That was totally...I mean, you have to have won your contest with this, because it was hilarious.
I love how there were girls named Alpha Centauri and Adipose 3! I think it was awesome!
In short: you totally rock! 10/10 an definitely a favourite! Report Review
Aw, poor Hermione! I really thought he could get over their differences after the wedding! Ah, I wanna know what happens next, so here you have a new devoted reader.
Also, I've no idea why, but his last rule was reallyfunny. "Don't fall in love with me"? As if! I think they're both going to fall in love with each other, yes? They have to! I hope Astoria gets ditched because she's a dim-witted ninny to not want to get pregnant for her figure when poor Narcissa would be such a good grandmother to her so desperately desired grandchildren!
Well, cheers to hoping Draco and Hermione fall in love and don't get a divorce!
See you in your next update, ya?Author's Response: Well, to answer your question first, Draco was worrying that they might start a relationship, or fall in love with each other (He can tell that Hermione had some feelings for him, and so did he. Draco wanted to clear things up between them). And, thanks for reading!
*Natalie Report Review
Great ending :) Okay, I don't think Draco/Ginny is a bad pairing, as I'm quite fond of it, though I do prefer Dramione...but this parody was hilarious! (Sorry, Draco, but I laughed...alot...)
The spy roll thing...ohmygosh I love parodies!!! You are so clever to come up with this! Can't write many parodies myself...Author's Response: Haha, thanks :D I honestly have nothing against the pairing but I think allot of times it can be driven to the ground with cliche's, still, many stories write it really well :)
I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the review :) Report Review
Haha, that was awesome :) I seriously do not understand Romione, and ya, I ship Dramione too :) so this was totally funny, especially how you had the narrator telling their thoughts, and that scene where it asked why they were together ... good stuff :)Author's Response: I know I have trouble seeing what she sees in Ron. I know he is madly in love with her but he can be so thick sometimes and really insensitive.
Maybe its the red hair.
Love Pepper Report Review
That was awesome! I have not read anything so hilarious in ages...I mean anything that was intentionally funny and actually accomplised its goal.
I love Ron throwing couches and the just snogging Lavender like nothing was wrong. Also...the glow from Draco...that was so insanely funny, I think I choked a couple of times because it was so unexpected.
This is super great! Hope you win your contest! It certainly does seem like a winner.Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm so glad you liked it! I had so much fun writing this, so that's fantistic to hear :)
Ron's temper was my favorite part of this. I still crack up every time I re-read about him karate chopping the table.
Thanks so much again, this review is making me grin from ear to ear :D Report Review
Oh no, please don't be disappointed in it! It is amazing the way it is! I recently discovered your story and I love it oh so much! Don't be disappointed with it!
I must say, this is one of the most well-written stories I have ever read. The personalities are very deep and realistic, and you really make the characters come to life.
Without doubt, though, the dreamscape thing is my favourite part...James and Lily with no prejudice...beautiful! The description is nearly poetry, it is so lovely and flowing, and never overdone. I am particularly fond of Lily's noticing minute things like James's hand texture, or the many colours in his eyes...I can practically see the entire story in my mind like a movie with your descriptions!
Also, the way you include Peter Pettigrew as...well, not evil, I admire that. Though I do not like him as an adult, I do realize he was a normal kid at one time, and I love how you've given him motives and a personality all his own.
Sirius and Remus: their personalities in the books give more to build on than possibly Peter's as a teen, or James's, and you worked it in very well. I find it hard to read stories where Remus is all player-type...not your story. He has just the right amount of popular boy in him, and I love it!
Another thing: while I'm not the biggest fan of Snape, and am certainly glad Lily chose James over Snape, I do find his character intriguing, and sometimes feel sorry for his perpetual loneliness. I think your portrayal of him conveys the confusion he surely was feeling during the rest of his school time with Lily. He wanted to keep his friends, but he also wanted Lily, and perhaps his weakness was what kept her away?
Good luck in your writing, I certainly enjoy reading it, and look forward to reading more. I cannot wait to see how the story will go, though my guess is that the dreamcatcher from Remus...maybe, instead of keeping out bad dreams, keeps out bad thoughts of James?? Just a guess...
Seriously, you have nothing to be disappointed about, this is superb writing, and the story flows beauifully!Author's Response: Oh my, thank you so much! This is so sweet. You are lovely and have definitely made my day. I will respond in parts:
I still would like to do some editing (never satisfied) but thank you for the vote of confidence. You have made me feel better about the story as a whole :)
I adore writing the dreams. They are beautiful! I am glad that you mention the hands because that's actually a thing of mine, haha. I'm obsessed with hands, fingers and the like and really believe they are so telling. Minute details like calluses and wrinkles fascinate me so I wanted to include that fascination here so that maybe everyone can find beauty in these little things.
Yes, this is another big thing for me. I despise Peter as an adult, but I refuse to project that onto him as a teenager. He was one of them, and they loved and trusted him, so I think it's important to represent THAT Peter and not the one that we met. It's not right, otherwise.
It's similar with Snape. I don't dislike Snape, but I won't glorify him either. He made good and bad choices, for which I both admire and pity him, and I think it's important to portray him realistically. Too many people started writing him as this noble, downtrodden hero after DH came out, and that's... that's not how it went. You can't just ignore everything he did. The fact that he loved Lily does not redeem him entirely, and this period would have been one of his worst and I'm really trying to communicate that... confusion and, probably, bitterness and resentment. I don't know. He's a hardone.
Anyway, I've written too much now! Thank you so, so much for your beautiful review and I am ridiculously happy that you are liking my story! I hope you continue to! Report Review
Haha, awww, that is so sweet, that last part :) But really, Lily, you've known he was the one since like...fifth year ;) wouldn't have admitted it then, of course, but...
I love your portrayal of James! He's so sweet and loving, but still full of himself and just so annoying to our dear Lily, but...we love him anyways,and so does Lily.
Yay, quick updates! Everyone loves those! Can't wait for the next one!Author's Response: I totally agree about Lily knowing James was the one all the way back then... I love them as a couple, I really do.
I'm really glad you're enjoying my portrayal of them. Thank you so much for the review! :) Report Review
That was...heartbreaking. Beautiful and sweet and well-written, but heartbreaking. I love Lily/James too, so why Severus has to be a guy I feel so sorry for, I'll never know, but this story is so going in my favourites, because it is just...touching :) so glad I read it in my small bit of spare time just now.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I've actually had it written for quite a while and I thought I might as well post it. Thanks for the review! :) x Report Review
Oh it is so cute and sweet and absolutely adorable!! Haha, I loved what all Lily said about the pictures...especially the one where she said James looked kind of cool. Kind of...
So glad for the new chapter! Rejoicing fifty times fifty!! Hope there is more soon, because I L. O. V. E. It! I really, really do ;)Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm really glad you're enjoying it so much. I actually just finished chapter 5 yesterday, so I should be submitting that into the queue soon! :)
Thanks so much for your review! Report Review
I could not breathe from laughing! Oh gosh this thing is absolutely hilarious and WAAAYYY too exaggerated! I love how James, Remus, and Sirius are 'Hot' and Peter is ' Not Hot At All But Really Hideous'. Report Review
Okay, that kill me it was so funny! I love how you randomly made James seven feet tall. I laughed through the entire thing. I'm high on sugar right now, though, so that could have something to do with it. Report Review
Oh that is just the most perfect ending ever conceived in the mind of all mankind! I absolutely adore this one!
You know, Harry does know just how to charm Ginny, doesn't he? And we all love him for it.
The best scene, though, was right after he gave her the bracelet: that scene alone was.FREAKING BRILLIANT! You are such an awesome writer! Thanks for sharing your lovely work!
Best Holiday Wishes!Author's Response: Thank you, god, that was just the nicest thing anybody could say. I really love Harry/Ginny, and I promised myself that I'd never write anything else, but them. I have to much love for them, and this...this is my way of showing it, but when people like you come around...you just made my day wonderful, and I thank you for that, I thank you so very much.
Love this review so much :) Thanks again,
Lizzie Report Review
Aaw, that is just beyond cute! Honestly, I've always loved Harry and Ginny together, there were just so many other pairings that people wrote more romantic and interesting dramas and oneshots and stuff...until I found your stories, and they are SO good! I will definitely be reading more of them!
Sincerely, though, your ideas in this one are most unique, and that's probably why it is so much better than most Harry/Ginny fanfictions. Thanks for sharing it!
Best Holiday Wishes!Author's Response: Oh Thank you! I love Harry and Ginny because it's so real and simple and people tend to ignore them because of this, but I just end up loving them more because I feel that I have to make up for all the hate that's on them :)
I'm so thrilled that you like my stories, it makes my ego swell like ten times! I'm thrilled, just so thrilled.
Thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you for this wonderful review, thank you so much :)
Lizzie Report Review
I can totally see that happening: the Harry/Ginny stuff and the things Teddy did.
It was so cute! Poor Harry and Ginny, though...Teddy interrupted most of their precious kisses.
I really liked that scene where Ginny thought about the pictures and Fred and when she knew that her wedding picture would be taken before Harry even talked to her. Oh, and where Harry called her Mrs Potter...that was sweet.
Best holiday wishes!Author's Response: Wow that's a great review, thank you!! :D I always have the inclination to mention Fred, he was such a great character, and I wanted to show that Teddy was just as normal as he could be. :D Thanks again!! Report Review
*sob* That...was so sweet! Who knew clicking on 'Random story' would pick something so heart wrenching.
But poor Hermione, Ron and Rose, I can honestly say that before reading this, I disliked the Ron/Hermione pairing. I'm retinking that idea because of this.
Excellent writing, and I really did enjoy it, though it made me want to cry.Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you write it and if it's any constellation I cried writing this haha.
Yay! I love making people think about ships!
I'm glad you like it and sorry it made you cry :)
Jaz Report Review
Haha, too cute! That is so clever and ingenious and unique and well...I've never read anything that made me like the Harry/Ginny pairing so much! Great writing...wish it could've been longer, though, because it was SO GOOD!Author's Response: Thanks, I'm so thrilled that you liked it. I love writing Harry/Ginny, people put them in such a bad light and I try to fix that light...I know, I'm weird.
I wouldn't how I cloud make it longer, but still thrilled you liked. :)
Lizzie Report Review
I would just like to say that this is an amazing story...perhaps quite an excess of language, but other than that, wonderful!
Barbie is annoying and I greatly dislike her. I hope that James will really embarrass her when he ditches her for Lily, so yeah :)
That thing about James' brain, Brian, and Lily's brain, Carrot being connected or whatever: oh my gosh, how did you ever think of something so perfect! Their brains are even friends!
You write their story so well I can't help but beg for the next chapter! Report Review
That is beautiful! James and Lily are totally perfect, and you have gotten their personalities just right. So...update soon, maybe? I promise I'll review it whenever you do.
I'm still picturing the two of them clinging to each other in a corner...oh my gosh that was the most beautiful thing I've ever read, that part where they were hiding together!
So, summing it up: I adored it and can't wait to read the next chapter.Author's Response: hey.. thank you for review. am so glad you like the story.
am so happy you find my characterization apt and that you can imagine those moments between james and lily. i personally, adore them together.
the next chapter is almost ready for posting. and i would love to know your views regarding that.
i hope you enjoy the story as it progresses :D
clanmei Report Review
Definitely no disappointment here, it was simply beautiful! I can't wait to read more (yes, I am certainly going to stick with it). I love your portrayals of James and Lily...quite plausible to go along with the canon storyline, especially the Snape factor.
And it is so cute that James is the man of Lily's dreams, by the way :)
You're an awesome writer!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really flattered that you enjoyed this so much. :) I was a bit nervous about the Snape scene, so I'm especially glad you thought that that worked well!
Thank you for all of your reviews. You've really made me smile. I'll try to get the next chapter up asap. :) Report Review
Aaw, so sweet! I love the part where James was about to kiss her and she rubbed snow in his hair ;)Author's Response: Oh, good - I loved writing that, and I was hoping my lovely readers would as well. :)
Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
Ah! My favourite couple too!
Oh my gosh you got James' character so narcissistic! I loved it!Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad! :) Thank you! Report Review
That was cute :)
Though I did aways like to think it was love at first sight for James, I love reading how others think it happened.
It's also nice how it's sort of through James' perspective.
Very nicely written, 10/10! :)Author's Response: Thank you for your response.
From the beginning my purpose has been to challenge the norm and offer something different, thus I wanted to really explore an alternative scenario of James liking her well beyond their first year.
I also intended to write it in a third person omniscient perspective but in the end I settled with providing more of James' thoughts and his point of view.
Thank you so much for the rating and compliments, I really appreciate it.
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