This is shabdabdingdong with your requested review! I have to say, the story is so sweet and it nearly made me cry! "Lee, would you wait a bloody minute.” George fumbled with the chain lock. “When you tell me you’ll be here at seven, you’ve never been on time in the nine years I’ve known you – Ron?” I really don't understand when George says 'Lee would you wait a bloody minute?' Cuz it says that Lee hasn't arrived yet :) Other than that, its quite sweet!Author's Response: thanks for this review!! Oh, that line... if you would reread it, you'd see that George was expecting Lee and heard a knock at his door. Thus, he assumes it is Lee. When he opens the door to see Ron, he is surprised. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this, and I'm sorry I nearly made you cry. XX Melissa Report Review
This is shabdabdingdong with your requested review! The story is good, but there are some things you will want to fix. 1. You might want to start your story differently. You might like putting, 'I never imagined I'd have a crush on Lily Evans' or 'I've got a crush on Lily Evans. Call me crazy, but I do,' or something like that. 2. "Hey, Evans," James said when he'd reached her. She glanced up and raised her eyebrows expectantly. "Potter…" "So, I was wondering…" One hand flew to the back of his head and he rubbed at his nose with the other—Sirius was practically falling down with laughter. "I was wondering if you want to go out with me sometime." I realized I was holding my breath and quickly let it out. No need to get worked up over this; there's no way she'll say yes, I told myself. "You're asking me out?" she asked, and it looked as though she was restraining a laugh. I thought this was probably a good sign, but she hadn't flatly rejected him, either. James actually rolled his eyes at her. "Well, duh." Even though I wanted her to turn him down, I felt a pang of embarrassment for my friend. "But you're always making fun of me," she pointed out. "Well… yeah," James said, nervously fidgeting with his wand, twirling it between his fingers. "But now you're asking me out." I suggest that you put when James calls to Lily that she replies, "What is it Potter?" 3. You might want to get a beta. Other than that, you are completly fine! - shabdabdingdongAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! I was struggling with how to begin this story, so thanks for the advice! I'll work on it :) I might get a beta someday... it's probably a good idea :P Thanks again for the review, it's greatly appreciated! Report Review
'I laughed so loud I swear a little pee came out.' LOL! Love this part! 10/10 Report Review
SO sweet! This is REALLY cute! Love how you started the story. Imagine that, Draco Malfoy part Veela! That explains the gorgessness! 10/10 and adding to favs! Report Review
This story makes me feel at home! *cuddles* I am also Muslim, so I really understand this! Finally, someone who writes about Muslims, not caring about what people say to them!!! Author's Response: Hey! Aww I'm glad it makes you feel at home! *cuddles back* Yes, I wanted to something different, and thus chose the main character as a Muslim. :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
I love this! Good job, I feel as if I am Narcissa, or even Bellatrix, the way you address her :) So good, i will add to Favs!Author's Response: Awww, thanks you!! :D I love getting reviews like this, and this one in particular made me incredible happy! THANKS! -Naida Report Review
That was just so cute! Love it, so MUCH! ~ deathlyhallowsmaster24Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) ~Khanh Report Review
I really LUV the story! Its so depressing, and yet, so soft!Author's Response: Aww thank you!! :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!! Report Review
LOL!!! This was one HILARIOUS CHAPTER! *laughing so hard is crying* 10/10 PLZ UPDATE SOON!!! HAHAHAHA!!! Report Review
LOL! Love this chapter... this next one is gonna be interesting i bet! Report Review
*whistles* Lily is SURE in trouble! I thought Marlene and Alice knew that the Gossip Girl is Lily! 10/10 and adding to favs! Report Review
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL! I can't believe this was LILY EVANS! Can't wait for the next [i] Gossip Girl Newsflash [/i]! Report Review
LOL! That is sooo funny! I can't wait for next chapter!!! Report Review
So sweet! I miss Fred right now! *starts sobbing* 10/10 such a sweet story and adding to favs! Report Review
Good story. Plots really good! 10/10 Abd addi g to favs!Author's Response: Thank you sooo much! Reviews INSPIRE and MODIVATE me :D I'm glad you like the plot so far...there is more to come...mwahaha Report Review
Thats a sweet beginning! I can't wait to read the next chapter! 10/10 and adding to favs!Author's Response: Glad you like it! XD Report Review
LOL! This is sooo funny! 10/10 adding to favs! *still laughing*Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad:) Still laughing is a good sign;) Thanks for reading and reviewing:) I'm also really glad you liked it, I just love that feeling when someone likes something that you did:) -Arya Report Review
Nice... No great job! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!Author's Response: Thank you!! :) I will update soon. thanks for staying with the story :) Report Review
Oh how sweet! But I don't see how it is the Little Mermaid. Will you update? Thanks!Author's Response: It's the little mermaid because the girl who made out that looked after him was not the real person, it was in fact the other girl. :) x Report Review
Poor Ron :( But the stories good nonetheless :)Author's Response: hehe, Ron is so fun to write when he's angry :) Report Review
I like it when the elves say, Kiss her!, cuz it's so funny/cute!!! Gr8 jib!Author's Response: Thanks, I love the elves! x Report Review
Once again, so cute!Author's Response: Aw, you reviews have made my day! Report Review
Cute! This is rly like Cinderella!Author's Response: Thank you for responding! Report Review
So cute! 10/10 and adding to favs Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
That was funny! Awesome this is soo cute! Gr8 job! 10/10 Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: Thanks so much to one of my most loyal reviewers! :3 The next chapter is already written and should be in the queue without too much of a delay. And then there's another sort of project coming up that I think you'll like, too, so I hope you get the chance to check that out once it's up! Thank you very much for your consistently lovely reviews! Report Review
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