I thought this was a really nice chapter, even if it was shorter than some of your others have been, and it really moved the story along. I hope Hermione will be well enough to give evidence for her trial! 10/10
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Wow. This really was an incredible, beautiful, heartbreaking story. You did a wonderful capturing Dominique's journey, and especially her last moments. I really didn't want her to die towards the end, and geared up when she did! This really was a gorgeous, sad, wonderfully emotional story. 10/10
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I really enjoyed this one-shot! I loved how you wrote Padma and Draco, and how they interacted with one another, especially under the given circumstances! I think you did a wonderful job capturing the grim and intense mood at Hogwarts, and I loved that you didn't shy away from the extent that the Carrows go to to punish students. It really is horrific, and I think you wrote that really well without overdoing anything. I also loved the end of this story, because we find out why Padma might end up in the Room of Requirement when she did. Overall I thought this was a really great story! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey!
I'm so pleased to know that you enjoyed this one-shot! It was written for a writing challenge so I was quite unsure about it, especially about making a plausible story with the prompts I was given. I wanted to get across the grim mood in Hogwarts during the war, and there aren't many stories that focus on that period.
The punishment that the Carrows use is really horrible! The Iron Maiden was one of the prompts I had to use as my 'thing' (although I didn't actually know what it was before I wrote this story!) and that fit with the Carrows.
I'm glad you liked the ending! There's never been much explanation about how the DA members all ended up in the Room of Requirement, so I wanted to provide a believable explanation about how Padma might have got there.
Thanks for the review!
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Wow, this was such a beautiful piece of writing. It was absolutely incredible. Definitely one of the most amazing stories I've read. I can't pick out a single thing that could make this story better. So I'll just gush about how brilliant it was.
I loved how you opened it, because we got an amazing sense of how Lavender's life was before Hogwarts. I felt bad for her, honestly, because her mother seems a bit out of it, and her cousin is just scary! When she pushes the bookshelf on her and then presses down... I got chills. And the way she just smiled was creepy! That's one of the many images I got from this story that are just haunting. You wrote those descriptions so beautifully that there was never a single moment in this story that I couldn't picture what was going on in Lavender's life.
And then she goes to Hogwarts! There's such a contrast between her home life and her life at Hogwarts. I feel like she's one of those people who's meant to be at Hogwarts, if that makes sense. She just seems so much more at ease there. And she has friends, even if they're ridiculous together! I loved the way Lavender is so silly on the outside, but seems so mature through the way you've presented her thoughts and opinions. The voice you've given her just seems so much older and wiser than who she is at Hogwarts, and I think that shows how much she grows as a character.
And then there's Ron! Haha. Even though we're seeing him through Lavender, I think you got his character so well! It was spot on! I actually sympathize with Lavender here, because you've shown how hard she's trying to make it work, and how she isn't just a silly girl who's jealous of Hermione. She just doesn't know what else to do. There's something really real and that, and I think you captured that beautifully!
I know I'm skipping around a lot, but Padma and Lavender. Let's just look at that for a second. It's a pairing that I would never expect, but that I really enjoyed in this story! Another instance where I'm just bowing down to your writing abilities! The way that they transition from barely knowing each other to being friends, and how they're so different, but just mesh so well, is brilliant. That just sets up their relationship so well, and everything about the two of them together just feels natural after that. It's so easy for me to see them together through their last year of Hogwarts, and getting through the battle together, because you can just tell that Lavender wants to protect Padma, and that she really loves her.
The end of this one-shot was absolutely gorgeous. I don't even know what else to say about it other than that it was incredibly beautiful.
This one-shot was wonderful, and had so many layers that I could read and reread and just pick at it for hours, because there's just so much wonderful stuff there that you've written so fabulously!
I haven't even gotten all my feelings out, but this review is starting to get rambly, so I'll wrap it up. This was phenomenal, and I loved it! Amazing, wonderful, stupendous work. 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello Cassie ♥
...so basically I just squeeed my way through your review :P
This is such a lovely surprise! Thank you so much for taking the time to read this (very) long oneshot of mine, and for leaving such fabulous compliments! It's been quite a while since I wrote it, so reading your detailed review going through all the stages of Lavender's life made me remember the whole process of writing it.
Indeed, Lavender's hardly the most popular character in fanfic no thanks to the negative portrayal of her in the books. But I think these are the sorts of characters I like writing most - I like to write the other sides of people, if you get what I mean :)
Yeah, Lavender doesn't have the easiest of home lives. Well, it's not the worst, but there's generally a lack of warmth and affection from her mother, who constantly has a preoccupied air about her, and then there's the complicated relationship with her cousin, Viola.
Hogwarts is perfect for Lav Lav :) She has friends, falls in love, falls out of love - and generally experiences life. She's the sort of very lively person, someone who feels things very keenly, and who observes things closely and who's very tuned in to the present moment.
I'm glad you were able to sympathise with Lavender during her relationship with Ron :D That's what I was hoping readers would feel for her. Ron is always a bit of a jerk in the novels, in my opinion :P
And yeah, the Lavender/Padma ship just came out of nowhere when I was writing the story. But I really wanted Lav Lav to experience a more fulfilling relationship before the end of her life; I wanted her to experience this emotional extreme of bliss and young love. But their relationship does sort of break down a little in the end, though :)
I'm so glad you liked the ending! Gaah, Cassie, thanks sosososo much once again for this amazing unexpected review ♥ It means so much to me when someone leaves such reviews telling me they've really enjoyed my writing ♥
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Wow, I really enjoyed this one-shot! Scrimgeour was really creepy, but I loved what you did with his character! The details were really nice in this story, and I could picture the ship's loo where they were meeting. I just really enjoyed this overall, and this you did a great job with it! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Yay, someone actually likes this! I was a bit concerned about it, because it's totally opposite of anything I normally write. Scrimgeour was supposed to be a really unsettling character, so I'm glad I did him justice. Thanks so much for the review, and I'm glad you liked it!
-ShadowRose Report Review
Wow. This was incredible. I don't even know what to say, so I'm sorry if this isn't a very coherent review! the way that you wrote all of these characters was just so brilliant! I felt so bad for Ginny, with her brothers teasing her like that, and then there was Tom and you wrote him so well! He was so creepy! It gave me chills but I loved it!
Especially this part- "Tag-a-long. Tom's voice slithered through her thoughts easily and her fingers found their way to the back of her head again, rubbing at the itch buried deep in her skull. Little Ginny in her second-hand robes, lagging behind her brothers, noticed by none. You belong to me now, little Ginny." Oh my goodness that's such an amazing piece of writing in just a few sentences!
And I wasn't expecting the second half of that story at all! But I loved how we got some of Irma's background and how Tom took her into the diary, and again he's just so creepy and snakelike, and I had this clear picture of it all happening and GAH THIS WAS FANTASTIC. You should be really proud of this because it's incredible! Wonderful, wonderful work!!! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Cassie ♥
Thank you so much for stopping by to read my new oneshot! And gah, you've really piled the praise on me eeep. I'm so beyond happy that you enjoyed the way I wrote the characters!
Ginny is normally not as helpless or frail as this; she can usually withstand or defend herself against her brothers' teasing, but her state of mind has been severely affected by the Horcrux. Oh, I'm glad you liked Tom's voice - he's a bully here, a petty bored one, but still very predatory. I was worried that he might actually sound sorta ridiculous. I mean, this is Voldemort that we're talking about :)
Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Cassie ♥ It means a lot when someone takes the time to read my writing, really.
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This chapter was really lovely! I really like the dynamic between all of the characters, especially because Al seems to be the one who has to sort out so many of their problems! Haha. I thought everything between Xavier and Ethan was so sweet, and you wrote those moments so well. I also think you've done a great job with the Xave/Tasha/Stewart situation. I can't wait to read more about it! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Al is the problems fixer. He hates confrontation and stress. He's such a worrier. :D
I'm glad you liked the moment between Xavier and Ethan. Thank you so much for leaving a review, Cassie!
Sam. Report Review
I really, really enjoyed reading this story! It was funny, light, and really original, and I think you did a fantastic job with it! I never thought about how the Weasley family could get a ghoul to pretend to be their son, but now that I've read this I'll definitely think on it a bit more! I loved how you portrayed the ghoul, and what strong character choices you made with him. He definitely knew who he was and where he was going, which was hilarious to read in the context of the Weasley household! This was really wonderful, and I loved reading it! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hi Cassie!
I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and found it original as that's what I was aiming to do! I never thought about it either, until I mentioned him in a review, then he kinda became stuck in my mind as if he was telling me to write about him! I'm so glad that you liked him, as I was worried people would think I was insane or something! Thank you for this lovely review,
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Since you were so lovely reviewing my story, I thought I would return the favor, and I'm really gale I did! I loved this! It's a really awesome start to your story! I can't wait to find out more, and I think you've done an amazing job setting up the pace and tone of the story. 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey there Cassie
Oh well I'm very glad that you enjoyed this. You didn't have to review it but I'm very grateful that you did and it's good to know that you liked it so much that you rated it a ten. The next chapter will be up in a few days time if you'd be at all interested in continuing on with this story.
THG Report Review
This was such a brilliant, phenomenal, outstanding chapter. I feel like this is the closest I've seen Severus where he's come across as so human. You can feel his vulnerabilities, and I really liked seeing that side of him. Also, now that he and Beth have gotten closer, I love the way his thoughts of her change his character, even if it is only slightly. He feels almost warmer to me, because he isn't the cold, arrogant man that Harry sees in Potions, and he isn't just the Hogwarts spy who might be a Death Eater. You've given him so many layers and that's really interesting to read, especially because you've written it so well!
I'm just going to tell you right now that Malfoy gets on my nerves! In the best way possible of course :) He definitely had the Malfoy family pride and arrogance that we see in his son later, and he's just so smug that it makes me want to... I don't know... Grab his shoulders and shake him or something like that! Sev's annoyance with the Death Eaters he's going on his mission with is perfect, and I could definitely feel that! He just seems a lot older than his friends, and I guess it's because he's so serious.
Also, the fact that Severus is sickened by the thought of torturing the Muggle woman just for fun really says a lot about his character, especially considering who he hangs around with! You wrote that internal conflict beautifully, and I loved how you showed his decision of doing what Malfoy says or potentially endangering his own life if he disobeys and shows he's not loyal. It's really a dangerous game that he's playing, and he has to be really careful about his choices, even if he doesn't necessarily agree with them. But the Order comes along and stops him from torturing her, even if they didn't know it!
AND THE SNETH AT THE END. That is also really dangerous! If they ever got caught the consequences wouldn't be good! I can definitely feel that desperation, and there was a breathlessness to that scene that I really loved. They're so sweet together, even if they aren't overly romantic, and I just love how genuine and realistic they feel! It's really natural and fun to read!
This chapter was amazing. I love your interpretation of JKR's characters, and of course I love Beth, too. She feels like a natural part of the story and I could definitely see her as a character in JKR's plot! Wonderful work, as always! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked this chapter! I'm very fond of it as well, and it does mark a turning point in Severus and Beth's relationship, however minute. It's sort of the first time where the two of them actually acknowledge, without words, that there IS something between the two of them, and that they're going to maybe try and figure it out. He reacts to her differently than he reacts to most other people in his life.
Haha, Malfoy gets in my nerves too, don't worry! Draco is all right (though I'm still not a huge fan), but he doesn't even come close to holding a candle to the arrogance and prejudices of his father. Writing Lucius in this and getting to explore that side of the Malfoy family was actually a lot of fun, and quite interesting. :)
Severus is quite interesting in that he didn't grow up with the bigoted ideals of many other pureblood fanatics -- he had to adopt them, and I take that to mean that sometimes his childhood teachings would have taken precedence, like in the scene with the Muggle woman in the middle of the street. He's very internally conflicted. And it /is/ a dangerous game that he's playing, but he plays it very well!
SNETH. ♥ Gah, I'm so into my own pairing, it's a bit ridiculous. They're... real, I suppose, in my head, at the risk of sounding a bit screwy. :P
Thank you so much for reviewing again, Cassie! ♥ I'm so glad you're enjoying it, and that you're enjoying Beth's part in it, too. You're amazing! Report Review
Wow, I really loved this one-shot! It was so sweet and you did such a wonderful job with it! I could feel the range of Narcissa's emotions, and how important this day was to her family, without anything seem over the top of melodramatic. I could picture her sitting in her room, worrying, and missing her true love. I was wondering how the story would end, and I was really surprised but definitely happy that Narcissa found out her husband to be was actually Lucius! I could tell how much they genuinely loved each other, which isn't something I've read a lot in stories on the archives, so that was really sweet and refreshing! The story flowed really well and I didn't see any grammar mistakes or anything like that. This was really wonderful! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Thank you SO much for taking the time to read and review this, dear, and I apologize for the ridiculous amount of time it has taken me to respond to your wonderful review! I'm SO glad that you enjoyed this, and that it didn't seem over-the-top or melodramatic. And I owe the no grammar mistakes to my amazing beta! I'll pass along the compliment! :)
Thank you SO MUCH! ♥
~Jayde Report Review
I'm sorry it's been so long, but I'm back to read and review some more of your wonderful work! I really love this story, and love getting a deeper look into all the characters, so it was a real treat to see into Sirius's head a little bit after he finally understands that Sneth is a thing (and thank goodness it is!). I do feel bad for him though, because he probably is really angry at himself for yelling at Beth like he did.
The conversation between Sirius and James was brilliant! Absolutely brilliant. Of all the times it's just been the two of them talking, I think this time was my favorite. It just summed them up so well, because you can tell that they see each other as brothers, and there's a lot of genuine emotion there, but they can still tease each other and have fun. And of course Sirius is now Harry's godfather which was such a great scene! I love how excited he is! :)
The end of this chapter really made my heart go out to him, though. I can feel how bitter and sad and confused Sirius is, and wish that I could magically give him a girl to be happy with! Hopefully when he makes things better with his friends things will start to work out before the war gets worse!
This story is amazing, and I love how in depth you get with the characters! This is some really phenomenal writing, and I can't wait to read more! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: No need to apologize, Cassie! I'm sorry it's taken me SO long to respond to this review in the first place -- but you have absolutely no obligation to return, and it makes me happy that you did at all!
He's probably a bit angry with himself at this point, you're quite right. I think he often does a lot of things on impulse, or at least he strikes me as being a bit impulsive. I'm glad you liked his conversation with James, though! I like writing scenes like that because it makes it more apparent that not everything was smiles and roses in that friendship; there is tension, there are fights. It's real, in short.
I'm not sure why Sirius never is involved in a relationship as far as we know in canon... but I almost feel he's too large in personality to settle down. Does that make sense? I can't picture Sirius in a relationship at all!
Thanks so much for returning and reviewing this again for me, Cassie. I've truly and honestly missed your lovely comments. ♥ And I hope to see you back around here soon! Report Review
Sam this story is so good! And Simon is so scary!!! You've done a fabulous job with those characters, and I can't wait to read more! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Simon is terrifying, I love it. :P
Thank you so much!
Sam. Report Review
OH MY GOSH TEDDY'S ALIVE. I wasn't expecting that at all! I need to read more. 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: He is! Teddy was my biggest plot twist! :D
Thank you for leaving a review.
Sam. Report Review
I'm really intrigued by this! You've done a fantastic job of stringing along little details and plot points so we don't get the full story right away. Great job so far! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Mysteries are my thing. Haha. ;)
Thank you for reviewing.
Sam. Report Review
So this was an amazing first chapter!im already sucked into this story! I can't wait for more, so I'm off to read the next chapter! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey, Cassie.
Thank you so much. I hope you like the rest of the story!
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I'm back again!
This chapter was wonderful! You do a fantastic job writing JKR's characters and keeping them in canon! Flint is really weird and kind of creepy, and I was worried he was going to do something, but Astoria is too smart for him. And you wrote Harry and Ron's conversation so well! I loved the portraits, and I hope they'll be in the story again later! Draco and Harry's conversation was brilliant, too. This story is just fantastic! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello, again!
I try really hard to keep my characters in canon, so I'm really happy that you thought they were. You're not really meant to like Flint, so I guess I did well with him. If you like Astoria, she'll be around throughout most of the story!
Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
I really enjoyed this chapter, and think you write Draco and Astoria really well! They're interesting together, because you can tell the really love each other, but their relationship isn't overly romantic or touchy-feely or anything like that. But I think it really fits who they are and how they were raised. The end of this chapter was really intense! I hope Hermione is ok! I can't wait to find out more! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hi, Cassie!
I'm really, really pleased that you like Draco and Astoria! Over the course of writing this, they became two of my favorite characters. They're both products of their upbringing, although the war changed Draco in some important ways. I hope he continues to make sense.
Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Hello!I really enjoyed this one-shot! I thought it was really fun and playful, and you did a good job writing the pranks that James pulled and the revenge from Lily! I would hate to be on her bad side! The story flowed really well, and your pacing was great. I also loved how you wrote James, because his character was just so believable for a fourteen year old boy! Haha. But poor Lily! His pranks were pretty harsh! I would hate getting covered in honey, feathers, and paint all at once! This was a really great one-shot! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: I feel bad for responding to this so late and when I say that I feel horrible, I mean that quite literally. I'm kind of sick at the moment.
Anyway, I'm glad that you enjoyed it and I thought I would have trouble coming up with pranks but they just flowed out. I enjoyed putting Lily through that torture.
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I thought this chapter was really great! I loved Harry's class that he taught, and think it's awesome that he doesn't want the students to call him Mr. Potter! I can definitely picture him beating six people in a duel, too! And I thought you did a wonderful job showing the seriousness of being ignorant of someone like Voldemort, and how it can have really dangerous consequences! I can't wait to read more! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hi!
Harry is all grown up in this story, but in a very grandfatherly sort of way. I tend to thing of him as somebody who had enough of being an adult before he turned 18 to last a lifetime, so he does his best to avoid acting like one when he can.
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This was a really packed, really wonderful chapter. I loved getting to see the trial after Ginny's death, and learning what really happened to both Ginny and her killer. I really wouldn't suspect Percy, though! That was a really shocking moment, but also really tough, because you want to sympathize with hi, but at the same time he did kill someone. But I agree with Harry that he's not a killer. And the end of this chapter was definitely my favorite part! I loved the talking portraits, and how they had a conversation at the end after Harry left the room. Their characters are perfect! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hi, there!
Nobody suspected Percy, and I'm actually not sure whether that made it easier or harder for him to accept what he'd done. He is not, by his nature, a killer. Harry more or less hit the nail on the head with his alternative explanation.
I loved the idea of the talking portraits in the books, and I always felt like they could have been used a lot more. So I made a point of including them in this story. I'm really glad the characters sounded right to you.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
GABBIE THIS CHAPTER WAS SO BRILLIANT. IT WAS SO, SO, SO INCREDIBLE!!! And we finally got to see Ben! You know how long I've been looking forward to that, so the fact that it finally happened was amazing! Of course he hasn't changed a bit, and is just as creepy as usual! Haha. But it's really interesting to see him as more of an adult, because the kids are all so much younger than he is.
He and Scorpious are really interesting together! I love the way you have their relationship, because it's so believable, and you can tell that they're brothers right away, all from how they treat each other. It's good that Scorpious apologized, too, because I think he'll feel better now that Ben isn't as mad at him anymore. And maybe his sister will stop calling him a git ;)
And of course it was great to see Roxie again! I love how she's becoming a more prominent character in this story, because she can help the kids, but also watch out for them so they don't get into too much trouble! She and Ben are so funny together, now that they're actually dating! They still tease each other just like always, but you can also tell that they really care for each other.
And they got the password! Woohoo! And IT WAS CACTUS AND THAT REMINDS ZABINI OF HIS WIFE AND BLAISE CALLS ASTORIA A CACTUS SO THAT MEANS SHE'S HIS WIFE SO BLASTORIA HAPPENS! Please, please, please let me be right and have Blastoria happen! Now that my fangirling is out of the way...
I can't wait to see what happens now that they have the password to Zabini's office and know where his room is! I have a feeling that things aren't going to be anything like the trio are expecting them to be! And I hope that they aren't in way over their heads! (but they probably are... Oh gosh)
This chapter was phenomenal and you did a fantastic job with it!!! I can't wait for more of this story! (and your others too, of course!) 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello!
First of all, thank you for always coming back to these stories. I swear that you're one of the only people who reads all of my work AND leaves me a review, I adore you. HAHAHA.
So you got to see Ben and I'm GLAD that you loved it! I had so much fun writing him from the children's POV, he's changed a tad but well, he is sort of creepy. Perhaps even more so because Albus has a crazy imagination. HAHAHA.
I think Scorpious is going to be just like Ben with a little more polish when he grows up. Its going to be scary but you could see the contrast between them, right? I wanted to make it seem as if they were brothers and that they loved one another regardless.
Hehee. Roxie is great and you'll see her again sometime down the line but I love her and Ben, they were great to write. They're a really sweet couple and I had fun playing with them, I think they'll be more like George and Angie down the road. Lord help us all, right? Hahaah.
HAHAHAH. I thought you would pick up on the password too! Blastoria actually DOES happen but not in the way you might think.
Just wait until I start updating for A Force of Wills for you. >:D
Things will not go smoothly for the Misfits, I will say that now but its going to be a fun thing to read and write I hope! I'll try to be updating soon, its going to take a while to get back into the swing of things and I'll be busy but anyway, thanks so much!
Can't wait to catch up on all your wonderful work too! ;)
Louis, I'm coming! :D
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Wow, this was really good! I thought you did an amazing job going back and forth between 1999 and 1972, and that you tied the two plot lines together really nicely. I loved how gradually you let us find out what Narcissa did, and how Poppy and Andromeda were involved. I especially loved the twist at the end! I wasn't expecting that at all! But it was sad that Andromeda died, because she seemed so sweet! This really was a great one-shot! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey Cassie! :D
Thanks so much for reviewing! Thank you; I was worried the toing and froing between '72 and '99 might be confusing instead of mysterious so it was great to hear that you thought it was amazing! :D
And I know! But if you think about it, if this one-shot was canon then the "Andromeda" that Harry met in the books was actually Poppy! ;)
Thanks so much for stopping by! ♥ Report Review
Hi Gabbie! I wanted to get this review in before you left, so I'm glad that I got some time for it, since I don't think I'll have time to review Albus before you go :( But it will be waiting for you when you get a chance to get back! :)
So, of course, I adored this! Draco is just so creepy, but I love it! You write him so well, it really gives me the shivers!!! I would hate to have him after me like that, and I would definitely not be able to stay as composed as Astoria seems to, even if she's horrified on the inside!
I really loved Draco's converation with Pansy, too. I think everyone automatically doesn't like her, and it was really interesting to see a softer side of her, with her own insecurities and worries for her future, and meeting the expectations of Pureblood society. It was really fascinating!
And of course I thought George and Angie were hilarious! For everything that Draco wants to do to Stori, he still gets uncomfortable around the pair of them flirting so outrageously! That was really funny, and added some lightness to the story that I really thought was fantastic!
This story was brilliant, and I'll definitely read and review Albus for you, even if you don't get a chance to see it for a while, and will have updates waiting for you when you get back! And I will definitely be rereading your stories and wishing I could review more than once! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello!
Oh, Cassie, this is the nicest thing! I almost burst into tears becuase I was so happy to see your review. :D
It will be nice to get your review later for Albus and I'll get to it whenever I can. :D
As for this story, Draco Malfoy is back and he's as creepy as ever. I wanted to have fun with his character and play with all of his weirdo emotions and I'm with you, I would not want this creep following me or lusting after me.
Astoria hates him very much and she has to stay as strong as she can, even when it seems like she's about to cry. HAHAH.
I think everyone does assume that Pansy is just another mean girl but when I'm sure that she was just as insecure and nervous as anyone else. Of course, that's no excuse for her being a horrid bully but she is just another girl and the contrast between her and Astoria is made clear with Draco's interaction with her and their place in pureblood society. ;)
But he doesn't want her you know!
Bwhaha, George and Angie had to make an appearance in this. They'd already shown up in "Monsters in the Dark" briefly but I thought it'd be funny to have them show up again for this one-shot. If you were wondering, they'd been swimming naked in the Black Lake, giving birth to that rumor that Angie has a mole and that Fred thought they'd done the dirty. HAHAHA.
I think humor and angst work wonderfully well, which is why I had to include some funny moments. ;)
Wagh, I wish I could respond to your review for Albus now! D': But thanks so much for all that you do and have done when it comes to my stories, you're simply the best.
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GABBIE HIS WAS SO GOOD. OH MY GOODNESS GRACIOUS THIS CHAPTER. I CAN'T GET OVER THE FEELS. HONESTLY I JUST ADORED EVERY SINGLE BIT OF IT AND JUST DEVOURED THIS CHAPTER BECAUSE IT WAS SO AMAZING.
Astoria's father is really scary!!! I don't know how you manage to write him so well, because his character is so layers and mysterious and tricky, but he gave me chills! I don't know how someone could be that cruel to their own daughter! He makes Dezzy's father look lovely! Their conversation was terrifying, because he was just so nonchalant about what was going to happen to her, and I thought for a moment that he would kill either Stori or Blaise, just to spite her! I'm really glad he didn't hurt Stori, but I can't say the same thing for Blaise yet, and that makes me really nervous!!!
And whatever she agreed to... I have a sneaking suspicion it has to do with Draco and that also makes me nervous! She's going to have him to deal with when she goes back to school...
And SO MUCH BLASTORIA AT THE END OF THE CHAPTER. IT WAS AMAZING. I LOVE THEM.
You were so sweet for dedicating this chapter to me! Good luck with everything during your hiatus, and I hope to hear from you every once and a while if you can ever get back to the forums or the archives! Your writing is fabulous, and you've been so wonderful as the only person on here to review everything I've written! I'll really miss you my dear! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello! D':
Waagh, Cassie this is the last review that I might get from you and it makes me really sad, I'm going to miss you!
I'm really glad that you enjoyed this chapter, it took me ages to write it. I think I went through at least five or six different versions of this and none of them stuck. One draft was even of Astoria confessing to all her secrets to a half naked Blaise! You can only imagine how that one didn't work out...
Maximus Greengrass is perhaps the hardest character to write. I didn't want to write him as overly cruel so I settled on something more calculating and subtle. He did turn out to be really scary though and I had to pause every so often because he's just so complex! I think he looks at all of his children as a business arrangement, he's always one step ahead of each of them and its sort of creepy.
I think Astoria would switch places with Dezzy in a heartbeat. Hahahaa. Oh, yes, their conversation was horrible but it was the easiest part of this chapter to write because I'd already had it in my mind for months. It felt great to finally let it out! :D
You weren't really sure what he was going to do since he appeared so casual and at ease and I think that's what disturbed me the most. A very awful person can sit there and bargain, threaten and hurt their own child you know. D':
I do believe that Maximus wanted to hurt Astoria but she was able to show no fear and bargain with him. Plus, there's something from her that he needs done and as for Blaise, well, he has plans for him too. D':
Bwhaha, whatever Astoria agreed to is foul indeed and most likely does involve Draco, it is not going to be pleasant when she gets back to school. >:D
So much Blastoria! I was saving that last little section for you! I knew that you would love that and went, "Yep. Cassie Potter will really enjoy this!" and I'm glad that you did. :D
I would dedicate the entire story to you since you're literally the only constant reviewer I have for this story! Hahahhaa.
I will be popping back as much as I can during my hiatus and I hope to keep updating for you!
I'm going to miss all of your stories, I think you're a fabulous writer. :) Never stop doing it!
Thank you so much for being so kind and reading all of my stories, it means so much.
I think there's a Draco Malfoy one-shot that's just begging for some love. ;)
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