OH. MY. GAWD.
THAT WAS SO ADORABLE, JAYDE.
Even though I'm very angry at Charlie for not going home and not visiting his poor family, I just can't help but squee with excitement! :D
I LOVED the way he proposed! It was absolutely adorable! I just - MY FEELS.
THEY'RE JUST SO ADORABLE AND CUTE TOGETHER.
AMAZING CHAPTER, AMAZING CHAPTER! :D
10/10!Author's Response: Surprise reviews make my day, and EEK! Your review made ME squee with excitement!! :D *hugs*
I know it's awful of Charlie not to go home and see his family, but I promise it's all for the good of the story. It will work out in the end, dear, I promise! :D
I was actually a bit worried about the proposal... I didn't want it to be too overdone or cheesy. So I'm glad you loved it and thought it was adorable!!
Haha! I LOVE THIS REVIEW!! I'm glad you think they're adorable and cute together! I can't wait to see what you think of future chapters!
Thank you SO MUCH for the AMAZING REVIEW!!! *hugs* Report Review
The White Tomb.
Please tell me that isn't, THE WHITE TOMB.
OH SWEET JESUS THEY'RE GOING TO TAKE THE ELDER WAND.
Also, your knowledge and explanation on the wandlore was really astounding! It really makes the story believable!
Please, please, please, please update soon! Forget your other stories; focus on this!
ahahaha I'm joking. But ack - I can't wait!
One thing though, the spacing annoys me. Don't worry, it's just that I'm a little nit-picker. An easy way to fix that is use the simple editor or use the paste as plain text button on the advanced editor. There's a few staff tutorials on it. :)
Other than that, MY GOLLY THIS IS A GREAT STORY! I'm so glad you asked me to review this one! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: What a lovely way to start a week, waking up to a shiny new review like yours!
The next chapter is already written so after I edit some minor spelling and grammar issues, I'll update. I'm not keeping you in a state of suspense for nothing.
Thank you so much for the lovely review! And I'll go back and edit the spacing as soon as I get a chance.
This is really interesting! I've never read one of the Scamander's being bitter, I think most people (including myself) see them as inseparable.
Again, you've captured the emotion and Lysander's thought process perfectly! It's amazing, you can write hilarious novels that are full of wacky characters (cough-Spencer-cough) but then you can write these amazing pieces, filled with emotion and imagery. (Not saying your other stuff doesn't though, it's just more prominent in your one-shots).
I loved the quote: "When Lysander flies, Lorcan soars."
It's just so powerful. A lot of siblings have that rivalry where one is better than the other and you just captured it in that one tiny sentence, in my opinion.
Also, I love how reluctant Lysander is to wear the sweater. I think he should be grateful and he shouldn't compare it to Lily's. He just doesn't seem to understand that he is his own person and Luna still loves him for it.
Anywho, this was another AMAZING one-shot, it was angsty and bitter, which is always fun to read! :D (It shouldn't be but it is :p)
Another 10/10! :D Report Review
I'm back for your second review! :)
This is not good at all.
Why would you write something like this because it is so UNBELIEVABLY PERFECT?!
Muhahahaha, I felt bad for writing that but that was actually my initial thoughts. :p
Anyway, I adore that your Lily is flawed and she isn't completely sweet and a teacher's pet. Also, I LOVE that you've made her struggle with classes without a wand or cauldron, it just seems so believable and she's stubborn just like Harry. :')
And I love how her and James laid in the grass every Thursday night, it's such a sweet little gesture and I just dhgkfgidkfgdsh.
I love the similarities between them as well, it's just so cute and adorable. :'D
And the freckles/love metaphor. It's just adorable.
Actually, this whole one-shot is adorable!
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Hi there! I'm here for your first review! :D
Firstly, OH MY GOD. THIS IS ACTUALLY PERFECT.
I don't know why I've never read it before! It's actually one of the best one-shots I've read on here so far!
I love, love, LOVE the comparisons with Peter and James, Wendy and Lily. I adore how you've written the way they were flying and the way Lily has become a part of the Marauders; I love seeing that in fics. It's never a good story when Lily causes a rift between them.
And the way she taught them about the Muggle fairy tales, it really captures Lily's personality perfectly.
And the simile: The cool night air creeps into the dormitory and into her bones like a whisper among friends
Wowza. That was absolutely gorgeous. I read it over and over, just WONDERING how someone could think of something like that.
And the 500 words, it was perfect. I think if you had written it longer, it would have dragged on. You've done really well with this one-shot. I can't find one fault!
And your James, he just seems so sweet and goofy; which is my favourite portrayal of him! :D
Also, about her feeling the laughter that's coming from him - that was another beautiful sentence.
These emotions (shipping feels), are just - oh my God. You've captured the right amount of fluffiness and romance without it being sickening. It's just perfect.
So, you can probably tell, I just LOVE this one-shot! I love everything about it! :D
Definitely a 10/10! :D Report Review
Camille. I have been reading.
I don't know why I'm acting so formal when I'm usually HERP DERP I LUV CATS LOL XOXOXOXO TUMBLR IS FUN AND JOHN GREEN IS PERF.
Yes, ignore me. Please.
ANYWAY, I'M GOING TO START THE REVIEW! *HUZZAH* (jeesh that took a while to get to the actual review huh? :p)
Is Lydia a Muggle? A Squib? Or did she attend Muggle School? Although I don't know much about English schooling but I'm pretty sure (and this is courtesy of my English school friend) that people have sixth form and it's kinda like tenth grade and then they go to college/uni/or drop out for the last two years what Americans would call senior and what us Aussies call year 11 and 12.
HOWEVER I MIGHT BE WRONG BECAUSE I DON'T HAVE AN EIDETIC MEMORY LIKE SHELDON COOPER.
But, the main thing of that ridiculously long paragraph was: Is Lydia a witch?
Other than that, it was perfecto! I likey this a lot! :D This totally deserves the January SOTM!
10/10!Author's Response: meep. (AKA asdfghjkl; no go away. Meow meow meow, I don't even know this story was thrown together a while ago, and I didn't think of all the details! MEEP) But really asdfghjkl thanks for the review. You're too sweet.
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Okay, I just wrote this REALLY long review and now it's disappeared because my Internet went funny. -_-
I'll try and say what I remember, but t wont be as eloquent and such. I'm starting to get really pressed for time. :/
Anyway, onto the review! :)
Firstly, I loved the way you've written Scorpius and Rose. They have traits from their parents but they aren't total clones of them, which is what we often see in fanfiction.
I'm really curious as to what happened with Hermione and Rose; although I'm guessing it had something to do with Rose going overseas to study. Or getting babied like she said on the plane.
And who is this mysterious person? You've really got a knack for creating all this mystery and cluelessness. For some reason, I think it's someone in/close with the family or -
OH MY GOD WHAT IF IT'S DEAN?!
It probably isn't, but I have an inkling it's someone close with Harry.
I only have one crit and that is that when the family speak, they all speak very formally. Most people tend to speak to their families with slang (excluding the grandparents).
Other than that, I LOVED seeing them all bond together. It was really sweet. Especially with Molly remembering what Remus said to her in Order of the Phoenix. :')
Anyway, this was another great chapter! Hope you update soon! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Hey!
First of all, thank you so much for all your lovely reviews, I'll respond to them all. Second, sorry it's taken me this long.
I'm happy you enjoy this and that the mystery of it all is catching on.
And no, it isn't Dean... Or is it? I'm not telling!
As for the dialogue with the family, seeing as Rose has been away for so long, there is a story there. Which you'll learn in a few chapters. And it explains (almost) everything.
Once again thank you for the lovely comments!
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Hello again! I'm quickly squeezing in these last reviews for you! :D
Oh. My. Gosh.
This was amazing!
You really have a knack for getting the chilling thing going on. I keep getting goosepimples because you write it so well! :D
Also, the DETAIL about the wands, that was FANTASTIC! I'm guessing you have to do a lot of research for this, and it definitely pays off!
Also, I LOVED Rose's personality/character! She was bright and bubbly and yet you could still see the Ron underneath her. :p
I also like the way her and Scorpius are bonding. ;) They're great together, they really are. :D
And naw, little Scorpius acting all official ahaha. He's a cutie pie. :)
Also, I liked that he was annoyed that he recognised the behaviour of Weasleys/Potters. :p It's a very Malfoy-esque thing to do. You seem to have gotten Draco's personality in him without Scorpius being a total clone ahaha. :p
Another great chapter! 10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Hehehe! Scorpius is very fun to write, because I see him as somebody who has had to struggle with his father's legacy all his life. So on one hand he has the love for his parents and on the other his need to not be like his father and to prove himself different.
Rose is the most difficult character I think, because she is the product of two very, very outspoken people, each with their own unique personalities. For me it's a challenge to balance those out and make Rose her own person. I'm really glad you liked it! Report Review
So I thought I'd quickly review because I got chills from this chapter! Yes, it was THAT good! :D
This was AMAZING! I loved it and I suspect a Rose/Scorpius ship is coming along? (Muhahahahaha)
I noticed you had some typos but it's just little nit-picky things that bothered me:
"We're going to leave know - it should be 'now' -. Once again, so sorry for your loss." he finished, not wanting to impose on this time of mourning any more than necessary. - you also forgot the closing quote. " -
"We can't bring somebody from outside in this stage of his investigation. Imagine the panic if word got out that there's a killer on the loose making clone-wands. People would start going crazy, the reports alone would be enough to burry - it should be 'bury' -us."
Anyway, those were the only two things I noticed and they were really small, it wasn't a major deal I'm just picky. :p
Also, that was Moody's wand?! :O Something strange is going on here! And I LOVED Ron's reaction to calling in Rose. He's an overprotective father and he still hasn't gotten over his grudge of Draco Malfoy. :')
I'm really interested to see how Rose and Scorpius act around each other, it's getting me excited! :D
Another, amazing chapter! 10/10! :DAuthor's Response: You suspect right, something may be happening there. *grin* If it all goes acording to plan and these characters don't take on lives of their own and spoil my fun. Which they tend to do sometimes.
I'm sure that there are typos in there and they will get edited out eventually, but thank you for pointing those out to me, it makes my job easier.
As for Ron, he's my very favorite character to write, too bad I can't squeeze him into every scene without it being strange.
Again, thank you so much for the lovely comments, they really made my day! Report Review
Hello again! Sorry for taking so long!
This was a really good chapter, all your characters are really believable and on par with canon!
I'm trying to find faults but I can't. :p The plot is really intriguing and mysterious, I really want to know what happens!
I really love the detail you've put in about the Wizengamont, it makes it so much more believable. :)
Another great chapter! I will try to review the rest today as I'm going to be going on holiday tomorrow for eight days! I will definitely try to get them done but just in case I don't, I thought I'd tell you. :)
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Since my career of choice is in law I really enjoy writting the parts about the wizarding laws and the actions law enforcement can or cannot take in accordance with it.
I'm really pleased that you find the characters to be in par with canon, since I do extensive research on them before writting them in here.
Enjoy your holiday! :) Report Review
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it'S OVER :'(
THIS WAS AN AMAZING STORY AND JAMES AND GRACE ARE JUST PERFECT FOR EACH OTHER OH MY GOSH THEY'RE ADORABLE IN AN UNCONVENTIONAL SENSE
I DON'T CARE IF I DO N'T MAKE SENSE IT'S THREE IN THE MORNING
I LOVED THE ENDING BUT I'M SAD AS WELL BECAUSE IT'S OVER
SO YEAH, THIS WAS AN AMAZING STORY I'M SO GLAD I READ IT :D
P.S. SORRY ABOTU THE CAPS I COULDN' BE BOTHERED TO TURN IT OFFAuthor's Response: OHMYMERLIN HI HOW ARE YOU ARE YOU OKAY I'M OKAY GOOD AWESOME YAY.
I'M KEEPING MY CAPS ON TOO BECAUSE WHY NO ITS FUN RIGHT I'M GLAD YOU LIKED THE STORY AND I LOVE THEIR UNCONVENTIONAL ADORBSNESS (not a big fan of conventional love... blah) SO YES TA LOVE THANKS LOVE YOU
-AC Report Review
So I'm finally here! :D
This is a good opening chapter, I'm very intrigued! :D
It's a bit strange that Vess' mother gave her alcohol but I guess that's why she was such an awful mother.
I really liked this! I'm going to add this to my favourites and therefore you must update soon! Muhahaha! :p
I will be returning very soon. >:)
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Hi there! I'm here to do your first review! :D
This is so INTERESTING! I'm in love with it already! You've portrayed Ron and Harry really well, they're very in-canon.
I also love the idea of Scorpius being an Auror with them, it's a really original idea but you've made it work perfectly! :D
Also, this plot is so unique and creative! I'm really intrigued as to what will happen next!
This is a really good opening chapter! I couldn't find ANY faults! :p
10/10! :D I'm also adding it to my favourites! :DAuthor's Response: Hello again!
I really like NextGen stories and I've read plenty of them. So I wanted to do something that isn't really common, with the chosen careers of the characters and how they interact in this era.
I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter and thank you for the fav story add! Report Review
okay, I have been shipping Molly and Gryffin as soon as I saw them and they SO KISSED/HAD SOME INTERACTION AND NOW THEY'RE ON A DATE OH MY GOLLY GOSH MY SHIPPING FEELS!
AND NOW JAMES AND NATASHA MY FEELS! :D
AND I'VE BEEN FIGHTING MY DOM/SCORPIUS FEELS BUT THEY'VE JUST ERUPTED LIKE A VOLCANO! :'D
Also, good luck in college! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: I've been shipping Molly and Gryffin ever since I wrote them so I'm glad we're on the same page! I was so happy when I finally got to write them agreeing to go on a date.
I'm glad you liked James/Tash and Dom/Scorpius too! I have to much fun with the pairings in this story.
Thanks for the good luck! I actually don't really like college much so I'm thinking about transferring but we'll see.
Thanks for reviewing :)
-Rebecca Report Review
Hi there! I'm here to review your story from the Mean Girls Quote Challenge! :)
That was absolutely adorable! I think you've really written Ginny, Hermione and Ron the way J. K. Rowling portrayed them. Especially when you were saying how Hermione was 'drinking' all the information in. It really gave us a great visual image. :)
Also, I LOVED the way you integrated the quote in the story! I was expecting you to write about a girl, I LOVE that you did a young James. :) Babies/Toddlers to get that way (from what I've seen from my cousins), if they have something they like they won't want to let it go, even for a second. :p
I think this was a really sweet one-shot, I really enjoyed reading it! :D
Anyway, thanks for entering my challenge and good luck! :)Author's Response: I'm happy you enjoyed this little story!
Ever since I read the quote, I knew that it wouldn't be said by a girl in the story but rather by a child. And then one day I was looking at some old photos and saw how my brother never parted with his superhero outfits and along came plunny.
Thank you for the review and for the second place! Report Review
Hi there! I'm here to review your story from the Mean Girls Quote Challenge! :)
Firstly, I already LOVE this story, it is amazing and when you posted saying you put the quote into this I got so excited. :p
Secondly, you used the quote in the story really well and I loved the way you did that! I love Millie's wishful hipster-ness, it's a very unique idea. :)
I also love Berkley and Sherri, even though they're very odd and critical of Millie, they seem to be very good friends. :)
And ew, Turk. I really don't like him. He's just eugh and yuck. And James, he seems kind of interesting. He doesn't seem to be a major jerk but I think he's a bit cocky. But I think he thinks he does it in good-nature even though it might hurt some people. I don't know if that makes sense but he seems to be a bit oblivious.
Okay I don't think that whole paragraph makes sense but meh.
Anyway, thanks for entering my challenge and good luck! :) Report Review
Hi there! I'm here to review your story from the Mean Girls Quote Challenge! :)
This was very, very, VERY interesting! I loved Audrey's thoughts and I loved how you made the quote as one of the main bits. Like, even though you didn't integrate it with your text obviously, it had that sense that she didn't belong in the magical world.
Unless I'm interpreting it wrong...
Anyway, I also really liked the calignyephobia weaved into this piece. From the tiny bit that I just researched, you seemed to have gotten it spot-on!
And I was hoping someone would do a non-humour story! I'm glad that you did it though!
Anyway, thanks for entering my challenge and good luck! :)Author's Response: Hi!
I have been given a fair amount of criticism for the quote for not capturing the spirit of Mean Girls (though wouldn't that technically only be possible if I were to write an American high school AU?), but I decided to re-contextualise it for this fic.
Anyway - I'm glad you like it, and you're free to make up your own mind. :D
Caligynephobia and Mean Girls go really well together, I think. I'd feel pretty caligynephobic too if I went to school with Regina George.
And you know me - it's always gotta be angst. :D
Thank you so much for your review, and for my first ever first place! Report Review
Also, is Carlotta's left or right hand twitchy? Because of it's her left hand that could mean a heart problem?! :O
I love Lily, I really do. She's an amazing sister and I'm so glad she forced Carlotta onto James. :p
And I'm so happy with Harry! He really is a sweet father. :) And Ginny and Al! I love all the Potter family. :D
But I'm so curious as to what's wrong with Carlotta! It seems serious because she was slurring her words. D:
Anyway, loved this chapter. Please update soon? :)
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Lily is indeed an amazing sister! James is lucky to have her - and his whole family for that matter. Harry certainly means well; he's not been the best dad to James in the last couple of years but it's not been out of malice, and this whole episode has demonstrated to them both just how much Harry cares about James. As for Carlotta - interesting theory! My lips are sealed :) Next chapter is in the queue, thanks for reviewing! Report Review
by the way, I've started shipping Al/Flora.
Even though she's a stuck-up snob and Al is a crazy wacko anD HAS A SON.
WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO US?! :O
And Wallis is a very odd name, with an odd personality but I like her. Also, I feel so bad for Flora for all the bad times but sigh she brought it on herself.
Anyway, I loved this chapter! 10/10! :D Report Review
PEEEAAARRRLLL I'M SO SORRY I SWEAR I THOUGHT I REVIEWED THIS! D:
Also, I haven't heard from you in a while, I'm hoping everything is okay?! Or are you on holiday like I was? :D
Anyway, on to the review.
I LOVED THIS CHAPTER! It was so sweet and bonding and adorable! No, I don't care if that doesn't make sense. :p
Anyway, I loved Freddie and his obvious crush on Denny. :D
And the rest of the family! But HUGO! He wins for being the best! :p
Loved, loved, LOVED this quote:
"And my hormones are on steroids, higher than Merlin himself!"
"Just because you're gay, doesn't mean you have to go around the house spreading your gayness to everyone you see."
All in all, I LOVED this chapter! I'm so sorry it took me so long to review! I SWEAR I reviewed it! D: Maybe I dreamed it...
ANYWAY, loved the chapter, can't wait for more! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Hey lovely:)
It's okay, don't worry about reviewing "late", I'm glad you liked the chapter none-the-less.
And it does seem like I've dissapeared for a while doesn't it? I truly haven't. I've just been so caught up with school, it's been interfering with my creative writing muse, so for these past few months all my writing projects have been put on hold. I'm currently constructing a chapter to the story I've dedicated to you by the way, but it's coming slowly.
And yesh! Hugo. I personally enjoyed how Hugo came out. I don't know why, but I always picture Hugo being the gay one, if any of the Weasley/Potter family was to become gay that is. I don't know, maybe it's the name? Hugo just sounds like a name I would give to my stuffed teddy bear. He's adorable though, none-the-less.
Thank you lovely for your review. Updates will come eventually, I PROMISE, but as for right now, everything has been put on a slow-mo status. Report Review
THEY'RE SO CUTE TOGETHER OH MY GOLLY GOSH!
THIS CHAPTER LITERALLY MADE ME GO 'SQUEEE!' :D
Anyway, I LOVED this chapter, I can't wait for the next one! :DAuthor's Response: HAHA. They are adorbs. Thank you so much for the review! Really hope you like the rest :) Report Review
My emotions were very wobbly with this chapter! At one point I was frustrated with Charlie, then I was squeeing from the cute-ness of Chiz (I've given them a ship name ahaha ;)) and then I was sad because of the Fred thing and Charlie thinking that he shouldn't be having a good time. D:
You're very good with making your readers' emotions go a bit funny! :p I'm sorry if that doesn't make sense, I don't know I should be on the computer. :p
Anyway, I really loved this chapter, it was so sweet. :)
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: I was going to wait to respond to this... but once I started crying, I decided I couldn't. Yes, that's right... I am LITERALLY crying right now!
Thank you SO much for taking the time to read and review this! It really means the world to me! And I am SO, SO happy that you loved the chapter!
OMG - I hadn't even thought of a ship name! Chiz is SO PERFECT! I adore it to pieces! I think that's what I'm going to call them from now on! So thank you for the ship name!! :D
Yes, Charlie DID go on quite an emotional roller-coaster ride this chapter, didn't he?? He's really still struggling with the whole 'grief' thing, but he's coming to like Liz also, so let's try to forgive him... he's going through a lot right now. :P
Hehe; I didn't mean to make your emotions go funny, but I'm glad I conveyed the emotions well! :D
Thank you SO, SO, SO MUCH!! *Squees* Report Review
Al and Alexa shouLD JUST GET TOGETHER ALREADY!
Are you enjoying the shipping feels I'm having?!
And I love Theo/Alexa's Dad! He's so sweet and cute, I'd marry him. ;)
Anyway, I really like your Al and Alexa, they're really great characters! :D
10/10. :DAuthor's Response: DO YOU THINK SO??? I guess we'll see. ;)
Haha. I love Theo so much, he's one of my favorite characters in HP.
Thank you so much for reviewing. :D
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ah they're their father's children, aren't they? ;)
Gotta love Roxy and Fred! :p
Also, DOM YOU NAUGHTY GIRL! You don't DO that to someone! *sigh*
Anyway, I really like Oliver. He's a funny little guy. :p
And ew. Benson is mean. :/
Anyway, I loved this chapter! I can't wait to see what happens in the next! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: I love Roxy and Fred to pieces :)
Also Dom, but she has done a bad thing so I guess she deserves this a little bit.
AND THANK YOU! This is the review that got me to the best of HPFF so THANK YOU MY DEAR! :) Report Review
JUST STOP BEING PERFECT.
I DON'T WANT THIS TO BE OVER.
I LOVE JAMES THAT HE'S SO SCREWED UP AND NOT NORMAL AND HE'S PERFECT FOR GRACE AND HE CALLS HER GRACIE HELP MY SHIPPING FEELS
YOU JUST HAVE THIS CRAZY WAY OF WRITING THAT'S SO PERFECT AND MOVING AND WOW
I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE BUT I DON'T WANT IT TO END D:
845185621841/10 ;DAuthor's Response: THANK YOU SO MUCH!
These are my favourite types of chapters to write and I'm so glad it came across how I want it to be. And him calling her Gracie is my favourite thing about them as a ship I think :D
-AC Report Review
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