she totally fancies him.
like, seriously. wake up smell the cocoa, doll! jack is a twat, plain and simple. james is unbearably cute. val is still oblivious, but it's cool, 'cause she's had a lot of stuff happen. i'm still hoping they get together soon. plain and simple.
great chapter, update soon!Author's Response: Or does she? I'll never tell ;) Yeah, he's a big old jerk face. I hope he gets eaten by a flobberworm, personally. And I guess only time will tell for James and Val...
Thanks for reviewing!
-Laura Report Review
Argh. Lucius is a right tosser. What a twat.
I can't believe she doesn't believe Sirius! I mean, surely she realises how horrid they are?! Bleugh. But, I really liked how she got her memory wiped, because it adds depth and a twist! Well, not really a twist, but whatever. Also! Is the prologue coming up soon?
UPDATE SOON!Author's Response:
I know, i really hate him.
I think she does deep down but she's scared of leaving the only life and friends she has ever known. i know what you mean. i didn't plan on the memory loss but i had that part of the story wrote for ages and i needed to fit in somewhere but i didn't want the story to develop too fast so that's how i came up with it.
and yes it is, it will appear the chapter after next. i am so excited to get started on it!
next chapter is ready to be vaildated!
vicki :) Report Review
ooh! oh, he thinks about her like, well, yeah.
i really liked this chapter- james and lily are just so cute! i liked the whole bit about sirius thinking about kissing her, 'cause it kind of starts their relationship, albeit slowly..
anyways! great chapter, update soon!Author's Response: Oo yes, their relationship faces a HUGE mountain and Sirius will be climbing it slowwwly.because they'll be a lot of things happening in between! I'm so glad you took the time to leave a review, I really appreciate it. xoxoxo Report Review
aw. james is so bloody cute! he's like 'ohmygod, he's so cute, i just have to stick him in a hot chocolate mug, since i don't like coffee' kinda cute.
but seriously. i loved this chapter! it really showed how much james cares for her, and how close her and scorpius are! hehe.
i'm really looking forward to the next chapter, update soon!Author's Response: Hahha. He's James, I think he's wonderful.
But I might be biased.
Hahha, I don't like coffee either, so I'll settle for a mug of tea!
I'm writing now! I'll get it posted as quickly as possible. Report Review
I really liked this chapter- I love how she's finally speaking about Joy, and speaking to James! Also, I loved the last line. The whole 'time to find Faith' bit? B-e-a-u-tiful.
That is all. UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: NEXT CHAPTER IS IN QUEUE! Update should be SOON! Aren't you proud of me?
James + Val = adorableness. I love them :) And thank you! I really liked the last line too. I giggled to myself a little at it. Not to brag, but I thought it was a clever little play off of the stories title.
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-Laura Report Review
He's just so sweet and cute and ohmygod, he thinks she's beautiful despite all her faults! AW. It's just so cute! Hehe. Right. I loved Sirius' point of view, because it showed how he felt about everything, and uhuh. However, 'When my gaze flickered back onto Layla I saw her and her friends’ fire insults over to Syannah and Jolene.' He's got it all wrong! Silly Sirius.
I liked the bit in the library. Like, with Conan and everything? And how Sirius doesn't like him. Can't wait to see where that goes. And the end bit, with him calling her Layla, and how I get it now! I really like that, because then, well I dunno, but I still really like it! Oh, and Kenneth telling him to stay away, and Sirius thinking that it's more than a competition- NO. SIRIUS. IT'S NOT A COMPETITION. BAD THINGS ALWAYS HAPPEN WHEN PEOPLE THINK LIKE THAT.
Great chapter, innit bruv?! UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: blackangelwings! I'm so happy at your enthusiasm! I totally see Sirius being the type to actually love and forgive someone despite all of their faults. Because he'll be expecting the same in return. I'm happy you enjoyed his P.O.V - it was a tough chapter to write!
Yes, Sirius did see it wrong with Syannah and Jolene, but trust me, things will be uncovered! *quivers in excitment*
Thank you! The study part was my fave to write :) and now you know why he calls her Layla. Holly definitely thinks he's lost his mind. And you're absolutely right NO SIRIUS IT'S NOT A COMPETITION! And that's where the excitment comes in hahaha!
The next chapter will be completed and up early July due to me moving! So stay tuned until then my friend!
XOXO WildFlower! Report Review
Oh, yay! I'm glad they took it really well. Lily's reaction was by far my favourite. 'blows to be you!' That's just hilarious.
Also! I liked this because it really showed how close they are, and how easily they would accept things like that.
UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: Thank you! I've always been really inspired by the closeness seen on "Friends" and "How I Met Your Mother" and my own group of mates when it comes to rendering the marauders and company. I've already posted the next chapter in the queue so hopefully it'll be up soon! xoxoxo Report Review
This was a really good chapter! I loved the whole 'royal equivalent to a kidney' bit, that was hilarious. Also, I like how they don't know about Muggle royalty- does this mean they don't know she's a princess, because if they don't, I'm really looking forward to how that plays out, but if they do, I want to see if they would still treat her the same. Yeah..
Still. Great chapter, and I can't wait for the next one! UPDATE SOON! Report Review
Oh, Fred. Tut tut.
Oh god, I love Fred's point of view! He's so ridiculously perverted and funny. My favourite line is definitely "YOU LIE! THE GREAT HIPPOGRIFF IS MY FATHER I TELL-". It was hilarious.
Can't wait for James' point of view! Update soon!Author's Response: Ahaa, it's one of my favourite lines too ^.^ And I'm glad to hear that, I love Fred's POV too- it's so much fun to write! And James';) I shall update soon, no worries!:') Report Review
I really liked how she acted before the full moon, because you really showed how much this was effecting her. Also, they keep getting closer! This is so exciting.
This was a really good chapter, update soon!Author's Response: Thank you!! Just to let you know, I'm still writing, just trying to get more chapters ready and go on a posting spree again. Report Review
i keep making this noise that sounds something like a mix between an 'aw' and an 'oh.' but, just EEP!
ok. so, i really loved the bit about magic going from a beautiful thought, to a dream, to an escape, and my favourite line, not including the last little bit, was definitely "To keep myself sane, I had to travel to the brink of insanity." that bit was brilliant. seriously.
right! the last few lines are fantastic. like, just wow. i love how she thinks she's being selfish if she tells people about it, you know? i really like that. and i'm holding on to the hope that maybe, just maybe, james will find out soonish. but not too soon. nope.
however, you can update soon.
(wayhey, see what i done there? *winks.*)Author's Response: I loved that line too, well. I hope I did, I did write it didn't I? (Actually that wasn't meant to sound that arrogant, I think James has been in my head for too long.) I struggled with it honestly, I wasn't too sure to put it in there, but I did, and I'm happy I did. You liked it, which is enough for me. (:
That's my Lena though. She is one of the most selfless characters i have, and yet she finds any bit of pleasure given to her as being selfish. She is truly a wonderfully complex person.
Ah, Jamie will find out soon enough. :D
And as always, I have my next chapter ready to be submitted and hopefully out in the next day!
Thank you for ready and reviewing lovely! You're keeping me going! Report Review
OH NO! Gah. I don't like Saundra. Go away, Saundra. Can't you see your sister is happy? She's so selfish. Anyways, I can't even decide if I like the fact she's going to Hogwarts. I mean, I love how you made it happen, like with her dad demanding her to come home, and how it was happening just because Saundra's been having problems. Which, incidentally, I think have something to do with why she was in St. Mungo's, yeah?
Anyhow! Great chapter, UPDATE SOON!
(Sorry about the mismatchiness of the review. I literally just woke up.) Report Review
yes! i've been waiting to see how she would find out about Remus for ages!
great chapter, update soon!Author's Response: I'm so glad you took the time to review! I really appreciate it, it makes writing and posting all the more worth it. I've already added the next chapter into the queue :) xoxoxo Report Review
oh.. wayhey! gi and sirius action!
i really liked this chapter. i love the whole background story between gi, evan and bas, because it shows why evan would want to get 'revenge'..
oh! the last line is great.
great chapter. update soon!Author's Response: Well, i thought i would treat you guys haha ;)
Well, i knew had to include it because in the first chapter i included a little Gi and Bas moment so i thought i would expand on that and why Evan gets like he does...one minute being nice to her the next trying to cause trouble...its just because he has feelings for her that she doesn't reciprocate.
Why, thank you!
The next one is already written so i am about to add it. Hopefully it should be up in a few days!
Thank you for reviewing!
Vicki :) Report Review
aha! the order. wink face.
i really liked this chapter- remus and holly seem to be getting more comfortable around each other. also, the bit about how she felt so young compared to him, which shows how the war is effecting him. that was good.
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Gah. I spent like, 5 minutes trying to figure out why he called her Layla, and I just can't think why!
Anyways! Yay for Deborah! Personally, I don't like Peter, but I'm biased because Sirius Black is one of my favourite Harry Potter characters. I really liked the bit about him watching her in the library, and how Holly reacted. Like the bit with her scratching her nose? That was hilarious. Also, Conan. So, perhaps I think he has a thing for Brenda, and is just using Holly as a way to get close to her, and in that case, I don't like him anymore. Plus, he fishes for compliments, the tosser. But, if he isn't, and he really does like Holly, woopwoop for her! Hehe.
And Rosier! What's that about?! I thought he was a Death Eater! Oh no. What if it's all part of the plot, (well, of course it is.) and he already is a Death Eater, and he knows about the Dementors! GASP. Totally can't cope with that.
Oh! I'm really excited about the next chapter, update soon!Author's Response: Hey there blackangelwings! Well he called her Layla because the song was playing in the prologue when they first saw each other. Don't worry, the next chapter will explain everything ^^
Yup Deborah has got it in the bag! I don't like Peter too, I cringe everytime I have to write him. But unfortunately there's no choice because he was a Marauder too - dunno why though. Sirius is one of my faves too! Who can't resist him! I'm glad you liked the part with Sirius watching Holly that part was one of my faves to write :)
Wow you're certainly onto something with Conan there, you're very perspective my little friend...I like it :P
And finally, yes Rosier! He is a Death Eater, and he did attend Hogwarts with the Marauders. More on him will come in upcoming chapters ^^
I'm just tying up loose ends and the next chapter will be up and ready very soon I promise! Thanks for another fantastic review!
James, James, James. sighs. See when people don't roll up their sleeves when it's really hot or whatever, my automatic reaction is that they cut themselves. Gah.
I'm kind of confused; you said Scorpius mucked up James' chance at asking her out. Does that happen in the next chapter? It's just, it kind of seems like Scorpius helped him by walking Rose to class.. Hmm.
Anyways! Great chapter. I really liked it, and I loved James' point of view. Update soon?;D.Author's Response: It's my reaction too, don't worry! I always feel horrid for thinking as such, also.
Scorp, ah Scorp. He's a fun character, eh? I love him. He's just as complicated and broken as everyone else, but his story is for later! and his reasons will be reveiled in time, I promise! Thank you for reveiwing!
I love writing from James' POV, he's a bit like the light in the darkness, eh?
Anyway, I've already submited my next chapter, so I hope you won't have long to wait!(:
I really like Lily's point of view, and I hope we get more of it! I love the fact she had to do that to find out, and how Echo cast the spell so Lily can't tell anyone? That's really good.
Looking forward to the next chapter, update soon! Report Review
I really like the whole bit about how her parents died, and everything, because it really shows why she was getting the letters. I like how you manage to make it funny and serious in the same chapter, because it shows how drastic the changes can be, yeah? You know, like, the bit: "LOOK! A DIVERSION!” I yelled, pointing at a cloud." Yeah. I really liked that bit.
Also! I like how you show the Ginny and Harry and everyone elses panic, because it's not totally overdone to the point when it sounds like a Scooby Doo episode.
(I love Scooby Doo. It's fantastic. I'm totally mature.)
(I'm really excited because I got an A on my English exam, so if the review doesn't make sense, that's why! Gah!)Author's Response: 'Look, a diversion' is a line often used by one of my friends. I fall for it every. Single. Time. So I thought it deserved a place in my hall of fame.
I like the comedy, and that's one of my themes in this book- finding hope where it doesn't seem you can, and from it finding happiness. I think that's something humans sometimes forget to do.
And Ginny panics because she loved Katie and Ellie is an embodiment of what she's already lost, and Harry panics (internally, because he's quite good at acting calm after so many years as an Auror) because he considers Ellie to be Teddy all over again. He won't lose her. The others are just plain confused, bless them. ;)
And Scooby Doo is the epiphany of all that is mature and well versed, so it is a privilege to have such a wonderful thing brought into a review of my story.
Congrats on your A, by the way! English exams are horrible, so you did amazing. Well done. Report Review
oh dear. oh no. was it george katie was snogging? oh dear. i hope it was.
(bloody hell, i sound like an old lady.)
anyways! i really like this, and i can't wait for the next chapter! update soon!
(did you know reviews have a maximum character thingy?.. i didn't.)Author's Response: Hehe I guess we'll have to wait and se. (; Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Harry Potter is dead?! Eep. I always thought he'd be The Boy Who Wouldn't Die. Ah well.
I'm really liking this! I love all the characters, and how they act. Also, I can't wait to read more.
Question: why does she say Albus? I mean, did you mention it, and I'm just too thick to notice, or didn't you?..
UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: I think I did that because I wanted something different in the story...
Thankyou so much! Well, no I haven't mentioned it. I will later on, but basically it's just an annoying habit.
I'll try my best :) Report Review
Aw, poor Sirius! He's so deep and dimensional.
I really liked this chapter! I loved all the little bits with James and Lily, with Rowan and Sirius! Looking forward to the next chapter, update soon!Author's Response: I know! I've always thought that Sirius was more than just a pretty face who was a cocky but loveable git. I'm trying to give him a lot more depth because I feel that there is SO much more to him than what is usually given. Thanks for the review! xoxoxo Report Review
Oh, yes! I was really worried at the start because I thought they were starting to get along, but it's all cool!
I really liked the bit about how James changed, you know? And how Albus could tell it was because of her. I really like Albus, he's dead cute. Oh, I also liked the way none of her friends asked about the song. I'm not sure why, right enough, but it kind of shows they don't care about her properly. Hmm..
She totally fancies him! *Fan-girls.* Gah, this is brilliant!
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: I adore Albus. I want an Al. Or maybe four. And James is pretty adorable. I wanted to show how much impact Val has had in his life, even though she pretty much disregarded him until now.
She fancies him! Or does she... ;)
Thanks for reviewing!
Laura Report Review
Norman and Norma, with their Spuds. That's brilliant.(1.)
Does she still speak to the potato?! I mean, that could be more than slightly worrying. Still. It made me laugh. (2.)
I'm really looking forward to some Lysander. (3.) Which, by the way, I still don't know how to pronounce. (4.) Hell, I didn't even know it was a name until spellcheck changed my name to it. Even then I had to google it. Gah. (5.)
Anyways! I can't wait for the next chapter, update soon! (6.)
1. It's like having a pet rock that gave birth to a pebble, and replacing it every so often with a larger stone, until eventually you're stuck with a mountain on a leash.
2. It was very funny, and I laughed annoyingly loudly.
3. He sounds awfully dimensional. I'm looking forward to some Elodie and Lysander.
4. Is it Lie-zan-dher, or Li-zan-dher?
5. I make that noise a lot.
6. I really liked this, and I'm really impatient. Snort. Author's Response: Thank you for this wonderful comment! And it's Lie-sand-er, I believe. And your pebble to mountain thought process is extremely interesting.. I will update as soon as I possibly can for you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
I loved having Rory's point of view, because I'm always wondering what he's thinking. I also love how he's a lot different from Albus, and how he speaks his mind about the Auror's scar and how he got it. Actually, I also really liked the story about how he got it. I really liked the whole 'what battle' bit. That was good, you know? Because it showed that they thought it was worse than what it actually was, or they are expecting something else to happen.. Yeah. This was a really good chapter, and I look forward to the next chapter when you update!
(Good luck on your exams! I just finished my preliums;D.)Author's Response: Haha - I'm always wondering what he's thinking, too!
Thank you so much for reviewing, blackangelwings.
I'm trying not to make the characters so one-dimensional as I push through this, and the story for Athanas was the perfect opportunity to flesh him out a bit more. (And Bahram, too.)
I must admit *blush* that I was quite fond of the 'What battle?' line, because, as you said, it shows that they're up against something bigger than just a facial imperfection - it shows that there's a bigger enemy out there.
Thanks ever so much and well done for your prelims! I hope they went well. :)
Bethan.x Report Review
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