Hello! This is the first review I've left in months thanks to rubbish RL stuff going on, so I apologise if it's not very good :/
Anyway, now that I've figured out how to translate all the anti-shipping words I really enjoyed this chapter! It's a great idea for a story and I love your OC Darcy (I'm assuming she's the daughter of Dirk Cresswell?). She doesn't seem at all cliched and is an interesting person to read about. And i have to say, I always really enjoy the next-gens that aren't set in Hogwarts. :D
It was a really fantastic first chapter and you've got great humour skills but without making it sound too over-the-top and forced. It's a much more subtle kind of comedy that just gives everything a light, easy-read feel.
Darcy's job sounds really cool as well! Certainly unusual.
I really enjoyed reading that!
-LWGAuthor's Response: Hah, I pity you for tagging me during the April Fool's prank. But I'm glad you liked the story!
Darcy is actually Dirk Cresswell's granddaughter. Kudos to you for picking up on the canon reference before I mention it later in the story! It's lovely that she doesn't seem cliche or Sueish and that you like reading about her post-graduation life.
Oh, I'm so pleased that you like the humor! I don't think of myself as a very good humor writer because I can't seem to get that zany, wild, over-the-top humor that seems to pervade a lot of next-gen stories. I'm happy to hear that you like my subtle style better.
Thanks for your sweet review! Hope to see you back again sometime soon!
-Amanda Report Review
ARGH SUCH A GOOD CHAPTER. It was literally so exciting, I couldn't stop reading! I can't wait till you put up the next one with the fight and the crazy counsellor ;D James seemed to act a bit harshly, especially after giving Esmie such an amazing present! NOO! :( I want them to be together forever :3 Aww loved it xxxAuthor's Response: ahhah, I was writing it and just thinking wahhh!! How can I do this to her!?!? x Love you x Report Review
HURRO :3 So I love this chapter, as usual :p
'I’m not that fat…not yet anyway.' Makes it seem like she's pregnant ;D
' God Rose why do you have to be so aggy all the time?' Do you mean angry or angsty? Or did you just invent a new word to describe Rose Weasley? :D Rose is being so mean! Poor Esmie :(
LLAMARMY YAY xxxAuthor's Response: haha yay Rhiannon, no she is deffinitely not pregnant, she just eats a lot of chocolate! I know Rose is so aggy/angsty :( x Report Review
Hiya! Sorry I'm so late with getting back to you with this review - life is very busy at the moment! I've been feeling really guilty, sorry. D:
But anyway, this is looking good! I already like Tiffany; I have a soft-spot for troublemaker characters to be honest. But just make sure it doesn't become a little cliched? I like the plot twist where one of the Professors is her cousin, that's a really nice idea.
There are quite a lot of characters introduced in this chapter, which actually works rather well and helps the flow along. I got a little confused about the plot at times, but I can get the main idea: Albus and Tiffany are going on some sort of exchange. I've read lots of transfer fics but not an exchange one, so that was nice.
Just be careful about the 'voice' of your narrator if that makes sense; you want to make sur your main character is well-rounded and depthy, so perhaps tone down the things like *Sarcasm alert.. Sarcasm alert* I know you only do that once but now and then Tiff can sound a little... phony?
But apart from that, this was a really enjoyable read!
Again, sorry about lateness of review. :/ Good luck with the rest of the story!
-LWGAuthor's Response: Hi! I'm sorry about the huge delay in response.. I usually respond when I first see a review, but I was an my phone and I can't reply with that etc.
Thank you :) She's like the opposite of me, although she's probably the reason why she's the opposite.. I think I channel alot of my aggression and evil through her, aha ;)
Yeah when I was first writing it, my friend was all like: 'Julia, be careful that doesn't seem like he's her boyfriend or something' as I hadn't immeadiatly put in he was her cousin...
Yeah, this is total new ground for me.. I've never moved schools or anything, and most of the girls from my primary school go to my secondary school, so I've never had to turn up half-way through the year at a place where I don't know anyone...
Mmm, I'll try to tone it down a bit :?
Thank you! Tis fine hun :) Thank you! And you with your stories! xx Report Review
After reading the description I just had to review this story, and I'm VERY glad I did! This has made my whole day better, it was just THAT CUTE. I MIGHT DIE FROM HOW ADORABLE THIS WAS. I nee dto give Louis a few virtual hugs through the computer screen -hugs screen-.
The distinction you created between the three children - Dom, Louis and Victoire - was actually incredibly good, especially as you were narrating as a three-year-old. Each of them had a very obvious character and it was really lovely to read as well as very funny and did I mention ADORABLE? You captured the tone of a toddler so well!
And Victoire tried to send Louis to Santa via owl?! Oh that's just genius.
-Annon :)Author's Response: GO, HUG LOUIS! IT'S GOOD FOR THE SOUL!
You may have mentioned adorable, yes...
And yes, Victoire did try to send poor Louis by owl.
THANK YOU FOR THIS REVIEW :) Report Review
Hey! It's been a bit like forever since I came over to your lovely author's page, so I'm very grateful to the review swap for prompting me into it, because I have definitely missed your writing laura! I can't really explain it but it's like a soothing balm to the soul, the way you phrase your sentences, and I felt so very peaceful while reading this. I've had a stressful week and this... this just calmed me right down. So thank you!
Well... that was at the beginning. But as we move on in the story it becomes less peaceful and more gripping, intriguing. It's a very interesting idea what you have here, and I love the way you've written Gilderoy. He seems pretty confused for a large chunk of the chapter, and then I REALLY wasn't expecting the mysterious companion to be... well, who he was! Such an unusual pairing- I really like it!
I think this is an amazing piece of writing. So subtle and fluid and powerful --and of course peaceful :P-- all at the same time. It's the kind of writing I could embroider on a pillow :D
-Annon xxAuthor's Response: Hey there! Thanks so much for stopping by, Annon! I know - it's been a while, it's kinda weird, lol. Gah, thanks so much! I'm so glad it calmed you down - apart from the fact that it's never nice to be stressed, the whole piece is supposed to be kinda dreamy, so I'm so glad that came through :) At least, for now... lol.
Thank you so much - although I can't really claim the credit for the idea itself, since that was given to me by a couple of challenges which I combined, I just wrote... well, this. Yeah, he's very confused. He kinda knows things, but has no idea what they mean or anything, so it's pretty fun to write. And haha, yeah, it is kinda weird - but they are about the same age, apparently, so it could have been... who knows? :P
Wow, thank you so so much for that! And thank you for this wonderful, wonderful review! I could embroider this on a pillow :)
Aph xx Report Review
Ahh the phrasing of this was so beautiful! I thought that beginning each paragraph with 'last night' could possibly get a bit boring/repetitive, but no, it was a lovely effect to use. It made the whole piece seem really poetic and ugh just gorgeous. I do have a special little place in my heart for Snily, I must admit, especially ones this lovely. Also loving the whole sailing metaphors/references :3
BUT SO MANY METAPHORS IN THIS. I am in heaven. I love them. I want to absorb them all. So dainty and poignant and I'm very glad that I had the opportunity to read this. :)
-Annon Report Review
Hahaha, ok, wow. This was so great, there is literally a huge great grin plastered across my face right now. The entire thing was just... ack, so good!! I'm reminded a little bit of Marina's 'Just Rose' but from a less creepy Scorpius's point of view. I'm still trying to figure out Scorpius to be honest; the problem (well it's not really a problem) is that I can sense so much of /you/ in this story, particularly the sections with Draco and Astoria and the 'dysfunctional family' scenes. I'm sort of muddling up you and Scorpius. :L
But I do love the attention to detail you always have in your stories; it's amazing really, how well you can make the words jump off the paper at me. in this chapter, I think it was Lottie's dubious coffee-making ability that really made the whole thing so realistic and imaginable. Love it.
I've been looking forward to reading this ever since you said that you were writing ScoRose for NaNo, and i was definitely not disappointed by it! But then again, I was never expecting to be ;)
xx Report Review
This is such a lovely story, I adored reading all the Audrey-Tracey interaction. You've written their single mother-daughter relationship so accurately, I can picture it all as if it were a movie. I particularly love the scene where Audrey is too close to the TV- I remember that happening so much when I was little, haha!
When I saw that this was a pregnancy story, and that some of the chapters were from Theo Nott's point of view, I sort of automatically assumed that Tracey would be pregnant in the story and that Theo was the father - I thought it would be all a bit cliched. However, I was very happily mistaken! I love the fact that Audrey is a character of her own (and an extremely adorable one at that! :p).
It was quite a long first chapter but it served as a very good scene-setter and was enjoyable to read, too! But I wonder why Theo would invite her to lunch so.. bluntly, and quickly too!? Seems like an interesting plot point.
I like that you used Tracey Davis for one of your MCs too, because while she IS a canon character, she's very unknown and that leaves lots of room for developments!
:)Author's Response: Aw this review makes me so happy! I'm so glad you felt I wrote the single mother/daughter realtionship well as I dont have any kids of my own so i'm just making this all up as I go. I'm so glad that you were happily mistaken and that this is not a pregnancy story between Tracey and Theo. And the fact that you recognize Tracey as canon makes my heart so happy! There are a lot of people who think she is just some oc I've made up and then I have to explain that she isn't so i love when people know who she is! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm so glad you liked it!
~Slytherinchica08~ Report Review
Wow i love it so so so much! It's amazing! I love this bit:
' After spending most of my summer either in my bedroom or sitting in a field so much human contact was going to be a shock to the system.'
Allie is so great. And she's a tree! ;D Woohoo! Can't wait for chapter 2.
Also, email this chapter to me and i'll beta it for you
xxxAuthor's Response: yay thanks Rhiannon, haven't even really started chapter two yet though *guilty face* just don't know what to write, I have some ideas but havent sorted it all out yet xxx Report Review
Really good!! I like the dream bit too - it worked well after all :D (and thank for the mention love you xxx)Author's Response: ahh Rhiannon thankyou! love you lots like jelly tots! x Report Review
Here from review tag!!
It's a bit of a funny coincidence that I'm reading a Halloween-type fic when it is in fact Halloween today (if you believe in that sort of thing. I personally don't believe in Halloween, but anyway...).
I liked the way you wrote Sirius - his anger and pain was so realistic and you could really feel all the emotion in this piece. It was very well written, and you didn't let all the strong feelings distract you from characterising Sirius realistically, and neither did you write these huge angst-y long paragraphs. It was a lovely mix.
I could imagine the scene so well, which means your descriptions were great!
A really interesting, lovely read. :)
-LWGAuthor's Response: Hi and thanks for the review! =)
It's not coincidence, it's fate. =P Well really, I'm glad you liked it and my Sirius. I'm not very good with angsty stuff, so that might explain why there's not long parts of that. Report Review
YES HAPPY BIRTHDAY QUOTH THE RAVEN INDEED :D
Ah Lottie you've totally outdone yourself with this - it's absolutely amazing! You must've put so much effort into it as well. I feel so lazy now :P
But wow, this was such an original idea! I love stories about really minor characters - and I always thought it would be really interesting to know more about Muriel and her past etc, but this is so great!
Those children of yours are balding you!”
“That would be age, Muriel, it’s come to you too.”
AHHAHAHAHA. god bless Arthur Weasley!
Crikey, Muriel doesn't want to go to that nursing home though does she?! This sort of reminded me of "Talking Heads" by Alan Bennett except funnier and backwards...
Anyway. This was amazing. xoxoxAuthor's Response: QTR FOR THE WIN 8D
Ahha thank you so much Annon! It was originally intended as a shortish one-shot but... it mutated, as my writing is apt to do once it sees my author page and decides it likes being there :P
Aww thankyou! lol Muriel's just fab, the old bat that she is, and you know how much of a sucker I am too for minor characters ;)
bahah ARTHUR IS SO FAB. At least, Arthur-in-my-head speaks these lines to me ♥
ahha yeah, Muriel is very set on not going to Ogden's. She will fight tooth and nail to NOT GO. And thank you! oooh I feel very flattered :3
Aww thankyou! And thanks for such a lovely review :D xoxox Report Review
Um, ok, in my last review I meant 'cute' not 'cut' but... darn typos!!
But this was so funny, and I remember you saying what the eventual pairing for this would be so all I'm gonna say is..
YAY FOR JAMES!
Your characters are really realistic and funny and loveable! this is just so great
Rhiannon xxxAuthor's Response: again ahh thanks Rhiannon love you Report Review
BETH YOU SMELL.
AWWW THAT IS JUST SO CUT BETH. YOU ARE AMAZING. ESMIE IS AMAZING. BUT YOU ARE MORE AMAZING.
xoxoxAuthor's Response: Ahh thanks Rhiannon Report Review
Aww I loved this chapter! I was quite sad to discover the dynamics of Pippa and Damien's relationship though - Pippa could've done without her brother abandoning her I have to say. Poor girl.
Cassie's description of Harper was just brilliant. "She's a hufflepuff and she has hair." Oh, wow. The thing that make this such a great story is the mixture of humour and angst - it's so fab. And, of course, Pippa's character.
Scorpius is indeed Awesome.
-LWGAuthor's Response: Hello! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! Yes! But Damien will never see it like that, he just saw it as growing up, and you know how older siblings can be, having their youngest siblings around them can seem uncool. Haha, yes, description is a skill that Cassie doesn't really have. Thank you, I do try to mix it up a little :) and I'm glad you like her character :) and I love Scorpius, how could you not :P thanks so much for the review, I hope you like the rest of the story and I hope you have an amazing day! Xx Report Review
"so that she was practically galloping beside me on her shorter legs." THE FUNNIEST MENTAL IMAGES EVER. Meh, I have missed Pepper. I can't wait to get on to reading your newest chapter *rubs hands gleefully*. Anyway, this was an amazing chapter as usual lottie and I'm super-jealous of your insane humour writing skills :P
I am a Hugepper shipper. It is my new OTP.
OH WAIT HANG ON ACTUALLY IT'S HTOS&CC/ME 8D
Life is good.
*runs off to Gretna Green/Las Vegas with this story to marry it and live happily ever after*Author's Response: ahha thankyou!! I am very glad that she has not disappointed on return, I know that I get annoyed at my mental Pepper sometimes ;P Hehehe thankyou so much! I am very glad that my weird randomness is amusing in story form :D
Hugepper?! Oh my gosh, please no D:
Wait HTOS&CC/ANNON IS WAY COOLER. Can I be the person who marries you two?
Haha thankyou for such a lovely review - it really keeps me going! :D Report Review
Hi! I was so happy to get your review on 'Against the Dying of the Light' so I'm here to return the favour. ;D
Basically, this is a fabulously funny story and I really enjoyed reading this chapter! I'm not really a fan of Oliver/OC but I recently read Mistress's amazing one and am definitely warming to the ship now. :) One thing I'm really happy that you've done is the way Kiwi isn't on the Quidditch team with Oliver - it's her friend. I like those sort of ambiguous almost-accidental-meeting sort of relationships if that makes sense :P
Aww I love the nicknames Cat and Kiwi by the way, they're really cute and seem to suit the characters so well!
You've done a really good job with this - the fluff is gorgeous :3
I hope you have a nice day!
~Annon xAuthor's Response: Ah, coming from you, this means a lot.
Mistress' Oliver/Jane is amazing.
I did have a nice day, but your review made it better! :) Report Review
Thank you so much for reviewing my story, I'm here to return the favour! ;)
Wow, this was amazing. Seriously /such/ a good beginning to a Marauder's and so original too! Not very canon-compliant because James did actually fancy Lily but seriously no-one would care about that because it's so fantastically written! I was laughing so much as well, lol!
"The fiend girl had my mother in her clutches! I must rescue her!" Awww what a little mummy's boy! James was so cute in parts of this.
I really like the way you've set things out too - the occasional one-line paragraphs and things. Usually I'd think this interrupted the flow a little but it didn't here.
Anyway, a very interesting take on Lily and James's relationship! I loved it :)Author's Response: Hello there!
Intrinsically it is canon because he's just trying to hide the fact that he's head over heels with her :P but that'll become more apparent throughout the story! :P
He was a sweetie :P But I only made him that way because he's telling the story and he wants to be seen as chivalrous and all that :P i don't know if you've noticed (yet) but a lot of it is twisted to suit his point of view :P so just be conscious of that if you're reading the next few chapters! (once they've been posted!)
Thanks a lot for your review! I really love YOUR story! Just telling you again! :P Report Review
Crikey! This was pretty intense, and god, the moments with Daphne were heart-wrenching. Does she have PTSD? I really want to find out more about her condition, whatever she has, and what caused it. It must be such a terrible for Astoria to have to deal with - a constant reminder of everything the war took away, damaged.
Astoria seems so lost, really, that's the only way I can think of describing her. The fact that she didn't want to have a day off work because she had nowhere else to really go really pulled at me, I felt so awful for her. But Christian seems nice - he evidently cares about Astoria a lot. He seemed like a great co-worker I have to say :)
It was all so well-written and captivating, now I just want to see a little more of the plot snaking in!
This is such a brilliant story, I really hope you keep on with it! You have a real talent :D
~annon Report Review
Ee I absolutely adore draco/astoria, so I was pretty excited to click on this story, and definitely enjoyed reading it.
This was very much a prologue, and a fab one at that! Lots of setting the scene, and the hint of a real mystery and great stuff to come.
I like stories about the post-war situations, dealing with the aftermath and all that, the scars left behind. They can be quite distressing - and especially that line about Daphne "losing all sense of herself" in St Mungo's seemed to convey this - but also extraordinarily interesting. I like seeing how different authors would interpret it.
Astoria seems interesting - obviously we haven't had much of a chance to get to know her yet, but I like what I've already seen.
A compelling story, I have to say :) Report Review
For some reason, I’ve never been a fan of song fics. I can’t quite pinpoint what it is, but I suspect that it’s the random lyrics threaded through the story- they really break up the flow for me – and unless I can hear the tune in my head, they make no sense either. :P
However, I actually had a great time reading this. I love the song you chose (it worked so well with the plot), and I’m always going to be thinking of this story if I listen to it from now on!
I liked the way you wrote Snape. You managed to capture all his yearning and love and regrets all into one neat little package, and the overall effect was really quite powerful. The imagery and metaphors were fantastic.
My heart goes out to Severus, as it always does when reading Snape/Lily. There’s something so pathetic and yet loveable about the tragedy that is Snily. This was a very heartbreaking piece of writing!
One thing I’d just comment on is that I don’t think the dialogue between Snape and Dumbledore at the end is necessary! The story is really great without it, and you don’t need it in there.
I’ve had so much fun reading all your stories! You are a truly talented writer. :D Thank you for all your commitment to Ravenclaw and Quoth the Raven *hugs*
-Annon ♥ Report Review
This was a really nice take on Remus and Tonks’ relationship- I enjoyed it immensely! I especially liked the flashbacks on Remus’s past relationship. It made his excuse for staying way from Tonks a lot more believable and solid. I honestly can’t believe how terrible and heartbreaking that little side-story was! On their honeymoon?! SO sad! :( If you hadn’t written it so nicely, I’d have thought it was a little too dramatic/over the top, but it definitely worked.
One thing I’m a little puzzled about was wouldn’t Remus have been arrested for killing the girl he loved? (I’m assuming he confessed because it seemed as though her parents knew he’d done it from the ‘look of disguts’ upon their faces.). Even though he’s a werewolf, he still murdered someone…
‘I still hadn’t forgotten the incident.’ –haha I’d imagine no-one could ever forget about the time they killed their new wife.
‘I loved Tonks with all the half of my heart that was still intact’ – so this made me cry.
I really love the idea for this, and it was fabulously descriptive and able to evoke a lot of clashing emotions inside me as all your writing seems to do lottie :). The ending was very sweet and lovely and made me feel all fuzzy!
(the quote was perfect)
-Annon ♥ Report Review
Whoa. So this was quite different to your other stuff that I’ve read, but gosh, it was so good!
It was actually a little confusing at the beginning, but that confusion really added to the creepy/mysterious tone of the whole story so it wasn’t a negative point at all!
I like the theme of fear. It’s more of a classic ‘monsters in the woods’ fear but those fears are really not to be underestimated. Especially if the monsters are real ones. My heart was beating so fast while I read this, until I finally got to the end things were explained. I know that sometimes the ‘I woke up and it was all a dream’ ending is not preferable, but it seemed to work here.
I wonder why you chose James in particular to be the main character? Was that a deliberate choice, or random? Just fascinated ;)
I enjoyed the drama in this piece! And, as always, it was extremely well written.
-Annon ♥ Report Review
Oh my gosh! I don’t know what to say :’) This is wonderful. Seriously.
Somehow, you manage to make Terry Boot sound like an insane creeper, but also really adorable and loveable at the same time! It’s quite mind boggling really and I’m not sure how you did it, but I completely loved it!
He’s been ‘observing’ her for four years. Not stalking. Of course not. :P
Aw, I was so sad when Cedric beat him to asking Cho out, but honestly Cho didn’t seem very nice in this so I think Terry deserves better, haha! But gosh, this just played out so beautifully in my mind, like a theatre production or something. It was so funny.
It was a nice, uncomplicated plotline too- if you’d tried to squeeze in any sub-plots or deep meanings or metaphors I think it would’ve taken something away from the pure simplicity and imagery that your writing creates.
I want a terry boot stalker too!
:D ♥Author's Response: Hey Annon!
Ahh thank you! I'm glad the creepiness of stalking/observing wasn't too creepy :P I think part of that may be because I kinda portrayed him very pitifully... haha. I guess I wanted to reader to feel sorry for Terry and get on his side.. but yeah, Terry definitely does deserve better than Cho! I don't think I've ever been that great at expressing emotions in stories, but I'm glad that sadness came through!
Thank you so so much for all your nice comments! You are much too nice! & agreed - as long as the stalker was as nice as Terry! :P
- Charlotte Report Review
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