members through test all the right things, bravery (I thought the Boggarts were a nice touch) and practical skills alike.

Also, I loved watching Remus gain a little bit of confidence in this chapter. He definitely has confidence in his own sphere, when it comes to his studies and the like, but I enjoyed reading his success in something that was more in the area of James and Sirius's talents. I'll be anxious to know now whether his doubts about joining the Order go away now, or if they persist. I was a little bit surprised at first by how apprehensive he was, but I suppose that would fit with his status as "the cautious one."

Anyway, this is a great story, and I'm glad to have stumbled across it. I'll be on the lookout for the next chapter!



Author's Response: Thank you! Nice to hear from you! :)

It did disappoint me a little that we didn't hear more about Regulus even in the little slivers of information we got about Sirius and his friends in canon. I also think he's super interesting, and when this weird idea about him and Lily being "friends" came to me I found it too difficult to resist. I also love exploring the idea of him and Severus forming a friendship since they both have in common that they lost their faith in Voldemort in time.

It's so great that you like Moody and the assortment of tasks I devised for the Order. I really don't like writing action sequences and this process of the trials has put me through my paces. Moody is a lot of fun and I do hope that I've captured his raw personality well.

Yeah, I think Remus probably doubts himself more than he should. He's certainly braver than Peter and there's more to him than simple book smarts, like with Hermione. I would think that facing the trials would make a lot of people feel nervous, but what counts is that he pushed ahead, and I'm glad you liked that he was proud of himself at the end.

Thanks again for your fabulous review :)


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Review #2, by Female_WarriorAn Even Match: 1.

23rd June 2013:
Hey, I'm just dropping in to comment on how beautifully written I found this story to be. You've taken some of the tiny little details in the books, seized on them and given them a background that suits your purposes. I really loved how Fudge passed over Ron! It was such a small thing, but it really showed the dynamic between the trio and also served to separate Hermione from Ron, which, though I haven't read far enough to know for sure yet, seems like a useful little setup for the later plot.

Hermione was a little bit more forceful than we see her in the books, even rather out of character, but I'm a firm believer in deviating from canon where it suits your purposes. ;) You've succeeded in making me wonder how her personality will develop in later chapters, and the hardness in her is very unexpected and intriguing, especially because you seem to be trying to keep most of her character intact in spite of it. You also didn't make out that her friendship with Harry and Ron was less than it was, which was good, but it definitely seems like you played up her disdain for their immaturity.

So, I know I've been really wordy, but I thought this chapter deserved a nice thorough review. Gotta love the way you knew what you wanted and weren't afraid to dive in and do it, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)


Author's Response: Love these responses :) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, especially so thoroughly! Very glad you like the story. I did deviate from Hermione's character in the books, infusing some of my own character into her for the purposes of my story. I'm not a huge fan of weakness. BUT I do believe it has a very useful purpose, and I'm trying not to go too far least, I want her to retain her signature compassion (just not for those who don't deserve it;)) I'll be updating in two weeks or so when I'm back from a vacation, hope you continue reading!

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Review #3, by Female_WarriorSouls : Souls

17th June 2013:
This is such an intriguing and original idea! The Sorting Hat's ability make decisions for itself has always made it a curious object, and I love the fact that you explain that by making it a Horcrux. It just fits perfectly, and the hat giving Riddle the same advice that Godric Gryffindor would almost surely have given as well is a really lovely touch. The song was a cool thing to see as well, it was creative but still stuck to the format of, "describe the houses and the task of sorting," and overall I felt that it worked quite nicely. :)

I thought that your characterization of Riddle was very believable. He wasn't curious at all about the end of the story that the hat told, only the portion he needed to use. The clarity with which that came through was excellent, and it brought greater depth to the clear lack of sympathy that he shows while he forces information out of the hat. That aspect of him, and the way you subtly expressed his separation from his peers really brought his character together for me.

I also thought it was interesting how Riddle almost seems to be reminding himself that he is Lord Voldemort sometimes. Is he still building his confidence, or is that just part of his sense of superiority?

Anyway, I also loved the tale of the Founders. You painted such an intimate portrait of the friendship between Slytherin and Gryffindor, and when that all went up in flames, a part of that intimacy still survived. It was great how parallel their relationship was with the splitting of a soul and how Gryffindor's despair shows that doing so is such a destructive act. I have to wonder if that other piece of Gryffindor is still floating around somewhere, maybe as something like the eagle knocker on the Ravenclaw common room door, or maybe mixing up the staircases when he gets bored. ;)

This story was beautifully written and definitely a pleasure to read. I'd definitely like to see another one like it in the future!


Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm very thrilled that you enjoyed the story! It's great to hear you liked the idea of the hat as a Horcrux, and that it was well characterized with some aspects of Gryffindor.

Haha, I'm very happy you liked the song! :) It flowed surprisingly easy, and I liked coming up with the often rather poor rhymes. I even tried singing it in my head! :P

I'm also pleased you enjoyed the characterization of Riddle! He's such a creepy character, and I liked getting into his head. Hearing you thought I did him justice was wonderful!

That's such an interesting point about him trying to remind himself that he's Voldy, I never thought of it that way! But in this story, he isn't quite Voldy yet, and is more human and could still be feeling doubt and a need to re-affirm himself. I'm so happy you picked up on that, and I think it's a little of both building his confidence and his sense of personal greatness.

I'm so happy you liked the Founders as well! :) This story was kind of a three-in-one, and it's good to know the pieces fit together alright and were interesting in their own right. A couple other reviewers suggested that Gryffindor could be the giant squid... so maybe he still is lurking about! :)

Thank you for this really lovely review, it was such a pleasure to receive! :D

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Review #4, by Female_WarriorChange: Getting to know

15th April 2013:
This isn't a happy story at all, but I loved it. The strength Narcissa shows in keeping all of this from her husband - and the implication that she continues to do it for years into Draco's childhood - marks her as a determined woman and certainly explains how she came to be so emotionally bereft. All throughout the books it seems like Draco is the center of Narcissa's life in just a bit more than the usual way for mother and son, and I love that you picked that up and expanded on it.

I want to know when Lucius turned into such a jerk! I loved how the two of them met, and I thought it showed a... softer? side of Lucius that isn't often touched upon by writers, although I too feel that he once had the capacity to express affection. The difference in how he and Narcissa treat the house elves, though, is also quite telling, and I liked that you slipped that into the picture. :)

I also really value constructive criticism, so whenever someone writes that they are open to it, I always comb through and see if I spot anything that could use improvement. However, I didn't find anything in this story to constructively criticize! It was very well written, the characters were believable, and the emotional depth of it is impressive. Awesomely done.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you liked this not-so-happy story =) Its great you liked the way I have portrayed Narcissa, your comments are spot on. Yes, I enjoyed expanding on the motherly side of Narcissa we saw in the books.

Haha, I guess over time, a lot of men turn into jerks. They are all nice in the beginning and later just turn horrible (speaking from experience). I wanted to show a softer side of Lucius, yes, before going over to his meaner one. Aha I am glad you picked up on the treatment of house-elves, it is a detail I pride myself on.

It is such a great thing to hear that you don't find anything in this story to constructively criticise. It means a lot to me. Thanks for all your lovely words!

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Review #5, by Female_WarriorEmpty Chairs at Empty Tables: Where My Friends Will Sing No More

28th March 2013:
This story was absolutely heartbreaking, but I mean that in the best possible way.

The depth of Narcissa's emotion is really something else. She understands and internalizes the whole concept and scope of the war, which not only fits perfectly with the reference to Les Miserables, but serves to make the all-consuming nature of her grief seem almost altruistic, and quite permanent.

I loved the dynamics of the family as Narcissa revisited them, they were all believable and they took a bit of the focus on despair away from the literal deaths. This is how I have always pictured the Black parents dealing with the "treachery" of Sirius and Andromeda as well - I feel like it would have come close to destroying them. Their lives would never have been the same after that, because none of them could accept what had happened.

Your imagery and metaphors are beautiful, and I have to say that they are the reason felt like I should tell you how much I loved this story. Regulus going from a prince to a butterfly with black-stained wings... excellent.

Cheers, and keep writing!

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so so much! :) That's just so amazing to hear (er... not in a bad way :D), so thank you! :)

I'm so glad you like Narcissa - this story just sort of hit me after I watched the film, so it wasn't really planned to be her. It is sort of altruistic, in that she's not mourning for her loss, she's mourning for their loss, if that makes sense?

Omigosh that is practically identical to my head canon! :D I love finding people who see it similarly to me, because it's such a huge part of my head canon. And I kinda wanted to focus on losses other than deaths - things which were still permanent in her eyes, because those things hurt just as much, you know?

Gah, thank you so so much for the review and all the wonderful compliments - it really, really made my day and was such a lovely surprise, so thank you! :)

Aph xx

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