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Review #1, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Imposter

27th June 2012:
Hi! There I am again! I didnt keep up with this story for the last like 7 chapters uugh I had so much work to do and so on:D Sorry :( I missed this story so much, and Im happy back and I honestly got tears in my of thinking it will be over ! I just can't let go , I have real issues haha :)
Cant wait to read whats next !

Author's Response: haha it's ok! I'm glad you're finally caught up! Thanks for reading and I can't wait for you to read the rest :)

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Review #2, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Love Potion No. 9

24th November 2011:
OH MY GOD SO MANY EMOTIONS! shfiushfdiuhfkxilaufr87wg
Anytime I see your update I freak out :D hahah

MAN AH I HATE SNAPE. Honstely he is not just a dick, like Sirius, James or even Remus can be sometimes, hes just a disgusting little racist.
HAPPY that their friendship is "over" right know ! In my opinion, it should have happend even ealier but well you know that.
Oh my god all the other things were so amazing! It was an up and down of my emotions the entire time ( I even felt sorry for Snape in the beginning not gonna lie) Oh wow just wow my favorite chapter! :)

20/10 !
Can't waaait for another update , put you already update really regularly, so thank you

Author's Response: Haha thank you! Snape is a jerk here, but I'm kind of glad you felt bad for him at first, that was what I was hoping :) Glad you liked this chapter I'll have more up as soon as I can!

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Review #3, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Dangerous

12th November 2011:
YAY ! :)
Honestly, I am so lazy right now when it comes to reading ...I don't read any fanfics or books but I still freak out when you're updating :D
I liked Lily and James conversation and Sirius was hilarious ...
and Snape -.- Well, you know how much I (more than) strongly dislike him. And he was precisely who I imagine him, always contemptuous towards another race (can you say race incase of werewolfs haha :D)
I really wanted to slap Lily in the face here though :“Your friends aren’t exactly a standup crowd either,” Honestly girl? They are not even comparable to group of racist maniacs (it's about time she realized that) stand a bit more up!
I Like that you included Peter :) I kind of like him ( until he becomes a part of the deatheaters of course) ..even more than I like Snape (unpopular opinion :p - though Snape is a bit different in your fanfic, obviously since Lily and Snape weren't even friends anymore at that point)
So I'll stop rambling ..or ranting ;) and yeah...can't wait for another update. Keep up your fantasic work :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! Snape will get continuously more and more like you imagined him in the coming chapters unfortunately. Ha, and Lily's just too nice to outrightly insult his friends :P I like Peter too, though, I think he's a very underrated character in Marauder stories and I wish I did a better job of including him; it's definitely something I'm working on :) Anyways, thanks for reading! i'll have more up soon!

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Review #4, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Let It Be

3rd November 2011:
okay, first there was this thing going on with hpff and then i wrote a long review and hpff didn't wanted to show it now I'm pissed haha :D
so yes, know I will quickly rewrite it , I loved the chapter. I see where Lily's anger about James is coming from but he didn't had a choice^^ maybe he could have said it to Lily before he spoke to his girlfriend. Talking about her, I kind of like Celia now, we'll see.
Also thank you for updating regulary and responding to all your reviews, it really makes reading here on hpff more fun :)

Author's Response: aw thank you! I LOVE reading everyone's reviews and responding to them and I definitely know how frustrating it can be to wait a long time for a new chapter :P But I'm glad you liked it! You'll get to see a bit of a resolution between L & J in the next chapter :) Thanks!

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Review #5, by applecakep.s. i love you: Dreams.

21st October 2011:
Awesome :)
Oh gosh , you're making me fall in love with James really badly ...well, i guess I'm always kinda in love with him :D

I love your Lily she does not have overly dramatic anger issues and in the end it's not weirdly cheesy ( not that I mind that every once in a while but you just kept it really real :) )
Can't wait for an update!

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Review #6, by applecakeStill Delicate: The Contenders

19th October 2011:
Loved it , as always :)
I still like Tom -.- :Dhaha at James he has Voldemorts name, I though that from the begining :D
I really like the banner but thats Karen Gillan isn't it? I can only picture her as Lily Evans :D

Okay :)

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Review #7, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Houston, We Have a Problem

19th October 2011:
Yaay ! Yet another update ? :) no complaints I just didn't expected that :D
Amazing I want to write its my favorite chapter but the last one was as well ;D I just really like your last couple of chaps ;)
I like that we see Lily and james relationship slowly developing and its not like all or nothing either Lilys hates and james and then BAM suddendly she loves him^^
Haha I laughed when Lily though that James is a mystery sometimes , well Lily you give the good boy also quite a tough time :D
Fav line : "He gave me a small smile and my heart skipped a beat.

Houston, we have a problem."

It was both adorable and funny ;)
Can't wait for more and see how thing are when they return...oh oh celia and Snape will react ..although I don't why what kind of "right" Snape would has :S Oh well, James and Snape is a whole mystery for itself :D

Author's Response: hahaha thank you! I'm glad you liked it :) I get really frustrated when a story just has them falling for each other all of a sudden and I wanted to make this a bit more realistic. And I'm glad you liked that line!

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Review #8, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Vulnerability

10th October 2011:
Yes ! FINALLY :D haha :)
Loved that chapters. I really think this is my currently favorite right now :)
Yes I would love to have James POV every once in a while!
okay, sorry, I need to write my essays so see you with the next chapter !
have a great day, bye (:

Author's Response: aw thank you so much! I'm glad you like my story :) I'll have more James's POV and more chapters up soon!

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Review #9, by applecakeRules of Attraction: A Bet is Made

9th October 2011:
AH! I love this ! The banner was amazing and so I thought I'd give this a try! And I really love it. There's something about the writing style that I really like. Like the character portryal that far as well, lets see how you continue that story :)
xoxo

Author's Response: Ah thank you! Yes, the banner is so amazing, I recommend if you're ever over at TDA looking for snazzy art, check out kaileena_sands' gallery, it's ALL SO STUNNING. But yes, it's slightly different from how I normally write, but we'll see how it goes. Thanks so much for the review! I hope you'll stick around for the rest. ;)

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Review #10, by applecakeThis Ends Today: Perspectives

3rd October 2011:
Oh wow, I really love this! This is one of my favorite oneshots of all time :D
All the characters were stop on- it didnt feel weird or out place like it sometimes can be with our canon/main characters because we just know them so well, but this was really good!
I love the feeling this gave me- that all of those people were sad not because they lost a hero or whatever he might be for them- but a good person. At least that was I got from this :P
So again, wonderful ! Thank you

Author's Response: Thank you for such a great compliment. That's really sweet of you. I'm glad the characters didn't seem weird or out of canon.

That's what I was trying to go for, so I'm glad you liked that feel. Obviously, most of the characters knew that Harry was 'The Chosen One' and the one prophesied to defeat Voldemort, but that came second to the fact that he was Harry. They knew and loved Harry the man, not Harry the hero (with the exception of Draco, who didn't like Harry in any form ;))

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #11, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Trust Me

28th September 2011:
Ah I loved this chapter! It seems like forever when I read the last one I just couldn't wait :D I love James POV Its refreshing and from Lilys POV you read about so much hate on James and stuff and that hurts my heart :'D AHHAHA AH I can't wait to read the next chapter, well maybe he will go through her stuff abit, I do that also but with James you dont know how far he'll take it :D
Oh Well back to Snape and that a lot of people comment to you about that well...There a two groups; the one that understood his character and the one who imagine a false version of him (aka MOST of the people)-.- That gets so much on my nerves if can't already tell, but since i love the marauder era I can't get away from him.Oh also to what you said in your last response; well you really find that romantic? Is it romatic that he insulted her, that he hates and has no respect for her believes,or look how he threated petunia when they met and his willingness to let her SON (and husband) die- NEVER came I across a less romantic thing than this . And well I kind of would like to "correct"? you, because it wasn't compelty for lilys sake in the end. The fact that he felt quilty! for her death ( and was angry at Voldemort) were the most important reasons for his change. His love wasn't enough, he surely does love her..but not in a way I would consider romantic WHATEVER( I like your Snape so I enjoy him :D)Well, I kind always sound so angry when taking about Snape , Im sorry...I'm just a discusser ( yes...my friends love me for that ;)..not ) I dont mean it to sound rude or anything, I really have fun with discussing and debating and stuff :D (I can't take Snape anymore though )
You know , I think your story is my favourite out of all that I await an update :) =) See you , hopefully, soon :)

Author's Response: haha no worries, your opinions on snape are totally valid. I can definitely see how you view him, I guess I just choose to view him differently. There's definitely guilt in there, but what motivates Snape all the years of Harry's school? Why would he feel guilty for her death if he didn't love her so much? Of course I think he's an evil git, but knowing that he loved Lily gives me a more human view of him. I don't think we can judge him based solely on him calling Lily a bad name, it goes deeper than that. We've all said nasty things to friends, and I think what makes Lily an interesting character is that she could see past his hostility to her sister and friends in the beginning to the more human and vulnerable side of him.

I have no idea if that made sense haha, I could go on and on and on about Snape. But anyways, I'm glad you liked this chapter and James's POV! I'll have more up soon :)


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Review #12, by applecakeGoldfish and Chocolate: Goldfish and Chocolate

25th September 2011:
That was so cute! I love Harry.

So this is where you’ve been hiding, you ungrateful little brat. She hissed, jerking him to his feet.

Found me. Harry said happily. That Broke my heart :(


Author's Response: Harry really had a bad childhood, but I hope that moment with Ginny gave him something beautiful to look forward to. Thanks for reading!

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Review #13, by applecakep.s. i love you: Green.

24th September 2011:
Hahha :D Thats so awesome :D James is hilarious :D


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Review #14, by applecakeStill Delicate: Awkward.

18th September 2011:
Hi =) Wow what a fast update :)
What I really love about this story you much the entire Potter/Weasley family plays a significant role :)


And don't worry I REALLY like Tom :)
One thing just bothers me.., when he was introduced into the story i didn't paid attention to him. Now i don't know anymore how old he was (

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Review #15, by applecakeBreaking the Quidditch Code: Negative Seven

18th September 2011:
woo okaay!
I finally read this entire story and I'm quite sad right know :( I hope it doesn't end soon now that I'm on here :D
Thanks for you response about Harry! The way to explained it it makes total sense, and it's actually what every good parent would do. Tell their kids to have a look on other opportunties. I just forgot to take into consideration that the story is from James(a male teenager) point of view and parents are always so "annoying and they don't let my live my life and they don't know anything at all" xD HAHA ;)
I love how you take your time with everything and develop the relationships between the characters. :)

I hope we see an update as soon as you have time =)

Author's Response: Applecake. I'm so hungry now. I've never had applecake, but whatever it is I either want it or want to invent it. This is serious business.

Don't worry, haha. This story isn't ending anytime soon. Right now I have it slated for over 55 chapters, so you've got a while to wait like everyone else, haha :) But I'm working hard.

And you're very welcome for the response! I'm sorry that wasn't more clear. And yeah, James is a horribly unreliable narrator. If the story was from Avery's POV it would be a completely different take on James and Harry. You know what I mean?

Thank you so much for the amazing review! Can't wait to see what you think of the rest :)


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Review #16, by applecakeDistinctly Disenchanted: Chapter Fourteen

16th September 2011:
aaah Yet another update? Feels just like yesterday :)
Loved that chapter , Lily and James were cute
and oooh the ending! Exciting I want to continue reading so I hope your inspiration will be back for a while (:



Author's Response: Yep, two updates in two weeks, which is unheard of for me. Thanks for the review!

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Review #17, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Full Moon

15th September 2011:
** AH! For reason unknown to me, my review just showed " aw your back" -.-. thats not everything I said *cries*
Here we go WAw poor Lily :(
But also ...how very naive of her to think like that of Snape, but its her friend so ...thats common, friends will always defend you ;)
But James is just speaking the truth :* Snape isn't the victim everybody makes him out to be gosh :D Thats why I wondered at your last response when you said that you can't write Snape as a jerk anymore why?...Snape is a terrible, terrible man...just because he loved Lily ,never changed that ( JK even said sometimes he is "deeply, horrible person")and he also never stumpled into 1000 of heartbreaking incidents and was oh-so helpless.
I love James here even more for being a realist .
But since this isn't an esssay ...;)

I understood Snape when he was taking about making conversations haahah- Same here.
"“So, no pressure or anything,” Severus gave me a tentative smile" Really like this sentence , cute :)

I'm really excited for the next chapter what will happen between them...maybe kill each other or something lol And I hope Liys dad is okay. It's always so depressive :D

So...Liked that chapter Can't wait for more !
Have a great day :)

Author's Response: Yeah, a lot of people get on my case about Snape. But I have a HUGE soft spot for romances and after reading the last book, and all the stuff about how he loved Lily, I really just can't hate him like I used to. i mean, I agree that he is a deeply horrible person (and I'll portray that more in future chapters), but knowing all the things he sacrificed to keep Harry safe (for Lily's sake), makes it hard to truly hate him. I don't know if any of that made sense... Basically I've been trying to see what Lily saw in him as a friend, his quiet devotion to her while quickly falling into the dark arts... you'll see their friendship dissolve by the end of the story unfortunately :( But I hope that answered your question?

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Review #18, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: The Joker and the Fool

15th September 2011:
aah you are back (:

Author's Response: haha thanks!

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Review #19, by applecakeDistinctly Disenchanted: Chapter Thirteen

2nd September 2011:
aaah so Happy ! Didnt expected this at all today ;) :D

Oh ! Im so happy your brother is doing well

Author's Response: In all honesty, I didn't think I would be able to churn out an entire chapter in one night, but somehow I did.

And thank you! It's been a rough road, but he gets better and better with each day.


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Review #20, by applecakeBreaking the Quidditch Code: In The Gutter

28th August 2011:
Just reading this story :) so far I really like it ! I just needed to write a review at this point because I was taken aback a bit... with harry oO
That you said harry kind of was obssesed about talking with James about dark arts and stuff and doesn't understand why James is so interestend in Q.?? Thats a cleary out of character Harry Potter...I was just abit in shock because you kind of poryated everybody really nice and real! Okay I will continue reading =)

Author's Response: Hi there! I'm glad you decided to leave a review on the story! :)

Here's the thing about Harry. You'll learn a lot more about the conflict later. But it's out of character for teenage Harry. In my opinion (and everyone is different), I think that Harry really got consumed in his work and the knowledge that people should concentrate on the important things in life--saving people, etc. He knows his family very well and really wants James to be involved in something else. He's not saying James shouldn't be interested in Quidditch. He just doesn't understand James's OBSESSION with Quidditch. In reality, Harry wants James to branch out in life. He wants him to meet other people other than his team and the pretty girls in his House. He wants him to try other things to see if he'd like them. However, as you could probably tell from the first few chapters, James is a highly unreliable narrator. His opinion and biases are what fuels the story. I don't think that makes Harry clearly out of character. It's just my take on the relationship Harry and James have with an unreliable narrator. I hope that helps. You'll gather a lot more on the conflict as the story goes on.

I hope you continue to enjoy the story! Thank you so much for the review!


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Review #21, by applecakeQuest of a Lily: Chapter One: Prologue

27th August 2011:
This sounds good :) can't say more to this story right now lets see how it continues :D

Author's Response: Oh thank you! :) I'm in the middle of writing the next chapter, its proving hard to get my mind on the paper but it will eventually.!

Thank you for the review! It just made my day :)

WhatAboutRegulus


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Review #22, by applecakeStill Delicate: A New Direction

26th August 2011:
hi! :D Im a new reader ...I know I jumped in when it's nearly over! I fell in love with this fic! I would have NEVER guessed I would. Though I alwayes imaged Scrop and Rosie together I never was interesed in their characters ( I never had a thing for Draco or somebody from there - haha Im a Potter girl ;) )but this fanfiction is amazing! I also hope you have the next chapter up a bit sooner- haha but no pressure !
Cant wait, keep up your good work!

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Review #23, by applecakeMy Sister's Fiancé: Chapter Twenty: Maternal Instincts

23rd August 2011:
hi :) I never though I would like that story! Because! Im neither into Teddy nor Dom stories what so ever but something about this got me hocked I think its was the plot:) ...so I put it in my favslist and now I read the entire thing :) So happy I did !
I love your other WIP as well ( well I didn't read the Vic/Teddy think ...like I said Im not into this..)
soo! I'm excited for any kind of update from you!

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Review #24, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Losing Control

23rd August 2011:
Finally James and Lily moment. James was awesome here :)
haha I can't get over Snape xD He's so different I chuckled at him :D I cant deny that I obviously like him better in this story...(which isn't THAT hard in his case xD)
loved loved this chapter ! I felt like this story hasn't been updated in forever :)
drama in the next chapter? okay I'm in ! Hope to see an update soon
xo

Author's Response: ugh I know. For some reason the queue got super long and with all the server problems I think it just took longer than usual, but I'll have the next chapter up soon! I'm glad you like Snape haha. Ever since the last book came out I just can't make him a jerk anymore... bah. Anyways, thanks for reading!

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Review #25, by applecakeIf Wishes Were Fishes: Inconvenient Truths

12th August 2011:
So, okay I have do be honest...I am reading chapter 14 right now so I have no idea what has maybe changed until now, but the things I have to say about this story, just wouldnt leave my thoughts and it was sucking the fun out of reading ;)
So generally I am really enjoing reading the story..
But (maybe my "critism" first) certain things just bother me. Well, one of the most important ones is ; Severus Snape. Most people just seem to ignore the snape JK created and just think their version is the real one. I don't know if you maybe wanted him to be ooc. But if not..Snape IS a true believer of Voldemorts ideolism and their(L andS ) realtionship already drifted apart before he called her a mudblod( like Lily said, he called other ones mudblood just not her until well.. 5thyear) and that Lily just gave him another chance his kind of low and a bit unrealistic. think in what situations "mudbloods" are in their world, their existence can be punished until death. For us it might not sound AS horrible but I believe in their world its actually worse then Alex cheating on her. ( I would have understood her more taking Alex back then Snape :D)
He took the road himself and he just isn't a good person and Lily realized that along the way and chose to go seperate paths for a reason.
Another thing is James (and Sirius)..I mostly really love your James =) and I like that you don't rush things with him and Lily so I think you will make them turn out being real. But (:D) you make him a compelete arse for all the 14 chaperts and until now I dont see another side of him, so that kind of links to Sirius .. you make Sirius kind of like an all goody goody guy(which he isn't). I mean , he was like James , i don't get why James gets all the hate ( from Lily, Scar and so on) and Sirius doesn't. Well , hes not doing anything in your story xD
You know what I mean? Seems like you are favoring him so that one could ever evrverver not like him..( I mean,just remeber the Snape- incident that year)
Sorry, I don't want to be rude :) And I mean you don't have to stay true to JK if you dont like to, you have every right to chance the things you want to ;)
That kind of was a long rant !( a but half of this was a general Snape rant :D)
Well as hrash as that may sound , I really love your story. I'm excited to continue the entire time that I need to hold myself back and not skip trough paragraphs. I love having James/OC and Lily/OC in there , it's kind of refreshing.

Ah! also if anything I said changed until chapter 18, sorry ;)
So that was long ..anyhow.. Keep up the good work. Wish you all the best (:



-English is not my first language-excuse my mistakes!

Author's Response: haha no its ok, I really appreciate your critique. One thing I really like to do in my story is make it my own, and usually that means straying a bit from what JK did in her books. I have an idea in my head of what all of the relationships/backstories in the books were like, as I'm sure you do too. This may not be how JK actually intended snape to be, but it's how I like to picture it. Plus, for the purpose of the storyline, it works :)

As for James and Sirius, some things have definitely changed in the few chapters, and since this story focuses mostly on Lily/James, I've stuck to developing those characters the most. But Sirius (as you'll see in the rest of the story if you continue reading) has his drawbacks as well. He has faults, but Lily doesn't really notice them as much as she notices James.

Anyways, I hope that made sense? I'm glad you're enjoying the story otherwise :)


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