Oh. My. God. This was amazing. I really love your writing, just thought I should mention that.
I agree that it was wrong of Adele to hide Blake's existence from the Potters, but it is completely understandable that she didn't want to approach Al after all that had happened between them, especially if he's being photographed with all those girls. And Al doesn't really get to judge her considering that she remained faithful to him, even though he obviously wasn't.
Side note, I was rereading Breathless, because I couldn't really remember stuff from the beginning that well, and I was wondering if you realized that Artemis(in the shopping mall on their "honeymoon") predicted that their first child would have Adele's eyes, but Blake's got the Potter eyes. Not that I'm complaining, he's adorable!
I can't wait for the family reunion. You should be proud of yourself, I spent a majority of at least two of my classes today daydreaming about this story! Report Review
Love the chapter, hate the point you chose to stop at. Report Review
Nonononononono! James is an idiot. A big fat idiot.
Really good writing though. Please update soon... before I die of curiosity... you don't want to cause my death do you?Author's Response: I'll update it soon and hopefully will redeem James sometime in the future!!! Report Review
Well if you're offering slices of Tom Felton... who am I to refuse? :)
I think you're doing great do far. I'm not so sure about the hints of Harry being a Death Eater though. I don't think my brain can cope with an evil Harry, but it's your story, and it seems like you might be able to pull it off.
I like the plot so far, it has a lot of potential. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more!Author's Response: I never said Harry wasa Death Eater! I'm surprised people have taken it that way, really. I wasn't actually planning it, but I might try to incorparate that, if that sounds good?
Thank you! This has really made my day(:
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oh my GOD! when i was the title to this chapter, i was terrified. I started chanting "please don't kill sirius off. please, please, please." over and over in my mind. thank you for letting him live :)Author's Response: You're welcome! Thank you for reading, and for appreciating that I went against canon. I'm usually very big on canon; in everything except Sirius's fate.
Hee, this chapter's title. :3 I felt so sneaky. :D Report Review
That was AMAZING! I was laughing so hard, I swear my mom and my brother thought i was going crazy or something. Overall, I just LOVE this chapter! Report Review
Well, the Victoire/Victoire thing kept me reading. I was just like, "WHAT is going ON?" I honestly though Vic had gone crazy and was talking to a reflection of herself at first. So you convinced me :) But then again if you ask any of my friends, that's not very hard to do (I'm a tad bit gullible). But it was good writing, though the brokenup-ness kinda bothered me. I don't know if its explained somewhere or I'm just being totally obtuse, but what's the purpose of the roman numerals? I get there's a point, I just can't find it. just clarifying that last bit was a just question, not a criticism.
All in all, though it wasn't really my cup of tea, I thought it seemed thought out and well-written. Report Review
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